\"Writing.Com
*Magnify*
SPONSORED ITEMS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/sapphirefaery/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/10
Review Requests: OFF
1,984 Public Reviews Given
2,114 Total Reviews Given
Public Reviews
Previous ... 6 7 8 9 -10- 11 12 13 14 15 ... Next
226
226
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


THE PREPARATION:
The title, rating, and chosen genres all fit this story perfectly. The description, however, might benefit from a word or two more of insight into the story. *Wink*

THE START:
Good grief, girl! I wasn't sure where this going, but I was sucked right in! You did a magnificent job with character development; they seem real and were simple to relate to. I could understand perfectly their feelings and found them in my heart right away! They are very believable and their dialogue is very well-suite to them as well as their situations. Everything flowed well and was simple to follow and understand.

THE LONG HAUL:
*Bullet*Comma before and after a name being spoken to.
         *Right*Come on[,] baby
         *Note*Noticed once more in the quoted lyrics. *Wink*

THE HOME STRETCH:
I really fell right into this and related on, possibly, too many levels! I think you just did an amazing job with the content! I was able to feel and see it all... I don't think that I took one breath in the "ER" scenes... I kept praying for an outcome that would be different from where I would've gone, but... I just had chills and tears at every corner and was really overwhelmed with the ending! I think the most amazing part of this story, honestly, is the foreshadowing that is undetectable until the end! When I was reading the ending, I noticed it all and realized how much there's a metaphor for life within that foreshadowing: how much we take those small things for granted, how much an action made on a whim can truly mean... You brought me into every single scene and made me want to cry, smile, cry, laugh, cry, eat, and smack you for making me feel and do all those things! *Smirk* I knew going into this how talented you are, but you really just blew me away with this one!!!

THE BIG PICTURE:
You should know me enough, by now, to know that I always try to be as helpful and honest as possible, but, I just couldn't find anything to "pick apart" or point out about this piece. I don't see room or need for improvement. You made me FEEL as I read --and, more than that, I felt (on each read) that I was experiencing this story, not feeling it... What more could anyone want?? I bet my left arm that you win this contest --If you don't, I say we boycott because you deserve it, my dear!! I'm just awed... Even on my third (fourth?) read! To me, it's perfect!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
227
227
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Review from your friend wakko71!
Review 2 of 3


TITLE ETC:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this piece perfectly. *Thumbsup*

CONTENT:
This is very well-written and I hope that each relative who read this was able to understand the care and love with which it was written. This letter definitely says a lot more than just the words that I read on the screen --and that is priceless! *Kiss*

AFFECT:
Honestly, I firmed myself up when I saw the title and description and STILL tears gathered in my eyes as I read! *Pthb* Not only would this be easy for so many to relate to, but the emotion and thought that you put into each word just shines through the words on the screen... I could FEEL every single syllable.

EFFECT:
For those lucky enough to have known your mother, I know that this would have filled their mind's eye with images and memories of her, but, for me, it made me remember several people and my memories with them --another priceless aspect to any written piece!

GRAMMAR:
*Bullet*When using a pronoun or noun in place of a name without the presence of a possessive noun, it should be capitalized.*Wink*
         *Right*for [mom] Mom.

*Bullet*Typo: [rising] a toddler
         *Right*raising

*Bullet*Missing Word?: lay [ ] bed
         *Right*in

*Bullet*Comma before and after a name being spoken to.
         *Right*Thank you[,] [M]om[,]

ET CETERA:
This is just beautiful, Saint Lee, and I hope that you found it to be therapeutic as you wrote it because, just reading it was incredibly therapeutic for me. You made me face memories, feelings, thoughts, that I just never wanted to think about.... THANK YOU!!!

RATING:
You put tears in my eyes and your words yanked on my heartstrings... For that, I have no choice but to give this a 1.0 --No, there just aren't enough stars for not only such a display of talent, but for something to packed with emotion!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
*Star*CHECK OUT my friend and Adopt-A-Newbie Rogue♥Sherri Author IconMail Icon! Thank you!
228
228
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Review 1 of 3 from your friend wakko71!


TITLE ETC:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this piece perfectly.

CONTENT:
I really liked that each line was a complete statement in itself. The breakdown into different portions/stanza/sections really worked very well with your words to drive home different points and allow the reader to sit and reflect between intervals which, to me, gave me an added chance to relate to your words. The flow, however did seem a bit awkward to me. With prose, it's always hard to tell how it should or is meant to be read, but, the first time I read this, I found myself stumbling a few times. I think a quick read-through might help to identify the little "bumps". *Wink* I think that some may have been caused by a feeling "jumping around" as I read --maybe try to find a way to better link each section together and/or rearrange them??

AFFECT:
I feel the passion behind your words and understand your feelings, however, the first time that I read this, I did feel a kind of detachment. It wasn't until the second reading that I truly found myself relating to your words... I think, though, that it is only due to the "matter-of-fact" way in which this is written; I felt more like I was reading a serious definition/observation than an emotional piece --which very well, judging by the description, may have been your intent.

EFFECT:
The imagery throughout this piece is mainly reader-driven which is great because it brings back memories for the reader, thereby making your words easier to relate to. *Thumbsup*

GRAMMAR:
A few grammatical errors were noticed throughout the piece:
*Bullet*[a] emotionally
         *Right*Due to the word follow "a" starting with a vowel, this should be an...

*Bullet*likeness[,] folks[,]
         *Right*Since this is being said to folks, there should be a comma before and after folks.

*Bullet*Loneliness[,] I believe[,] is
         *Right*I believe is added detail here, my dear, *Wink* so a comma should surround it since it is not critical to the statement and could be removed without any "sense" being lost.

*Bullet*...rescue you from[.]
         *Right*All other lines are complete thoughts, however, this one is fragmented since there is no mention of what the subject is being rescued from... While it is is implied, the inconsistency caught my attention. *Wink*

ET CETERA:
I enjoyed reading this piece, but I really think that it could be better. I think that an edit would truly make this item just blossom into a work of art. You've the idea and the thoughts, I think that's it's really just a matter thinking about the words and the grammar... *Wink*

RATING:
I'm giving this a 3.5 because I really feel like a bit more work would make this better... It just wants a few more minutes of attention to blossom into what it could be --and you have it in you, so I don't want to hear about offense over rating! *Laugh* I'm being honest and would really love to come back, read it again, and give this piece the rating that it could have with just a bit more work... *Kiss* I think that you could really make this stronger quite easily!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
*Star*CHECK OUT my friend and Adopt-A-Newbie Rogue♥Sherri Author IconMail Icon! Thank you!
229
229
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Review on behalf of "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!


TITLE ETC:
The title, description, and rating all fit this poem perfectly. The chosen genre (Other), however, could be replaced. Perhaps Writing?

CONTENT:
This just took me away. You captured beautifully a moment in time that we should all be so lucky to experience! (I experienced it while reading this one, lol). The free verse form really worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end.

AFFECT:
This poem had a very enchanting, relaxed feeling that just blew me away!

EFFECT:
Plenty of memories came rushing back as I read this which I just love!

GRAMMAR:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, however, I do wonder about placing commas after and and tomato in Line Eleven... It could just be me, but I seemed to take a natural pause in those places each time I read through this poem.

ET CETERA:
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this and couldn't help but smile! I LOVE it!!!

RATING:
Gee... I wonder... LOL. *Wink*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
*Star*CHECK OUT my friend and Adopt-A-Newbie Rogue♥Sherri Author IconMail Icon! Thank you!
230
230
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Review on behalf of "JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM CLOSED 4NOW" Open in new Window.!
Review 2 of 2 of your Friendship Package from Simply Positive!

With the Message: "For Being A Simply Positive Winning Reviewer!!"


TITLE ETC:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly! *Thumbsup*

CONTENT:
The ABCB rhyme scheme worked very well with your words to keep everything moving along without any rhymes feeling forced. Everything was simple to follow, understand, and, most of all, feel!

AFFECT:
This poem yanked on my heartstrings and put tears in my eyes! The build up is magnificent and happy before the slow descent which allowed me to relive memories and smile before... Wonderful!!! This is definitely a poem of feeling and that comes through resoundingly clear!

EFFECT:
While your descriptions led my mind's eye one way, I love that this is also left open for the reader's past and memories to fill their head and make this a poem that is simple to relate to!

GRAMMAR:
I did not notice any typos, however, I do suggest adding punctuation. The flow was smooth, however, I really think that giving the reader's voice more guidance would greatly improve the flow and the whole of this poem.

ET CETERA:
All in all, I really enjoyed reading this and found it simple to relate to and FEEL... GREAT job!

RATING:
I really want to give this poem a 5.0, but I just feel like the flow is not as smooth as it could be, so I'm giving a 4.5... *Wink* If you would like ANY further suggestions or help with punctuation, please, just e-mail me and I'll be glad to help! *Kiss*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
*Star*CHECK OUT my friend and Adopt-A-Newbie Rogue♥Sherri Author IconMail Icon! Thank you!
231
231
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Review on behalf of "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!

TITLE:
This title definitely fits this poem perfectly.

DESCRIPTION:
Makes the reader want to know the answer and fits the poem perfectly. *Thumbsup*

RATING/GENRES:
The rating is well-suited to the content, however, the chosen genre (Other) could be replaced. Perhaps Emotional or Experience...?

FORM/STYLE:
The ABA rhyme scheme and short lines worked wonderfully to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling forced. Everything was simple to follow and understand.

EMOTION:
It was simple to understand the emotions of the poet, as well as having my own feelings stirred. Great!

IMAGERY:
The imagery throughout this poem is reader-driven, making memories flash before the reader's mind's eye as he/she read which makes this simple to relate to.

TECHNICAL/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice grammatical errors or typos. The only suggestion that I could come up with is to spend a few more seconds with this poem. It felt like something was missing, but I honestly don't know what... *Blush*

OVERALL:
I enjoyed reading this poem and love how much you managed to convey with so few words!

RATING:
I'm goin' with a 4.5 only because I feel like this poem could somehow be improved... *Blush*


*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
232
232
Review of April Summer  Open in new Window.
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


Ugh! I can relate all too well to this poem! *Cry* It got FAR too hot FAR too early this year! (I think this was the first year in my sister's 42 years of life that it was so hot on April 26, that she went to the shore for her birthday! --EWW!!!)

As far as the technical aspects of this poem, the flow was smooth and everything was simple to follow and understand. It did, however, feel more like prose than poetry to me... *Blush*

I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

All in all, I wish I could say I enjoyed this poem, but it made me want to scream! *Blush* --Another hot, yucky day in New Joisey, so this just hit too close to home! *Wink* Okay, mission accomplished with making your reader feel and understand what you experienced --as well as inviting him/her to experience it through your words! That's an awesome thing... I just don't feel like "poetry" is the right category... *Blush* It felt too blunt and narrated for poetry in my meaningless opinion. *Laugh* I think that, as a prose piece, this would be perfect! As a poem, though... I say 4.5. *Kiss*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
233
233
Review of Kayla  Open in new Window.
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


BASICS:
The title, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. The description, however, might benefit from a word or two more of insight into the poem. *Wink*

TECHNICALS:
This short poem really tugged at my heartstrings. It is heartfelt and beautiful... and so very true! The end put a big smile on my face. I also found this poem to be very easy to relate to --my dogs' faces were dancing before my mind's eye! --Especially playful Nala, the 100-lb. lap dog! *Laugh*

SPECIFICS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

FURTHER THOUGHTS:
This poem is beautiful and heartfelt. It definitely says much, much more than just the words on the screen. I love it!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
234
234
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
HAPPY WDC BIRTHDAY!!!

TITLE:
This title fits the poem perfectly!

DESCRIPTION:
This title gives a glimpse of background information, however, I feel like it may benefit from a word or two of insight into the poem.

RATING/GENRES:
Poifect! *Thumbsup*

FORM/STYLE:
The AABB rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words to keep everything flowing smoothly from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling forced.

EMOTION:
This poem just yanked at the strings of my heart... Not only was it simple to understand the personal feelings that you expressed, but also to relate to feel for you, and to feel those feelings on my own as memories ran through my brain...

IMAGERY:
The imagery is reader-driven which really made this poem simple to relate to...

TECHNICAL/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

OVERALL:
This is a beautiful poem and an amazing tribute... Very easy to understand and relate to... This just yanked on my heartstrings.

RATING:
Ya know, I try to put honesty in every review and hate giving out 5.0's as much as I do, but I just can't find anything to take away from those five stars...

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
235
235
Review of AMONG FRIENDS  Open in new Window.
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
HAPPY WDC BIRTHDAY!!!

TITLE:
Fits perfectly. *Thumbsup*

DESCRIPTION:
Short, sweet, and to the point! *Thumbsup**Thumbsup*

RATING/GENRES:
The rating and chosen genre are both well-suited to this poem, however, I think that other genres may suit this just as well --Perhaps Friendship and Experience...?

FORM/STYLE:
The AABB rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling forced.

EMOTION:
This poem was simple to follow, understand, and feel! Moreover, this poem is so easy to relate to that it just yanks at the reader's heartstrings and has him/her nodding their head all the way through!

IMAGERY:
The imagery throughout this poem is reader-driven, making plenty of faces and memories flash before the reader's mind's eye as he/she reads --which just adds to the "relate-ability" of this poem!

TECHNICAL/SUGGESTIONS:
There were just a few tiny things that popped into my head as I read:

*Bullet*Among friends[,]
         *Right*This phrase is repeated without feeling repetitive, however, there is an inconsistency with the comma following the phrase...

*Bullet*[,]
         *Right*In a few lines, there are two statements being made, two different, but equal views/ideas being stated, so I think the commas in lines 2 and 4, a semi-colon may be better suited to the flow of the poem.

*Bullet*give and take
         *Right*My brain is at war over this one, but I'm just going to follow my heart and say what's there instead of what my brain says. *Pthb* I feel like hyphenation on either side of and would help to link these words together as the singular action that they are usually noted for; Also, because give-and-take usually describes ONE action or aspect of a relationship or friendship, the word "strengthen" felt a bit awkward --perhaps strengthens...?

OVERALL:
This poem not only spoke volumes to me, but really yanked on my heartstrings as a poem that I just say "Amen" to, my beautiful Sister!

RATING:
In good conscience, I'm going with a 4.5 just because I know that my beautiful sister can easily turn this into something amazing! Just a quick read through, and BAM! perfection will come knockin'! *Kiss*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
236
236
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
HAPPY WDC BIRTHDAY!!!


BASICS:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this piece perfectly.

TECHNICALS:
This is just beautiful! It's wonderfully well-written and simple to follow, understand, and, most of all, feel! I had tears in my eyes from the get-go and, by the end, I was crying. This is just beautiful, Sher, I don't know what else I can say, and I'm not going to waste your time by padding this review. *Wink**Kiss*

SPECIFICS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors nor did any suggestions pop into my head, however, I did see one li'l typo:

*Bullet*God’s [ ] came
         *Right*I think a word is missing...

FURTHER THOUGHTS:
This is a beautiful tribute to an angelic woman that I would have loved to meet. *Kiss* I know that she is watching you from her cloud with a smile on her face. *Kiss* Thank you for sharing this and letting us into your heart...

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
237
237
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


TITLE:
This title definitely fits this story perfectly.

DESCRIPTION:
Again, fits perfectly.

RATING/GENRES:
The rating and chosen genres are all well-suited to this story. *Thumbsup*

STORYLINE:
This story was easy to follow with a message that I hope all readers will carry with them everyday! The simplicity of this story made it easy to take everything in. Great!!!

CHARACTERS:
The characters were pretty well-developed for such a short piece, but I do think that the reader-character bond could be stronger...

EMOTION:
It was simple to feel the confusion of the humans as well as understand the feelings of the whales, which really made this quite thought-provoking!

IMAGERY:
The simple characters and settings kept everything wonderfully easy to see as I read! Wonderful!

DIALOGUE:
The dialogue was well-suited to the characters and situations which kept everything believable! *Thumbsup* I did, however, notice several instances in which a comma was missing before or after the names of "people" being spoken to.

TECHNICAL/SUGGESTIONS:
I noticed a few little things here that I think could easily be changed to make this story even better...

*Bullet*[somewhere] on the Atlantic...
         *Right*Since this story is written in a third person point of view, this phrase felt awkward because it makes it feel like the narrator doesn't fully know the story. Perhaps say in the middle of or just remove the word somewhere?

*Bullet*a young [women]
         *Right*Should be woman.

*Bullet*Hey[,] Luke,...
         *Right*Since this is being said to Luke, there should be a comma before his name as well as after.

*Bullet*I'm [ ]hearing
         *Right*Extra space here.

*Bullet*Putting on the head[ ]phones[,]...from confused[,] to anger[,] to...
         *Right*headphones can be one word.
         *Right*I think that a comma after headphones would improve the flow here by separating the two actions taking place.
         *Right*These commas seemed to break up the flow a bit by separating things that are linked together by the word to.

*Bullet*I mean, come [one],
         *Right*on

*Bullet*remember[,] sisters,...
         *Right*Comma to separate the sisters being spoken to from the dialogue directed at them.

*Bullet*[They] are far...
         *Right*There

OVERALL:
This short story is well-written and thought-provoking. I thoroughly enjoyed its insightful, eco-friendly tone and message!!!

RATING:
I'm rating this a 4.0 because I think that, with a bit more work, you could easily urge this story to blossom to its full potential. *Kiss*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
238
238
Review of Protect and Serve  Open in new Window.
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


This is a well-written and thought-provoking piece. Many people do not think about the lives of police officers and this helps to shed some light on that, making readers see that officers are human too. I do, however, feel that this piece could use a for more minutes of your attention to truly blossom into its full potential.

I noticed that the word "there" is used twice in places where it should be they are or they're.

Also, the ending was a bit confusing because you have built up this piece as geared toward officers, but then switch to soldiers at the end. While many police officers may have been Marines or soldiers, there are also many who have not, so this felt a bit awkward and came as a little shock.

All in all, I really enjoyed reading this and thank you for sharing it! I love when a piece leaves me thinking and that's exactly what this piece did. Great job!! Write on!!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
239
239
Review of Quiet Fire  Open in new Window.
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Review on behalf of "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!
HAPPY WDC BIRTHDAY!!!


BASICS:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this piece of micro-fiction (Or perhaps micro-fact! lol) perfectly!!

TECHNICALS:
You stuck wonderfully to the word count and amazingly managed to bring your reader in AND tell a complete story!! The imagery is wonderful and vivid. I could see this taking place before my eyes! At the end, I could only smile and take a deep breath of the fresh air coming in through the open window --a nice, autumn-ish breeze of relief! *Delight*

SPECIFICS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

FURTHER THOUGHTS:
A lot of 55-word stories can leave the reader wanting more, but this felt so complete that I'm just amazed!! *Pthb* I love the simplicity and relaxed feeling of this story! Very well-written and real, Mr. Jace! *Delight*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
240
240
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


Oh My... Wow!!! I am absolutely floored by your talent!!! Each image is just... Oh my God! I am so incredibly jealous! lol.

Each image in this folder is just beautiful! The way you manage to capture life, nature, and the beauty in all things is clear in each and every item! I think "Don't Go Searching for Waterfalls" is my favorite, but that could be just because the title drew me right in and made me click it first!

I've known a lot of people that can draw OR paint, but very few that can do both so well!! You are truly an artist in every sense of the word! I bow down to you, Ms. Writeartista!!!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
241
241
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Review on behalf of "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. and The Review Fools!!!


BASICS:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. (The rating may be a notch or two higher than needed, though...) *Wink*

TECHNICALS:
The free verse form worked beautifully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end. Everything was simple to follow, understand, and feel. I think that we can all relate to this poem --or could have at some point in life. This is definitely one of those poems that fits perfectly the situation for which it was written, but can also be related to many other situations and aspects of life --Wonderful! This brought back plenty of memories for me!

SPECIFICS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, though one thing did pop into my head: In Stanza 2, Line 4, did you mean for "can" to be "can't"??

FURTHER THOUGHTS:
In my mind, heart, and meager belief system, I firmly believe that a perfect poem should stir emotion and make the reader FEEL. If that same poem can be related to, then it cannot be less than perfect. To me, that's this poem. *Pthb*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
242
242
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


BASICS:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this piece perfectly.

TECHNICALS:
The flow of this piece is smooth. Everything is simple to follow and understand while reading. It was also easy to envision, as well as stirring up my emotions! This is well-written and I am so glad that you shared it --people should be able to feel the outrage and to know that such things happen! I thank you for sharing this!

SPECIFICS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

FURTHER THOUGHTS:
I have a close friend that works in the same field. She has worked in several residences, so this story really did not come as a surprise to me as I have heard of such things before. The way that your own experience was handled, however, is just disgusting! My friend has seen people fired for MUCH less than what your co-workers did. It comes down to that the directors and higher-ups really need to be tested for ethics and morals more so than managing capabilities! That line of work is not made for uncaring people, but for people with compassion and heart. Thank YOU for having that compassion and heart, Ms. Lexi! It's people like you that put a little hope in our world.

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
243
243
Review of LAKOTA  Open in new Window.
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP LEADER
ANGEL ARMY MEMBER
HELPING HEARTS MEMBER


You did a beautiful job with this acrostic. Not only did you stick well to the form, but you made a clear statement that, in many ways, still resides in our world today! Amazing!!!

The only suggestions that I could conjure up would be to bold the beginning letter of each line and add punctuation. With or without, though, I still think that this poem is strong and perfect. It made me feel, stop, and reflect... What more could one ask for from a poem??

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" Open in new Window..
244
244
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP LEADER
ANGEL ARMY MEMBER
HELPING HEARTS MEMBER

TITLE:
This title fits perfectly --and struck a chord in my heart right from first sight!

DESCRIPTION:
Again, fits perfect.

RATING/GENRES:
The rating is appropriate and the chosen genres are definitely well-suited to this poem!

FORM/STYLE:
I have tried this form and just... Wow! What an amazing job you did with it!! You stuck well to form and all three poems make sense --and all connect to that "miracle". I'm just amazed!

EMOTION:
The poem itself definitely stirs the emotions of the reader and, being from "Joisey", this poem actually made me shiver! You captured what happened wonderfully!!!

IMAGERY:
Everything is easy to envision from your words, as well as news reports. *Blush*

TECHNICAL/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

OVERALL:
This poem is just splendid! I don't know how you did it, but... WOW!

RATING:
What about "WOW" don't you understand? *Pthb* Of course this gets a 1.0! *Wink*


*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" Open in new Window..
245
245
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP LEADER
ANGEL ARMY MEMBER
HELPING HEARTS MEMBER


This is such an incredibly inspiring piece that I am actually left speechless... It is well-written and yanked at my heartstrings, but really opened my mind and heart to take in your words and, hopefully, adhere them to my everyday life. I am amazed at your remarkable spin on this and how you have opened your life and heart to allow see positives that would be invisible to so many.

I didn't see any grammatical errors or typos and just can't tell you how much I respect you and how much I appreciate these sage words of wisdom. Life doesn't come with a handbook, but this might be a good start to one! *Kiss*

All I can really say is: Thank you!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" Open in new Window..
246
246
Review of Seasons  Open in new Window.
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP LEADER
ANGEL ARMY MEMBER
HELPING HEARTS MEMBER
Review on behalf of "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!


TITLE:
The title definitely fits this poem perfectly.

DESCRIPTION:
Again, fits perfectly.

RATING/GENRES:
The rating is appropriate, if not a notch higher than needed. The chosen genres are well-suited to the poem.

FORM/STYLE:
I don't have the patience right now to search for all the particulars of English Sonnets, so I'm just gonna go with what I see. lol. The ABAB rhyme scheme and rhyming couplet worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling forced or taking away from the affect of the poem. Everything moved along beautifully and was easy to follow and understand.

EMOTION:
This poem gave me a incredibly feeling of peace and love. It is calm and definitely stirred my emotions while I read!

IMAGERY:
The imagery is vivid and beautiful. I could see the seasons changing before my eyes.

TECHNICAL/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, but I do think that the addition of punctuation would really help to make the flow even smoother. I know that it's optional, but I think that a little more guidance to the reader's voice would really just make this poem perfect.

OVERALL:
I absolutely love how you managed to bring your reader from one season to the next in such a seamless fashion! Wonderful!

RATING:
I'm givin' it a 4.5 just because I think that another minute or two of attention and this would easily become a 5.0.

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" Open in new Window..
247
247
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP LEADER
ANGEL ARMY MEMBER
HELPING HEARTS MEMBER
Review on behalf of "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!


TITLE:
The title is long, but fits perfectly.

DESCRIPTION:
I didn't read the description first, so it just gave me a whole new mode of thinking about what I just read. *Wink*

RATING/GENRES:
The rating is appropriate and the chosen genres are perfectly suited to the piece.

STORYLINE/PLOT:
You really say a whole lot more than the words on the screen which is wonderful! The breakdown of times, etc, really worked wonderfully to bring the reader into the sleepless night, while also making him/her reflect and remember things from their past as well as the narrator's past. I love it!

EMOTION:
This was simple to feel. Not only did I feel the frustration of sleeplessness, but also the love and longing... This was like facing an old ghost for me, memories of reading poetry late night with an ex... I don't know if that's good or bad... *Confused*

IMAGERY:
Everything was simple to envision --not only because of my own past, but also because of simplicity of the scene. You laid it out before my eyes quite well, my friend!

TECHNICAL/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos. The only suggestion that came into my head is for you to use this as a launching board for a longer story. It felt complete and yet I was left wanting more...

OVERALL:
I thoroughly enjoyed this and do hope that you'll write more of this story, drag this out a bit, etc...

RATING:
I'm goin' with a 4.5 because of selfishness of wanting more of the story! *Wink*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" Open in new Window..
248
248
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP LEADER
ANGEL ARMY MEMBER
HELPING HEARTS MEMBER


Oh my!! This is just hysterical! *Laugh* Not only was I laughing all the way through, but, dear God, you pegged my mother!!! From her, I learned to open everything AWAY from my face, peek, and, if all looks clear, smell. *Laugh* It's a habit now that I just can't break. I can't even tell you some of the things that I've found in her fridge over the years! *Laugh*

Okay, back to the review... This is well-written and had me laughing right from the get-go! It's so very...real! I could see it all --even the things I didn't particularly care to!

Two things, however, did stand out in my brain:
         *Bullet*In the first paragraph, the G granny should be capitalized since it is unaccompanied by a possessive noun. *Wink*
         *Bullet*Near the end, creme cheese caught my attention since I've only ever seen it as cream cheese. Could a Joisey thing, but I thought I'd mention it. *Wink*

What more can I say? This is well-written and I thank you for sharing it with us!!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" Open in new Window..
249
249
Review of Those Words  Open in new Window.
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP LEADER
ANGEL ARMY MEMBER
HELPING HEARTS MEMBER
Review on behalf of "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!


TITLE:
The title fits this item perfectly.

DESCRIPTION:
Short, sweet, and to the point! *Thumbsup*

RATING/GENRES:
The rating is appropriate and the chosen genres are well-suited to the item. *Thumbsup*

FORM/STYLE:
This is a lovely piece of prose that flow smoothly from beginning to end. Everything was simple to follow and understand.

EMOTION:
This was just enchanting! Not only were the words calm and spellbinding, but the roused my emotions and just left me breathing and reflecting... Wonderful!

IMAGERY:
The imagery is vivid and beautiful! A bit reader-driven, which makes the poem easy to relate to, but the added picture really just took me away...

TECHNICAL/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

OVERALL:
This is just beautiful... what more can I say?

RATING:
If not just for talent, you get a 5.0 for taking me away! *Kiss*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" Open in new Window..
250
250
Review by Stephanie Grace Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP LEADER
ANGEL ARMY MEMBER
HELPING HEARTS MEMBER

TITLE:
The title fits this poem perfectly.

DESCRIPTION:
While this description gives good background information, it might benefit from a word or two of insight into the poem.

RATING/GENRES:
The rating is appropriate and the chosen genres are definitely well-suited to this poem.

FORM/STYLE:
The ABAB rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling forced or taking away from the affect of the poem.

EMOTION:
This poem had me teary-eyed from the get go! I smiled, too, but my heart broke for your loss. This really tugged on my heartstrings --HARD!

IMAGERY:
The imagery is simple which kept everything easy to envision.

TECHNICAL/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

OVERALL:
This is a beautiful tribute filled with smiles and sadness, as well as strength and hope. It is well-written and incredibly emotional. I love it!

RATING:
There just aren't enough stars, Ms. Judy! *Kiss*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" Open in new Window..
558 Reviews • *Magnify*
Page of 23 • 25 per page   < >
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/sapphirefaery/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/10