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Review of To Catch a Child  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
You offer a curious tale Greg. A man sees a little girl and determines to show her parents their own lack of concern. He runs after her, she screams and he lets her go. It appears she is let go to enjoy her future. After that he contemplates ending his life. He looks up at the beautiful sunset and decides to do otherwise.

Thoughts: I love the premise of getting caught by the possibility of new life. Just recently my wife rescued someone from committing suicide. I wish it could be so easy. I love the tale, I just wonder how real it is.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello Jeff, a very interesting twist.

I get caught up in a dynamic of what might transpire between Silas and the dragon and am left considering that sometimes it is better to live in the real world than get caught up in a dream that can lead to the loss of life. The tiny man was an interesting ploy. The defective equipment on sale spoke about how easily it is to be taken advantage of. I still find myself wondering if the young man can win. At the same time for me it would not be worth it.
thanks for sharing!!
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Review of choice  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello shreyans, I appreciate most your closing thoughts. Life provides us with opportunities. What we do with those opportunities defines us making us the persons we are. John chose money and realized that Maria was the one who made him rich.

Suggestions: It would help to have a space before each period and an indentation at the beginning of a paragraph, in order that I might follow your thoughts better. It could also help to capitalize names like God and peoples names.
thanks for sharing!!
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Thanks for sharing your spiritual ruminations nads. I liked your thoughts and how they built from creation to
a place where God could be worshipped. In the course of getting there we look at the cosmos and the ones for whom it is created.

thoughts: I wondered if there was a rhyming pattern or if it was geared to free verse. It seems some lines rhyme real well and others don't. I also wondered about the line if it does not represent the good of mankind, then evil will not show. It seemed more likely that if it did represent good that would be the case.
thanks for sharing!!!
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Review of Number 1  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Express, you offer up some impressions that leave it up to the one who interprets to decide for themselves. There are plenty of facts about pain that keep it from being a villain and in the end in your poem
pain is good, especially as opposed to predictability, which keeps pain at bay.
Thanks form sharing. Much to ponder!
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Sara, thanks for sending your entertaining poems. I can see the objective is to offer children a vision of the world of the ugly and fat. I am not clear about whether this is for entertainment (humorous) or if there is an objective over and above that. I can see myself grinning about Mrs. Grizziles and the comb that is like a chair and Sir Snoresalot and his strange diet of eating tin cans. It is fun and yet being ugly and fat in a child's world is not that way.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Rhychus, you offer the experience of death's imminence to share about a core of enlightening and euphoric love that might be encase deep within. It might be said that as we head into the darkness we will learn about light, we will know more about love and realize/discern what is truly worth living for.

Death has to take place for change to take place. In the case of this story politics, war mongers and nightmares in broad daylight are the only clue to knowing what needs changing and who will make it an agenda worth living and dying for.
thanks for sharing. I pray that your effort to change and inspire are not in vain.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Thank you Megan rose, I was entertained and inspired by your piece. A nine year old girl is brought face to face with reality. She experiences a time of swinging in the sky with her departed mother as her guide. She sees memories and possibilities of the many gifts that life has to offer. The little girl experiences that Mom more alive than ever as she looks at her mother's eyes and knows the love that keeps her safe and embraced, even as she goes with her own daughter to begin the swinging ritual once again.
thanks for sharing
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Review of Inner rage  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello starving artist, you raise a lot of questions. Any one of them could incite a person to want to be in a rage. The picture that I get is that the flames are stoked as one (match with rage) is thrown in after another. the question at the end is a container for the rest. Does it matter?
I have had my own bouts with rage. I am not sure it matters much. It happens!! I am aware and after that I try to put myself back together again. I am not sure you can put a good or bad label on it. I think that more of the issue is how to manage it so that it does not take control of you.
thanks and god bless
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Review of Alyssa  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hello Greg Alan, I read it over many times and thought it strange and creepy at the same time. Suzy is the "princess" and Alyssa is anything but. In a sense they are the odd couple. In the end Suzy disappears and the parents shake their heads right after a scream rippled through the air. I am left trying to figure how parents even go to this place and what happened to Alyssa after she fell down the stairs. CREEPY!!! Is the abandonment theme being played out over and over again?
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello Sam, it was a great story to read as I started the day. It gives crystal clear truth that two people can look at the same object and see it in totally different ways. I especially liked the take that Dickey had on the song "Play me". I guess it all depends on what you let fill your mind. Maybe Dickey needs to look at his own name and how that can be misconstrued.
Thanks for the whimsy. God bless.
Drifter
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Review of Into Christ  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well Keaton, you caught me in every which way. You spoke of my faith in ways that caught me by surprise. By the end I was realizing that there is hope to be found in one person deciding to give up life for others. In the midst of an empty cave was a place that we could go and seek and find that even in being gone their could always be the possibility of new life, a rising from the dead which seemed the least likely consequence for people with spears and people humbly kneeling. Thanks for speaking my faith for me. God bless!!!!!!!
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello G.B., You offer a wonderful apologetic for determining to never get old. I experience the vestiges of what you talk about. I can feel the aches, not being able to keep up with the grandkids and realization that the window for seeing the world closing. As you say in the end growing old is not fun. Maybe an attitude of determining to look for glimpses of youth in the frailness is another way to look at it.
thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Thanks for sharing Ronnie. In a sense winter is like a picnic basket that awaits being opened. Spring is the catalyst from which this will eventually happen. Spring reminds me that new life is on the horizon. Winter is not the end. It is the blanket under which spring is thawed and the promise that singing and blossoming are on the horizon.


Suggestions: It seems a bit redundant in places. I see all the seasons represented. Spring seems to be the only one that matters.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Johnathan Matthews, You have a wonderful gift to share. Amidst the narrative is a depth of questioning that leads the reader into the deepest and profoundest queries. Has man suffered so much to sacrifice of himself for comfort?, Time passes without bias-how did it come to this. The key to unlocking the mystery is a key that opens the back seat into a trunk with a comforter inside. Existentially I am no more or less than the stars I marvel at and wonder what that means as I seek comfort in a car.
I like the thought process. I would like to hear sentences that flow in a manner I can read without having to wonder what it means. An example: But misguiding still when I say uncomfortable. I am not good at figuring out grammar structure. But does not seem to be a subject of the sentence. Maybe it could read: I am misguided when I was I am comfortable.
Thanks for writing. You have a wonderful provocative gift to share.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the depth of imagery Harry. There is the chilly breath of fall and the grieving tree that looks forward to sleep. Amidst the change of life there a multitude of colors bursting forth like fireworks. I am left considering that the season of winter is not so bad. Amidst the angry fight to stay alive and awake is the realization that after a time of sleep there will once again be new life.
Thanks for sharing.
God bless
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Review of Shin  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Chinspinner, It was a curious tale. Pi and Shin appear to be friends. As Pi looks out over the balcony she sees a bird and a mammal. I see Shin appear out of nowhere. There are a lot of possibilities in terms of where the tale will go. I would like to know more about Pi since she seems to be the main character around which the tale takes place. I can see her in her surroundings and have a perspective. Who is she in relation to all that is happening around her.
Thanks for sharing. Look forward to more.
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Review of God's Will  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello C A N D Y, thanks for sharing about what God's will means for you in the quinzaine format. The first line offers a platform for all that follows. The will of God unites man to God. At that point questions come to the surface. I feel challenged to decide whether I will dive into the questions and discover what God's will and how God's will has meaning for me.
thanks for sharing
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Review of Short Poem  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Cheokeelace, Thanks for sharing your musical impressions. You offer comfort for the soul, inspiration for the mind and motivation for the inner child. The last line is the most curious. I like the concept of the inner child. I can not help thinking of a sense of wonder and even a dance. Motivate seems a little weak for me, and yet it seems to work well for you.
Thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for time to be a blessing by sharing a memorial about what made Very Sara a person/writer worth knowing. In the course of writing there are times that we all wonder if anyone really notices or cares about what I write. Your tribute proves otherwise. Your life is touched and you invite others to know about the way she blesses and inspires with truth that transcends the grave. She lives on in you Prosperous Snow and in the garden of paradise where we can get to know her as you have.
Thanks for your gift.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for sharing a poignant moment with your mom. I am helping a caregiver take care of an Alzheimer's and was able to make a connection. In the midst of being with one who has a failing memory, especially a parent it can be very difficult to find something to laugh about. I am listening still for the laughter as I recall my own Dad's last days. Thanks for taking time to share. It means a lot to me and I am sure to others who are fighting the same kind of battle.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello MC Gupta, I was hooked into the whole idea of someone being so full of themselves that all others are small and of little consequence. I found myself laughing as soon as I read the first lines. Maybe I am laughing at myself and my own mask of wanting to be in control of all that I might call my subjects. Just do not tell my wife that. At least I can feel this way as I read this. My wife talks of her brother in the exact same light. Thanks for exposing the part of me that can get me in trouble.
God bless
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Review of Nick's Accident  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Kings thank for your heart felt empathy for one who had been involved in life's violent accidental caress. I currently work with a woman who was struck by a drunk drirver and soon after lost a baby and a husband who no longer wanted to be married to an "invalid". The woman is now well into her fifties and what stands out is her willingness to have faith in God's provision. I pray for the miracle of a cure also. I pray that people can see the potential for love and spirituality. At times people like these can be the true teacher about what it means to love and worship a living God.
God bless. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Lots of Paint  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well done Jatog the frog. I was there with you as you painted to uncover what seemed to be dead. It is in becoming a painter/artist that I can see the possibility of what a house might become. You offer a metaphor for life. What we do is not in vain if we go at it with good intentions. We might seem overworked and underpaid and yet in the end as the paint dries we discover a place that is livable, a place we can call home.
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Review of Swish  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello LeafFlower, I could tell that this writing came from the heart. I can not imagine the feelings of one who has experienced the death of one who has been not only a brother, but a mentor of the best basketball player that you can be. I liked the idea of a team called the butterflies, as if there were butterflies in one's stomach as one goes for the winning shot. The pilgrimage and the longing for the dream coming true is what hooked me.

suggestion: watch consistency of tense structure. The first sentence is a good example you start in the past tense (threw) and end in the present (makes). Keep writing even as you shoot to score in your stories and things can only get better.
God bless!
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