Wow. Just wow. This is one of the best sci-fi stories I've ever read. I really loved it. I love time travel stories to begin with and this was brilliant. My only complaint is that it's too short. I want more!! Lots more. This would be a great beginning to a full length novel. I found no errors. Absolutely fantastic!!
Very weird! I love it. Makes you wonder if the people are ignoring VIC or if something has indeed happened to them. Has an excellent creepiness factor. I noticed no obvious errors in spelling, grammar or punctuation. I really enjoyed this short, but sweet little story!
A fun and amusing story. I felt for her on her crazy bike ride to work. The ending kind of was a little flat for me. The dialogue seemed a little forced and kind of took away from the humor of the earlier part of the story, in my opinion. I didn't find any errors though, so well done!
That was the only thing that stood out as a possible error. Otherwise a very well-written story. I cried a little when she made up with the almost mother-in-law. Very moving and emotional. I don't usually like these kinds of stories because they make me cry, but if you hadn't written it so well it wouldn't have made me cry.
Fun and interesting. As for the questions, why question a children's book? lol. I mean, most of his stuff was silly nonsense, looking for meaning in it is silly too! In my opinion. They're fun books for kids.
Once upon a time there was an evil sorcerer named Kevin. Everyday, people laughed at him because Kevin was hardly a commanding or frightening name. One day,fed up with all the laughter and jeers, Kevin cast an angry, vengeful spell. Because of that, all the people who had laughed at him and refused to take him seriously began turning into porcupines. Until finally, there were no humans left in the kingdom except for Kevin, and he lived happily ever after.
This was really fun. A fantastic idea and reading other people's stories was awesome. Thank you for sharing them!
I really liked this, but now I'm a little disappointed at the ending. Will the kids and teacher remember what he said when those things do happen? Is he stuck in the past or will he end up back in the future and it was all a dream? So many questions! But, very well-written and I did enjoy it!
I found this very amusing. I liked the twist at the end. I was a little confused why Santa had dwarves instead of elves, but you do say it's not your usual Christmas story. A fun read.
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