This was absolutely delightful. I figured out who she was right away, but had no idea what she was up to until the end. Very well written. You did a great job modernizing a mythological figure. No obvious errors in spelling, punctuation or grammar. Great little story!
Very nicely written. For being so short, it's quite good. I would love to see this one expanded a tad sometime. A little more backstory, maybe show the wife running off the road before revealing he cut the brake lines...just some ideas for you to contemplate.
What a wonderfully fun little story. It's short, but very well told and feels like the perfect length, though it would be fun to see it as a serial, maybe...tales of Father Time would definitely interest me. Your descriptions are fantastic. Amusing and interesting. I noticed no errors. Great job!
Short and to the point. Very sad and unfortunately a huge problem these days.It's hard to review such a short piece, especially when it comes to poetry, but this is very heartfelt and moving and I saw nothing wrong besides the first misspelling. Keep on writing!
It didn't work very well due to unclear directions. Instead of just asking for an action, tell us what kind of verb we need to use in order for the story to make sense. Also the animal (beginning with anthro)suggestion was just plain confusing. I think it shows some good potential with a little work. Be as specific as possible!
Well written, dark and disturbing, no obvious errors. Good twist ending, though a tad abrupt. The reveal might be better if you build suspense just a little longer. Still, a fun read!
Great little story. A fun read. Excellent twist. Only error I noticed was "what sty we live in" Would sound more natural to say "what a sty we live in"
This was a fun little read and you followed the prompts beautifully. Unfortunately, the other entries were disqualified and I apologize for taking years to get back to this. I'm sending you gps to thank you for entering and as an apology for taking so long. The contest is finally back up and running so I hope you'll enter.
Wow. Just wow. This is one of the best sci-fi stories I've ever read. I really loved it. I love time travel stories to begin with and this was brilliant. My only complaint is that it's too short. I want more!! Lots more. This would be a great beginning to a full length novel. I found no errors. Absolutely fantastic!!
Very weird! I love it. Makes you wonder if the people are ignoring VIC or if something has indeed happened to them. Has an excellent creepiness factor. I noticed no obvious errors in spelling, grammar or punctuation. I really enjoyed this short, but sweet little story!
A fun and amusing story. I felt for her on her crazy bike ride to work. The ending kind of was a little flat for me. The dialogue seemed a little forced and kind of took away from the humor of the earlier part of the story, in my opinion. I didn't find any errors though, so well done!
Fun and interesting. As for the questions, why question a children's book? lol. I mean, most of his stuff was silly nonsense, looking for meaning in it is silly too! In my opinion. They're fun books for kids.
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