I found your name on the Anniversary review page and I thought to review this piece.
I like this story. It is really sad to leave a child in such a situations. But life is hard . Sometimes we need to make decisions which are painful. I found the thoughts reflects in your story.
I liked the way you told the story. I like the lines
“Cindy would call, they'd go bar-hopping, and life would return to normal.”
Yes, storms often come our way, that is life! Yet, the positives thought keep us go forward. And we need to accept the things that we can’t eradicate.
If only life were like a fairy tale, our story wouldn't be so difficult to write. well said. I enjoy the scents, colors and sounds this poem. It is so inspirational . yes, it is very true . I like the lines
“But life is uncharted
Treasure along the way
Some you get to keep
Some will slip away.”
Though difficulties, we should go forward accepting the circumstances of our life. I like your poem . it’s so full of wonderful thoughts. Happy Writing!
It's my pleasure to review your poem" A JOURNEY WTH WDC and ME." .
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I'm a huge fan of your writing. The stories and poems you have here, are really beautiful.
General Impression: I like your poem. it’s so full of wonderful thoughts. Yes, love should always be that way. I like the way you have crafted your words.
Favorite lines: The rhyming of this poem is beautiful. I like the lines
“I walk the road we walked at night
And in your arms you held me tight”
The poem is lovely. It blended with sorrow and sweet thoughts. Thank you for sharing.
This is a good piece of write about bipolar disease. Yes, it is very surprising that nowadays so many people getting through bipolar disease.
There are so many things in life we just can’t change but accept. I want to thank you for sharing. It is beautifully told and written.
This is a sweet poem. It feels like breathing a fresh air. I enjoy the scents, colors and sounds this poem. You painted the season spring beautifully. The tone of this poem is soothing. I especially liked the lines
“Children’s laughter fills the air
My mother’s voice, you wouldn’t dare
Muddied boots, and soggy clothes
Footprints lead to the old wood stove”
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
It seems to me it is a good starting of an interesting sci-fi story. I understood this was written for a kind of contest with limited word counts but it looks great. I think you can make a bigger story from this piece. It would be interesting. These are my thoughts and ideas alone.
I saw that you have an anniversary this month and I thought to read your "A Warm December Night" as part of my participation with Anniversary Review event this month.
I like the simplicity of this poem and the little rhyming. I understood this was written from personal experience and it looks great. I like the thought woven in this piece. Thank you for sharing.
Favorite lines:
"Linked tight by voices and laughter
They will remember scooting down the plastic slide
In the spooky dark. "
I enjoyed it reading.
Mina
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I saw that you have an anniversary this month and I thought to read your "a very Spooky Night" as part of my participation with Anniversary Review event this month.
Writing poems or story for children is challenge. This is a good spooky story, beautifully written with the Spooky Halloween Writing Prompts.
I especially liked the descriptions and the presentations.
The tone is soothing. The poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words.
Favorite Lines:
"My children, remember what I just said,
hallow's night is full of fun but it's also full of dread.
Don't fall in delusion for witch is not caterpillar, she doesn't change her gown.
Now let's carve some pumpkins and decorate this town."
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Closing Comments: Wonderful poem. I enjoyed it reading.
Mina
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I saw that you have an anniversary this month and I thought to read your "The Tempest in the Moonlight" as part of my participation with Anniversary Review event this month.
General Impression: This poem is unique. I like this thoughtful poem.
The Poem: I like your thoughtful poem. Our life has both dark and bright side. Both are beautiful in different ways. You wrote beautifully “You will find me in the moonlight;
In raging tantrum of the storm.
I, myself, in darker form."
I like how you put your feelings into words. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
This is wonderful place to tribute the members who have passed away. It is so sad to see that so many people have passed away. We only come to this beautiful world for a short time and left this world to leave our loved ones behind.
Breathtaking and mesmerizing piece I have just read. I read it a year ago and I read it again and again. My absolute favorite line:
"I would sit here on my porch just to listen to your voice.
You have the voice of an angel sweet and tender of couse.
I will sit right here in my rocking chair and doze to sleep.
When I awake I hope to here your sweet voice in my ear."
The poem flowed beautifully with the poets crafted words. The rhyming scheme makes this poem brighter. I enjoyed. Its well written.
I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem. The poet have painted a perfect picture of Day To Night with carefully designed words. The tone of the poem is soothing. the rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful.
Favorite lines:
"They'll live off the land until they are strong.
They'll live or die if life's cycle comes along.
The land will furnish all the food they will eat.
When it rains they drink the water they need."
Overall Impression : A beautiful poem. I enjoyed this poem. The poet like Kings always glitter in our heart.
This is sweet and sad love poem. This poem is significant not only the words but also the feelings you put down here. Yes, indeed words has strength to express ourselves.
My favorite is the last stanza
"I don’t know if my heart is dead,
Or , if I live at all.
Why did I love if there was this
Heartbreak destined for me?"
These are my thoughts and ideas alone.
Beautifully told and written. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing.
Good start. Yes, music can actually heal our mind, body, and soul. It is so powerful. I like the way you put your feelings in to words.
My only suggestion is capitalized all the i's
for example:
"When i first found out I had an anxiety, I was 16 years old. I had come to have anxiety in a different way..It was like I had an overdose in my heart."
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
You have good descriptions of your characters. The conversation flowed beautifully. I think you need some paragraph break. Otherwise this is a beautiful story.
This was such an amazing read. I like the message. you have painted a nice picture. The imaginary of this poem truly perfect. I loved the ending so much. My favorite lines
"Life on earth is persistent and permanent, ever-
changing but ever-constant. Life on earth existed eons
before our brief stay and will remain eons after us.
We are mere drops of water in the flowing river of life."
This was incredible and I really thoroughly enjoyed it.
The article is about technology. Yes, technology taking us forward, whether we want it or not.
It has enhanced modern life in many ways especially in communication and transportations. It helping us to diagnosis the diseases but in some ways, it has to create an adverse effect especially on the children. these days they are spending more time in front of the computer.
I cannot think a single day without a cell phone, personal computer, email, Internet, washing machine or Digital Cable TV.
The way you wrote this piece kept me reading it to the end.
My Favourite:
“I don’t have to worry about all this convenience making me fat and lazy. I have an exercise machine to help me avoid that.”
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I'm a huge fan of this author’s. I like his rich narratives. His work is more imaginative. I've read some of the stories of this author and I thought that the stories that he has here are really beautiful.
General Impression: This is a good story, beautifully written and told. I especially liked the descriptions and the presentations of this story.
Dialogues: Dialogue floated beautifully between the characters.
Characters: All the characters (Aubrey, Sir Kevin) are well developed. The speaker has good descriptions of his characters: for example: “His upper torso was uncovered and his skin was smooth and unblemished. He had dark curly hair and his eyelids were fluttering”
I like the smallest details of this story and the way he wrote kept me reading to the end.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone.
I appreciate the simplicity of this poem. The speaker of the poem loved from distance and never have the courage to express herself. I like the way the author put her feelings into words. I especially like the lines
"And my heart, it fears
That you may never love me
The way I feel for you
You only look at me, not seeing me"
This poem has good rhyming scheme. I like the wording of this poem.
It's been a pleasure to review your poem "Sing a song of Taj Mahal" on behalf of the "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP". I love reading a poem and I thought the poems you have here really beautiful.
First Impression: I like this free verse poem about Taj Mahal.
The poem: Beautifully told and written. You will be surprised to know that I am yet to visit one of the seven wonders of the world Taj Mahal!
yes, I have a great desire to visit it once. I like the way you have crafted your words in this poem. The rhythm of this poem is absolutely beautiful. you have breaks and spaces right where you need them and punctuation seem good to me even, though, I'm not expert in the same.
I find a couple an of mistakes for example: “It's a Mecca for tourists”. You can change it “It’s a treasure for tourists”. And capitalized the words Shah jahan to “Shah Jahan” otherwise it’s a wonderful poem. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
Favorite Lines: I like the humorous ending
“Each of the marbled minarets
conceal such romantic secrets
for lovers to silently explore
to admire and to adore.”
Overall Impression: I like the A beautiful poem. Wonderfully portrayed. I enjoyed it. I'm a huge fan of the narratives of your poems. Thank you for sharing.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
It's been a pleasure to review your poem"leaves" on behalf of the “"The WDC Angel Army"
I am writing this review of your poem when you aren’t here. I found that you leave us some wonderful writing behind.
Initial Impression : I like the concept of this poem. The poet wrote beautifully based on a true story happened at NICU. I like the words of this poem. The way you wrote can easily read.
Theme and Creativity :This poem have soothing tone. The rhyming is absolutely beautiful.
The poem : The story is about a set of twins. You described beautifully how do they grow up cared by doctors and nurses. I like the way you shared their story through this poem.
“He will grow up, being cared for with love
He'll be their gift, sent from above.”
Final Impression: : Beautifully told and written.
Writers like you are never really gone. You will always be in our hearts with your works.
I am writing a review of your poem when you aren’t here. Sometimes I visit your port and have read the wonderful writing.
Initial Impression:This is good adventure story following with WDC writing prompts
Characters:All the characters are developed very well not realizing what happened next. I like the descriptions and presentations of the characters. I especially liked the character, Jeremy and Lily.
Setting:In modern time. I really like the fact “That’s a walking harvester,” he continued. Some call it a Modern Robotic Reaper. The logging company is going to start harvesting the timber on my north field today.” . I understood this was written for a contest and it looks great. You made this story interesting.
DIALOG:Floating beautifully between the characters.
NUTS & BOLTS: Beautifully told and written. I enjoyed. It's well written. You mentioned you won 1st Place of Feb 2015 Official WDC "JOURNEY THROUGH GENRES" contest. And you deserved it. Writers like you are never really gone. You will always be in our hearts with your works.
I am writing a review of your poem when you aren’t here.
I know you are nowhere but it feel everywhere
Sometimes I visit your port and have read the wonderful poem written by you.
I still remember the encouragement you have given me as I was here as a newbie.
Initial Impression : This poem is absolutely wonderful gratitude poem.. I like the beautiful words the poet has put together for his dad which expresses his feelings.
Theme and Creativity :This poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming. Your poem flowed smoothly with your crafted words. The poet recalls his memory through this poem.
The poem : A beautiful gratitude poem.
My favorite lines
“Dad was a poor man but he had much love.
When we needed help he'd ask God above.
For His love and care whenever He prayed.
More dad prayed more love came our way.”
Final Impression: : Beautifully told and written.
I know that people are never really gone. Our soul lives the earth after death. I want to know you that we have miss you every day. In our hearts you will always stay loved and remembered with the wonderful writing you leave behind.
Yes, you are a King. Thank you being the most thoughtful writer I’ve ever met. You will be in our heart and never be forgotten. May your soul be rest in peace.
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