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Review by Mina~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.

This is good thoughtful poem. I like the way you wrote this. I liked the concept as well. The images are vivid and artistic that keeps the readers to read it at the end. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.

The poem: In this poem, you told about time. you said that time never stays. Beautifully started with the lines “I ponder oft this currency called Time That spends itself e’en as I write this rhyme.”

Yes, time always runs and runs without stoppage. It never waits for anyone. It is so precious than gold. Which you told with these lines “How best to spend this precious, waning gold; It glitters best in passion of sweet labor, We should the value and respect the importance of time every single moment. We should remember if time once lost it never retrieve.

I like the little rhyming of your poem and the meaning it has. I sometimes find it difficult to rhyming my poems.

Though I am not expert but It seems you have used punctuations marks where they are needed.

Overall: Your poem floated beautifully. It tells we need to use the time properly.
Beautifully told and written. Thanks for sharing your story with us.

It's pleasure to know someone like you.

Keep writing!

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Review by Mina~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"Just Answer the Question II. I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.


I like this story, and the way you told. The title caught my eye. I don't how to express my feelings after read this article. I am touched by your articles. I understand you wrote this from personal experience and it looks great.

The story is about a 90 year mother-in-law Elsie who has dementia for the past five years. You share your knowledge, experiences with good examples. It keeps me reading it to the end.
I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing! I learned about the behaviors of dementia patients.

Keep writing!
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Review of In the Morning  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Matthew!

I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"The WDC Angel Army. I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.


This is a good piece of write. Beautifully told about despair and depression.

Inner fear disrupts our activities. I like the lines of your piece
"Wallow not in fake remorse
I was always set upon this course
Tears will dry,Smiles disappear
I could not defeat my inner fear"

Suggestion: In second and last stanza you need one space after the punctuation mark “comma”.

It is well written thoughtful piece. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing!

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Review of cant forget  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"The WDC Angel Army. I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.


This is a good piece of write. The title caught my eyes.

This is a good poem. Yes, love should be like that! Your poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. I could feel the sense of sadness woven in your poem. I like the way you put your feelings into words.

Favorite lines: “and that it doesn't hurt me
i miss you teasing me”

Suggestion: I think you need to capitalize all the first letters of your poem. For example “i still wear your shirt i say i don't care” should be “I”
It is beautiful poem. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing! Keep Writing!*Smile*

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Review by Mina~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I am sending you a review of your story, "My Mother Came Back for the Review Challenge for February. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.

The title caught my eye.

*Bulletg* FIRST IMPRESSION:This is good story. Beautifully told and written. I like the way you wrote this story.

*Thumbsup*THE STORY:This story is about a 13 year kid Rain whose mother left her when he was just 6. She worked in his dad's coffee shop, La Coffee. One day while Rain was doing her homework she heard a quiet tapping on her window. …

*Bulletg*SETTING: In a modern time.

*Bulletg*CHARACTERS:All the characters well developed. I like the character Rain.

*Bulletg*DIALOG: Dialogue floated normally between the characters .

*Starg*OVERALL IMPRESSION: Wonderful story. I enjoyed it reading.

Keep Writing!

*FlowerV* Mina.*FlowerV*

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Review of Successful Life  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work"Successful Life. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.

*Butterflyb*This is good piece of write with points how to be successful in life. I liked the concept.

I like the descriptions and presentations. The way you wrote this piece keeps me reading it to the end. Your points are short and to the point. Each points it very true. Yes, the most important and basic of success is to belief on Almighty Allah. Nothing can achieve without believing our creator. We always be mindful of Allah so that we may prosper.

Another important point of success is to set the right goals.

Beautifully told and written. Thank you for sharing!

Keep Writing!


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Review of Restless Whispers  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,

I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"The WDC Angel Army. I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.{/b}

I just read this beautiful poem. I like how your poem starts with onomatopoeia words. This poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. You beautifully painted the images of cemetery with some good words choice. The images are vivid and artictic.
“A peaceful wind gently rustles through the grass,”

“Darkness encompasses the tall stones” “Her white dress drapes over the blades of grass
Leading spectators away” All the snapshots beautifully expressed in words.

It is well written thoughtful piece. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing!

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Review of Anxiety  
Review by Mina~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your story "The Pulse for the Review Challenge for February""Anxiety

I like the quote, "Nothing diminishes ANXIETY faster than action" - Walter Anderson

Which reflects in your thoughtful poem. We all experience anxiety. You truly said nothing but our actions only lessen our anxiety. We must accept anxiety as a part of our life . This poem gives me the positive that we all need to go on with life.

I like the images you have painted in your poem. The descriptions are well written and very vivid and artistic. It told beautifully that our action reduces anxiety.

Keep Writing!*Smile*

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*Starp* Mina *Starfishp*
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Review of Time  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi,

I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"The WDC Angel Army. I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.


This is a good piece of write. The title caught my eyes.

This is a good poem. It is so true of life today. Even little children today do not have time to stand and stare, to look at nature because of their busy schedule. I like the words. I like the images you have painted.

My favorite lines

“Will we have time?
If we stand here waiting,
for the roar of springtime
is coming in full swing.”

It is well written thoughtful piece. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing!

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Review of Death  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,

I'm reviewing for the Review Challenge for February"The WDC Angel Army. I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.


This is a good piece of write. The title caught my eyes.

First, I feel sorry to hear your aunt death.

I love this poem because it captures something poignant – and true.

When a loved one dies an emotional feelings surrounded our mind. Which reflects in your poem. You express your sorrow in deep, powerful ways. Crafted beautifully with your words. For example “Our sorrows will turn tomorrow’s into sweet memories for a life time remembering all the joyous moments hilarious and wisdom that they leave behind as their legacy”

Suggestion : I found some of the lines of your poem are too long. I learned that The length of the lines and the line breaks are important.

May your aunt’s soul rest upon in peace.
It is well written thoughtful piece. I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing!

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Review of On magic  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!

I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.

*Butterflyb* Initial Impression: Yes! There is magic all around us . the sound of magic sooths us. It heals our pains. This magic travel everywhere with our words. I like the images you have painted here.

*Idea* Theme and Creativity:Your rhyming scheme is beautiful.

Favorite line: “There is magic all around us
The way flowers bloom and children develop
If only one wishes to see
How bumblebees fly and horses gallop”

*Cut* Suggestions: I found some spelling mistakes . In the first stanza “Wether they are read or heard” should be whether
2nd stanza 2nd line “Conveing” should be Conveying. And 2nd stanza 4th line “listeining” should be listening.


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Happy Writing!

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Review of The Gift.  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!Smiles

I just read your poem "The Gift.

First Impression : This poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming. I like this inspirational poem.

The tones I find in this poem is soothing and positive.

My favorite lines :
“To love my life and love myself, no need to be the best.
For nature knows and nature grows on those who ask for less.”

Final Impression : This well crafted write delivers a powerful message. Yes, our life indeed a precious gift. Thank you for sharing.


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Review of Deep In Her Eyes.  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!Smiles

I read your "Deep In Her Eyes.

This has lovely romantic thoughts inside every line. Its so full of wonderful thoughts . written with the views of personal experience. It looks great. I like how you put your feelings into words.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone.

Mina  


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!Bubblegum

I read your "Part 3 of the Fill in the Blanks Story

This is a clever story about time travel. I like this story, and how you contrast the three worlds (past, present and future). it's interesting to think about.

The Story:  *FlowerY* The main character Cody found himself in past in a classroom. His teacher Ms. Saunders asked him to give a speech from the past, present, or future. Cody told them about internet, the year Y2K and September 11th 2001.

Final Thoughts:  *FlowerY* The way you wrote keeps me reading it to the end.

Wonderful story. I can’t wait to read another chapter from you. I enjoyed it reading.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone.

Mina  



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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a lovely story using poetic form, Hooves!

I like this poem because each stanza is beautiful. I like the way you telling this story. Your rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful. I like the image of the hooves you have posted here. my favorite lines

"Grazing heart calls out for Ireland;
Sing of lush fields of emerald green -
Love follows legendary paths;
Magnificent sights to be seen!"

I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!

First, I want to welcome you to WDC. I read your story"Unlikely Guardians

I like your story for the activity "fill in the blanks". I also participated this. The main focus of this activity is on developing writing skills.

         *Dragon*  General Impression: Beautifully told, great write and the way you displayed it. I like the plague doctor story.

         *Dragon*  A Few Things You Might Want to Work On: I didn’t find any mistake. I think you can make bigger story from this piece. That will be great.

         *Dragon*  A Few Closing Comments: Overall, I thought this piece was very nice.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest.

Happy Writing!

Mina  

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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
It's been pleasure to review on behalf of Simply Positive Group.

This is short and sweet story of friendship. I like the happy endings of how the friends drove the unfriendly eagle. That's what a friend does. Friends help each other out as needed.

Suggestion:You can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be interesting.

Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing.

This is my opinion only. Thanks for sharing your awesome work with us. Its pleasure to know someone like you.


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I loved this poem. It is pure and very true. Yes, anger is one of the worst emotion. It creates a negative effect on our life and on the lives of those around us. But unfortunately, we can't always control it. You told beautifully that a certain amount of anger leads to bliss.

” Perhaps it is due to this
That a certain amount of anger leads to bliss
Not to a cold world
And not to fists curled”

I could relate your poem. I like those words.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.


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Review of Do you hear me?  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!

First I want to welcome you WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.

*Butterflyb* Initial Impression : This is a beautiful but sad poem. I like how you woven your thought into words. Yes, when our heart is broken it is the saddest thing in the world.

*Butterflyb* Theme and Creativity :Your poem flowed smoothly with your crafted words.

*Butterflyb* The poem : I feel the sense of sadness woven in this poem.
My favorite lines
“The way you laugh
The way you walk and talk
You may not see me anymore
And that's ok”
*Butterflyb* Final Impression: : A beautiful poem.
Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  







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Review of The Village Green  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
}Hello!

I am sending you a review of your story, "The Village Green. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.

This is a lovely nature poem. I like the beautiful nature picture the poet has painted here.

This poem is about the feelings of the poet when he took a walk by the village green. The treasured memories of the village cherished the poets heart. He felt he is part of nature. I like the lines

“Generation filled houses
In front of narrow sidewalks
Made of concrete slabs
Cracked by huge tree roots”

The tones I find in this poem is soothing. I like the way the poet put her feelings into words.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
You have written a very good piece of poem. It's been a pleasure to review your poem. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.

A beautiful light awakens in the darker shadows of winter. Your poem painted the beautiful picture of winter. I like the beautiful nature picture you painted here.

Favorite line : The earth is kissed by cold;
life, it seems, is on hold.

Overall Impression : I enjoyed. Its well written.

Thanks for sharing your work with us. Its pleasure to know someone like you.

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Review of Icarus  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
It's been pleasure to review your "Icarus on behalf of Simply Positive Group.

Welcome to WDC. I just read you poem about inner feelings. You penned down all your thoughts so beautifully in this poem.

When you feel only darkness or pain or see it in another. Look beneath this you will find there is light there in the soul.

Favorite lines:
"Wingless watching wonders worried
I may never feel what Icarus felt
Yet we have a similar end to our stories
So I guess I do know what it's like when dreams melt

The tone of this poem is soothing.

Overall Impression : I enjoyed. Its well written. I think your poem is wonderful.

This is my opinion only. Thanks for sharing your awesome work with us. Its pleasure to know someone like you.


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Review by Mina~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!

I read your poem from Read and Review page

The Poem:  *FlowerY* This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.

This is beautiful thoughtful poem. The tones I find in this poem are soothing and cheerful at the same time humorous. The poem speaks of important rules of life taking from poetry; I feel this poem is simple, positive. I love how the poem ended with the same stanzas

“"This A is for the apple that
has grown upon my tree,
a gift today
right on display
your desk to you from me."”

Final Thoughts:  *FlowerY* Beautiful poem. I enjoyed.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review of Fairy’s Favor  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hello Joy!

I saw your name in the portrait authors list in "Angel Review Forum this month. And I thought to give you a review. These are my opinions only and I am not a writing expert.

         *Dragon*  General Impression: A wonderful poem

         *Dragon*  What I like: The last stanza was my absolute favorite. I admire every word choice and the flow was smooth and continuous.

Everyone probably has a story of a baby tooth coming out. I like the way you telling the story from a child point of view. I especially like the same phonetically words of the last stanza . for example “for” “score” “aglow” and “Wow! Geronimo!"”

         *Dragon*  A Few Closing Comments: I enjoyed your poem.

Mina  

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Review of Trapping the Fox  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Joy!

I saw your name in the portrait authors list in "Angel Review Forum this month. And I thought to give you a review. These are my opinions only and I am not a writing expert.

         *Squirrel* General Impression: The main character telling story within journal. I liked the way you told the story with very clear descriptions and presentation.

         *Frog*  The Story: I like the chapter titles as well. I wouldn't have the joy of discovering each new page.

I think It helps the reader to moves from one chapter to the next.

The dialogues floated beautifully between the characters.

I think you can make this a wonderful book.

         *ButterflyB*   Closing Comments: Beautifully told and written.

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