A very good message with an unique concept. You have written a very good piece of poem. I liked the way you compared snowflakes and angels. The descriptions and presentation are clear. In first stanza, you used the word "heaven’s angels" to convey the feeling. I like the tone of this poem. I like the phrases play "moonlight’s platinum glow," "so pristine and white,"cacophonic melody enchants".
I like the lines
"Face uplifted
to snowflakes descent,
souls uplifted
when angels are present."
I like how each line breaks. Rhyming makes this poem more interesting.
Wonderful poem. It packed with messages. Thank for sharing!
So enchanted poem! I like the beauty of autumn you have painted here. I could feel the sound and color of this poem.
A poem is soul breathing. Its flows beautifully with your crafted words. I like the phrases play “a sprinkle of deciduous hardwoods” “pencil-like sentries of evergreen” “radiate their sun-lit majesty.” All the natural things blended together create a vibrant nature scene.
I like how each line breaks. Rhyming makes this poem more interesting and makes the rhythm faster, happier. I like the images.
It seems you felt as you are a part of nature when you wrote this. The way you wrote keeps me reading it to the end.
First Impression: This is a sweet tribute for a heartfelt friendship. I like how you penned it down.
The poem: You wrote beautifully what friendship truly mean.
Friends makes us laugh, and we can share our thoughts with them. Life becomes dusty bleak desert without friends. I found those words reflected in your poem. The way you wrote can easily read. I like the images you have painted here.
Favorite parts :
“All the days I spent with you,
these things I can't explain,
the only thing I want:
For us to stay the same."
Ovarall: Friendship is a good subject for poetry. I understood this was written from personal experience and it looks great. I like the thought woven in this piece. Thank you for sharing.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
Initial Impression:Beautiful poem. Cleverly done each line with a long "A" sound
Theme and Creativity: This poem is beautiful and flows beautifully with your crafted words. Your rhyming scheme a,a,a,a makes this poem more interesting.
Favorite lines:
"And I walk not in the light of day
But in the shadows of death and decay
While you sit on high to say
My sentence has lead you astray"
Suggestions:I didn’t find any mistake.
FINAL THOUGHT: I appreciate the way you wrote this.
First Impression: A very good thoughtful piece . I especially like the rhyming scheme of this poem. It felt so melodious and rhythmic in my head.
The poem: I like the images you have painted here. I like how each line breaks. It flowed beautifully flowed with your crafted words.
I really liked some of the phrases play, discontent and scratches, " earthly goal " greedy gain of goodies " the fork in the road ".
Favorite lines:
“for I had pondered the narrow
but chose to carry my own load
and left behind, forever
the fork in the road”
Final thought: In conclusion, I think you wrote a good poem with a good message Thanks for sharing.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: Good start. A very good thoughtful piece and so true. I like the fonts color.
THE STORY: Every person born with unique personality into this world. We born to represent something new.
And if we do or follow another person, dressed like another we never know who we really are. So, we should destroy our false world and accept our true selves.
Favorite lines:You truly said “once you decide to dress yourself as another person who isn't you, you just killed yourself, not literally but emotionally. “
SUGGESTION: I didn't find any mistake.
FINAL THOUGHT:In conclusion, I think you wrote a good article with a good message Thanks for sharing.
Thanks for sharing it with us. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: Good start. I like this gratitude poem and the concept as well. You draw a picture of someone who play a significant role in our life. I am now reviewing it and I do hope you find something that is interesting and helpful to you.
THE POEM: A mother's love for her child is like nothing else in the world . She loves us unconditionally and never expect anything in return. You start beautifully “I was planted in you like a seed “ yes it is very true. Our tiny life grew in her umbilical cord. Her love is incomparable. You truly said in your line “You bought all the finest cloth, accessories” I Like the images you have painted.
SUGGESTIONS: I saw a few mistakes however. In the third stanza you used the line " You bought all the finest cloth,accessories " I think you need a space after comma. I think you need to capitalize "I" because it is a pronoun.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. I especially liked the character “Ryan”. You crafted him so beautifully.
FINAL THOUGHT: Nicely put your feelings into words.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for March.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a wonderful story. Beautifully told and written. It flowed beautifully with your well-crafted words. I like the suspense builds through this story. It makes the readers worry about your main character.
THE STORY: A family found a boy during a weekend getaway.
DIALOGUES: Dialogue floated normally between the characters and I could imagine the scenes where they are.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. You crafted all of them so beautifully.
I enjoyed it reading. Thanks for sharing your awesome work with us.
I just read your thoughtful twisted poem from read and review page. It's been a pleasure to review your story "The Fall" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army"
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
TITLE:I like this thoughtful poem and the title as well.
IMAGERY:I like the beautiful images you have sketched here.
RHYMING & REPETITION:Your rhyming is pleasing to the ear.
RHYTHM: You have good rhythm in this poem.
FAVORITE:
“Love and pain,
are one in the same.
It’s the synonym,
I can live with.”
STRUCTURE & FORM: I like how each line breaks.
THEME: Yes life is like that. Your poem reminds me a quote 'In Light there is Dark, and in Dark there is Light.' Which was reflects in your poem.
OVERALL IMPRESSION :I enjoyed your poem. It’s well written.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: I just read your thoughtful twisted poem from read and review page. Maya Angelou's beautifully told in her poem how a bird struggling to escape its cage. You beautifully twisted Maya Angelou's poem, "I know why the caged bird sings".
THE POEM: I like the images you have painted here. I liked some phrases play in this poem “knows no bounds” “wide and out” “land on the sand,” “captive in a cage” “perish with age”.
I especially like the rhyming of your poem. It flowed well with your crafted words.
My favorite lines: “a pleasure once so grand.
The bird now yearns to land and soar,
to be free once more.”
SUGGESTION: I didn't find any mistake.
FINAL THOUGHT:In conclusion, I think you wrote a good poem with a good message.
I just read your poem from read and review page. I found you have many wonderful poems in your poem. • Humorous ending. Your poem has lovely romantic thought crafted inside. I like your thought process. It's real to life and humorous. My favorite lines
"I thought of you the whole time; your face was in my head."
She grinned and said, "You miss me and what we had in the past."
"Not really," was my answer "I just didn't want to cum too fast!""
Hi!
I just read your story from read and review page. It is an an interesting story. The character is well developed. The dialogue floated wonderfully through the characters. I like the character Nigel. I feel your story is positive not to mention humorous. I like the title LOVE THY NEIGHBOUR. I enjoyed it.
It was a good story and it held my attention from beginning to end.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good romantic poem. I like its simplicity.
THE POEM: The main image is wonderful. Yes, love should be expressed that way.
Your poem has beautiful romantic thought woven inside every line. It seems you wrote this from personal experience. You told beautifully about your deep and meaningful love to her.
FAVORITE LINES: “The stars have shifted
And I find my way.
I get lost and found again
Day after day.“
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good story. Wonderfully told with third person. I especially liked the way you tell your story.
THE STORY: This is a story of a man Ryan who was too shy to find a soul mate.
Ryan was walking alone at the seashore enjoying the natural beauty. But he very much desired to experience this enchanted scene with a loved one. You have a good imagination. I like the thought “How would it feel to combine nature' s tranquilizing power and her serene presence?” your story tells that a hesitation is a missed opportunity.
DIALOGUES: Though there is no dialogue but it floated beautifully. I like the presentation.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. I especially liked the character “Ryan”. You crafted him so beautifully.
SUGGESTION: I didn'find any mistake.
FINAL THOUGHT: you are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.
I just read our poem when I came across read and review page. It is beautiful poem. I like this carefully designed poem. The words "Water, splashing" "Ancient mountain" "mountain's spring" all the natural things blended together creates a beautiful images. I like how you displayed it. I could feel the sound, smell of this poem.
My favorite lines
"Mountain's spring, unearthed;
crystal droplets springing out--
water, splashing, pure!"
you have used punctuation marks where they are needed.
I just read it from read and review page. I like this story, and the way you told. I find this story is humorous and well written. The title caught my eye. I understand you wrote this from some kind of comedy contest and it looks great. I like the smallest description.
I just read your story from read and review page. This is good story about A dog's magical Christmas. Your visuals gave so much life to the imagery. I like this story. You have good imagination. The dialogue floated between the character smoothly. I like the character Dimitri.
It is well written thoughtful piece. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing!
I just read "The Turtle's Triumph!" when I came across read and review page. I like this story written with prompt a turtle's greatest accomplishment from the perspective of the turtle. I find it good reading and humorous. It's so imaginative. I appreciate the narrator's thought process. Especially the ending is brilliant
"Being stuck upside down is the greatest challenge a turtle could ever face and I overcame it in record time."
I just read "The Light Of Olympus" when I came across read and review page.
This is good piece of research work. It packed with information about universe. I learned many things from your piece. Yes I learned that giant stars are millions upon millions of times brighter than our own sun. Scientist are still working on to find a planet like our earth.
I like this scientific piece. The way you wrote keeps me reading it to the end.
I just read "A Whirlwind Romance" when I came across read and review page. This is beautiful romance piece written with limited words. Your word prompt "hair" "dress" "stripes" was probably given to make some kind of romance story.I think that's why you focused on that which is important for the contest. I think you could make a bigger story.
I really liked the way you put out your feelings. Thank you for sharing your work! Pleasure to read it!
I just read this when I came across read and review page. The way you wrote this keeps me reading it from the beginning to the end. The dialogue flows beautifully between the characters. You have good imagination. I could also imagine how characters look like. I like the character Megan.
Beautifully told and written. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing!
I read your piece as I came across read and review page. I like the images you have painted in your poem. The descriptions are well written and so true. Your poem has good messages inside every line. This poem gives me the positive impression. My favorite line
"To many these days, trials
Are too much to bear.
So they question and doubt and
Seek hope elsewhere."
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
Thanks for sharing your story with us. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
I just read your piece. It is very thoughtful piece and true. It keeps me reading it to the end. You truly said "Women aren’t as strong as men."
The right to educate women is a fundamental right of the nation. The number of men and women in the world is almost equal. But, Interestingly the education rate of women is less than men.
Beautifully written and told.
Thanks for sharing it with us. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
Keep writing!
I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.
This poem is beautiful. It really demonstrates the poet's frustration over this relationship. I like the word "invisible wings" woven in throughout the poem. I like how you put your feelings into words. I find this poem is positive. I like the ending
"My courage grows strong
My invisible wings are no more"
Thanks for sharing it with us. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
Mina.
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