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Review of On magic  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!

I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.

*Butterflyb* Initial Impression: Yes! There is magic all around us . the sound of magic sooths us. It heals our pains. This magic travel everywhere with our words. I like the images you have painted here.

*Idea* Theme and Creativity:Your rhyming scheme is beautiful.

Favorite line: “There is magic all around us
The way flowers bloom and children develop
If only one wishes to see
How bumblebees fly and horses gallop”

*Cut* Suggestions: I found some spelling mistakes . In the first stanza “Wether they are read or heard” should be whether
2nd stanza 2nd line “Conveing” should be Conveying. And 2nd stanza 4th line “listeining” should be listening.

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Review of The Gift.  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!Smiles

I just read your poem "The Gift. " Open in new Window.

First Impression : This poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming. I like this inspirational poem.

The tones I find in this poem is soothing and positive.

My favorite lines :
“To love my life and love myself, no need to be the best.
For nature knows and nature grows on those who ask for less.”

Final Impression : This well crafted write delivers a powerful message. Yes, our life indeed a precious gift. Thank you for sharing.
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Review of Deep In Her Eyes.  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!Smiles

I read your "Deep In Her Eyes." Open in new Window.

This has lovely romantic thoughts inside every line. Its so full of wonderful thoughts . written with the views of personal experience. It looks great. I like how you put your feelings into words.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone.

Mina  
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Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!Bubblegum

I read your "Part 3 of the Fill in the Blanks Story" Open in new Window.

This is a clever story about time travel. I like this story, and how you contrast the three worlds (past, present and future). it's interesting to think about.

The Story:  *FlowerY* The main character Cody found himself in past in a classroom. His teacher Ms. Saunders asked him to give a speech from the past, present, or future. Cody told them about internet, the year Y2K and September 11th 2001.

Final Thoughts:  *FlowerY* The way you wrote keeps me reading it to the end.

Wonderful story. I can’t wait to read another chapter from you. I enjoyed it reading.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone.

Mina  
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Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a lovely story using poetic form, Hooves!

I like this poem because each stanza is beautiful. I like the way you telling this story. Your rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful. I like the image of the hooves you have posted here. my favorite lines

"Grazing heart calls out for Ireland;
Sing of lush fields of emerald green -
Love follows legendary paths;
Magnificent sights to be seen!"

I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!

First, I want to welcome you to WDC. I read your story"Unlikely Guardians " Open in new Window.

I like your story for the activity "fill in the blanks". I also participated this. The main focus of this activity is on developing writing skills.

         *Dragon*  General Impression: Beautifully told, great write and the way you displayed it. I like the plague doctor story.

         *Dragon*  A Few Things You Might Want to Work On: I didn’t find any mistake. I think you can make bigger story from this piece. That will be great.

         *Dragon*  A Few Closing Comments: Overall, I thought this piece was very nice.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest.

Happy Writing!

Mina  

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Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It's been pleasure to review on behalf of Simply Positive Group.

This is short and sweet story of friendship. I like the happy endings of how the friends drove the unfriendly eagle. That's what a friend does. Friends help each other out as needed.

Suggestion:You can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be interesting.

Thank you for sharing your work! Keep writing.

This is my opinion only. Thanks for sharing your awesome work with us. Its pleasure to know someone like you.
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Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I loved this poem. It is pure and very true. Yes, anger is one of the worst emotion. It creates a negative effect on our life and on the lives of those around us. But unfortunately, we can't always control it. You told beautifully that a certain amount of anger leads to bliss.

” Perhaps it is due to this
That a certain amount of anger leads to bliss
Not to a cold world
And not to fists curled”

I could relate your poem. I like those words.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
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Review of Do you hear me?  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!

First I want to welcome you WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.

*Butterflyb* Initial Impression : This is a beautiful but sad poem. I like how you woven your thought into words. Yes, when our heart is broken it is the saddest thing in the world.

*Butterflyb* Theme and Creativity :Your poem flowed smoothly with your crafted words.

*Butterflyb* The poem : I feel the sense of sadness woven in this poem.
My favorite lines
“The way you laugh
The way you walk and talk
You may not see me anymore
And that's ok”
*Butterflyb* Final Impression: : A beautiful poem.
Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  
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Review of The Village Green  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
}Hello!

I am sending you a review of your story, "The Village Green" Open in new Window.. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.

This is a lovely nature poem. I like the beautiful nature picture the poet has painted here.

This poem is about the feelings of the poet when he took a walk by the village green. The treasured memories of the village cherished the poets heart. He felt he is part of nature. I like the lines

“Generation filled houses
In front of narrow sidewalks
Made of concrete slabs
Cracked by huge tree roots”

The tones I find in this poem is soothing. I like the way the poet put her feelings into words.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
You have written a very good piece of poem. It's been a pleasure to review your poem. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.

A beautiful light awakens in the darker shadows of winter. Your poem painted the beautiful picture of winter. I like the beautiful nature picture you painted here.

Favorite line : The earth is kissed by cold;
life, it seems, is on hold.

Overall Impression : I enjoyed. Its well written.

Thanks for sharing your work with us. Its pleasure to know someone like you.

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Review of Icarus  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
It's been pleasure to review your "Icarus" Open in new Window. on behalf of Simply Positive Group.

Welcome to WDC. I just read you poem about inner feelings. You penned down all your thoughts so beautifully in this poem.

When you feel only darkness or pain or see it in another. Look beneath this you will find there is light there in the soul.

Favorite lines:
"Wingless watching wonders worried
I may never feel what Icarus felt
Yet we have a similar end to our stories
So I guess I do know what it's like when dreams melt

The tone of this poem is soothing.

Overall Impression : I enjoyed. Its well written. I think your poem is wonderful.

This is my opinion only. Thanks for sharing your awesome work with us. Its pleasure to know someone like you.


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Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!

I read your poem from Read and Review page

The Poem:  *FlowerY* This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.

This is beautiful thoughtful poem. The tones I find in this poem are soothing and cheerful at the same time humorous. The poem speaks of important rules of life taking from poetry; I feel this poem is simple, positive. I love how the poem ended with the same stanzas

“"This A is for the apple that
has grown upon my tree,
a gift today
right on display
your desk to you from me."”

Final Thoughts:  *FlowerY* Beautiful poem. I enjoyed.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review of Fairy’s Favor  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hello Joy!

I saw your name in the portrait authors list in "Angel Review Forum" Open in new Window. this month. And I thought to give you a review. These are my opinions only and I am not a writing expert.

         *Dragon*  General Impression: A wonderful poem

         *Dragon*  What I like: The last stanza was my absolute favorite. I admire every word choice and the flow was smooth and continuous.

Everyone probably has a story of a baby tooth coming out. I like the way you telling the story from a child point of view. I especially like the same phonetically words of the last stanza . for example “for” “score” “aglow” and “Wow! Geronimo!"”

         *Dragon*  A Few Closing Comments: I enjoyed your poem.

Mina  

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Review of Trapping the Fox  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Joy!

I saw your name in the portrait authors list in "Angel Review Forum" Open in new Window. this month. And I thought to give you a review. These are my opinions only and I am not a writing expert.

         *Squirrel* General Impression: The main character telling story within journal. I liked the way you told the story with very clear descriptions and presentation.

         *Frog*  The Story: I like the chapter titles as well. I wouldn't have the joy of discovering each new page.

I think It helps the reader to moves from one chapter to the next.

The dialogues floated beautifully between the characters.

I think you can make this a wonderful book.

         *ButterflyB*   Closing Comments: Beautifully told and written.

*FlowerY* *Tree3*Mina*Tree3**FlowerY*
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Review of I miss you  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sparkle destiny Author IconMail Icon

I'm reviewing your poem "I miss you" Open in new Window. . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.

*Butterflyb* Initial Impression:This is sweet poem.

*Idea* Theme and Creativity: I really liked the way you put out your feelings into words.

*Pencil* The poem: The poem is about the feeling when we missing someone. This has lovely romantic thoughts inside every line. No matter how I wish to forget
I still feel a pinch of regret
that I should've tried harder
My heart begins to stutter.

The mind go with its own will.

*Cut* Suggestions:I like the little rhyming. I didn’t find any mistake.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
It's been a pleasure to review your story on behalf of the “"SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Open in new Window.. This review for "Day Thirty - Flight of the Prince" Open in new Window.

This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.

*Ornament1G* First Impression : This is interesting sci-fi story, beautifully written with the prompt “SpaceWizards ”.

*Cat*The story: I especially liked dialogues and the little suspense of your story. The diolouges floating beautifully between the characters.

I like the way how you wrote this story. I understand, I read just a chapter that’s why it seem incomplete to me. I think it may fit on the next chapters later on. Otherwise it’s good story.

*ButterflyV*Overall Impression I enjoyed it reading.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  
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Review of Chasing Clouds  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!!

I found your name on the Anniversary review page and I thought to review this piece.

I like this story. It is really sad to leave a child in such a situations. But life is hard . Sometimes we need to make decisions which are painful. I found the thoughts reflects in your story.

I liked the way you told the story. I like the lines
“Cindy would call, they'd go bar-hopping, and life would return to normal.”
Yes, storms often come our way, that is life! Yet, the positives thought keep us go forward. And we need to accept the things that we can’t eradicate.

Happy Writing! 

Mina  

*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews ~ Summer Break" Open in new Window.*CakeP*
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Review of If Only  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
If only life were like a fairy tale, our story wouldn't be so difficult to write. well said. I enjoy the scents, colors and sounds this poem. It is so inspirational . yes, it is very true . I like the lines

“But life is uncharted
Treasure along the way
Some you get to keep
Some will slip away.”

Though difficulties, we should go forward accepting the circumstances of our life. I like your poem . it’s so full of wonderful thoughts.
Happy Writing! 

Mina  


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Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Mary Ann!

It's my pleasure to review your poem" A JOURNEY WTH WDC and ME." Open in new Window..
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I'm a huge fan of your writing. The stories and poems you have here, are really beautiful.

         *Dragon*  General Impression: I like your poem. it’s so full of wonderful thoughts. Yes, love should always be that way. I like the way you have crafted your words.

         *UmbrellaP*    Favorite lines: The rhyming of this poem is beautiful. I like the lines
“I walk the road we walked at night

And in your arms you held me tight”

The poem is lovely. It blended with sorrow and sweet thoughts. Thank you for sharing.

Happy Writing! 

Mina  



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Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello!

This is a good piece of write about bipolar disease. Yes, it is very surprising that nowadays so many people getting through bipolar disease.
There are so many things in life we just can’t change but accept. I want to thank you for sharing. It is beautifully told and written.

Happy Writing!

Mina  

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Review of Raindrops  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!Robert

This is a sweet poem. It feels like breathing a fresh air. I enjoy the scents, colors and sounds this poem. You painted the season spring beautifully. The tone of this poem is soothing. I especially liked the lines

“Children’s laughter fills the air
My mother’s voice, you wouldn’t dare
Muddied boots, and soggy clothes
Footprints lead to the old wood stove”

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review of Life on Mars  Open in new Window.
Review by Mina~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello!Neva!

I read your story "Life on Mars" Open in new Window.

It seems to me it is a good starting of an interesting sci-fi story. I understood this was written for a kind of contest with limited word counts but it looks great. I think you can make a bigger story from this piece. It would be interesting. These are my thoughts and ideas alone.

Happy Writing!

Mina  

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!

I saw that you have an anniversary this month and I thought to read your "A Warm December Night" Open in new Window. as part of my participation with Anniversary Review event this month.

I like the simplicity of this poem and the little rhyming. I understood this was written from personal experience and it looks great. I like the thought woven in this piece. Thank you for sharing.

Favorite lines:
"Linked tight by voices and laughter
They will remember scooting down the plastic slide
In the spooky dark. "

I enjoyed it reading.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! minja

I saw that you have an anniversary this month and I thought to read your "a very Spooky Night" Open in new Window. as part of my participation with Anniversary Review event this month.

Writing poems or story for children is challenge. This is a good spooky story, beautifully written with the Spooky Halloween Writing Prompts.

I especially liked the descriptions and the presentations.
The tone is soothing. The poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words.

         *Elephant*  Favorite Lines:
"My children, remember what I just said,
hallow's night is full of fun but it's also full of dread.
Don't fall in delusion for witch is not caterpillar, she doesn't change her gown.
Now let's carve some pumpkins and decorate this town."
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         *ButterflyB*   Closing Comments: Wonderful poem. I enjoyed it reading.

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