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My overall opinion: I felt this was solidly laid out story of a lawman who is out looking for a fugitive that got away from him. He never could let it rest and he felt pressed that justice must be served, in any way possible, only to learn that sometimes justice is to let sleeping dogs lie. I really liked reading this story and was rooting for the fugitive (again!) and was satisfied with the ending. It all pulled together in a cohesive and realistic way.

Your spelling and grammar: I'm happy to say that I noticed nothing in the area of spelling or grammar and was pleased to see your use of grammar structure for the time period.

What I liked most: The ending made me quite happy and I thought justice was really served in the way the lawman left the secret he'd unearthed alone.

What I liked least: As usual, I wanted more story and wished to see more text about these characters.

An editing suggestions: none.

I have always enjoyed this genre and love it when the writing stands true to the era it is from. You have done this in this wonderful story!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
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#4403293

Review of Guns and Ammo Aren't Enough

Review by Happy Adore♥

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Rated: 18+

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My overall opinion: For me, this story did not have a happy future regardless of what was written. It was about a brother and sister who turned to crime to exact revenge against a wealthy town family who killed their kin while they were out from their home. They start stealing items but specifically the guns and ammo to rain down revenge on these people. It felt forlorn because these weren't just angry kinfolk but these were kids, young kids, dealt a very bad hand in the end. How could they win with these kinds of odds against them? They won't but they will get revenge and take as many of the people who stole their parents ,brothers, and sisters away from them. So from that angle, it worked. But I only felt sadness in the end. Good job with a difficult subject.

Your spelling and grammar: I did not see any spelling or grammar issues in your story so that's a good thing.

What I liked most: I liked that they were tireless in their pursuit and did do hurt to the people who killed their family, so that made me feel better about reading it.

What I liked least: Well, I usually do not like the story to end but was glad that their story ended in them taking out so many people, though I dislike sad endings. You did a good job with it.

An editing suggestions: none.

Closing thoughts: You have to have your sad westerns otherwise it wouldn't be an accurate picture of the old West which in many ways was heartless and mean. You balanced it by giving the kids the upper hand and for that, I could smile sadly.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
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#4403290

Review of High Stakes on the Sweetwater River

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Rated: ASR

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My overall opinion: This story of a man who puts his life, nearly, and the life of his wife on the line to speak the truth in a town where the richest cattleman is the dirtiest and deadly, rang true to me as a situation I am sure existed in this era. The tension felt crazy high as I read through this story of this man who didn't want the lives of two fellow townspeople wiped in mud and disgraced over money and land. Really nice job with this story.

Your spelling and grammar: I am happy to say that I did not find any spelling or grammar errors in the story.

What I liked most: I was happy to read another story of the hard, treacherous times of the Western era. This story stuck to the mood and tone necessary for the genre used and I liked it.

What I liked least: This story works as a story of corruption but it lacked the grammar structure and colloquialism of these Western areas. I read many Westerns recently and there is a certain type of language used that made this story less gritty than it could be, in my opinion.

An editing suggestions: none.

Another good Western told in tone of the times, very good to read!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
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#4403286

Review of Found out

Review by Happy Adore♥

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Rated: 13+

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My overall opinion: The story of a young woman of Asian ancestry who strikes on her own in a growing Western town to write articles, or she wanted to be a reporter, kept my interest for a happy ending for the main character. There are always lies, and the young man who helped her had ulterior motives for his assistance. It seemed like this story was a lead in to the rest of this character, and her paramour, Roy, story and possible relationship. The tension was high and unfortunately, for me, it felt rushed for the word limit but I think you did well with the words you were able to use.

Your spelling and grammar: There were just this one place where the sentence could use a semi colon, in my opinion, since they both stand alone as a separate sentences.

She couldn't handle it, she had to hide. This was my only suggestion in this area; the rest is pretty well laid out.

What I liked most: I liked your use of colloquialism and grammar structure of the time. It feels more believable when the words are written this way.

What I liked least: I think that I wanted to know more about this character, Suzanne, and I wished for more text about her.

An editing suggestions: none.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
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#4403284

Review of The Marshal

Review by Happy Adore♥

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Rated: 13+

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My overall opinion: This story read quite taut as the tension was thick in the air as I read through about this young man who was hiding out from the lawman and the young lass who fell under his spell. Very solid entry for the Western genre complete with the grammar structure and colloquialism of that time. It was a very engrossing read and I found myself hoping the guy who the Marshall was after would get away but sadly, it wasn't in the cards for him that day. A very enjoyable and engaging Western I'd read again and again.

Your spelling and grammar: I am happy to say there were no spelling or grammatical errors to report for your entry.

What I liked most: I really liked the dynamics between the Marshall and this young man who he is chasing. It is liked they are locked in some morbid dance and there are no winners in the end.

What I liked least: I wished there were more story for me to read.

An editing suggestions: none.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
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#4356357

Review of We'll Rise Up

Review by Happy Adore♥

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Rated: 18+

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My overall opinion: This is a strong story that makes great use of the audio prompt for this month. The character development is well thought out, the story layout flows well and this makes sense within this framework. The main character, young Tillie is a strong willed and angry young girl who lives on a plantation in the South who vows revenge on the man who just beat her father in front of her eyes. There is resolution for her through the curse placed on anyone who hurts a family member, and she finds peace in this new found knowledge. I thoroughly enjoyed this story!

Your spelling and grammar: There were no spelling or grammatical errors to report which always makes me happy.

What I liked most: Well, there are so many things to like in this story. A slave gets vindicated the day after a beating, a wise and loving grandma to advise the family, a dad who is there for and loves his child, and the list could just go on!

What I liked least: There was nothing that I found to dislike about this story.

Suggestions: No suggestions needed.

An editing suggestions: none.

Closing thoughts: What a joy to read a story with such strong characters who just liven up the page with their intensity and the dialogue, it really keeps you engaged and invested in their future endeavors. I know this is a short story for the monthly prompt but I would love to see more from this family in some of your future writings. This was a joy and privilege to read this story today!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

#4356355

Review of The Risen Uniter.

Review by Happy Adore♥

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Rated: ASR

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My overall opinion: This story mixes fantasy and religious themes beautifully into a working story theme. There are two main characters. Prince Cronus and King Murian in this story and the main character, Prince Cronus has this strong belief in God and his power to unite the warring kingdoms into a state of peace. His father tells him this is foolishness to believe but Prince Cronus won't falter in this belief. I think this story managed to make me care about the warring kingdoms and the quest for peace through a steady and forward moving story style. This helped keep me engaged in the story.

Your spelling and grammar: No spelling or grammar issue were found in this story.

What I liked most: I liked when the Prince received the visit from the Heavenly visitor with the sword. This is where the story shifted and the Prince had the power to unite all of the kingdoms in peace. I love reading about the power of faith, faith that does not waver but is strong and impacts others for change.

What I liked least: There was nothing to dislike within this story.

Suggestions: None.

An editing suggestions: none.

Closing thoughts: I was pleasantly surprised with this story. I really enjoyed the story development, the movement and dialogue which served to keep me interested. What a fantastic thought of a world with peace, and no more war anywhere. Don't know if we'll ever see this in our lives but it is good to read about it.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
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#4356350

Review of Miguel's Duty

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Rated: 18+

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My overall opinion: This story of a young Hispanic Secret Service agent who is sworn to protect a President who is personally does not agree with is a very powerful story of honor, duty and the daughter he wants to continue to make proud. It travels over the issue of duty over personal opinion, even though some of these opinions are quite strong. There was emotion and tension within this story that it kept me on the edge of my seat. Great job with pulling this together.

Your spelling and grammar: There were no spelling or grammar issues with this story.

What I liked most: The main character is a strong proud Hispanic man with a delightful elementary aged child who loves the fact that his job is protecting the President. This man often fights within himself whether he should just simply step aside when the enemy shows but his duty to the Constitution keep his mind in check for another day. This is laid out throughout this story, the struggle, and the daily battle to stay the course. I thought this was well laid out.

What I liked least: There was nothing to dislike in this story.

Suggestions: None.

An editing suggestions: none.

Closing thoughts: What a fantastic job you did with your interpretation of the story prompt and showing the battle that is often fought when opposing sides are employed together. I thought his focus on his child for strength really was a used well and the story felt balanced. This was an engaging and solid story for so many to read and enjoy.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

#4356349

Review of Rise Up

Review by Happy Adore♥

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Rated: 18+

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My overall opinion: This interstellar tale of a female character and four younger kidlings all called Zarrian kind of doesn't get a chance to draw the reader into the story before most of the characters are killed in a spaceship crash. I feel like I am observing this, unfeeling like, because I did not get to meet them. The story seems base d around the older character named Stacce. She doesn't draw me in nor make me feel concerned about being stuck out on some distant planet in space. This is not a good thing because if I am not concerned, then I will not probably read more, in my opinion. The story tends to drag but there is hope if the layout and the content is revisited.

Your spelling and grammar: No spelling or grammar issues were found.

What I liked most: I liked the three eyed robot character and was saddened to learn he'd been killed off early on in the story. I think the characer Stacce needs a sidekick to help the story along.

What I liked least: For me, more could have been done with the song prompt for the story integration. The mention of the words, Rise Up, just feels like a slight but I think more thought could have gone into making the song fit, in my opinion.

Suggestions: I'm not sure of the paragraph but a sentence has a typo in it:...am all along on this planet now. This is a simple fix that is easy to correct.

An editing suggestions: none.

Closing thoughts: Nice work on your entry for the Rise Up audio prompt and I hope you take some of my critique in consideration.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

#4260598

Review of War Memories

Review by Happy Adore♥

Rated: 18+

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My overall opinion: This is the stark story of a young man's long path back to recovery as a soldier in his planet's war, in which, he suffers debilitating injuries and must lean on others on his way back to health. I was struck by the age chosen for the young warriors, 15 years, just shy of being a full-fledged teen and yet already seasoned soldiers. A sobering, yet triumphant story!

Your spelling and grammar: No spelling or grammar errors were discovered.

What I liked most: What I loved was the interplay between the brother and sister characters. As he fought her, and she nearly gave in because he was so negative, there is a redeeming time when friends rise to occasion and help when it is needed most. This was most encouraging to the young man who almost lost hope for any good in his life.

What I liked least: Nothing except maybe the ages of the characters. So young to experience this type of pain and loss, and yet, I know it's only a story. I am hopeful this stays that way.

Closing thoughts: This was a solid story with poignant moments and realistic dialogue that kept me enthralled til the end. Well done!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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#4260593

Review of The Letter

Review by Happy Adore♥

Rated: E

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My overall opinion: This was a surprise story with more than initially expected for the title. There was not only the single parent issue, family separation along with a very precocious, nearly OCD child of the main character to keep things moving along in this story. It didn't feel like a happy tale but I left thinking there was love, and at least, they had one another.

Your spelling and grammar: I did not find any grammar or spelling errors in this story.

What I liked most: I liked that the brought the surprise to his mother, as it didn't seem, to me, that he often brought her happy surprises. The story of the Christmas miracle has been told many times but not like this one. I enjoyed it!

What I liked least: Not sure if the open-ended ending fits here for me, even though we were left with the main character's Mother in the hospital. She felt like a side character for me, necessary for the letter miracle to play out in the story but nothing more.

Closing thoughts: This story of a Christmas miracle not only for the main character, Lois, but for her son Mason is heart-warming as their dynamics play out throughout the story. There seemed some loving tension but she will always provide for him as he's her reminder of what her life is for.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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#4209093

Review of Our Canvas is Life

Review by Happy Adore♥

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Duke the Fluke

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Impression: This review is for your poem, "Our Canvas is Life", a poem that is a metaphorical comparing of a poet and an artist.

What I loved: I enjoyed the idea behind this piece. To muse on how an artist and a poet can be so closely related.
I thought the second line in your second paragraph really was thought provoking and introspective. So many are lauded as having talent but many who do, they have it because of the experience in their lives.
I thought the work you presented rounded nicely around the title of the poem.

Final thoughts: Enjoyable work! I hope to read more of your work in the future!

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Review of The Right Thing to Do

Review by Happy Adore♥

Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

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My overall opinion: This story is written for the story prompt of a villain who thinks they are doing a valiant thing, that they are the hero who saves the day when they are the bad person all along. In this story, we meet a man who comes from a long line of lawyers and he decides to contemplate murder.

Your spelling and grammar: As I read through your entry, I found this sentence sense error in paragraph three, first sentence: “So where does my “murder theory” come into play?” You ask. This sentence needs editing for syntax error and is not a huge rewrite for this story.

What I liked most: I enjoyed that you did not fill in unnecessary information but attempted to present your character, though this character could use more background or info, in my opinion.

What I liked least: It just felt a bit unclear but I still read through and enjoyed your story.

An editing suggestions: My other suggestion is to just read through again for clarity and reading ease.

Closing thoughts: This was a good story and I do encourage you to keep on writing and developing your work.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you will. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

#4182488

Review of Theopolis

Review by Happy Adore♥

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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My overall opinion: This guy was a pompous jerk with narcissistic tendencies but hardly a villain, in the context of villainy. Yes, he has authority issues, and wishes to do things and has lack of respect for the work that goes into keeping the country safe, but that makes him a dirt bag, not a villain from my perspective.

Your spelling and grammar: Great spelling and grammar. No issues there.

What I liked most: I liked how the character was laid out and various scenarios with him were provided.

What I liked least: I wanted to see him do something besides say breathe out threats, that he isn't strong enough to act on. Most people lack the umpfh to DO anything...and I didn't like that the officers just didn't cuff him for making threats. They could do that, if they so chose to.

An editing suggestions: None were necessary.

Closing thoughts: So, this character wants to be a tough guy, huh? Well, I'd love to see him drafted, or kidnapped and dropped in different part of the country. Then, let's see how much of a villain he actually is! Oh! The thinks you could think but I'm getting into a whole other territory.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you will. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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#4182479

Review of The wife beater

Review by Happy Adore♥

Rated: 18+

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My overall opinion: This story is about a man who is meeting his counselor for the first time because he acts in violence against his wife. He is insistent that his actions are provoked by his wife's laziness. The counselor hears his rebuttals and states that they will recommend divorce and immediate seperation, for his wife's safety.

Your spelling and grammar: No spelling or grammar issues were found.

What I liked most: My favorite part of this story was how the counselor did not allow him to get a rise out of them. They stated what they would do and left the room, leaving him to rant and rave. It was a very good addition to this story!

What I liked least: Probably the story content was my least favorite. It's a taboo and hard to read.

Suggestions: I felt that you created this person as a believable villain who thinks he's the hero of the story. In his warped mind, what he does makes sense and is just.

An editing suggestions: None needed for this piece.

Closing thoughts: This was a very good character set up for the villain of your story, should you lengthen it. I thought you did a good job with introducing us to this scary character.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

#4182477

Review of The Price of Safety

Review by Happy Adore♥

Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

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My overall opinion: This is the character intro of a young thug who has lived a hard life and chosen to pursue crime as a profession. He has a very bad experience with another pal, who is killed by another group of thugs, and this sets in him the need to never let anyone hurt him. This theme continues unto the very end of this sad story.

Your spelling and grammar: No spelling or grammatical errors were found.

What I liked most: I liked the movement of the story, and the language. He definitely came across as a tough guy but I felt he was shaped by his life, the things that were thrust upon him and he just couldn't escape. I really enjoyed your character introduction!

What I liked least: How this character ended was not the greatest for me but he was on a roll and all things must stop sometime.

An editing suggestions: None were needed.

Closing thoughts: I thought you kept the pace lively and interesting. Even though I was reading about the villain, I found myself rooting for him and hoping he might win somehow. This bodes well for his guy if you placed him in a story of his own. This character intro was a strong one and well laid out. I found myself really feeling vested in this character, which is a good sign to me of a job well done!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you will. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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#4182476

Review of Pay back

Review by Happy Adore♥

Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

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My overall opinion: In this story based on a story prompt for a villain we meet a woman, Jamie, who is the true definition of the saying, "Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned" and this woman not only was scorned but he tried to destroy her life. She is striking back like someone seeking justice for wrongs inflicted to her and her family.

Your spelling and grammar: There were no spelling or grammatical errors in this story.

What I liked most: I loved her purpose and indignation. She is going to succeed in her revenge.

What I liked least: I didn't have anything that stood out for me, and that's good.

Suggestions: For easier online reading, I would suggest you break up the paragraph sections so it doesn't feel like it all is running together. There is a lot of content but when it is all jammed together, it gets hard to read.

An editing suggestions: See above.

Closing thoughts: Jamie is a true hellion but it only turned out that way because of what her former husband awoke in her. I think she could make a good continuing character, if you chose to.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you will. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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#4182471

Review of The Scarlett Rose

Review by Happy Adore♥

Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

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My overall opinion: This story written for the villain story prompt introduces us to a loveless marriage, two unhappy people, and two people in lust. The main character, Jacob, is caught in an affair with a women who expresses deep interest in him and his life, while at home, his wife, Sarah, treats him like last week's garbage. He is starved for emotion and affection; this woman gives him all that he needs even though, it will destroy his marriage. So technically, he is the villain here, even though I wouldn't rule out his girlfriend. She's not counseling him about his marriage; she is trying have him for herself.

Your spelling and grammar: No spelling or grammar issues were found.

What I liked most: In a story like this, there is so little to like about the theme, and the main character as a man is not dynamic but as often happens, he is to someone.

What I liked least: His mousy air was not beguiling but again, he is employed. And that is attractive to someone.

I also am not a fan of affair stories because they all end the same.

An editing suggestions: None were found. I did like that you used great line and paragraph spacing which make for easier online reading.

Closing thoughts: As you read, I am torn on his status as a villain because there is more than one villain here, in my opinion. The marriage is loveless, and is hanging on by a thread. But that is usually how it works. Good job, though!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you will. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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#4182470

Review of Why Can't a SpaceVillain be Good

Review by Happy Adore♥

Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

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My overall opinion: This is a fantastical romp for the villain story prompt that explores whether a villain, wait, no, a SpaceVillain be good, do good. In this story, we meet a girl named Zoria whose mother is an evil SpaceVillain and only strives to pursue the worst. Yet her daugther wants to be a SpaceVillain too but only do good, not bad. I like it...it's zany!

Your spelling and grammar: There were no spelling or grammatical errors found.

What I liked most: I liked the absurdity of it, the fun of it, and the theme.

What I liked least: That Zoria's mother dies before she got to see her daughter succeed as a SpaceVillain that only does good.

An editing suggestions: None were needed. I did want to mention that your line and paragraph spacing were very nice and help with online reading fatigue.

Closing thoughts: Zoria sounds like a character with a polyanna view of the universe but you got to give it to her. She's got large kahunas to take on the villain industry as a good villain! Well done.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you will. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

#4182467

Review of Sister Justice

Review by Happy Adore♥

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Hi Shannon

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