You have submitted your entry, "Robin's New Home" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: Cute, but somewhat unorganized story of a little bird named Robin (good word usage!) who gets bored and falls out of the tree and upon falling, realizes that he is scared of heights.
Rhythm, flow, style: Though the story was wrapped up logically in the end, I just didn't feel the flow of it, and really didn't feel any emotion from the story about the young bird's delimma which I think you might want to work on. He seemed more selfish than afraid to me, but this is something that could be tightened up in a rework of the story. For this, I give your story a COOL.
Contents: It is the story of a young Robin who has lost his way, and through a series of events, the whole family relocates to the base of the tree, which stays true to the photo prompt, so the young Robin will not have to suffer through trying to fly again. I give you credit for creating the story and pulling all things together for the contest.
Remarks: Keep up the good work with your writing and I would read through it again to see if you see any areas that you agree might need some rework.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry, "Tiny Door", to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: A short story told from the view of a little person who has lost his way in our world, which was revealed through verbal cues towards the end, and he is thrilled to have found this door that might lead him back to his world. Clever and interesting take on this photo prompt.
Rhythm, flow, style:The flow of the story was a bit slight; it tried to gain momentum by causing the reader to muse on some thoughts of how the world has progressed, but I never caught the real emotion of the story, unfortunately, though I did think it was an interesting take on the photo prompt. For this, I give it my SMILE.
Contents: Not really full of much adventure but it did have creativity and insightful thoughts on the nature of the world.
Remarks: All in all, I think it was a valiant effort at this month's contest and I do think that your writing will only get more interesting the more you write and I do encourage you to keep up the good work.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: The story starts well but doesn't give a good idea of where it is going until almost the last few lines. The silence seems from the family seems to go on too long, and the reader is left to understand or read ahead to find out where the story is going.
Rhythm, flow, style: The story reads so delicately and sweet as the tree fairy family struggles to deal with their misfortune with discretion and dignity. The flow is a little stifled and then, it moves along at the end, and it is a happy ending for this good family. For this, I give your story a STAR.
Contents: The story gives us a glimpse into the world of the fairies, and particularly, one family who has been seemingly driven from their home at the base of the tree. Though their lives were being seriously affected by the move, they seemed oblivious to the changes until the wise fairy King has the family brought in to find out why they have left their home, and their life , to live in among the leaves. The humor at the end was a heartwarming surprise and showed the cleverness of the writer to change the mood with a few words. It was a very nice touch.
Remarks: All in all, I think that the writer dug deep into their writer's box to develop this story to revolve around the picture prompt.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry, "From the Ford of the Oak Tree" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: This was a warm little story of a man who had been living a rather numbed life for years who found out that dreams can come true if you just step outside of your comfort zone to experience them.
Rhythm, flow, style: I thought that this was a nicely paced story that allowed the writer to interpose some actual facts about names and heritage, which was a good touch for the story and showed heart when it was time to interact with Adare, the leprechaun. So, I give your story my SMILE.
Contents: The story started well, and flowed nicely into the finding of the hidden door at the base of the tree. The main thing that I found detracting was the lack of puncutuation or run-on sentences here and there. However, it was a good story with a fabulous ending for Chris who showed the leprechaun that all people are not greedy for gain, and some are just happy for the friendships that they can have.
Remarks: Overall, good work, good story with a few minor errors here and there but it was a really enjoyable story that especially will be timely for next St. Patrick's Day.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry, Whiskers First Adventure" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: The first opening lines really set the scene for a sweet little adventure that unfortunately, for the reader, never plays out except in shortened form. I think from the beginning lines, the reader might think we are going to read about young Whiskers adventures of mischief and fun, but we only get it told in the form of two words, scary and fun, and it was a bit of a letdown.
Rhythm, flow, style: I think you have a good style of writing that is suitable for children. It is a safe kind of writing that doesn't want to hurt the reader, or stir up too much emotion and it is lovable. I think it started well, but from my standpoint, it ended too soon.
Contents: Good heartwarming reading that is suitable for the young eyes, and the young at heart. Too short for a story for me because not enough of young Whiskers adventure and too much third person POV.
Remarks: Nice writing and good reading especially for the kids.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your story. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
You have submitted your wonderful entry, "My Kingdom No More" to the "Short Shots" contest for the month of May and now, for your review.
Impression: This is a story of jealousy, greed and divisions between people over social status. And the writer cleverly built this story to end at the little door from the photo prompt, which I nearly forgot about while I was reading this engrossing story.
Rhythm, flow, style: I really enjoyed the style; it was truly reminiscent of the old folklore style of writing with a moral in the end. The story began well with the king thinking of his days of playing by the tree with the door at the base, as it flowed into this story of a kingdom divided and ultimately lost because of the greed of the people. For this, I give your story my SMILE.
Contents: It really read like a solid piece of writing with the people not truly understanding that they would lose everything that was most important to them if they would not choose to get along with each other. I felt like the writer stayed focused in the course of the story, not veering away from the plot as many people tend to do, and kept it interesting.
Remarks: This was a good work that I enjoyed reading and think that there is a message here for us all. The ending was a real surprise as I wondered how it would be tied into the story, and it was done with a real creative touch. Nice job!
I enjoyed reviewing your writing today. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
For your entry, you submitted your poem, "For I Was Never Real" a kind of mind bending little work that muses on the idea of what it would feel like to not be real, and know it.
I thought it was a good effort, I think you listed your work in the right genres, and enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Thanks for entering the contest and best wishes in the contest.
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For your entry, you submitted your poem, "Sleep Deprived", a quick little piece that deftly lays out what we all feel when we find that we are lacking sleep.
I thought you laid out what we all feel in a very nice way, and though I thought you could elaborate further, it was good.
I wish you all the best in the contest and thanks again for the entry.
For your entry, you submitted your poem, "Sauk Mountain Climb", a funny little poem that describes a climb up Sauk mountain and pokes fun at those of us who have waited till our prime is nigh. I couldn't keep from chuckling at the account in this poem. It was funny, warm-hearted and engaging from start to finish.
I really enjoyed reading this poem and do wish you all the best in the contest!
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For your entry, you submitted your poem, "100 Miracles", a story-like poem that tells the tale of a boy who lived his life without seeing many miracles, and in the end, learned that what he felt was wrong with his life was something that many people must live and deal with.
I thought that you did a nice job with this poem, that there is a good message in your work, though you do have to think to find it out.
Thanks for your entry and I do wish you all the best in the contest.
For your review, you entered your poem, "Morgana la Fay", a poem about the deadly beauty who only had darkness in her heart, and all around her lay the dead who dared to fall in her trap.
I liked the rhyming and the theme of this poem. I thought you did a very nice job and how the first lines and the last are the same. It kind of shows that the beginning is the end in this god forsaken existence.
Thanks for entering the contest and to seeing your work in the next round!
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This review is one from your Mentor a Newbie auction winning bid and for review, I am looking at this short story, "The Seven Sins of a Girl", the story of a young girl who started her life innocent in her pursuits but in the end, only found darkness and bitterness in the life she led.
I liked the theme of the story because of the moral behind pursuing only money, and empty pursuits; it will leave you dead feeling and alone, even if you have many things or people all around you.
The story did not have much dialogue but it really had that old writing feel, where the speaker is trying to reach the reader with story with character and depth. I left feeling that I had read a story that was not only entertaining but I had learned something, as well.
Very well done, Dana and I do look forward to reading your next story before making my decision.
For your next review, and I did make a counting error in the last review, I'm reviewing your poem, "Just For Today", a wishful little piece that wishes for those things that we know we should do but often put off or only aspire to do in our lives.
I thought it was a honest piece, lively piece with good feel to it. This is a very good poem and I enjoyed reviewing it.
For your fourth review, I have chosen your poem, "I Dream" a truly standout piece that draws the reader into this world of wishing, loving and peace for others.
I thought this was a very well constructed and creative bit of writing that is solid from start to finish. Each line builds upon the next and the vibe is all positive and full of love. I can't get enough of this and loved reading all of this poem.
I really liked the last stanza: "I dream
Of days gone by,
Of past loves that never really ended,
Of friendships that never blossomed;
And time forever suspended." I don't know but this really caught me in a very special way and finalized my thoughts on the MB winner.
Well, I'm on my way to the last poem and thank you for donating in the MAN auction.
For your second review, I have chosen your spring themed haiku, "Promises of Spring", a bouncy, light and fun poem that sheds light on those wonderful feelings that springtime brings each year.
I have always enjoyed a good haiku because you can say so much in a few words, if you learn to do it well. I feel that you conveyed the anticipation, and yet, the duties that will come once spring has arrived. Very nice work!
I enjoyed reviewing this poem and look forward to the rest of them.
For your entry, you submitted your poem, "Peephole" a poem of friendship and the bonds that come from people who understand each other and choose to work together in the unity that binds them together.
The theme of this poem is heartwarming and though the speaker is skeptical of friends outside of this relationship, you can tell that these emotions are mutual.
Good work in this poem. Thanks for entering the contest and I do wish you all the best.
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For your entry, you submitted your poem, "Learn to Live" a truly inspirational, encouraging work that tells the reader to not look at their circumstances but learn to live within them. I think this is a very incredibly moving piece of poetry; it says the things I would think many know, and might see for others, but they won't do this for themselves, even if it might make their life better.
Your poetry is clear, worded so well and you use easy to understand concepts. Bravo again, Sherri; you've got a hot one here!
Thanks for entering your work and I do wish you the best in the contest!
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I was out the site, participating in a scavenger hunt when I came across your poem, "Dream or Memory" and I knew that I wanted to review it.
It is a poem that looks back on a terrible scene of a fateful night when there was so much emotion in the air; hate, anger, loneliness, these emotions rang so strong. They are the stuff that bad dreams are made up of, and sometimes, they are are memories too.
I thought you did a good job of painting a dark picture, of a home full of sadness and woe, where people were confused and hurt with nowhere to go.
For your entry, you submitted your poem, "No Greater Love", a very defined and well written piece of writing. I thought that you tell the story so well, but you do not stray away from the poetic structure of your work.
You did a great job with this poem, and I do thank you for entering your work.
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I was out on the site, and I saw this poem, "As She Felt the Masters Call" a touching memorial to your friend's mother and the wonderful life that she led. The words that you wrote were so moving and really tugged at the heart strings.
For anyone who loses someone, but it is because they go on home to glory, well, that's a different situation.
I love this line so much: "Her love for God and family
Shows through each and every one.
This matriarch of the family
Her work on earth is done." This is such a testatment to a life well-lived.
I really applaud you for your poem, and hope that you will enter your work in next month's poetry contest at "Hummingbirds HUM Poetry Contest" [13+]. We'd love to see your work there.
For your entry, you submitted your poem, "Prodigal Son", a sonnet that draws its background from the biblical story of the prodigal son. I think that it is well written, flowing work that speaks of the great love that was shown the prodigal, in spite of, his thoughtlessness towards his family.
I think that you did a good job with this piece and I do thank you for entering the contest. Best wishes to you!
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For your second review, I have chosen the poem, "Crow Feathers", a very interesting short poem that speaks of facing life on gilded wings, but flying on in spite of being persecuted.
It's a very interesting take on life, and the people who exist in it.
The entire poem was very good, and I really wish I understood its entire meaning but in spite of this, I thoroughly think you are a good poet.
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For my first review, for this is my first time to your port that I happened upon quite unexpectedly, and I am starting with your poem, "Alps" a work that speaks from the voice of the mountain, and it is a voice that is powerful, yet beguiling at the same time.
As you read through the poem, you are taken with the speakers word's to a place that is dangerous, cold yet alluring from the delicate balance between life and death as you climb deeper into the heights.
One of my favorite parts of this poem is here: "from movement one above the other,
zones of bend and thrust
where we've created havens for the clouds...", this just gives such an image of wonder and greatness that is almost makes the heart break for the beauty of those peaks.
This is an awesome piece of writing and I am so glad that I wondered through your port.
I came across your poem titled, "Adrift", a poem of letting your creative mind flow to reveal those hidden ideas inside.
I thought that this was a luscious piece because it could have been a love poem, or a surreal piece just due to word choices in this work.
One of my favorite parts of this poem is the line about "phantom visions float like Titanic survivors waiting for a lifeboat..." this creates such visions in my mind and I really enjoyed reading this piece!
You have a nice style and I look forward to reading more work from you.
For your entry, you submitted the short story titled, "Mr. Fish" a cleverly written story that twisted the perspective so much that I almost didn't realize that Mr. Fish wasn't a fish until I reached the end of the story!
The start of the story gave the feeling that we were watching the activity in a pond but we were actually reading about people, cleverly written and it took a careful eye to catch what you were really saying, which I did not catch until the ending.
I thought it was lighthearted, fun, and left me with a smile on my face. Nice job on this one.
I thank you for your contest entry; I do apologize that it was sent out late and I do wish you all the best in the contest!
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Impression: Cute, but somewhat unorganized story of a little bird named Robin (good word usage!) who gets bored and falls out of the tree and upon falling, realizes that he is scared of heights. 
Rhythm, flow, style: Though the story was wrapped up logically in the end, I just didn't feel the flow of it, and really didn't feel any emotion from the story about the young bird's delimma which I think you might want to work on. He seemed more selfish than afraid to me, but this is something that could be tightened up in a rework of the story. For this, I give your story a COOL. 
Remarks: Keep up the good work with your writing and I would read through it again to see if you see any areas that you agree might need some rework. 
I'm reviewing your poem, "Just For Today", a wishful little piece that wishes for those things that we know we should do but often put off or only aspire to do in our lives. 
