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Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello catzeal and welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here.

I have just read your story, "Just A Lttle Faith," and thought I would leave some comments.

I have to say, I really enjoyed this and looking forward to reading more.

Imagery is really good, I could clearly see faith in my minds eye. A girl who rebels against the life that is expected of her only to find herself in such an adventure.

A few typos here and there and also this line:

'Goodbye Peter,' Faith greeted with her lips pursed." If you greet someone it is hello not goodbye.

Also it is better to begin a new line each time someone speaks. This makes it easier for the reader.

Thank you for sharing.

Sanita
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Review of My pet  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Thedarkninjapanda, (What a great handle) and welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here.

I have just read your poem, "My Pet," and thought I would leave some comments.

A dark but emotional poem.

Your pet, meaning your anger and frustration which you need to let go of. I think perhaps we all suffer this at some time. We can hurt people with it but, most of all we hurt ourselves.

Thank you for sharing.

Sanita
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Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Destiny, how are you? I have just read your poem, " Reason In History," and thought I would leave some comments.

I am not absolutely sure of your poems meaning as I understand it is a part of another writing you have done.

However, I liked this. I am guessing the "Elder," is perhaps a religious being trying to corrupt perhaps?

I shall have to read , "Elder And His KIngdom," to fully understand.

Thank you for sharing.

Sanita
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Review of Stuff  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (1.5)
Hello Spearmint and welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here.

I have just read your poem, "Stuff," and thought I would leave some comments.

I am not too sure of the meaning of your poem, I am guessing it has something to do with love.

Also all the , "Thees," and "thous." do not seem to fit right.

These lines:

"These Eyes of Mine
Thine heart is a fickle well"

Do not make much sense. it reads as though you have not finished the first line before going to the second.

Perhaps once you have edited it will read much better.

Sanita
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Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Koyel, I found your poem,"Success And Failure," in the poetry news letter, it is one of the editors picks.

I really enjoyed this, I loved the way each word gradually formed the last word, "Failure."

I have never written a Diamante but after reading yours I may have a go.

Thank you for sharing.

Sanita
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Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
HI spacecat, I have just read your item," In Memory Of My Dad," and thought I would leave some comments.

First of all I would like to say I am sorry for your loss. It is very hard to lose a loved one.

I thought your eulogy to your dad is beautiful. You have so many wonderful memories to hold on to, especially the football days. Your dad sounds like he was great fun and also a great dad.

Best wishes.

Sanita
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Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again amagrah, another good poem from you, "Stranger To Myself."

I loved this and can relate to it very well. Being alone can be very difficult and makes our days seem very long indeed.

A lovely poem with a great rythm and rhyme.

Best wishes.

Sanita
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Review of Retired not Tired  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello amagraph and welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here.

I have just read your poem. "Retired Not Tired," and thought I would leave some comments.

This is deffinately food for thought. I think a lot of older people find they have nothing to do once they retire. However, there are lots of things out there to enjoy.

I loved the last verse, says it all:


My life is somewhat calmed,
not a whirlwind in sight.
That's not to say its over,
I wont go down without a fight.

One suggestion: wish's should be wishes.

Best wishes.

Sanita
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Review by Sanita
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Donavan, how are you are? I have just read your short story, "A Prince Fatale," and thought I would leave some comments.


I really enjoyed this story. So simple and yet so captivating. I loved the opening line, "Long ago in a far away Kingdom." It sounded so ordinary and yet I seemed to know it just would not be.

Great imagery you created.

I would like to read more.

Sanita
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Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Rowan and welcome to WDC. I have just read your item, "Writer's Block, I Guess," and thought In would leave some comments.

Well we all go through this from time to time but, it does come back.

I find the best way to deal with it is to just write anything, whatever enters my head. it may be a lot of gobbledygooosh but, it does not matter, you are still writing and eventually what you write will be right.

Keep writing.

Sanita
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Review of Rays of Hope  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Collkin, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here.

I have just read your poem, "Rays Of Hope," and thought I would leave some comments.

I thought this a beautiful expression of hope. Your whole feelings summed up in a few lines. very well done and I am sure, to many readers, this will give them a ray of hope.

Best wishes.

Sanita
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Review of "It"  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Harry, how are you? I just came across your poem, "It," and wanted to leave a comment or two.

It certainly is a very thought provoking poem and I presume the "It" you speak of is power/control.

I agree it can turn an ordinary mean into a brute.

Thank you for sharing this and I shall surely visit your website.

Sanita
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Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi again valleyboy, how are you.

Another funny poem from you.

I think Rover must have been alergic to the taxman, as we all are!

Again a great rhythm and rhyme.

No favourite part, I loved it all, especially the twist at the end.

Best wishes.

Sanita
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Review of SUMMER FRUITS  
Review by Sanita
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello SandraLynn and thank you for your entry, "Summer Fruits," in the "Invalid Item"  .

This is a lovely poem, it brought back memories of strawberry picking with my sister. I am sure we ate more than we collected in our baskets.

I think strawberries have to my favourite of Summer fruits.

I loved the whole poem but, I think this my favourite verse:

"They all seem so luscious,
A bright glistening sight.
Quite a few must be tasted,
Appreciative bites."

I have no suggestions, great rhyming.

Good luck.

Sanita
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Review of SUMMER FRUITS  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello catdok and thank you for your entry in the "Invalid Item"  .

It is nice to see a comedy entry, I enjoyed the read.

That melon sounds rather tempting.

The only suggestion I would make is not to write in all capitals. But you will not be judged on that, it is just a personal; preference.

Thank you again for your entry and good luck.

Remember not to edit till after the contest round.

Sanita
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Review of The Soldier  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello valleyboy and welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your poem, "The Soldier," and thought I would leave some comments.

With all the tragedies of war it is nice to put a little homuor in.

I enjoyed this, especially the last verse, although, I am not sure Barry Manilow would aprove.

A great rhythm and rhyme.

Best wishes.

Sanita.

"Invalid Item" 
"Invalid Item" 
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Review of A Journey Home  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Fyn, how are you?

I always feel a little humble when about to review a blue case's work. *Smile* .

However, I could not pass this by without a comment or two.

I visited Ireland last month, my sister lives there, a beautiful place.

I enjoyed this story, I loved the imagery it created and these lines: "The road twisted through incredibly lush fields as each turn opened new ‘post card perfect’ vistas that had me yearning to grab a paintbrush, or at the very least, my pen and notebook," describe Ireland perfectly.

A sad journey home but, also a beautful one for both Grandmother and the story teller.

I have no suggestions for improvement, I found it perfect as it is.

Sanita
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Review of Father  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Madison and welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here.

I have just read your poem, "Father," and thought i would leave some comments.

Quite an emotional and personal poem about your father and how much you miss him.

Suggestions: I think the poem would read better in shorter lines. As it is, with no punctuation, it makes it difficult to read.

For example this part "I miss you so much why can't you see why do you have to ep lieing to me I want you in my life but you walked away all I can think is please daddy stay" Would read better as:

I miss you so much why can't you see?
Why do you have to keep liying to me?
I want you in my life, but you walked away,
all I can think, is please daddy stay.

Hope this helps.

Good poem.

Sanita
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Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jennifer, how are you? I have just read your little story, "If The Rocket Hits The Moon," and thought I would leave some comments.

What a great little story and what an imagination Jack has.

I think children would love this, perhaps with illustrations.

Thank you for sharing.

Sanita
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Review of Culinary Cat  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Karl, how are you? I have just your poem, " Culinary Cat," and thought I would leave some comments.


I actually laughed out loud when I read the last lines, very funny.

And now I am wondering if this is true?

Loved the poem and have no suggestions.

Sanita
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Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Zed, welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here.

I was about to read and review your collections of sketches, but your item has not come out properly. Perhaps you copied and pasted?

It looks like parts are missing and does not read properly.

I will be happy to come back and read them once editing has been done.

Best wishes.

Sanita
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Review of Just dreaming  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Koyel, how are you? I just read your poem, "Just Dreaming," and thought I would leave some comments.

What lovely images your poem conjured up in my mind. First of all the thought of a visit from a Fairy, I can think of nothing more enchanting. Then A handsome Prince for your Groom.

Lovely poem and I have no suggestions, I like it as it is.

Sanita
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Review of still know  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (2.5)
Hello talentedwithapen86 and welcome to WDC. I just read your poem, "still know," and thought I would leave some comments.

Reading the poem, I think you are trying to say that even though at times you feel down, you also know it will get better.

I think we all feel like this at times.

Suggestions: I found the poem difficult to read as puntuation is not right. For example in this part:


i may be lost sometimes

feel like i can't find my mind.

yet i still know.

that with every tear i cry

it will go. There should not be a full stop (period) after . "yet I still Know."

Also "I" should always be a capital and capitals at the beginning of a new sentence.

You will find the poem will flow a lot better and be easier for the reader to understand.

Hope this helps.

Sanita
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Review of The Story of Us  
Review by Sanita
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
Hello Vicky and welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here.

I have just read your item, "THe Story Of Us," and thought I would leave some comments.

To be honest this did not really make any sense. I did not understand the story. There are a lot of spelling mistakes and words that do not exsist, such as anywhore or anywhooo.

It does need a lot of editing to be understood.

I would be happy to read it again once editing has been done.

Sanita
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Review of I Feel For Trees  
Review by Sanita
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello E.Greycourt, how are you? I have just read your prose, "I Feel For The Trees," and thouht I would leave some comments.

I liked this, I loved the two different ways of looking at the life of those trees. Pity and envy for trees so familiar to the writer.

I cannot say I have a favourite part because I liked it all.

Thank you for sharing.

Sanita
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