This is a clever piece written with just one syllabic words!!
It really a tough contest I think. But you managed it very well.
The readers will get pulled into the world where John and beast fought. I had a very clear picture of them in my mind.
You painted a real picture of fighting scene. I especially likes the dialogues. There was a comic touch to each dialogue that would make the readers read this story.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "The Beast" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
It's beautifully written and told. It seems it’s an interesting movie. I am actually influenced by review made by reviewers .
The way you analyze makes me add the movie “On the Waterfront” on my list. I like way you wrote this with clear descriptions.
“One night, Terry is used to lure another guy to his death. He has no idea about what he is doing, it relates to his pet pigeons, a hobby, he shares with the murder victim. The fact that this love of pigeons is shared is a poignant and heartbreaking twist in the film.”
It’s interesting to think about the suspense of this film.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
I like this story, and how you penned down your feelings. It seems you wrote it from personal experience. Yes, the death of a loved one can also make someone sad. I found it reflected in your story. What I like most about this is the descriptions of each scene.
Suggestions: I could see only line spacing gap between the lines. The small..i should be CAPS. The rest is perfect .
I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: The title "Anthrophobia" has caught my eye. This is a good story. Wonderfully told with third person. I especially liked the way you tell your story.
THE STORY: This is a story of a Dauthess's daughter who got suddenly sick and no physicians could cure her. You have a good imagination. I like the ending very much.
DIALOGUES: Good dialogue. They floated beautifully. I like the presentation.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. I especially liked the character “Daughter”.
SUGGESTION: I think in some places you need paragraph breaks.
FINAL THOUGHT: you are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.
It's been a pleasure to review your story {item:2192466 } on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
Beautifully put your feeling out. You paint a enchanted picture of a sunrise.
The plot is simple but beautiful. It has a very good message “This is really a beautiful sight to behold And in our eyes it will never grow old.” Nature brings peace in our mind which reflected in this poem. They make us feel connected with it.
I find “While in the meadow lies a field wet with dew and lushly green.” This line is a little longer otherwise it’s a wonderful poem. I appreciate it’s simplicity.
You have good rhyming. I enjoy the scents, colors and sounds this poem.
The tones I find in this poem is cheerful.
I just read "Too Dang Hot" your poem from nature genre page. I am reviewing you for June review Challenge on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
TITLE: The title caught my eyes.
WHAT I LIKE:I like the descriptions and presentation. You paints a beautiful images of summer. I could totally relate to your poem because here we experience sweltering summer heat. For the past few years weather pattern has dramatically changing. Summer stays too long whereas winter stays short.
The descriptions are well written and very vivid.
RHYMING & REPETITION:Your rhyming is pleasing to the ear. The tone is soothing that makes me read your poem to the end.
STRUCTURE & FORM: It seems you wrote it from personal experience. I like this form.
MY FAVORITE: "Rotisserie chickens stewed in our sweat
Panting like dogs with our tongues hanging out
Check if he's called. No, he hasn't called yet.
If you see his truck, then give me a shout."
OVERALL IMPRESSION :I enjoyed your poem. It’s well written.
I want to welcome you in Writing.com. It's been pleasure to review your "Observation Lessons" on behalf of The Angel Army. Please be reminded that this review reflect my opinion only and I am not a writing expert.
First impression: This is a good story beautifully told and written with 300 words. The readers will get pulled into Cassandra’s world.
Characters and dialogue: The dialogues are floating well between the characters. There was a comic touch to everything that keeps me reading. I could imagine them well.
Overall impression:
I enjoyed your story. It followed the rules of the prompt a setting, at least one (1) character, a conflict and a resolution. I think and you can make bigger story from it later.
Thanks for sharing your awesome work with us. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
You may join "The WDC Angel Army" . It’s great place to work for the community.
Initial Impression: I like this poem because each stanza is beautiful and so enchanted. The poem captures the moment of life.
Theme and Creativity: Being with nature is really wonderful. Though I find it really hard living in a concrete jungle.
I like reading nature poems, because, It makes me feel connected. They cherished my heart.
This poem consists of three rimed stanzas and beautifully ended. The word vividly describes the feelings towards nature. The rhyme makes this poem brighter; the flow of this poem is wonderful.
Favorite Lines: The sordid dirt, sage messages ordain,
For intricate rhythms to promenade
With passion, swirling under the April rain.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "All I Really Want" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I appreciate the philosophical thoughts and the emotions portrayed in this poem.
The words are so true that it makes me reading your poem to the end. It has good rhythm and flowed beautifully with your crafted words. Throughout the poem the poet questioning about the states of our mind. I like the repeated line “Cause all I really want …”.
I feel this poem tells us to embrace life fully. The last second stanza is my favorite.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "Caught Up" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I love the first rays of the sunlight and it’s feel pleasant when the rays touching my skin.
I appreciate the way you put your feelings about the beneficial effects of sunlight. I like the enchanted picture you have painted here. The last two stanzas were my absolute favorite
"Yes, I am caught up in His glory
Standing here trying to tell His story
Caught up in the brightness of the sun
I am glad to be a child of His Son!"
A beautiful tribute to the nature, great write and the way you displayed it.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "Aurora Borealis Rhapsody" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
I like this small poem written for 24 Syllables.
Beautifully used the prompt word “Rhapsody”. It is rich in words. The plot is extremely simple and positive.
You paint a enchanted picture where the rainbow lights awakens the universe. It has nice rhythm. The punctuation marks gives this poem an extra flavor.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "Why are you S.A.D.*?" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
This is beautiful quatrains poem written for a senior's contest. I appreciate the philosophical thoughts portrayed in this poem. Each season brings different looks and beauty. Each season affects our mood which reflected in your poem. For me, I also feel gloomy in the grey cloudy day.
I found this poem is positive and a little humorous for example “How can any of this sadden you?
Oh, the pollen. Excuse me. Ah-chooo.”
The way you wrote makes me reading your poem to the end. It has good rhythm and flowed beautifully with your crafted words. The tone I find this poem is soothing and cheerful.
And my favorite lines are
"The warm summer fades slowly away,
Autumn’s palette is now on display.
Halloween, pumpkins, Thanksgiving too;
so many reasons for not feeling blue."
This is indeed a good entertaining piece. It's been a pleasure to review your story "Haunted Hotel" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
It’s a good story. Beautifully used the prompt “What could happen when you inherit a haunted hotel?“ . I like the dialogues. They floats well with the characters. I could easily imagine the scene. The suspense of the ending makes me wonder what's going to happen next.
This is a good poem about a blade of grass. It has good message. I like the way it ended. The plot is simple but beautiful. The speaker is metaphorically compared with a natural object with human nature. A beauty like simple pleasure could cherish our heart which the poets tells by these lines
Yet some will only see a field
and simple morning dew.
A blade of grass, like anything,
depends on point of view.
This is good story. I could totally relate to your story. Because it,s well written. I like the way your story ended. You have sketched beautiful picture of the surroundings. I especially like the character grandma.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "The Child of the Water" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army"
I like the short story. I like the descriptions and presentations.
I'd particularly enjoyed the fighting scene with the sea monsters. You have described it beautifully. I had a very clear picture of him in my mind.
OVERALL IMPRESSION :I enjoyed your story. It’s well written.
I try to read a poem every day. Every poems tells a story. I believe the poem is a reflection of sadness love, beauty.
This poem written with a famous fairy tale Jack and the Beanstalk. I appreciate how each line started with a certain letter. The poem has good rhythm . It rhyming is soothing to the ear. I like the scenery you have sketched here. It gives the readers a good feeling when they read it. I like the last stanza “Bury some coins and dress up the bean,
Enter the town and make a big scene.
All the curious folk were soon gathered ‘round -
Now Jack told the tale of a bean that he’d found”
I like this story, and how you crafted the dialogues. It reminds me my grandmother. Her conversations, her affectionate scolding-- come to my mind.
I like the dialogues of your story. It flowed beautifully. I like the emotions evokes in this story. Your prompt was probably to make a story with a specific prompt. Maybe this is why you focused on the dialogues. I like how your story ended.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.
I've read it several times. I like reading this thoughtful piece. The words are so pure and so true. It is full of wonderful thoughts and yet inspirational. The title fits your write. It delivers message to the readers.
I like your lines “Pay it forward means to do for others without expecting stuff in return. But that doesn't mean that the people paying it forward don't expect you to be polite and thank them”
I like reading this piece. It reminds me a show Master chef kitchen. It is one of my favorite show. I love watching the contestants cook with great enthusiasm.
You beautifully painted a cooking scene. In your piece Tyra an amateur cook along with other contestants trying their best to impress the judges . Some adding pepper on roast, some slicing potatoes, some making cream fillet.
I think in some places you need paragraph break. It seems that this is a first draft of yours. It will be more interesting if you edit a little.
Thanks for sharing your work with us. It's pleasure to read your story.
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