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Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo displays a sunset over water.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the picture, tapping into hidden stories/people and inspiring the reader to remember them.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the picture evokes memories of the past.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which does not follow a 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I would suggest tightening up the poem to reflect a 5-7-5 traditional syllable pattern of a haiku. I love how the picture and poem compliment each other and inspire the reader to go deeper into the meaning. The poem/picture evoke a sense of peace. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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Review of Antheraea  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo is a moth against a ruler.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the disturbing picture, as it explains how the moth got there and evokes the immediate feelings of the viewer.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

This picture invoked an instant reaction from me. "eewww." It's a very powerful picture that says "look at me."

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The picture grabs your attention and the poem adds depth. Well done. The poem/picture evokes emotional disgust and well, I think we'd all be freaked out seeing that moth. I also like how the title, which is strange, (it's the name of the moth) plays right into the dynamic of the picture and poem. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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Review of Fyn Wave  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo shows a whole showing off it's flipper.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the playful picture, evoking a sense of reverence and respect as the whale says "hello."

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The concept and the lighthearted word play. I enjoyed the sense of awe the author invoked with the words.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. I love how the picture and poem compliment each other. The poem/picture evoke good vibes with a lighthearted beat. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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Review of Jumping Dolphins  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo is a playful one, showing dolphins jumping out of the water.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the picture. It's nice to see the dolphins enjoying themselves and bringing happiness to others.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The photo is very vibrant and expressive.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I like the picture, but I would would like to see the poem do more than describe what the dolphins are doing, maybe tap into the emotional response of the picture such as fun, vibrant, playful. The poem/picture evoke good feelings. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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Review of Leaving  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo highlights a sunflower surrounded by autumn foliage.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a perfect compliment to the autumn picture, as old becomes new giving into what nature wants.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The concept. Nice word play about old and new.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. I love how the picture and poem compliment each other and inspire the reader to go deeper into the meaning. The poem/picture make the reader think about nature's cycle, and even deeper, our own. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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Review of PINK AND BLUE  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

This is a nature photo taken "upward" to reveal the skies. Trees are witnessing the sunset.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the picture. As nature bares witness to God's work.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoy nature photos and I liked how this one tied into God's wonderful work on Earth.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which does not follow the 5-7-5 syllable pattern. The pattern here is 5-10-6.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

My only suggestion is to work on the 5-7-5 syllable scheme. The poem/picture evoke a feeling of wonder. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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Review of Once More Now  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Dylan and his invisible friend make pub night interesting.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked what happened to Annie. Poor thing. It made me chuckle.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omnicient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

This was a dialogue challenge so the dialogue drives the story. The dialogue is conversational and engages the reader.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

It's hard to fit descriptions into dialogue, so I would say good use of trageted sentences to dribble in the description of the Pub

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting, Irish Pub

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Annie, Dylan, Unnamed friend

There's enough here to understand all their motivations. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/puncutation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. This was a challenging contest and the author did a great job with it. The dialogue felt natural to the Irish and there was a solid story that weaved in Irish lore. I like how the unnamed friend was implied to be a Leprechaun. It made me think as a reader. I had to read it a second time to make sure I didn't miss anything. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

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Review by StephB
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

THREE SCORE AND TEN
The blog was active SEP-DEC 2020. The blog focused on biographical entries.

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

Each day was something new and I liked reading about Luna and Biscuit.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. I liked how the entries took on a conversational tone.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had nice focus on biographical content. All the blog entries I reviewed were spot on - not too little, not too much.

*Star*VARIETY

Discussions were varied and well thought out. The theme of the blog, "biographical" tied all posts together.

*Star* ACTIVITY

Posts were hit and miss. Some had good engagement, some had none. I would have liked to have seen only because it was an interesting. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The introduction frames the theme of the blog well so you know what to expect.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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for entry "Anxiety Fest
Review by StephB
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

THE DEFINATION OF INSANITY
The blog was active 8 out of 12 months in 2020. The blog focused on a WDC prompt, "30 Day Blogging Challenge."

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

The replies to the prompts were very oringal and well thought out.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. I liked how the mechanics made the blog easy to read. I also liked how the entries took on a conversational tone.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had nice focus on the "30 Day Blogging Challenge." The content on all the blog entries I felt was a little short, but that didn't take away from people interacting, and if anything, it showed less is more.

*Star*VARIETY

In regards to the prompt content, discussions were varied and well thought out. The theme of the blog, "personal" tied all posts together.

*Star* ACTIVITY

There was good engagment on the posts. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The introduction could define the theme a tad more.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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for entry "Coffee and Philosophy
Review by StephB
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

WRITINGS IN THE SAND
The blog was active about 6 months out of the year in 2020. The blog focused on personal/entertainment type musings from the author. Any posts having to do with Coffee *CoffeeBl* was a big hit with me.

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

I liked the every day musings. It allowed readers to connect to the blog.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. I liked how the entries took on a conversational tone.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had nice focus on personal, whimsical thoughts. The content on all the blog entries I reviewed was spot on - not too little, not too much.

*Star*VARIETY

Discussions were varied and well thought out. The theme of the blog, "emotional/personal" tied all posts together.

*Star* ACTIVITY

There was good engagment on the posts. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The introduction establishes a theme, but I might suggest using a graphic to lure more readers in.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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Review by StephB
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

THE ART OF PYSCHO THERAPY
The blog was active every month in 2020 except Jan. The blog focused a storyteller, "Muzzy" and day-to-day thoughts on society, with a comedic/erotic/spiritual theme.

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

I liked the originality of Muzzy. Muzzy has some friends, like Zach, Tulip and Aubrey Plaza. It's a very unique world Muzzy lives in.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. I liked how the entries took on a conversational tone.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS


The focus was consistently on Muzzy throughout. The content on all the blog entries I reviewed was spot on - not too little, not too much.

*Star*VARIETY

I liked the reflection question at the end; that usually brought the vignette into focus. There was a nice of variety of several themes.

*Star* ACTIVITY

There was no engagment. I don't think the blog was set up for it. There were 10 ratings so it does have engagement there. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is intriguing, but the introduction could benefit from a graphic or WDC ML to draw more attention.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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Review of Complex Numbers  
for entry "Got Muffin
Review by StephB
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

COMPLEX NUMBERS
The blog was active every month in 2020. The blog focused on a WDC prompt, "30 Day Blogging Challenge."

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

The replies to the prompts were very oringal and well thought out. I like the use of videos to frame some of the posts.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. I liked how the mechanics made the blog easy to read, and I like how the tone took on a conversational tone.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had nice focus on the "30 Day Blogging Challenge." The content on all the blog entries I reviewed was spot on - not too little, not too much.

*Star*VARIETY

In regards to the prompt content, Discussions were varied and well thought out. The theme of the blog, "personal" tied all posts together.

*Star* ACTIVITY

There was good engagment on the posts. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The introduction gives a shout to complex numbers and highlights the Merit Badges the blog has earned.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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for entry "Psalm 3:1-3, 8
Review by StephB
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

THESE ARE MY JOT-TINGS PART 2
The blog was active all of 2020. The blog used WDC prompts, for example, ""Rhythm and Rhyme Challenge."

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

The replies to the prompts were very orginal and well thought out. I also liked how the author used different poetry forms from hiakus to sonnets.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. Good use of WDC ML.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had a fantastic focus on poetry. The content on all the blog entries I reviewed was spot on - not too little, not too much. I also liked their was a spiritual theme throughout. On several of the hiakus, I appreciated the nature theme.

*Star*VARIETY

In regards to the variety content, what I liked was the various forms of poetry the author used.

*Star*PARTING ACTIVITY

There wasn't as much activity/engagement which was a bit of bummer because the poetry was well written and engaging. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The introduction was engaging. Good use of graphics, WDC ML and inspirational quotes.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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Review by StephB
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

Mary's Golden Moment
The last month the Blog was active was July 2020 and it focused on a WDC Prompt contest.

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

The replies to the prompt were very oringal and well thought out.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. I liked how the mechanics took on a conversational tone.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had great focus on the WDC contest. I thought the contest was just right. There wasn't too little or too much.

*Star*VARIETY

In regards to the Prompt contest, there was a nice variety of prompts to work with and on the 30th I liked how it focused on picking your favorites.

*Star*PARTING ACTIVITY

There wasn't as much activity/engagement which was a bit of bummer because the posts were well written and engaging. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I might make the Introduction a bit more engaging by posting a graphic, using WDC ML, or definging a theme, for example, this blog will focus on... I would have liked to have seen more entries scattered throughout the year.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph
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Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (1.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2021. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

*PointRight* Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
*PointRight* Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
*PointRight* Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
*PointRight*This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2021! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
*PointRight* Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

*PointRight* A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

*Reading* THE POEM

Cupid is a bratty little jerk who wins again.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: UGLY. I especially liked: "Plus, what you, in your silly diaper, do is a farse."


*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem that has a ABAB rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Well done intentionally bad Cupid Slam. Great visual: "This little Cherbu, in saggy diapers, wins again..."

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2021 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (1.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2021. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

*PointRight* Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
*PointRight* Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
*PointRight* Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
*PointRight*This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2021! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
*PointRight* Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

*PointRight* A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

*Reading* THE POEM

Something happened to Cupid's bow so now it causes decay and darkness.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: UGLY. Cupid's good intentions have caused toxicity, decay, darkness and damning the lovers to hell and purgatory. That's rough.



*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem that doesn't have a rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

While intentionally bad, Cupid's slam seems to come off a bit misdirected at the couple and not on him.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2021 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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Review of Love Struck  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (1.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2021. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

*PointRight* Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
*PointRight* Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
*PointRight* Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
*PointRight*This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2021! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
*PointRight* Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

*PointRight* A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

*Reading* THE POEM

The woman telling the tale gives Cupid a taste of his own medicine.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: BAD. Cupid is either vindictive or stupid -- "We give each other no rest, slinging arrows at each other's breast."

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem that doesn't have a set rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

While intentionally bad, Cupid's slam seems to come off a bit easy. It's implied he's either stupid or vindictive but there's not a gritty visual to really sell the slam.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2021 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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Review of Cupid Plucks  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2021. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

*PointRight* Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
*PointRight* Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
*PointRight* Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
*PointRight*This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2021! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
*PointRight* Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

*PointRight* A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

*Reading* THE POEM

Cupid's arrow clearly wasn't tipped in St. Valentine's elixir because Beau can't get nowhere with Rose.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: BAD. Cupid plucks in vain.

I liked the story of Beau and Rose. This just wasn't their Valentine's Day.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with 8 two line stanzas. The lines in each stanza rhythm.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

While intentionally bad things happen to Beau, Cupid's slam (he plucks in vain) seems to come off a bit easy.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2021 Contest. Line count was not listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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Review of A letter to Cupid  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (1.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2021. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

*PointRight* Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
*PointRight* Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
*PointRight* Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
*PointRight*This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2021! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
*PointRight* Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

*PointRight* A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

*Reading* THE POEM

Who needs Cupid when you have Tinder?

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: UGLY. I especially liked: "So put on some clothes, don't flash your ass, go on a diet, at least show some class."

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with 2 stanzas and each line in the stanzas rythming.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Well done intentionally ugly Cupid's slam.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2021 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (1.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2021. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

*PointRight* Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
*PointRight* Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
*PointRight* Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
*PointRight*This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2021! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
*PointRight* Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

*PointRight* A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

*Reading* THE POEM

Cupid gets chewed out for his choice in "love interests."

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: BAD. Cupid missed and gets cussed out but we only hear his side of the conversation.

I liked the line: "The only thing you'll get is brown bows and rose rust."

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem that has a AABB rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

While intentionally bad, Cupid's slam seems a bit tame to me.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2021 Contest. Line count was not listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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Review of Pthhhh  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (1.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2021. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

*PointRight* Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
*PointRight* Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
*PointRight* Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
*PointRight*This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2021! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
*PointRight* Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

*PointRight* A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

*Reading* THE POEM

Cupid can't aim.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: BAD. Cupid missed and hit a "beast."

I liked how each stanza started with "Stupid Cupid." Nice repetition there.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem that doesn't have a rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

While intentionally bad, Cupid's slam seems to come off a bit easy.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2021 Contest. Line count was not listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: ASR | (1.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2021. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

*PointRight* Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
*PointRight* Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
*PointRight* Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
*PointRight*This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2021! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
*PointRight* Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

*PointRight* A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

*Reading* THE POEM

Cupid is looking for a place to take care of his personal business.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: UGLY. I especially liked: "He kinda looks like Mia Farrow."

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem that has an ABAB rythme scheme.

I liked how the poem was a dialogue between a Mom and her son.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Intentionally bad Cupid Slam.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2021 Contest. Line count was not listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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Review of Stupid Cupid  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2021. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

*PointRight* Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
*PointRight* Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
*PointRight* Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
*PointRight*This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2021! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
*PointRight* Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

*PointRight* A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

*Reading* THE POEM

Cupid tries 3 times to work his romantic magic, but alas, he's not very successful.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: GOOD. Just a "stupid Cupid" lament.


*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a 4 stanza poem with 4 lines. There is a AABB rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

While intentionally bad, Cupid's slam seems to come off a bit easy.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2021 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Princess Griselda desires to find her brother despite her world's cold challenges and evil wizards.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the opening. I thought it was very engaging.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person limited in Griselda's point of view. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Good job with dialogue tags.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes, but this is something that could be expanded on. I might tap into the five senses, especially smell and touch to heighten the descriptions of Griselda's world.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: unknown
PLACE: cold, rural setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader. Time really isn't essential to the broader context of the story.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Griscelda

There's enough here to understand her motivations, she stays true to wanting to find her brother. *Thumbsup* I thought the brother changed his motivations too quick at the end and it didn't feel natural to him, so I would on his character being a tad more consistent.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. You use exclaimation points a lot which makes the story feel a little melodramaic.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. Good imagination to create Griselda's fantasy world. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.

Glowing Steph

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Review of A Place to Hide  
Review by StephB
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

A child is looking for a kind face after escaping horror.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. It offered hope in the face of a tough situtation.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. I might suggest a line break between the 4th and 5th paragraphs when the character POV shifts.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's one line of dialogue which accents the narration. I might suggest using quotes=" and not ' for the dialogue.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: side of the road

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Josie

There's enough here to understand her motivations; she's looking for a safe haven. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I might suggest a minor edit for spelling and punctuation.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. A creative take on the picture prompt. A suspenseful vignette. Good luck in the contest.

Glowing Steph

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