I like this afterglow poem because it is rich in words. You are right that The changes in every person are so everlasting that there is an afterglow shining around the world.
We come to this world only for a few amount of time. Life begins like sunrise. Sometimes clouds and storm prevent us from shinning. But after storm keep sun shining. It’s so wonderful to see sun shines again. These was reflected in your poem. You paint's a nice picture. The tone I find this poem is positive and so true.
I like the lines of the end stanza
for us all to capture this without withholding the enrichment
of all this love in the world brings a strong lasting presence
This is sweet poem about Hawaiian Breeze. I appreciate the simplicity of this poem. You expressed beautifully your feelings . Sometimes we need to look around, slow down, take deep breath to avoid the digital world, and we found the simple pleasures that makes us delightful.
You have good rhyming in this poem. I like the lines
The aroma of this sent is so, so pleasant
That it brings a pleasant Pervade
First I want to tell you that I love rhyming poetry. I found you have many wonderful poems here. I am now reviewing this beautiful song lyrics. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good poem. I like the colors and shapes and sounds of this poem.
THE POEM: This poem has lovely romantic thoughts woven in each line. I admire every word choice and the flow was smooth and continuous. The tone I find this poem is soothing and positive. Your rhyming scheme make this poem more interesting.
FAVOURITE LINES: In time I will heal and I will be free.
I'll send back these heartaches to you C.O.D.
I'll send back these heartaches to you C.O.D.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "Dear Me Letter Contest Entry" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army"
I love reading dear me contest letters. Your letter is inspirational and after reading this I find encouragement too. I appreciate this and enjoy it.
I like the third paragraph Enjoy your writing with a cup of tea at your side waiting for you to take a sip and enjoy it bouquet of aroma.Here, in my country tea is very popular. I can't imagine starting my day without a cup of tea.
I found that you need a verb corrections The world will be a better place because you were here and did what you could to help people and make their lives better it should be “are”.
It would be interesting to read if you align your letter.
I think you are a good writer and you can make this world beautiful through reading and writing.
This was a very good letter! I enjoyed reading it, and I hope you write some more letters in the coming years. Thank you for sharing your work!
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
I like this poem because it’s full of wonderful thoughts. You have painted a vivid picture through your writings. It is easy to read and understand. Yes, writing is the best way to express our feelings. I learned many from WDC and still I am learning.
We can help ourselves by writing. If we put down our good and bad feelings that happened everyday and acknowledge them may help to remove anxiety and lift up our spirit. The words of your poem is so pure, honest and very true.
My favorite: Hold your head high
You're not dead you're alive
write and you'll receive a reply
Some suggestions: I think you need to capitalize all the first letters of each lines.
Overall: I enjoyed reading your poem. It is wonderful.
First I want to thank you for this sweet little poem. I am now reviewing it and this review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I like this poem because your words are so true. Its express strong emotion. you wrote beautifully with deepest feelings. I like the way you have crafted your words in this poem. Your rhyming scheme is beautiful. I appreciate its simplicity. My favorite lines
Love is something
But it’s not anything
suggestions: I think you can add some extra lines to make it more beautiful.
I especially like this poem. I love the symbolic words you have used here. your poem has good message. The last two stanza are my absolute favorite. I admire every word choice and the flow was smooth and continuous. You paints a nice picture about Fountain of youth. I enjoyed it reading.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "Decaying Beauty" from read and review page.
This is beautiful poem about decaying beauty. It's beautifully started with the line "Creation dawns from Death’s designing reign". It's full of wonderful thoughts. I liked the way you write this poem. I like the images you have painted here. It's so enchanted. I could feel the sounds, smells, touch, and feelings of this poem. The last stanza is my absolutely favorite
"Creation dawns from Death’s designing reign.
Grieve not the changing of the ebbing day,
for in decay is born a new domain."
I appreciate the way you wrote this poem using 15 lines Villonnet Form.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a beautiful lyrics. I especially like the words.
THE POEM: This lyrics has wonderful thoughts inside every line. It crafted with lovely romantic thought. I find this poem is simple, positive. The tone of this poem is filled with hope.
FAVORITE LINES: I’m not fool to trust but I forgive you
Our memories now just residue
Ignore me when we meet
Though it’s hard but I pretend
SUGGESTION: I didn't any mistake.
FINAL THOUGHT: I appreciate the way you write it. I enjoyed.
Irish stars in the moonlight. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. This is beautiful poem. I like the repeated verse "Irish stars in the moonlight
Guinness from the pub
A kiss for your sweet one
Your darling, your love" you used. It's full of wonderful thoughts.
This poem is unique and flows beautifully with your crafted words. Your rhyming scheme makes this poem more interesting.
I really liked the way you put out your feelings. Thank you for sharing!!
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
This is a good piece of write. The title caught my eyes.
Yes, love should be like that! Your poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. It reminds me one of friend. I like the way you put your feelings into words.
Favorite lines: “What's happened to me?
I haven't got a clue
It makes me all excited,
Just hearing your name”
I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing! Keep Writing!
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
I like this poem because of the words. I feel this poem is simple and positive. Your words are very true that Trust before Lust,Consistency before Efficiency, Dignity before Negativity. I love that combination. This poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming. I like this thoughtful poem. The voice of the poem is the strength for me. It is so pure.
I like the thought woven in this piece. Keep writing.
This is beautiful poem about accepting the things in life. When someone breaks our heart and we have to accept and move on. It is hard but possible. But we try to accept. I like the way you put your feelings into words.
The tone is soothing. The poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. The last stanza is my favorite
"You who have put me in this pit of misery
Should be punished for all of eternity."
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Hi, I enjoyed reading your poem very much. I appreciate the simplicity, and the meaning it has. Yes, Darkness is not the absence of light,but the cover for it. Your rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful. You have used punctuation and grammar where they are needed. My favorite lines
"Because of you
I am a broken
And empty shell
Of a person."
First I want to welcome you in WDC. I found this poem and thought to give you a review.
I love this poem because of the main thought of the poem is about travel. It’s written so beautifully that makes me read your poem to the end. It describes the beautiful places in the world. You painted them so beautifully.
I like the words and the little rhyming of this poem. My absolute favorite lines are
"They're all gone now, but in our dreams and memories,
we can stop and reminisce while filling up at the Speedway pump."
Keep writing!
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First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This is good piece of work about positive and negative side of video game. I liked the concept. I like the descriptions and presentations. The way you wrote this piece keeps me reading it to the end. Your points are very true and to the point. Yes, video games is an addiction. It causes health problem.
I remember when I was high school I spent all of my free time playing video games. It was really fun. But too much of anything is bad.
I learned that some video game like Blue Whale can kill people. Your article helps the reader’s.
In conclusion, I think you wrote a good article with a good message. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good story I like the concept. You wrote it from the view of our mother nature. I like this thoughtful piece.
THE STORY: Your visuals gave life to our mother nature.
Earth is a place to live. There is no other planet like our mother earth. The earth gives us food, shelter, everything we need to survive. She provides us everything need for free, like mothers do for children. Earth is indeed a mother to all but we don't pay the respect that she deserves.
You described beautifully what problems our mother earth faces today.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
Initial Impression: I like this thoughtful poem about the principal of life. The concept is unique.
The poem:I like the narrators thought process. You painted beautifully about life. I like the way you painted it. Your words are very pure, honest but very true. I especially like the lines
as i got older i got better.
trimming was easy.
just don't dig too deep.
Yes, with age comes experience and skills. We become more empathetic and we can carving our own path easily.
Suggestions: Capitalize the first letters at the beginning of each line and all the i. For example when i was young i wanted to carve you. I found some spelling mistake “triiming” “instict.” “acedemic.” otherwise it is wonderful poem.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
It is a beautiful poem shows the confusion fear with love.
Your poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. Yes, Love is confusing. I like the way you put your feelings into words. Our mind is a wondrous place , so many things happening here. I like and appreciate this poem because it shows how we feel when we in love.
Suggestion:I found that that some of your lines are too long for example “Though you do not know the depth of how I truly feel, it still warms my heart & soul to know you’re there.”
It would be an wonderful poem if you make some lines shorter.
I like the words of your poem.
My favorite lines are “I look at you & see an amazing glow,
but then I realize who you are.
Constantly clouding & sojourning in my mindless dreams.”
I understood this was written from personal experience and it looks great. I like the thought woven in this piece.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION:This is interesting story about animal, beautifully written with the prompt. I especially like the ending. You wrote it from personal experience and its look great.
THE STORY: This is a story of a kid and his Stage show in Shakespearean Play. Your story tells that how difficult it was for you to make your dog an actor.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. You crafted them so beautifully.
SUGGESTION:Though I am not expert in grammar but I found some mistakes
-“I went on for awhile,” you need a space between “a” and “while”
- both well known and obscure you need a hyphen between word “well” and “known”
FINAL THOUGHT: you are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.
First I want to say you Happy Birthday as I saw your name on birthday list.
This is a beautiful gratitude letter for pets. You have shown some of the many reason you are thankful for them. You named your pets as Josette, Maggie and Rocky and you called them "my children" . I like the thoughts.
You wrote this beautifully for the Merit Badge Project with limited word counts and it’s look great. Yes, pets are the greatest friends of men especially the dogs. They are so caring and loving. Unfortunately, I have no pets to write about their stories. Because I do not have enough space in my apartment building to take care of them. But I always feel to have a pet dog.
They give us emotional support. From this letter I learned that Maggie rescued you when you get through seizures.
I like the way you put your feelings into words. Your letter expressed how a mother feel about her children. I think Josette, Maggie and Rocky would be happy if they could read your letter. And they could understand how amazing and wonderful their mother is.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed it.
WHY I AM REVIEWING THIS ITEM: I saw your name on the list. And I thought I would give your story a read.
FIRST IMPRESSION: Kevin, you wrote a good story. It reminds me college days, my teachers and friends. I have so many memories with them.
The way you told this story keeps me reading. Your story made me laugh. The tones I find in this story is cheerful, and humorous. I like the descriptions and presentation of your story and the ending.
SETTING:In modern time.
CHARACTERS:Well developed. I like the character Vaughn
STORY: Vaughn tried hard not to not to fall asleep in his language class, but he did fall asleep during lectures .
When asked to comment , he didn’t afraid but answered confidently which makes his teacher amazed. I really like the fact.
OVERALL IMPRESSION: Clever story . You told beautifully how you found your way into English Literature 101 studying A Clockwork Orange. I enjoyed it reading.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "Education." on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" April review challenge.
I like this piece and the concept as well. You wrote differently what education truly mean. I like your point of views and opinions about education. The way you wrote keeps me reading it to the end.
We need education to gain our knowledge no matter we take it from life or from schools. Education helps us build opinions about the things in life. To build a society. To build a nation.
Education helps us to move forward. You truly said that our wholes lives we are educated to work and work to educate. We did mistakes every day, we learn how to deal with it. We help others to learn what we have learned.
I like how you ended this piece with a question What is education to you?
I think it helps the readers to think what education really means to them.
Beautifully told and written. I enjoyed it reading. I can’t wait to read another piece from you.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I read your poem when I came across read and review page.
It is a clever poem beautifully written with the Prompt where it starts every line with the letters of the alphabet backwards from letter P to letter A (P,O,N,M,L,K,J,I,H,G,F,E,D,C,B,A)
I appreciate your every words choice. It flowed well with your crafted words. I like the images you have painted here.
My favorite is the last stanza
"Lightning flashes, thunder rolls
Keeping time at specific intervals
Just as Mother Nature's roar of anger
Intensifies with fat drops of her tears."
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
Mina
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