For your entry, you have submitted this poem, "Changing Eyes" a tritina, an awesome poetry form. I thought that you maintained emotional balance, yet the poem told me a story quite poetically.
The way you described how the eyes show so much in the relationship, as it goes through a decline, has so much power, passion but it is sensitive to the sadness experienced within.
I really liked your poem, Staine and just learned another poetry form all at the same time!
For your entry, you have submitted the poem, "Loving a Friend" which speaks on the desires of the heart and how it can affect the one who is in love.
There is such emotion in this piece and you can tell that the love is so real. The lines are clear and distinct in form, and there is a good balance from start to finish.
I enjoyed reading this work and thank you for submitting it for the contest.
I have reviewed some of the items from your folder, "Uncut Jems" and I realized that your folder for your poetry has not been reviewed.
This is a great folder with some very good poetry items in it. I was so proud of your work, and really am glad that I've had the opportunity to review them.
Keep up the great writing and I hope more people stop by for a R&R!
I've been wanting to review a few more items from your port, Randomangel, so I chose your poem, "Nonsense" which truly is not anything close to it.
All I can say is that you have some wild and zany dreams, but the fact that you were able to articulate your thoughts in such a delightful manner really struck me.
To write the poem using the letters of the alphabet from z to a, yet it all made sense to me, I was impressed!
Your writing is really taking off, Randomangel and I am glad to have you as my "newbie".
This is your final review from your winning bid from the "SYAA Auction" held earlier this month.
Your poem, "The Catalyst" is a poem of change and movement brought to play by an outside stimulus. The air that causes your body to move, your mind to see and think clearly and with vigor. I do like how you say this person, this thing doesn't give you life, but incites a new look on the life you now lead.
It has such good structure, content and vitality; I enjoyed this one very much because I can really relate to the thoughts behind it.
This is your ninth review from your winning bid in the "SYAA Auction" held earlier this month.
Your poem, "Changes" is a playful jaunt look at how we say one thing but inside, desire another. You begin with wanting peace, quiet and serenity, but the chaos and rampant rages of this world won in the end. Now, you no longer look for serenity, but have found enjoyment in sinful delights.
I liked the tone and pace of this piece and again, your emotions ring true all the way through.
This is your eighth review from your winning bid in the "SYAA Auction" held earlier this month.
Your poem, "Not a Word Spoken" has such a fresh, young perspective on falling in love, in spite of not actually talking, but you know what you feel from the first sight. Early heartbreak can linger for a long time, but hopefully, you were able to part on a friendly note.
Again, you evoke the emotion, the insecurity and awkwardness of the moment very well.
This is your sixth review from your winning bid in the "SYAA Auction" held earlier this month.
Your poem, "Without You" is a true tongue in cheek poem that packs alot of power in spite of its size. Many readers will be surprised to see that this is not your traditional poem bemoaning the loss of a lover, but one in which the lover is mocked for thinking you'd be lonely without them.
As usual, you add the emotional plus with your word structure and keep the reader entranced from start to finish.
This is your fifth review from your winning bid in the "SYAA Auction" held earlier this month.
Your poem, "Aftershock" discusses in poetic form, the effects that trauma can have on a person. The uses of the words ending in "ball" had a pointed touch to it.
The emotion that you are so known for shows strongly in this work, especially with the empathy shown at the last stanza.
This is your third review from your winning review bid in the "SYAA Auction" this month.
Your poem, "My Woe" is an interesting acrostic that spells out "I AM THE DEMON I CANNOT DEFEAT" as you write about the struggle to maintain your strength in writing.
The stanzas really support the thought, as I know that many can feel you in this area. I thought that your poem is quite creative and strongly worded.
I've been wanting to review some of the poetry in your port and thought that I would take a few minutes today. What a pleasant surprise it was for me!
Your poem, "Alone" is about feeling alone, but what an illusory picture you have painted for us all to read.
What I liked about your poem: The poignant illustrations of aloneness; they are so delightful to read!
My favorite line: A single cloud in an empty sky,
A pained look, an unheard sigh,
A flower floating on the sea,
A rusty lock without a key. These are so creative and it reminds me of the lyrics to "King of Pain". Very nice job!
What you've written is just a lovely work of art and I really enjoyed reading it.
Thank you for your entry in the Hummingbird "HUM" Poetry contest.
You entered your poem, "Night", which you list as a small poem, but I must tell you that it is FULL of fabulous writing!
What I liked about your poem: I loved the flow, the mood of it, it felt like a walk with a lover after dark, and he whispered words of love unexpectedly in my ear. That's what I felt like as I followed your poem down to the last word.
My favorite line: All of it was a such a dream, a dark flowing dream. I loved the way you repeated the last line of the previous line into a work of art.
I saw your poem on the site and thought that I had to review this truth tale of a poem.
Your poem, "Not By Chance" really cuts through the excuses that are usually provided when men don't want to tell the truth behind the breakup.
I thought is was amusing that you used the different cliche remarks and thought of your own, but didn't want to sink to the lower walk of life by using it.
This line stood out for me: "But I remained quiet. I knew it wasn’t by chance
this end for me, this beginning for you." It struck me because it was the line that expressed the reality of your breakup and the emotions you held inside.
I was out browsing around on the site,a nd I saw your poem, "Tiananmen" and felt that this was a powerful piece that I must review.
Your poem is about the foster care system and how they fail to recognize the love and true feelings that develop with many of the parents and the children who see their foster brothers and sisters as family. The children become pawns in a game, being placed even if the home they are in doesn't want to lose them.
These lines are so STRIKING to me and I include them here: "They said she was “just a foster child” –
we had no right to contest her new placement.
But I tried. I stood in the driveway,
attempting to block the inevitable.
They drove her away and I still stood there,
certain a tank had just run over me." There is so much strength and hope in the eyes of a child, they believe in spite of the reality of the situation, and can inspire others to stay strong and continue to love. The way you describe the child standing as her foster sister was taken away just brings up images of a child in a third world country being forcibly removed from a family, and it is a powerful one!
You really did a great job with this poem Alicia and I am so glad that I had a chance to review it for you!
Well, here is the second review for your winning bid in the SYAA auction.
I chose your poem, "You", and it was such a treat in spite of the melancholy feeling throughout the piece.
I enjoyed the repeating lines, it was almost like a chant and helped to maintain the mood of the poem.
This is my favorite stanza: "Silent I sat, dear,
noting your contentedness;
I've long sat here with my tears." What stuck out to me is the entreating tone utlizing the word, "dear", which is almost a word of endearment, yet a chiding because of your rescuers placid mood while you were in tears. Good, very good and I like it!
You have such a good collection of poems that I really cannot wait to review more of your port.
This review is part of the HUM Raiders review from the Hummingbird group and for your review, I am reviewing, "Come Back to Us", a story that combines the sci-fi genre with the story of a family learning to cope with the separation of the father to a space station on Mars.
I think that you really took an interesting turn with this story, combining the different elements, and the relationship side of the story really was done very well.
I don't read many stories where the writer examines the musings of a father that is providing the childcare, and that has to be a missed area, even though, it is pretty prominant in our society.
I feel that you take fragments from your own life, and express them without inhibition in your work, and it is a refreshing blend.
I hope your book develops even farther for you and thanks for providing it for the group raid!
This review is part of your port review from "Simply Everything" and I have again chosen a work of poetry from your journal of writing. This poem, "Ragged Doll" is a bitterly honest look at how you felt during a traumatic period in your life.
I could relate to the feeling of just being weakened and unable to carry your own life, the way you'd like to see it go. When one goes through serious setbacks, it is as if you are some toy that anyone could play with or toss wherever they feel at the moment; it is the feeling of vulneralbility and helplessness that can be so overwhelming.
I felt you captured this so well in your poem for I envisioned a used Raggedy Ann doll as I read through your poem, and it made me feel sad.
These lines from your stanza: "My hopes and my dream ends with that fall
I am now like a ragged doll.
Carried to wherever I go to,
I have nothing to do." They truly epitomize the thoughts of this poem so clearly and distinctly.
Again, I applaud you for getting it out onto paper. This way, you can look back at it when this time has passed knowing that you are not truly a ragged doll.
This review is part of your port review from "Simply Everything" and for this review, I have chosen your poem, "Anxiety". You had a traumatic experience and took pen in hand, and expressed yourself with so much clarity!
Nothing can shake a person's world like misplaced trust or someone shatters what little innocence remains in your world. You no longer feel as confident in your decision making, and wonder if you'll be the same, ever.
This last stanza wraps it all up in an bitter tasting nutshell: "Vulnerable no more,
I have lost complete control.
It has taken its toll,
for my fear of the untold." It is so wrong when a person messes with another person's comfort area, and removes what they consider to be good about themselves from their lives. Very good job here!
Again, I enjoyed reviewing your work Sarah and look forward to reading more from you!
This review is part of your port review from "Simply Everything" and I've chosen your heart touching poem, "Strength Escapes" which is about your wish for more time with your grandfather.
There is so much emotion in this stanza: "Tears stain my cheeks
caress my face.
Roll to my lips,
the feeling, anything
but bliss." The feeling of helplessness, of your impending loss, is so completely explained through your tear stained face. The way you state it is so creative and I loved it!
and this stanza: "I have no time
to cry.
Strength escapes me
like the mist
which escapes the morning sun." This one really touched me to the core; I have felt such a loss of strength before and you capture this in this line.
This is a lovely, but sad poem, but I am glad that you have found your voice to share this with everyone else.
This is a review of your piece, Bleeding Inside, which recants a terrible account of a young woman who is abused at an early age, and it changes her life.
I must say that this was very hard to read, Sjolie, and I know it had to be even harder to write this story. The truth, the brutal truth, is so hard to read and comprehend, and it was tough to conceive of what was written on the screen before me.
I applaud you for facing this evil, deranged figure head-on, and revealing it for the world to look at and revile him.
Your ending was hopeful, caring and promised a future with healing and safety.
So, here is anothe review of the items in your port and I snuck upon this suspenseful work titled, "The Charmer", which is the story of a young girl who is sent to live with her aunt but is kidnapped by an unsuspecting couple who feel they are doing the poor children they take a favor.
The movement of the story was pretty steady; the dialogue interesting, and in line with the time period. The couple seemed very subtle, demure, not dangerous, yet they did take someone else's child and regardless of how they appear, which is the point of your story, what they did was wrong.
Not that you were wondering but I did not find any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors in your post.
I stumbled upon your port when I saw this item, "More About Me" which made me curious to find out about this generous, creative person.
I did not read your original work, "A Bit about Me", but I feel as if you've opened a curtain on a part of your life that is free and sincere.
I think that it is great that you are don't enjoy phony relationships, choosing to want real interactions in your life.
I really think that you are a wonderful person, true and caring and I think you have a thing for the newer members of the site, not that you've been here long yourself, but you remember how it feels to not know anyone or how to get around here.
I enjoyed reading your biographical piece and hope to review more of your work!
Till the next review,
THe TaLe oF CoCo ADoRe
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This is part of your port review that we give our Newbies who are members of "Adopt a Newbie" when they become adopted.
For your first review, I chose your personal narrative titled, "Operations? Meet Support" which tells of a novice's flight on a military transport.
The speaker lives on works in Support on the base, and normally is not involved in operational flights, but this time, the base commander gets a burr up his shorts and wants the Support staff to participate.
It is a crisply, tight told story with no frills, but a few giggles, nonetheless.
Nicely done, Sue and I'll see you on the next review!
Till the next review,
THe TaLe oF CoCo ADoRe
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I was so proud of your work, and really am glad that I've had the opportunity to review them. 
