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Review of That Wicked Night  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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This poem flowed smoothly and I really like that it tells a complete story. I did, however, feel like the story could be drawn out more. It felt a bit rushed to me. I think that adding more details could help to improve this piece. Also, I didn't really feel a strong character/reader connection which I think is because of the lack of emotion throughout the poem. Perhaps try to further explore the narrator's feelings?

All in all, I enjoyed reading this poem and loved that it made me sit back and think. I really don't know what I would do in that situation (Knowing me, I'd shrug and smile. LOL.). You did a great job of bringing your reader into the story to understand what happened and show them the scene.

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Desiring  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is a great poem with a very loving message. The emotion was spot-on and the flow was very smooth. I was, however, a bit thrown off by the form due to the last two lines. In a Tyburn poem, according to the sources that I have found, the last two lines are each nine syllables long and incorporate the first four lines before the rhyme/ last syllable. This poem was so loving and had such an impact that I really didn't even think about the form the first two times that I read it. The third read, though, something clicked in my head and I realized that I needed to look at the form a little more... It is really beautiful, *shrugs* Just not a Tyburn. LOL. *Wink* This is a wonderful first attempt, though!! *Kiss*

The message of this poem is inviting and just...divine. We should all be so lucky as to feel this way!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Eyes  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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You stuck very well to the form and I love the feeling that there is a much deeper story behind this poem. I would, however, have liked to see more of that story; I was left wondering a bit about why the ending was true, etc... Perhaps another "stanza" would help to make things a bit more clear?? My only other suggestion is in the fifth stanza: Since this line is being directed at a person, there should be a comma before "my"...

All in all, I did really enjoy this poem and I loved the creativity behind it as well as the many things that it could represent. The eyes could be so many things that it really amazing to think of the endless possibilities of interpretation by readers! Great job!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Land of the Dogs  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My Feelings:
If only such a place existed --humans would find a way to ruin it *Cry* This is a wonderful tribute to dogs and the respect and obvious admiration that you have for them! I wholeheartedly agree!

My Suggestions:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

My Thoughts:
This poem flowed smoothly from beginning to end and has a wonderful message that I hope will inspire all of its readers! It was reflective and just lovely! Thank you for sharing!!!! (As a side note: This would not be true if my dog was there! LOL... Especially sharing... Nala shares her toys with NO ONE! LOL).

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Stephanie Grace
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Review of My Oxygen  
Review by Stephanie Grace
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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My Feelings:
I found this poem to be very thought-provoking. I really like how it had a feeling of openness, allowing the reader to take the words metaphorically and easily relate them to different aspects of life. At the end, I felt a deep sadness and was left reflecting on your words.

My Suggestions:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos. While reading this the first time, I did detect a few little hiccups in the flow, but the went unnoticed on the second and third readings, so I cannot pinpoint exactly where they were... *Blush*

My Thoughts:
This poem has a weight to it that I really was not expecting; which is wonderful and added to the impact of each word as it hit my heart. The free verse form worked well with your words to keep everything simple to follow. The scene that you laid out before my eyes was solemn and mournful, and yet filled with gratitude as well. I enjoyed reading this poem as well as the reflective state that it left me in.

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Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My Feelings:
This poem offers a wonderful comfort to the reader. It really spoke to me. It left me not only feeling relaxed but offered a wonderful reminder that I am not alone. The faith that is portrayed in each line is astounding and beautiful.

My Suggestions:
Just two little things popped into my head while reading:
*Bullet*Stanza 2, Line 7: There seemed to be a missing syllable here when I counted. It could just be me; if not, perhaps remove the contraction and spell it out: I have...?
*Bullet*Stanza 6, Line 6: I am unsure if this is a typo or if I just couldn't find the word in the dictionaries (I checked three. LOL). Is it possible that blessest is meant to be blesses?

My Thoughts:
You stuck very well to the chosen format and the rhymes did not feel forced nor too predictable. I really thought that this poem was simply beautiful. I love the comfort and warmth that I found in your words --it was like being hugged by a dear friend. I also love that this poem is so easy to relate to --it really made me reflect on my own life and feelings, which made this poem that much stronger. It's impact was quite profound on my heart.

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Stephanie Grace
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Review of BEAUTY IN THE SKY  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My Feelings:
The vivid imagery throughout this poem really left me feeling very at peace. The first stanza drew me right in and left me smiling, feeling relaxed. I am unsure of the form, though, as all Limericks that I have read have been funny in content. I also did not feel the usual rhythm of a Limerick...

My Suggestions:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

My Thoughts:
While I am unsure that this is a traditional Limerick, I found the flow to be smooth without any rhymes feeling forced. The wonderful imagery and relaxed feeling really just took me away, though did leave me feeling a bit mournful (as all sunrises seem to do. LOL). You did a tremendous job of capturing the night as well as its final moments. This is a great display of talent!

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*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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TITLE & MORE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly.

FLOW & FORM:
The flow was smooth from beginning to end with a nice, bouncy rhythm that kept everything nice and light. No rhymes felt forced, nor did I detect any hiccups. *Thumbsup*

CREATIVITY & WORDING:
This poem is VERY creative! It's amazing to see what can inspire poetry! *Laugh* The simple language used throughout kept everything very easy to follow and understand. *Delight*

EMOTION & IMAGERY:
The lighthearted feeling was incredibly enjoyable. I was laughing from beginning to end! The imagery was wonderful! LOL... Plenty of commercials were going through my head! *Wink*

FAVORITE BITS & SUGGESTIONS:(*Derived solely from humble opinions.)
I honestly cannot pick a favorite bit --I loved this poem as a whole!

I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos and, by golly, I can't think of a single way to improve this poem! (Third read: Check the last stanza; I think "and" should possible be capitalized.).

OVERALL THOUGHTS & RATING:
What more can I say? I absolutely LOVE this poem! It is just hysterical (and I definitely needed a laugh since Hubby and his friend are rambling on and on behind me... Ugh.)! I can't even conceive a reason to give this anything less than a 1.0! *Wink*

Thank you for sharing your poem. Please remember that this review is based only on my own opinions and is not to be taken with any weight; it is only the thoughts of one person and is not meant to do anything more than let you know my thoughts as a reader.*Kiss*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Allure  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*SnowMan*The Envelope: (Title, etc...)
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly.

*Ornament4B*The Card: (Visual Appeal)
Plain black text on white screen.. always a good choice! *Wink* The added image is a nice touch, as well!

*StockingR*The Stocking: (Form, Flow, Narrative)
The abcb rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words without any rhymes feeling too forced. The flow was smooth and welcoming... The narrative, well... your talent for storytelling shines through in this poem!

*StockingB*The Stuffers: (Emotion and Imagery)
The feelings of the narrator came through very clearly. *Blush* It was simple to be enchanted by your words and envision everything --I thought I might be falling in lust along side you! *Laugh**Blush**Wink*

*CandyCaneR*The Ribbons: (Suggestions)
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head (I tried... really I did!)

*CandyCaneG*The Bows: (Favorite Parts)
You mean aside from the ending, right? My favorite part about this poem, honestly, was the buildup! I knew there'd be a punchline, but I wasn't finding it and started thinking that you'd just put this poem in the wrong folder! *Laugh* Definitely a VERY sensual tale... and then that ending... PERFECT!

*GiftB*The Present! (Overall Thoughts)
What more can I really say? This is incredibly sensual and just a wonderful glimpse into what the bar scene is probably like nowadays! LOL. (I'll have to ask my husband, Six-Pack-To-Single-Scottso! LOL).

*XMasTree*The Tree: (Rating)
I can't find any reason to give this less than a 5.0... Sensuality, enchantment, enticement, and one of the best endings I've seen thus far!

*Ornament2B*...And the Partridge in a Pear Tree...!*Ornament2B*

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Review of Tomorrow  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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The intent of this Royal Flush Review is to examine everything in a poem. Structure and format, imagery, word usage, spelling, setting and emotions.


Structure & Format: So, by my count, we have here abab rhyme scheme with eight-syllable lines. Meter is beyond me, LOL, I have read plenty about it and own books for it, but I just can't be bothered to actually figure out the whole stressed / unstressed thing. Back to the review... The abab rhyme scheme with added internal rhyme was fantastic! It gave the poem a nice, bouncy rhythm without the rhymes overpowering the words or feeling forced (except in Stanza 4, Lines 1 and 3 which just made me laugh. LOL). The only place where it seemed that you'd varied from the eight-syllable count was in Line 3 where I counted 11 syllables (Indian, History, and Mystery are all three syllables by my count; as well as dictionary.com's.). *Wink* It didn't really hinder the flow too much, but it was noticed during my first read.

Imagery:
I think we've all been in similar situations at some point or another so, while you wrote some very vivid imagery, I also had a whole lot of memories flood through my mind's eye.

Word Usage:
The simple language kept everything easy to understand and follow. Not once did I find myself feeling confused. *Thumbsup*

Spelling:
Aside from the purposely misspelled word (Stanza 4, Line 3), nothing caught my eye as "off."

Setting:
The setting was simple to envision and relate to! *Blush*

Emotions:
I really laughed my way through this. Not only could I easily feel the frustration and panic of the narrator, but I could well remember feeling those emotions myself in similar circumstances!

Overal Impression:
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem! It is fun, lighthearted and a true delight!

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Review by Stephanie Grace
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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INITIAL REACTION(S):
This is wonderful! I mean, not only did I get a good laugh from it, but I was nodding from beginning to end... nodding and thinking! This is very creative and I really loved the conversational narrative. I felt like, at any time, I could jump on in and respond to something you'd just said. *Thumbsup*

TYPOS & SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head. Oh! Wait... Nix that... At about the end, you reference "Stephanie Meyers"; are you sure that's spelled right? I've never read her books (or been able to sit through that "Twilight" thing), so I'm not sure, but I thought I'd seen her name spelled as "Stephenie." (If I'm right, Bravo to you for using what I consider the right spelling of the name!).

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
The title and opening lines really commanded my attention and called out for me to read this and the words that followed held that attention very strongly. You kept everything flowing well and it was all simple to follow and understand. The light-hearted feeling throughout this came through, but I also found myself doing a lot of thinking. By the end, I was inspired to try and write something to answer a question or two... I never saw that coming! All in all, I think you did an awesome job with this and thank you for starting off my WDC day with such a magnificent item!!!

RATING EXPLANATION:
Do you really need me to explain the 5.0 I'm about to click?

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Tiger  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly.

ANKLE-DEEP:
You stuck very well to the chosen form. Everything was simple to follow and understand. You did a superb job of capturing and describing your subject. Reading this poem was really almost like looking a painting! *Thumbsup*

KNEE-DEEP:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, however, I did feel like the flow could be a little smoother. I know that punctuation is optional in poetry, but I really like that it would help here to better guide the reader's voice as he/she reads. The presence of commas in lines two and ten made the rest of the poem feel a bit bare in the punctuation department. Also, in the final line, the two words seem to mush tonight a little bit; I think that adding some kind of "stopper" between them would not only improve the flow and reception here, but also add to the impact and strength of the final word.

HEAD UNDER WATER!
I really enjoyed this poem and think that any child would love it! I could definitely see this accompanied by pictures of a tiger, though, it really doesn't need to be as you did such a wonderful job with the imagery! *Delight* Another thing that I really loved was that this poem gave me the sense of a complete story! Wonderfully written!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Luminous Vision  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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INITIAL REACTION(S):
Ya know, I picked this poem because I say that it had only been rated by one person. My thoughts were that, since that one rating was a 5.0, perhaps it was a poem that could use another view; perhaps it could use some work and the person that had rated it wasn't one of those people that would give it something lower or loved it and didn't seem that it could be improved... I was wrong! This poem is beautifully written. Its sensual content and feeling resonated from screen to heart and mind!

TYPOS & SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
You stuck wonderfully to the Villanelle form without any rhymes feeling forced. The flow was smooth throughout (a great feat, I believe, as I usually feel myself hating the repetitious side Villanelles.). The language --the wording, is just beautiful and inspiring. With each stanza, I found myself falling deeper into this poem's beauty and I could only smile from beginning to end. This is just... beautiful.

RATING EXPLANATION:
I'm giving this a 5.0 because I can't think of one reason why anyone would rate this any lower. It just took my breath away...

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Sky Flowers  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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INITIAL REACTION(S):
Just... Wow! The creativity and talent present in this poem are really mind-blowing! I've attempted Rictameter as well we monorhyme and, well, let's just say that I could NEVER combine the two! I am truly just amazed...

TYPOS & SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors. The only suggestion that popped into my head is with the last line. It stood out enough, but I think that making it stand out just a touch more might add even more impact to it. Perhaps try color or italicizing?

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
I've never thought of hot air balloons in that way. There's an annual show of them around here and I hate when people ask me to go... Those things seem so dangerous --so scary. You, however, have taken those feelings completely away from my heart; You made me see the beauty and majesty that so many others appreciate in these balloons. The comparison of them to flowers caught my attention right away --and definitely caught me off-guard, but I found it very true. I can see how they could be considered "Sky Flowers"; How you came up with that... that's just pure imagination and talent! I really don't know what else I can say. The flow was smooth, the rhymes didn't feel forced, and I just fell in love with this poem!

RATING EXPLANATION:
Hmmm... Do you really need an explanation? I'm giving this a 1.0 because of all the things that I just sat here and typed about this poem! *Pthb**Wink*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of The Encounter  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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INITIAL REACTION(S):
This poem is creative and very enchanting. The dark tone really gave it a sense of eeriness that made me feel a deep mourning. I could feel the loss and longing behind the words --you definitely did an amazing job in the emotional department!

TYPOS & SUGGESTIONS:
*Bullet*Line 8: awakes: I think you may have meant awakens.
*Bullet*Lines 11 & 12: I kind of faltered here while reading. The comma in Line 11 felt a bit unnecessary. The word had in Line 12 also seemed to trip me up a bit. Perhaps play around here a bit... It could just be me, though. *Blush*
*Bullet*Line 13: Since there are two different but connected thoughts here, maybe replace the comma with a semi-colon?
*Bullet*Line 14: The comma here kind of threw me off. My first thought was another semi-colon, but, on my second and third reads, I'm thinking maybe just replace the comma with the word as...?

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
This poem is very well-written. The Free Verse form worked very well with your words to keep the flow mainly smooth from beginning to end. The added image is a nice touch, but your words did a wonderful job of setting the scene on their own. I could easily envision and feel everything!

RATING EXPLANATION:
4.5 only because I think that this poem just wants a few final touches to blossom into its true potential. *Wink*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Love's Sunset  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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INITIAL REACTION(S):
This is a form I don't think I could ever handle! *Blush* You did a wonderful job with it, though, and created a poem that I think we can (or could have) relate(d) to at some point in life.

TYPOS & SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any typos, however, two little things pop into my head for suggestions:
*Bullet*In some places, (example: Lines 1 and 2), there are two separate, but connected thoughts with a comma between them. Since there are actually two complete thoughts in these places, maybe replace the commas with semi-colons (Like at the end of Line One?)?
*Bullet*The final line of each stanza gives a powerful feeling in each instance. In the first two, though, there are actions without the reader knowing who is making the action. I wonder if italicizing would prove to heighten the impact of these simple lines even more.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
I love when a poem is easy to relate to and that's what I found with this one. I am amazed by how much emotion you managed to put into such a restrictive form! The rhymes did not feel forced and did not take away from the emotion --another great feat! The flow was smooth and everything was simple to follow and understand. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem and think that you just did a fantastic job with it!

RATING EXPLANATION:
I'm going with a 5.0 because of the raw emotion felt while reading. Though those two minor suggestions did arise, I didn't feel that they hinder the flow so drastically that the rating should be lowered. I thank you for sharing this poem... I really enjoyed it!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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INITIAL REACTION(S):
I really enjoyed this poem and found it to be a great display of talent, though I did feel like it could be better...

TYPOS & SUGGESTIONS:
*Bullet*This was more like Senryu than Haiku, but that's neither here nor there, LOL... Just a side note. *Blush* Calling this Haiku, though, without any reference to nature did give me a bit of a nose-scrunch since it cannot be traditional Haiku without nature (Yeah, I'm an ol' fashioned kind of gal...).
*Bullet*The double-spacing throughout this poem made the lines feel a bit disconnected; it felt as though there should be some meaning to the spaces between the lines, which there was not. *Blush*
*Bullet*In the first line of the second stanza, have you tried a semi-colon at the end rather than a comma?
*Bullet*The final stanza really caught me quite off-guard. While I understood what was being said, the words didn't quite seem to say what I think you may have meant. There seems to be a change of tense here which really threw me off and left the final line somewhat meaningless as I was not quite sure what was meant by it... What's burning? The comma in the first line of this stanza also breaks up the flow a bit since this is kind of one statement-- Perhaps move it to after Mercilessly? In the second line, "of" felt out of place; what about "with". As for that last line, I don't know what to say... it just doesn't seem to fit and it may be a punctuation issue, but I am unsure...

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
I feel like this is a poem that MANY of us can relate to and which we can all relate to many aspects of our life. It is well-written and very expressive and emotional, however, the ending kind of fell flat... You had my heart right until that last line which did not give me the affect that I believe you desired. I really love where you going with this poem and LOVE LOVE LOVE the feeling and emotion though!! They are very relevant within and throughout this piece and that's a beautiful thing!

RATING EXPLANATION:
I'm going with a 3.5 only because I think --no, KNOW, that you can take this and turn into something truly beautiful... It seems to be calling for a few more minutes of attention before it will blossom into its true potential...

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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INITIAL REACTION(S):
This is a charming poem that I think that all readers could relate to. I love how you managed to relay the meaningfulness behind what others would perceive as ordinary items to be discarded. Memories are held in everything we touch and that message really came through clearly as I read this poem.

TYPOS & SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head!

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
I really loved this poem. The dash of random rhyming really gave a wonderful feeling of whimsy to the free verse form and also gave a wonderful lightness to a poem that could've felt much heavier... I just love it! What more can I say?

RATING EXPLANATION:
I can't think of one reason that a poem of such reality and meaning could be given anything less than a 5.0!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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INITIAL REACTION(S):
How charming! LOL. I got a great laugh from this poem! The ending was just superb --I never saw that coming!

TYPOS & SUGGESTIONS:
Just some opinions, LOL... Mainly meaningless...
*Bullet*The double-spacing made this poem feel a bit too stretched out, made the lines feel a wee too detached from one another.
*Bullet*I think that another look could be made at the punctuation throughout this poem. While it is present, it does not feel fully consistent and, as a reader, I felt like my voice was straying a bit, in some areas, from how you may have meant for this poem to be read. On my first read, it made me reread a few times; on my second and third, though, I was pretty much fine, but still noticed the little "hiccups"... *Blush*

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
This poem was so incredibly entertaining that I'm not even quite sure what to say! The way in which you have set this up really gives the final stanza a strong impact! I love that I was completely in the dark until that final line! The aabb rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth and rhythmical without any rhymes feeling forced! I also love that the rhyme scheme did not detract too much from the weight and buildup of the stanzas! I was thoroughly lost and a mite freaked out right until the end! Wonderful!

RATING EXPLANATION:
I'm goin' with a 4.5 only because of those hiccups in the flow... I really think that another look at punctuation would just make this poem purrrrrrfect!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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This is just... beautiful! I noticed a few typos (just some extra spaces here and there), but I don't think anything could take away from this beautiful, heartwarming tale. This actually put tears in my eyes and just plain made me melt. I love the subtle foreshadow, that bit that seems so inconsequential and had me thinking, "Why even mention it?" and... BAM! You had a reason all along.

Of course, I want to say that this story could be expanded, but you told me not to, so I won't. *Pthb* (Perhaps you could this exact piece, in all its glory, as inspiration for a longer story?).

All in all, I think that this story is beautifully written and just amazingly emotional! If my heart were any warmer, I'm pretty sure spontaneous combustion would take place! Just... beautiful... What more can I say? Your talent of making your reader feel comes through so clearly that I am just amazed... I love it!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly! *Thumbsup*

ANKLE-DEEP:
The emotion throughout this poem is very well-conveyed and just simple to understand! The imagery is wonderful and also very reader-driven, making plenty of memories come into the reader's mind! I found myself relating a lot to this poem --many different lines/statements really just seemed to be perfect for some memories that came up... Amazing! The free verse form really worked beautifully with your words to keep the flow smooth without this having too much of a prose/story feel. It was kept poetic from beginning to end.

KNEE-DEEP:
I did not notice any typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

HEAD UNDER WATER!
I thoroughly loved this poem! I enjoyed every word of it and felt so incredibly comforted that I just don't have the words... You really did an amazing job, Ms. Web Witch! The spirituality was clear, but not overpowering or "preachy"... The sense of strength and comfort and at-one-ness were all just awesome. Thank you for sharing this! I definitely needed that right now. *Blush**Kiss*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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INITIAL REACTION(S):
This poem is strong and beautifully-worded; the imagery is just magnificent and the Native American side shows through so clearly that I just felt so at peace while reading that I can't even thank you enough (by the by, I've got my husband playing and singing Ozzy Osbourne while we're at my sister and brother-in-law's playing Wii bowling... excitement all around --and some bad words about other family members... I NEEDED that peace!).

TYPOS & SUGGESTIONS:
Okay, just some random thoughts (that, for the most part, did not become apparent until second and third readings):
*Bullet*Punctuation: I know that it's optional in poetry and merely based upon personal preference, but, since there are two periods within the poem, I think that punctuating throughout would not only improve the flow, but really enable you to better guide the reader's voice to add impact to your words as well as making the poem a bit more consistent. *Wink*
*Bullet*In Stanza Four, Line One, I think there may be a typo: Should envelops be envelopes?
*Bullet*The last two stanzas did not have the same rhyme scheme as the first three; this was a bit of a shock to me as it caused me to pause and re-adjust the way I was reading... In all honestly, my darling, it did mess with the flow a li'l bit. *Blush*

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
The imagery throughout this poem was incredibly strong and the connection of poet and the "chosen" animal came through very clearly! To me, though, this not only represented the connection between you and that animal, but also the connection between all Native Americans and animals and nature. The respect... the love... the admiration... the, for lack of a better word, at-one-ness... It was just incredibly strong in each of those fields.

RATING EXPLANATION:
I'm going with a 4.0 ONLY because of the flow... I just feel like it could be tighter, stronger... The idea, the imagery, the feeling... it's all there; this poem has an ambiance all of its own, I just think --no, KNOW, that you can make this better!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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INITIAL REACTION(S):
This poem is incredibly heartwarming and well-written! The emotion found in each line and stanza is just amazing! There is also a great feeling of comfort and peace that just blew me away!

TYPOS & SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, though one little suggestion popped into my head:
*Bullet*The third line of Stanza Two ends with the word "and", while it did not really hinder the flow or interfere with the presence of the rhymes, I still wonder about it being placed at the beginning of the fourth line. (My third and forth read, though, it felt like it was in the perfect place, so take that for what you will, LOL).

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
The rhyme throughout this poem is flawless and the creativity and imagery are both impeccable. This was so touching and brought such peace to my heart and tears to my eyes that I actually had to sit back and just reflect after reading it the first time. It's just beautiful... What more can I say?

RATING EXPLANATION:
If I even mistakenly clicked anything but 5.0, I wouldn't be able to sleep tonight!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Oh! You poor dear! Thank you for giving me such a laugh --and allowing me to laugh with you and not at you! *Wink*

You did a great job of capturing the reader's attention and bringing him/her into the story. I could see it all... I like how it seems very conversational, it really made it feel like I was just talking with a friend!

I did, however, notice a few little places where this piece could be improved. There were a few minor typos (example: last paragraph, there's a period before a comma). Also, there is a change of tense that kind of tripped me up. I think that a quick edit could really just push this piece over the edge of perfection! *Wink*

All in all, though, I found this piece to be very entertaining --I was blushing and just plain cracking up by the end! I don't know what else I can say --Other than, again, you poor dear!! (And your poor sister too!!!).

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I can see why this has a plaque! This poem is filled to the brim with creativity and vivid imagery. You describe wonderfully something that many --if not all, of us have experienced. *Delight*

The free verse form worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end. Everything was simple to follow and understand. I fell right into this poem, not just reading it, but experiencing it.

There were two little places where my brain questioned punctuation, but not so much so that it hindered the flow..
*Bullet*razor[-]edged - I think that hyphenation here would help to better link these words together as one desciption...
*Bullet*In the line before the final line, my brain wanted a comma at the end since this line is added detail to the full thought carried into the proceeding line.

All in all, I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. The creativity and talent really left me feeling awed. This poem really demanded my attention from the first line and held it beyond the last. Absolutely wonderful!!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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