Well done, you have a good flow with long poems and that's good. In my opinion. And she made sure he'd never cheat again. It happens sometimes! Good Read!
Hello Fyn,
I found this in the editors picks. I'm very happy I did.
This is a nicely done story poem. Mr. Angelino the wood carver gives the story history from long ago. And you created a delightful ending. Loved it!
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I came upon this in the editors picks and found this to be quite different, and this different is good. I enjoyed the part where there was a desperate man in need and his needs were fulfilled,and witnessed by two children, a brother and sister. It brought out the meaning of Christmas in a different way. Well done.
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I really enjoyed reading this. Naturally, all of it looks well done. Nice flow to the story Hoovise.
I did something like this because of a boy pulling my hair, but that wasn't until 6th grade. And I kicked his butt, in front of everyone.
You need a shirt that says;
"Don't Make Me turn Green.
You Wouldn't Like Me If I Were Green!" lol
They're are many people on this earth that can comprehend to these words in your poem. It has a good flow and rhymes well. It is like a prayer to God.
Good Read!
I enjoyed the memories looked upon with each ornament, before it was placed on the tree. Your separation of paragraphs is done nicely. Not to many , just enough. I like how you incorporate
everywhere and everything you did, and made memories of them to share all year through again and again in the form of a Christmas Ornament.
While I was browsing for reading material, I came upon this Very Funny Story!
I was laughing as I read, thinking to myself exactly how this was happening in your back seat. I chuckled so hard I almost wet my pants.. Thanks for making me smile.. lol
Good Read! Ha, ha ,ha..
This is a non-intentional funny story. I would be embarrassed if I were Pretty the cashier.
Sometimes you have to do what you have to do to get it done! Right?
I really enjoyed reading this nice poem. Your structure was done well. Your flow with the words is good. Your rhyming, is nice and easy to follow with. The poem you tell is a dog that has two names and can't figure out why the people do that.. It's confusing, I would think.! A good read!
Dear Story Mistress.
This "Comment-In-A-Box" sounds like it will be more 'user friendly.'
I look forward to the rating system.
Have a Merry Christmas and A Bright Beautiful Happy New Year...
"2016" I pray will be one of my best writing years. God Bless the little children of the world...
Welcome to WDC Conwritedd. Your story tell me of a disappointed man. Co-workers making fun of him leaves him uneasy and then he has to deal with his wife's criticism because of his lack in helping her with duties needing to be done on a daily basis. As I read, I understand your meaning of this story.
You mentioned you need help with your English. I did see several mistakes, but I still understood your point. To help you to better your writings read others here at WDC who have badges, awards, five stars on a piece written. It means that that writer has done a good job in wording and grammar along with punctuation. Remember to space once after every comma used, and try not to use them too much. At the beginning of any new sentence space as you would a comma. Some require a double spacing. If your writing appears too close it makes it hard to read clearly and it will help you see any mistakes along the way.
One more word of advice, read, read, read and read again if you need to until you feel it sounds right or close to being right. Keep up the good work at writing, never give up if it is something you really enjoy doing. It took me five years to write a child's story. So be patient, and get a dictionary app that offers several spellings to be more correct. Check for the meanings to. The English language is the hardest to learn. Good luck!
This is a powerful story of bulling. You made a very good point about how mean some kids can be because your different and poor. And those are the one's being bullied. I found no errors in this story.
It is just sad that it is too true to some unfortunate child. Terry had a talent and it was taken from her. Well done on writing this short story. I hope this will open the eyes of other readers, especially teens. Help those in need, because you just never know what could happen tomorrow.
Good Read!
This is an adorable little story about a mouse looking for a Christmas gift in the city. I seen no errors in grammar or anything else. It did have a great moral to it. That kindness can be found in some of the worst places. I envisioned every word.
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I really liked the point you're making in this poem. The sadness it contains. From the eyes of the dying.
Well done!
I did notice a few misspelled words, but in some country's it is the right spelling if this is so disregard my corrections if they do not apply..
you wrote: There is still (halve) of my drink left. correction is; (half)
you wrote: My spirit (toke) his bag and gave a kiss. correction is; (took)
you wrote: My hand fell (of) bed. correction is; (off the) or/ (off)
you wrote: What a (racket) broke out my room. correction is: (ruckus)
you wrote: My father (shacked) my hand with tears. correction is: (shook)
Good Read! Just needs a bit of fixing, in my opinion only.
Bravo! Dreamwell, with this poem of truth. Every word of it I felt the point of it crush my heart, only to be again needed and loved once more. Well Done!
I know someone, who it reads as if it were her, life.
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Another short story done W.D. Wilcox. As I read chills began to run through my body in hopes Tom get's out safely. I love happy endings and you provided that here. Well written.
Good Read!
This should be posted in every high school across the country for inspiration to be the best you can be.
Well done with truth in your words. Good Read!
I was wondering what kind of disease you were talking about that consumes from within and kills some but not others, until your ending made complete sense. I agree with every word you wrote. It couldn't be more TRUE. Only each and everyone on earth has the power to change and heal if they so choose.
well written and full of real meaning. Good Read! Oldwarrior. I pray this opens the eyes many.
This nice short story has excitement, sadness and adds a happy ending. One, I wish for all family's who receives a letter of your loved one in, M.I.A.
I felt it needed just a little more show of expression's with = ! points when Shala spoke. Pther than that, I saw no mistakes.
My opinion only. Still a good story. I love happy endings too.
Good Read!
That was an interesting and different read. Good flow with rhyming words and it details the anxiety of a baby bird who can't wait to fly. Very cute with an easy read for a young child to not be so anxious, because bad things can happen. It teaches; patients is a virtue.
Good Read!
This is a good beginning readers story, with a moral to keep your promises rather than to break a promise and cause the mother to worry. I found only one grammar mistake.
You wrote: All of (the) sudden Bobbie smelled something.
It should say: All of (a) sudden Bobbie smelled something.
Other than that you done well on this.
Good read!
Wonderfully written! I feel the same as your poem words, and all. All that will remain when my time is over. A gift to share with generations to come. Good Read!
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