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Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

I love how you weave autumn through the piece in different ways.

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

In the second paragraph, the third sentence started as if you were showing us something, then it turns like we're hearing her thoughts. You might set off her thought somehow from the rest so that we can more easily see what she's thinking versus what you're showing us.

In the third paragraph, I feel a little confused. What is it about Norway that forces her to confront her husband about her affair?

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

I like how you start the piece. You gently pulled me in with the leaf and thoughts of autumn. I like how you paralleled different things in her life with autumn, be it the cold or the colors. The last paragraph is a perfect end; it's finality makes me content with the close of the piece. Great job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of I Love the Rain!  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

I love the rain too!

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

I would suggest picking one tense and using that throughout the piece (i.e. Rain falls; sky reaches). You have some punctuation in the second half but none in the first half. I would either punctuate the piece like you would if it were in paragraph form or omit it all together.

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

I loved the description in the second line: diamond downpour. It's a beautiful image. I really liked were you ended with the piece as well. I like the idea of land and sky coming together. You've described the scene and interactions of the rain well. Good job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

A very interesting and educational piece.

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

In the first line, hippopotamuses are mostly herbivorous? I wondered with the next bit of "grazing on grasses" if the comma wasn't supposed to go before "mostly" rather than after.

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

I enjoyed learning more about the "river horse." I had no idea that they couldn't swim or were related to whales! You presented your facts in a way that was easy to take in. I feel like I learned a lot about these animals in a very enjoyable way. Great job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of Glory and Honor?  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

Subjects like this transcend time.

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

None.

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

At first it seems like you're setting up to dissuade people from fighting, but it does turn out to be inspirational. I think people sometimes lose sight of why people fight. Perhaps we'll always have wars. I hope not.

The idea behind this piece could have been written in any period in time and set in any time. It's futuristic and the foes aren't ones we've faced yet, but the concept the idea of what we fight for is classic. I like how you've highlighted the changing technology and how we fight with "toys" now. Good job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of Sparrow  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

An interesting piece. I like the set up.

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

I feel like there is more to this story that I'm missing. For instance, in stanza two, I'm a little confused by: "Sparrow! Why do you lie?" Where does this come from? What exactly is being asked of the sparrow? How did she get to the point where we come in?

I would like to see more punctuation, specifically at the ends of the sentences.

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

The flow and your rhymes are great. This is a very intriguing tale. I'd like to know more about the sparrow. I like the ending. It's realistic, but hopeful. It shows that, even though things may not be the way that you wish they were, you can find contentment with your situation. Good job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of Lovesong  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

A lovely piece full of sentiment.

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

I would like to see more punctuation to fit the natural sentences within the piece.

In the third stanza, "it's all means" should be "it all means". I'm also wondering if you meant you can't walk on the moons of mars instead of "can".

I'm not sure about the all caps LA's at the end of the piece. Personally, I think the last line is a good end to the piece and, while the la's illustrate your humming afterwords, I don't feel that it adds anything to the piece. At any rate, I think it would help to not have the a's capitalized.

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

I like the sentiment you portray. I especially liked the images and lines about being on the moon in the second stanza. I like how the piece progresses from song to a humming a tune to a promise that means more than the rest. It's a beautiful thought. I think that, with a little fine tuning, this could be a beautiful piece. Good job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of Christmas Eve  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

A nice piece.

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

In the third stanza, I feel like you were a little boxed in by the form you have set up. The third and fourth lines feel like they should belong more to the first rather than being separated. I think it might help to switch lines one and two then remove the comma so your first line (which would then be line two) would be the subject for the following lines.

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

I love the way you have the piece set up. Your syllabics and rhymes are terrific. I like how you have combined both the Christmas story with Easter so we get the full picture from start to finish in one piece. Good job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of In Elysian Fields  
Review by § Forsaken §
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

An interesting piece. It's not often I read mythological piece that are as original as this.

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

I'm unfamiliar with Shadowfax. Is this based on a myth you know? I'm trying to figure out, in stanza 2, was it Shadowfax's intention to anger Pegasus or was Pegasus angry for some reason and Shadowfax is saying it wasn't his fault?

In the last stanza, I have a hard time picturing her taking "each in hand."

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

The piece flows well and your rhymes are excellent. I think you could lengthen the piece a little to include more of this story. It's a story I have not heard before and this whets my appetite and I'd like to see more. Good job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

What a tragic piece.

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

In stanza two, the punctuation feels off to me. I would connect lines one and two with a comma. I think the semi-colons could be a comma and I would change the period on line three to a comma to connect "forgotten" with "every day, a little more."

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

Your rhymes and the flow are terrific. You tell this sad tale very well. I really felt the anguish and the heartbreak. I like the strength displayed in the end, although the escape chosen was tragic. Great job1

Keep writing!!!



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Review of Lurking Raven  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

This is a dark piece but has a gossamer feel to me.

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

None.

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

Your rhymes and syllabics are excellent. Your word choices are perfect. It flows beautifully. Your descriptions are well done, dark but not overly graphic. Even though the topic is dark, I found this to be a beautiful piece. I like the lightness of the last line in the third stanza: In a twinkling to the eternal sphere. It reminds us that death isn't the end, just the passage to another, brighter, place. Great job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

A lovely welcome to the site.

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

My only suggestion is that you might add a link or two of your favorite items that helped you feel comfortable here or places you frequently go back to for help, ideas, or just camaraderie.

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

You've done an excellent job of introducing yourself and welcoming newcomers to WDC. It never ceases to amaze me what you can find on the site and how many members are willing to help you, regardless of what you're trying to do or find. Great job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*Note6*First Impressions*Note6*

A sad and heartwrenching story.

*Idea*Questions/Suggestions*Idea*

None.

*Note6*Overall *Note6*

It is so sad to think things like this happen. Thank you for sharing your story. You told it extremely well. The piece flows beautifully and the rhymes are excellent. I like the couplet form. The last couplet is enough to break your heart. Excellent job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of Vlad's Wife  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

I was expecting something a little more from an "untold" story.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

I'm not sure about using "untold" in the description. The base of the story fits with historical accounts. I like that you added how you felt she thought and felt in those final moments. I would like to see more of your story along with the history.

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

I like how you added an additional action/suspense moment in the beginning when the arrow is first shot into the room. You introduce the facts quickly and concisely. I would like to see it expanded a little. It's a short moment, but I think you could show more of the background of her story. I like seeing this story from her viewpoint rather. It's nice to see and imagine why rather than just being told how. Good job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of Morning Brew  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

I love this simple form!

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

None. *Bigsmile*

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

Thank you for the notes on the form. I think it's interesting that you mention that Adelaide created this form based on her love of Haiku. What's interesting is, not knowing this prior, I always was reminded of Haiku when reading this form. You've executed the form very well. The piece is excellent and I love the image at the end. It brings the piece to life. Terrific job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

Children are very special.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

Around line 9, I feel like something is missing. When I read it, I want to add "be" after "may." This also feels like the beginning of a new sentence. It seems to shift a little here.

In the last line, I think "into" should be "to". It fits better with the previous line of "To you and."

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

Children really are a gift and a blessing. I like the way you have the piece set up. Your rhymes are nice in the first half. I don't feel the rhymes in the second half are as strong as in the first half. I like your descriptions of the beauty the child brings, especially the second couplet. I can see and feel what you mean. Good job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

I love the form. I felt taken in by this piece.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

None.

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

Thank you for the notes at the end about the form. You did an excellent job in executing this form. I loved the repetition of the lines. It really ties the piece together nicely. Your rhymes are terrific. I felt transported into some dark and tortured place. It was very clear to me. Great job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of LED BY A STAR  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

A lovely piece.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

In the first stanza, the comma at the end of line one separates the subject "star" from the verb "led." I think you could do without it.

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

I love the way you present this piece. It is so visually appealing and festive. The flow and rhymes are terrific. You tell the story very well and it fits right in with the images in my mind. I love your descriptions of the smiles and feelings everyone had. Great job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of The Promise  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

The flow and rhymes swept me into the story. The story kept me reading.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

I felt a little confusion in the fourth stanza. Are we now looking at a different person's perspective of events?

I think it's interesting that you keep a punctuation pattern, but the comma in line three, stanza two separates your subject from verb.

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

I would like to see a little more definition between father and son. I had to read it through a couple of times to get the full grasp of who we're seeing. Your descriptions are good and I really felt for the characters. They seemed very real. The rhymes and flow were terrific. I was very surprised by the ending. Good job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of Lullaby  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

Not what I expected from the title. I was pleasantly surprised.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

I feel like there are a couple of spots that might benefit from a comma.

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

I like the reiteration of "shall sing its lullaby." Each stanza holds its own image, and that phrase helps bring each image together. I would like to see some sort of explanation or description of what these lullabies are. I think you could expand the piece to show us the bigger picture. I feel a larger story in this short piece. Good job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review of Why Am I?  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

This piece goes much deeper than I had expected.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

None.

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

This is a beautifully written piece. It flows very well and the rhymes are nice. You raise some terrific questions that go to the heart of the topic. My favorite part was the question in stanza three: What is it that You want from me? I think, in some form or other, we all ask ourselves this question. I like how you end with a plea to answer your questions versus ending with a question as in the other stanzas. Great job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

This is an interesting piece and not what I expected.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

I like how you have your own form set up, but sometimes it doesn't seem to fit with what you're saying. For instance, in the sixth stanza, the first two lines discuss just coming to the end and then you say "Or" and discuss how it might end. The "or" seems to contradict but then the last two lines describe the end.

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

The piece flows well. I like the occasional rhymes you add along the way. It helps to add something to your set up. I think the reiterations add continuity to the piece. Sometimes it almost seems humorous. You've described many different ways a story might go. I like the line This story would like to tell you a story. It gives me an idea that maybe the stories write themselves to an extent. Good job.

Keep writing!!!



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Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

You paint a sad picture of where we appear to be headed.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

There are several apostrophe and a couple of punctuation errors. Lets is a contraction (let us) and needs an apostrophe before the 's.' You also have a couple of instances of "its" when you mean "it is" or "it's". I would recommend reading through the piece again and looking for similar items as well as capitalization.

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

I'm a little in the dark as to who (or what) is guiding me on this tour. You paint a vivid picture of the end our path of destruction is leading us to. I like that you left a glimmer of hope that we may be able to repair the damage done to the planet. Also you bring in the nature of life to preserve. Even though humans did their best to destroy the planet, life still clings on. Good job.

Keep writing!!!



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Review of Trumpets Sound  
Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

I always enjoy learning new forms.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

In the second stanza, the second line can't stand on its own. I would suggest omitting the semi-colon at the end of line one or changing it to a comma.

Is there a specific meter pattern that is required with this form in addition to the rhyme scheme?

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

Your rhymes are great and the piece flows well. I like the reiteration of Trumpets sound at dawn's with the twist of the last word being different in each stanza. It adds continuity and moves the piece forward. The story is told well in a simple, short form. Great job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

I didn't anticipate where you were going. It's a heart breaking story.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

In the third stanza, "picking" doesn't fit in with the rest being in past tense. You might try "while she picked" instead of "while picking."

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

While the end is somewhat disheartening, you weave a bit of hope in the word "joyfulness." It's amazing how people can find joy and laughter in otherwise hopeless situations, like how she was glad to have her children by her side. Even though they were all working hard, she felt it a blessing to have her children within reach. You paint a vivid story. Great job!

Keep writing!!!



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Review by § Forsaken §
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for sharing this piece and for giving me the opportunity to share my thoughts with you. All suggestions and comments are my personal opinions and are shared in a spirit of helpfulness. Remember, it's your piece to do with as you see fit.

*CandyCaneG* First Impressions *CandyCaneG*

A lovely winter piece.

*XMasTree* Questions/Suggestions *XMasTree*

I think the first comma could be a semi-colon. It feel like each line can stand on its own. You don't need the comma at the end of the third line; it separates your subject from your verb. I would suggest going back through to check for other punctuation that could be omitted or changed to keep your subjects and verbs together.

*CandyCaneR* Overall *CandyCaneR*

Your syllabics are good and your rhymes are spot on. I love the opening couplet. It really sets the tone and scene for the rest of the piece nicely. I like the images you present and how you move the piece forward in time as well. I think it's interesting how you use the line leaves covered with snow in two very different ways. Good job!

Keep writing!!!



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