Excellent subject. I liked the attitude of this poem. This is kind of a psychological poem. It examines a lifestyle, a love, a passing, a mark in time. I liked it for what it was, a real statement. Saw it in this week's Poetry Newsletter.
Suspenseful piece. As you did well. I liked the two characters most mentioned, but again, I would like to see more tension and emotions exploding. You want an all out fight and arguement. Perhaps, the piece can only go so long and then must be ended, but the
idea of this piece is unique, original, and very worthwhile. I'm wondering about the ending. Is it
credible? The thought that the fire took Jenny was not really what the piece was about, am I right? You have two stories here, in a way. Perhaps, they should be combined with a more believable method. Best Regards.
First of all this is a delicate subject. You have tried to handle it well, and abuse is the name of the game in so many psychological circles today. You have good beginnings here. A story like this could really explode and the tensions and emotions make it masterful.
You didn't deal with the incident of abuse very long, and hung onto Halley and Bianca and their getaway mostly. Maybe if the scene would have been explicit and the emotions of Halley's shown, then we could really identify with Halley. Rene was portrayed as well, with a slight bend of the "lean". Making her more full-fleshed would be good too. Best Regards.
I'm back to raid your Port for the last time. I hope you don't mind. I'm enthralled with this piece. It is such good story-telling! I loved your angles, your characters, and the heroine is expertly portrayed.
You have much to say about the Dragon and the lifestyle
the young heroine had while we become caught up in the suspense of her possible death. Saving her was a good thing, I think. It was a good angle. The most of the description was done well, you have fleshed it out with a good length, and the piece ends nicely. Very good job! Best Regards.
I little short, but the characters of Jamie Lynn and Bilbo were sweet. I liked the part about the "pencils" that tasted good. You gave us a little sketch that comprised, but was very adequate. Very nice. Best Regards.
Interesting parody. I think I understand it. You really just don't need that teacher, eh. Your stanzas were a bit uneven, however, all in all it came out okay. Nice and lyrical. You balanced everything in the end, pretty well--with the attitude and camaraderie
of the piece. Cool. Best Regards.
I thought this story was just great. It was very fullfilling by the end and you portrayed Rumplestiltskin in a very charming manner. I kind of liked it just as much as riffling through the real
story about him. The attitude of the reporter was kind of comical, and I liked that. You gave us a full report. I liked the story-line rundown alot. Best Regards.
Excellent, excellent. I did a piece that was published recently called "Society's Masks" and I had proposed there that there are young women out there behind them such as yourself. You have a great little piece here. It gives us a societal attitude and the piece is moving, really. Silent tears are sad proposals of things that we hold inside that sometimes don't want to come out. It is almost a philosophical statement here. Yet, like the proud lyricist that you are, I think you might have mean't: Don't rain on my parade. You always stand true to sticking up for yourself.
Pretty darn good honesty, Johnny. I think you endeavoured to tell us your heart-felt wishes and it was put across well. Saw this in a Romance/Love Newsletter on "emotions" about love. Good choice.
Passing through.
Brilliant, superb! Lines run off the Grecian Urn with the good, good sense of all that it's worth. I like you. You have great talent and thanks for sharing so much, Popcorn. I love RAOK. And You are
wonderful in this piece, so have fun at SLAM. Luck and hope all is well there. This was in this week's
Poetry Newsletter. Best to you.
{/i}I find this a very endearing poem. The lines rythymic and rhyming find their way to a greater "end" with really good sensibility and match-point the word love very well. I like a poem that speaks from the truth of love and this one does. Enriching for its worth, and nicely ended it is excellent.
Favorite lines: It is a more digestible affair; to share it with a lover and a friend.
This line gives us reality and logic that this kind of poem has throughout. Well-done! Best Regards.
Wow, what a marvelous panorama of NYC. I envy you. Getting to see ll this. It sounds exciting. You lived through a great rush of moments. They way you told this piece was nicely done as well, through the eyes of the older woman. It was very real. You have a lots to look back on. Good job! Best Regards.
There is excellent psychology behind this piece. You have here those stream-of-conscious phrases that add up to a great title. I liked your quick, clear insight on what "love" means to you. I saw this in the Romantic Newsletter. It's a great piece for that Newsletter with what was discussed. Good pick! Great read!
I liked the simplicity of this piece. Yet, it's framework boasts more than simple words. I feel calmed by it, a tranquil piece which jumps out at me in the new Poetry Newsletter this week. I love to write Spring poems
myself, and this one edges on the very nice-ities of Spring we dream about when writing. Giving us Peace of mind, a nice rhyming rythm to it, it is very well-written. Best Regards.
Hi Pita, I enjoyed this poem that they placed in the Poetry Newsletter this week. It has the juice of great knowledge to it. Expressive lines. Colorful, thoughtful. I liked your placing an explanation in the description, it helped me understand the poem. Great.
Many sure-fire lines give this a cognizant, contemplation and very
wise in nature, it catapults us through "the ordinary man" with great
caution and exciting moments which live for him. I liked each line,
savoured your "dreams" and really liked the line:
Through these journeys I am humbled.
I feel humbled too. Your poem took me through a grand kaleidoscopic
set of stanzas I have yet to realize. Best Regards.
Irony, valuable quotes, it's got alot. The humor seeps through and we are taken on the "road". Nicely done. We have everything here to expect and then that last line searching for the truth. Like it. It's a valuable lesson. Family matters. Best Regards.
I'll settle with the fact that it is a great poem. It has the finality of death mixed with the curse of it, I guess. I liked your deep sense of motivating the reader to discover this place in New Orleans and the title is wonderful. It's a colorful type of piece. Note: (Watch lineage.)
Good read.
I like the time-zone in this poem. You are motioning us through it like a guide with a tour. This moves it quickly and several times you ask yourself where is this diner?, as if, sounds hot. I thought it had alot of merit. The best things about your poems are free. Life?
Best Regards.
Appears to be a perfect sunset at "Cafe DuMond". Good lines through the entire poem make it complete, a real slice of life as a traveling poem, and a satisfying adventure for the reader. I liked the existence of placing quotes in the poem, this was choicy. Unforgettable.
Excellent little piece. I liked your autobiographical style and the candid remarks that measure up to a solid one. You give us the lowdown on history about Quoddy Head, and that's nice. I bet it has lots of history to it as you say. Close into Canadian waters. I liked your "old hand knitted fishing sweater", details like this give this piece quixotic design for us to amaze ourselves with. Good one again. Best Regards.
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Excellent info about yourself. You ought to be proud to carry that wallet. It's a real good thin'. These incidentals are nice in a Portfolio, they enhance it. You have introduced yourself, what else is there to say here, you know? Liked. Good read. Best Regards.
Just a perfect talking poem. I love this. You have great lines, and the warmth you show in the poem is apparent. Your travels appear to be many, and going to Spain appears to be no different.
Yes, the formula you used, an acrostic, was a success! Your opinion and attitude are interesting and very trustworthy which gives the reader something to believe in.
Favorite lines: Leaders have come and gone since
and then followed by Still my mind is there now,
Spanish places, faces, and us together
Good job! Best Regards.
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