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Review of A MANLY THING?  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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ON THE SURFACE:
Oh, my friend, what is with you and your apparent fixation on poem about... well, you know. *Laugh* The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. The AABB rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling forced. The pace was quick and upbeat --a perfect match for the amusing story told!

ANKLE-DEEP:
The emotion was definitely spot-on... I was gettin' a bit defensive, thinking of similar spats that Hubby and I have had. *Blush* (Nothing to this extreme, though). I really laughed my through this, though, picturing myself and my husband as the couple! Just... Wow! LOL. Hysterical! The imagery, too, was really nailed throughout this. I could see it all! *Laugh*

KNEE-DEEP:
This only things as far as grammar/typos/suggestions that I noticed were a period at the end of Stanza 2 that obstructed the flow and left the thought feeling incomplete since it's carried into Stanza 3 --and-- there's a tense change that made my brow crinkle while I read. It seems to be happening in the present, but the couple seems to be in the past...?

HEAD UNDER WATER!
I love it! It's not often that I literally laugh out loud while reading (especially not outside!), but this had me rolling... Okay, I'm off to piddle now... Maybe I laughed too hard!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Release  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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BASIC ELEMENTS:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. The ABCB rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling too forced. Everything is simple to follow and understand. You did a great job with relaying your feelings as well as your message!

GRAMMAR/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos. The only thing that kind of gave me a short pause was the final line of Stanza 3... I wasn't quite sure what was meant by 'the flame' or how it related to the rest of the poem. I love that this whole poem is a little open for interpretation, but this line seemed to stick out a bit... *Blush*

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. I can't tell you how many days I have felt this exact way. I love that this poem is so easy to relate to --as I KNOW many others will feel the same way as I do in that respect. A wonderful read, my dear! Thank you for sharing it! Write on!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Hyperbole  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Title & Description:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly.

Flow & Format:
This poem had a very smooth flow and amazing, bouncy pace that kept everything upbeat! *Delight* The rhyming couplets worked wonderfully with your words to make each message clear without any rhymes feeling forced.

Emotion & Imagery:
The emotion is just happiness... I just smiling, nodding, and laughing all the way through! The imagery, well... Ha! It's spot-on and quite amusing! *Laugh*

Typos & Suggestions:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

Overall:
I LOVE LOVE LOVE this poem! It's so very true, very real, and just amazingly entertaining! I don't know what more I can say... I'm still feeling all giddy and giggly. *Blush* Bravo!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace


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Review of Force of Nature  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. The flow was smooth; everything was simple to follow and understand. This poem had a fast pace to it as I read that I really enjoyed, it definitely suits the contents. *Wink* The message of this poem came through clearly and is one that I hope all readers will pay attention to!

ANKLE-DEEP:
This poem was very easy to feel as images and memories flow to the forefront of the reader's mind. For too many, this poem is simple to relate to.

KNEE-DEEP:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos. The only suggestion that came into my head isn't a suggestion at all, but just an opinion. *Blush* I felt that, somehow, the ending could be stronger. Yes, it has an impact, but I just feel that it could have a much greater impact and REALLY hit the reader hard.

HEAD UNDER WATER!
This poem is well-written and very true to life. It is reflective and incredibly real. A wonderful read! Thank you for sharing it with us!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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There truly are not enough stars for this poem.... Such emotion, such love... This really had e crying.... It's beautiful!

From a cold, clinical, technical standpoint, the punctuation could be looked at to improve the flow a little bit, but, I refuse to let that stand in the way of the five stars that this deserves (and that really is not enough). The ABCB rhyme scheme worked beautifully with your words without any rhymes feeling forced.

This is just a beautiful, heartfelt poem and I really don't know what else I can say (Other than my beanpole nephew has the same jacket...).

Thank you for sharing this, ShiShad,and God bless! *Kiss*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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TITLE ETC:
The title, description, and rating all fit this poem perfectly, as does the chosen genre, however, I think that others may work as well --and bring in more readers! Maybe 'Experience' or 'Satire'?

CONTENT:
The AABB rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words without any rhymes feeling forced. Everything was simple to follow and understand and I was rolling my eyes and laughing the whole way through! (Not rolling my eyes at you, of course, but at personal memories and thoughts of the amount of pills in my house... Doctors seem to just want to give meds for anything nowadays... It's a bit sick... Maybe they should develop a pill for that!). The content was very true-to-life and real. The flow was pretty smooth, though the capitalization at each line made me pause a few times since it made my brain think that a new thought was being started rather than the thought being continued from the previous line --but, that's just me, I know... *Blush*

AFFECT:
This poem definitely made me feel --not only a tad of animosity toward doctors, but also happiness and strength. I could understand the pain and frustration of the different 'ailments' mentioned, but also the lightheartedness with which they are relayed to the reader... GREAT job!

EFFECT:
Sure, I could've seen it all while reading, but my mind became focused on my parents... My mother's face and pharmacy that she calls a medicine cabinet were glowing before my mind's eye the whole time.

GRAMMAR, ETC:
Yeah, yeah, the capitalization thing... Other than that, I just felt like more could be added. Honestly, I was a bit disappointed that the rant about pills and the pills for side effects for the pills wasn't explored a bit more... I think that adding another stanza or two to make the pill count higher would really push this ovver the top and add more impact to the ending (which made me laugh anyway, LOL).

ET CETERA:
This poem is very REAL. I can't think of another --or better, word to describe it. It's really fun read, but also thought-provoking as connections are made between helpful meds and their side effects... You did a truly wonderful job with this poem! To make ME laugh out loud... Yes, amazing job, LOL.

RATING:
I'm going with a 4.5 only because of things that I already mentioned. I think that you can easily make this poem even better than five stars if you just read it through and allow your muse to cut in... I think this poem just wants a few more minutes of your attention to coax it into its full bloom. *Wink*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace


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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this story perfectly. It is a great conclusion to part one, though I do think that they could be combined into one. *Wink* There were a few, minor bumps in the flow, but nothing that obstructed the story from coming through clearly. Everything was simple to follow and understand. The messages found in this portion are the story are ones that I pray EVERY reader will pay attention to and carry with them!

ANKLE-DEEP:
Not only was it easy to feel your feelings as experienced throughout the the story (there was the concern, the serenity at that picturesque beginning, the amazement, the bewilderment, etc...), but this really tugged on my heartstrings and left tears in my eyes. Perhaps because I can relate so well to the person that this portrays, this REALLY hit home for me. Wonderful job! The imagery is very vivid and amazing! Without such stories, many would never see such sights. *Delight*

KNEE-DEEP:
Just a few little nit-picks. *Blush*

*Bullet*...of the [residents]: I think that you may have meant residence here, though I can see how residents would work in this situation too... *Wink*
*Bullet*[clinacle] sounding: clinical
*Bullet*[is] now in training...: Watch for tense changes... *Wink*

HEAD UNDER WATER!
I thoroughly enjoy reading this and give you a heartfelt thank you and pat on the back for sharing this! Your appreciation and love of animals comes through so clearly that I can't imagine anyone walking away from this without "getting" your message. A quick edit would make this even better, but I absolutely adore this story. Your a hero and a beautiful soul --and this story proves it!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this story perfectly. Everything was simple to follow and understand, though I did feel a few little hiccups in the flow as I read. This is a wonderful glimpse into your life as well as your heart! Having been in many similar situations with both my cat and one of my dogs, I related to this all too well! You did a wonderful job of relaying the story. The tension was well done, though the description did soften the impact of it by telling the reader beforehand what's happening while you were still trying to figure it out... *Wink*

ANKLE-DEEP:
This was simple to envision and feel! I found myself holding my breath a few times while reading... *Blush* VERY well done!!!

KNEE-DEEP:
There were a few little things caught me up in the grammar/typo department (hence the hiccups, lol):
*Bullet*Having the dialogue together without lines skipped between the different speakers made these spots feel a little cramped.
*Bullet*daughter [is] Since this is written in past-tense the word is threw me off... Perhaps was?
*Bullet*"...here again." "Scat!" Since the same person is speaking here, it felt very weird to have closing quotation marks and then opening ones back-to-back. Maybe add a dialogue tag between them or use an ellipsis to relay the pause and difference...?

HEAD UNDER WATER!
I really enjoyed reading this story and can't wait to read part two! It's nice to get a glimpse of humanity in a such a wonderful light! You're a true gem! I think that a quick edit could make this better as far as the technical side, but with the emotion, imagery, humanity, and truth in this piece, how could anyone not love it?

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Hotly Scored  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. You definitely managed to say a whole lot in such a short space! The flow was smooth and everything was simple to follow and understand, as well as interpret and relate to. While the meaning behind the words is simple to "get", I think that this poem could also be taken a few different ways, depending on the reader's own experiences. *Thumbsup*

ANKLE-DEEP:
Not only was easy to understand and feel the emotions of the narrator, but own feelings were stirred as I found myself relating to each line, understanding the message all too well. The imagery is creative, but also very reader-driven as memories and faces from the reader's own life float to the forefront of his/her mind. *Delight*

KNEE-DEEP:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, however, I do wonder about replacing the comma in the final line with a semi-colon as two different, but connected thoughts are present.

HEAD UNDER WATER!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem and found it to be very emotional. You relayed perfectly the feelings. I did feel, though, like something was missing... like there was more that could be said. It could just be me and I'm really not sure what, since I felt the finality of the end.... I dunno... Maybe I'm crazy (like that would surprise you, LOL). I did really love it and loved how it left me reflecting --that's a treasure to find!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Family Secret  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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TITLE, ETC:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this story perfectly.

STORYLINE/PLOT:
This has an incredibly creative storyline that really blew me away!! Everything was simple to follow and understand. The buildup was just superb; I never knew where this was going to go, but I just couldn't look away from the screen!!

CHARACTERS:
The characters are well-developed and easily come to life for the reader as he/she envisions their own family members. *Thumbsup*

EMOTION:
There was a great tension as I read, an excitement that kept building up until the end --and beyond! I could feel for poor Khir as well, tears coming to my eyes as I read... *Thumbsup*

IMAGERY:
Everything came to life before my eyes. You did a tremendous job of laying out the scene and giving enough description for the reader to easily envision everything while reading

DIALOGUE:
The dialogue is well-suited to the characters and situations and worked very well with the narrative to enhance the story.

TECHNICAL/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

OVERALL:
I absolutely LOVED reading this story! It is brimming with creativity and talent!! I was, however, left wondering what will happen next... Has there been any thought in your head as far as expanding this story? If you do, I would LOVE to read it!!!!

RATING:
I can't find one reason why this story should receive anything less than five stars!!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Dead Tissue  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. The free verse form worked very well with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end. Everything was simple to follow and understand. I love the buildup and how it is misleading, making the reader worry about the narrator's health. *Thumbsup*

ANKLE-DEEP:
The emotions were all clear; not only could I easily feel for the narrator, but my own emotions were stirred. This really tugged on my heartstrings as I read! There is a sense of comfort and hope at the end that I loved; a sudden rush of strength. Great job!

KNEE-DEEP:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos. The only suggestion that I have is to add punctuation at the end of the final line to give the poem a sense of finality. *Wink*

HEAD UNDER WATER!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem! It is creative and very well-written. I loved the metaphoric look at the situation... very easy to interpret and relate to. I loved it!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Remembrance  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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TITLE ETC:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this story perfectly.

CONTENT:
Everything was simple to follow and understand. The flow was smooth, though I did get a bit jumbled near the beginning... With the presence of the word "today," it brought me to the present, but then everything is kept past tense which messed me up a little... Especially in the third paragraph with the phrase, "had gone by"; I felt that it should be "has gone by" since you are speaking from today. I think that the flow could be a little smoother by just taking a quick look at the tense. It didn't really take too much away from the story, but just something that caught me up. The plot, though, is wonderful!!! I would love to see more of these characters. You did a wonderful job of making them come to life!

AFFECT:
It was simple to detect the feelings of the characters while my own emotions were stirred by their situation. I felt horrified and empty, yet loved and hopeful too. Amazing!

EFFECT:
You did a tremendous job of setting the scene for the reader. The imagery is very vivid --I could SEE it all before my eyes.

GRAMMAR:
I did not notice any grammatical errors, however, I did find a little typo: In Paragraph 14: left I behind --I believe that I should come before left...? Also, in Paragraphs 11 and 12, the word Of threw me off as it did not seem to fit with the preceding question. Reading it as a whole, it would become I like to remember of death, etc... The of's threw me off. *Blush*

ET CETERA:
This story is incredibly creative and I think that you did a truly remarkable job of writing it! This is a wonderful display of talent!

RATING:
I really want to give this story a 5.0 because I thoroughly enjoyed it, however, I'm going with a 4.5 because I do think that a quick edit could make it even better... *Kiss*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this item perfectly purrfectly. This letter is very professional and well-written. It has a smooth flow and manages to cover a lot in a short space without jumping around. *Smile* Everything is simple to follow and understand; the message is clear and very strong.

ANKLE-DEEP:
You did a wonderful job of showing your feelings without letting your emotions cloud your professionalism which is always a plus when wanting to get a point across. *Wink* Reading this letter, I actually got tears in my eyes. Where I live, there is uncountable number of stray cats that wander around, as well as a number of family pets that join in the wandering (my own included). We have problem after problem with neighbors --one that has had animal control set up traps in his yard, another that scatters moth balls around his lawn. These same two men have been seen literally swerving in their cars in an attempt to hit a cat. Eek... I'm rambling. What I'm trying to say is that I found this incredibly easy to relate to. It yanked on my heartstrings!

KNEE-DEEP:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

HEAD UNDER WATER!
You did a tremendous job with this letter. I wish I would have found it sooner. All I can say is, "Amen!" The sick and twisted things that people will do are just despicable. Animals have rights too.

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of crumby steps  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (2.5)
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BASIC THOUGHTS:
This was very creative and I love that so much of it can be taken metaphorically to relate to the reader's own life! It was, however, very hard to read due to the grammar. While it was easy to understand what you were saying, the grammar took a lot away from your words and made me feel a little frustrated, like you don't take writing seriously or just don't care --a quick edit before posting an item is important so that people will know you care about your writing and want them to get your message...

GRAMMAR/SUGGESTIONS:
I am listing a few little tips and rules here, but more can be found throughout your piece:

*Note*"i" should always be capitalized. The trend of keeping it lowercase usually signifies depression or lack of self-respect.
*Note*Idk - using slang or abbreviated language in a story can not only confusing, but very distracting. Not everyone may know what it stands for, so, without explanation, a reader may walk away right there.
*Note*elvis: Proper nouns, like names, should always be capitalized.
*Note*vegas: Another proper noun as it names a specific place.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
It is obvious that you have a very creative mind. I think that, with this short story, you really have a great idea but that an edit is really essential and, to me, it could be expanded a bit more. Why not try to describe more of what is seen and felt? What happens during the walk? This can definitely be interpreted many different ways, but I was left unsure of how metaphorical it really is. All in all, you've got wonderful groundwork here; just try and spend some more time with it and allow it to blossom to its full potential! You obviously have the mind to make this a 5.0 piece, so what are you waiting for?

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Slow Rush  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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BASIC THOUGHTS:
I think that you did a really great job with this poem... It is incredibly visual --the scene just came to life before my eyes!! The free verse form worked well with your words to keep everything simple to follow and understand. This poem had a lovely, relaxed pace and feeling that truly gave it its own complete ambiance and allowed each line to become real for the reader. The flow was smooth, however, the break up of some lines gave me pause and there, especially when the broken thought travels from one stanza to the next. It worked wonderfully to add to the relaxed pace and keep the poem flowing gently, but it caused me to have to reread certain parts to really make sure I hadn't missed anything. I think that just looking at that aspect of the poem and trying to find a way to maintain the pace without breaking up so many thoughts would greatly improve the impact and interpretation experienced by the reader.

GRAMMAR/SUGGESTIONS:
The only thing that caught my attention here is in Stanza 7, Line 2: night [slow]/ rush -- I think that slowly may be more appropriate as it is describing the word rush being used as a verb and not a noun.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem and can't thank you enough for the relaxation I found in your words! That was just what I needed this evening! The only reason I am going with a 4.5 instead of a 5.0 is because of the flow and that pesky {i]slow/slowly. If you do decide to change the formatting, I would LOVE to come back and reread this poem! You've really got something beautiful here!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Verdant Visions  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. You stuck wonderfully to the chosen form without any syllables feeling out of place. *Delight* The different shades/ synonyms of green was a very nice, creative touch that kept the poem from feeling repetitive and added many layers to the imagery. Everything was simple to follow as well as understand.

ANKLE-DEEP:
This poem had a beautiful, peaceful feeling that relaxed me from the get-go. *Delight* The imagery is vivid and... green! This really had my mind's eye going crazy with images!

KNEE-DEEP:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, not did any suggestions pop into my head.

HEAD UNDER WATER!
This is really beautiful and incredibly image-packed! I don't even know what else I can say! This came to life before my eyes and left me feeling so incredibly relaxed that there just aren't any words...

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Tribulation  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. You stuck wonderfully to the form --a feat in itself (what a scary form! LOL)! The flow was smooth, though I did detect a few little hiccups while I read... Everything, though, was simple to follow and understand. The message behind the words comes through loud and clear.

ANKLE-DEEP:
This stirred my emotions with every line and left me reflecting. *Thumbsup* The imagery is there, but, the primary images came from memories and visions of my own life that were brought to the forefront of my mind by your words. *Delight*

KNEE-DEEP:
In Line 7, I wonder if a semi-colon would serve the flow and message better than the present comma...?

In Line 10, should well sealed be hyphenated? I don't know, lol, but my brain wanted it to be, so I thought I should mention it.

HEAD UNDER WATER!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. I think that a quick read-through might help, but I'm not quite sure what I should say as far as how this can be improved. I think that it mainly lies in the restrictions of the form... You handled it beautiful and creatively, but I think that, no matter what, I'd be left with the same feeling. *Confused* Then again, it could all just be me... All in all, though, I really enjoyed this poem and found its message to have a very powerful meaning. GREAT job!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Unconditional  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. The rhyming couplets worked very well with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling too forced.

ANKLE-DEEP:
You really make your husband to come alive for the reader! The imagery is spot-on and the emotion is clear. I could feel the admiration and love behind each sentence and my heart swelled. *Delight*

KNEE-DEEP:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos. The only suggestion that popped into my head is to add punctuation. I know that it's optional in poetry, but I think that it would make the clarity and flow of this poem even better by guiding the reader's voice as he/she reads.

HEAD UNDER WATER!
This is a beautiful dedication to a man that sounds so incredibly real and charming that I just may have fallen in love with him through your words! *Laugh* Honestly, you did a remarkable job with this poem! Your husband is incredibly lucky to have found such a beautiful soul for a wife! The only reason that I'm going with a 4.5 instead of a 5.0 is because I think the flow could be just a touch better (add punctuation, lol). I'd LOVE to come back and give this its proper 5.0 if you decide to touch it up! *Wink**Kiss*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Dear God  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. The rhymes did not feel forced; everything flowed smoothly and was simple to follow and understand while reading. *Thumbsup*

ANKLE-DEEP:
This really tugged on my heartstrings! Not only is it simple to understand your feelings throughout this poem, but the emotions presented are ones that we have all felt, I think, which kept this poem incredibly easy to relate to! The imagery is,, of course, reader-driven, making memories a scenes from the reader's own life flash before his/her eyes [which just makes it even easier to relate to and feel!]. *Delight*

KNEE-DEEP:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

HEAD UNDER WATER!
Oh, Wyn! I really loved reading this... What an incredibly display of raw emotion! What more can I really say??

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. This is very creative! I love the way that you have written this --the whole premise is just wonderful! I wonder what the prompt was...[?] Everything was simple to follow and understand as well as being easy to relate to! I found this to be quite a thought-provoking piece!

ANKLE-DEEP:
This definitely got both my heart and mind moving. While understanding the feelings of your mind, my own feelings were stirred while thinking about how my mind must feel! *Blush* This isn't a visual piece, but it stirred up plenty of my memories to go before my mind's eye.

KNEE-DEEP:
The only grammatical error or typo I noticed was in the second paragraph: who's should be whose to show possession. *Wink* The only suggestion I have is to fix that. *Laugh*

HEAD UNDER WATER!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this! It left me feeling reflective and inspired --amazing!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Pigeon Parade  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. I did, however, feel that this had a bit more a "prose" feeling than "poem". As a poem, though, the free verse form worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end. Everything was simple to follow and understand. *Thumbsup*

ANKLE-DEEP:
You did a tremendous job of bringing the reader into the scene. This just came to life before my eyes (not good with my fear of birds! LOL). As I read, I could easily feel the changing moods toward these flying rats. *Laugh* The buildup was really terrific. I was never quite sure where this was going and my attention was held throughout. *Thumbsup*

KNEE-DEEP:
There were a few little places where the punctuation seemed to obstruct the flow, but that could just be me --especially since I went on a BIG rant about grammar yesterday (I can NOT text message. How can you fit proper grammar and language into 160 characters? LOL). For example, in the first line of the final stanza, I wanted a comma after Today just because it's started a sentence and an added detail to the main thought being expressed.

HEAD UNDER WATER!
This poem is incredibly creative and I absolutely love the message at the end. It left me sitting and reflecting, just thinking deeper about what had been said. *Delight* I also love that you threw in information about the pigeons. All in all, this is really great read that made me smile. It was actually quite fun! *Bigsmile* It definitely had me thinking of the NYC pigeons... I haven't visited them in a while (Somehow, they're the only birds I'm not completely terrified of. LOL... Maybe because they walk along with you on the sidewalks instead of dive-bombing your head like the Jersey shore seagulls? LOL)

Thank you for sharing this poem!! It was a delight to read!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Slumber Land  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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ON THE SURFACE:
The title, description, rating and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. The ABAB rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling forced. *Delight*

ANKLE-DEEP:
The imagery throughout this poem is just beautiful! It's very imaginative and descriptions really make it all just come to life! The emotion is serene and beautiful, yet curious as well. I love it!

KNEE-DEEP:
I did not notice any real grammatical errors or typos, however, I do think that taking another look at the punctuation would improve the flow of this poem. While the flow was very smooth, in several places, a comma at the end of a line broke up a thought. With the added capitalization at the beginning of each line, this caused me to pause several times in unnecessary places. I absolutely love punctuation in poetry, but it should be handled just as it within a story. One example: Lines 7 and 8: violin caressed[,] / As you; the word "as" links this thought together as one thought, so the comma is unneeded. *Blush* I'm talking in circles, aren't I? *Laugh* If you would like more in-depth help with the punctuation, please just let me know....

Also, in the final line, I think that slumber land should be capitalized as it is talking about a specific place... Real or not (very real to me!), it's a proper name. *Wink* If you would like to keep it lower-case, then I would suggest adding an "a" after "of". *Wink*

HEAD UNDER WATER!
I really fell in love with this poem as I read. Not only did I get the sense of watching a child sleeping, but I couldn't help but smile as thoughts of my sleeping dogs came into my head; when they start running while asleep, I always wish they could tell me what they were after! *Laugh* I think you did a truly remarkable job with this poem. The one and only reason that I'm going with a 4.5 instead of a 5.0 is because of the flow... that's it --a simple fix. If you do choose to edit the punctuation, PLEASE, let me know so I can come back and give this poem its 5.0! Thank you so much for sharing this... It really put a smile on my face --I needed that! THANK YOU!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace

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Review of Child of December  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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BASIC ELEMENTS:
The title, description, rating and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. This poem flowed smoothly from beginning to end and everything was simple to follow and understand. The imagery is vivid and the metaphors are strong which really made this poem hit me quite hard. I love that it is also left open for a little interpretation which makes it easy to relate to. I mean, I can understand what is being relayed, etc..., but I also feel like a reader could easily relate this to their own childhood or life in many different ways. I really believe that this poem could have many more meanings than just the obvious one expressed. *Wink*

GRAMMAR/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors or typos, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

PERSONAL ASPECTS:
This poem is creative and beautifully worded. It is a great display of talent and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing this poem. *Kiss*

RATING:
Uhh.... Do you really need any more explanation than what can be found above?? *Laugh*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Mother's Garden  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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BASIC ELEMENTS:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly, although, maybe Other could be replaced by Experience? The AABB rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling forced. Everything was simple to follow and understand. You really brought me right into this poem with the vivid imagery and clear emotion! This had me smiling all the way through it! This is really a beautiful, reflective poem!

GRAMMAR/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors, nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

PERSONAL ASPECTS:
I love how I just fell right into this poem! I really felt like I was right there in the garden... Thank you for the mini-vacation! *Kiss*

RATING:
There aren't enough stars in the sky to give to such a reflective, beautiful memory and sentiment.

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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BASIC ELEMENTS:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. Everything was simple to follow and understand. The flow was smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling forced. The emotion came through clearly, not only could I understand what you feeling, but your words really hit me quite hard and yanked on my heartstrings. The message of this poem is truly beautiful and filled with strength and hope. It is a message that I hope all readers will heed and carry with them long after reading.

GRAMMAR/SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any grammatical errors, nor did any typos pop into my head.

PERSONAL ASPECTS:
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. The strength that lies behind the message really caught my attention. This poem read like a hug from a friend --THANK YOU!

RATING:
Something that stirs me this much can be no less than perfect.

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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