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#4804512

Review of Account Anniversary Cnotes

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE CNOTES

A fun collection of cnotes that wish the receiver a Happy WDC Account Anniversary.

WHAT I LIKED

This has got to be one of my favorite collections. I love coming here and using the cards to wish someone a happy account anniversay.

ENGAGING

The cnote collection offers a lot of choices. Every card is fun and upbeat, just like a birthday should be.

AFFORDABLE

I thought the price point was affordable. Again, I use this collection a lot to wish community members a happy WDC Anniversary.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The introduction uses a ballon filled graphic which helps to set the tone/mood of the collection.

PARTING THOUGHTS

A fun, entertaining and lively set of cards! I highly recommend them.

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#4804511

Review of Painted Birthday Cards

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE CNOTES

A collection of vintage birthday cards.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the warmhearted messages each card had. It made each card endearing and special.

ENGAGING

The cnote collection offers a good amount of choices. There's a different thought for each card which made them unique.

AFFORDABLE

I thought the price point was affordable, making this collection a good choice for birthday cards.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The introduction uses a graphic which helps to set the tone/mood of the collection.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The look and feel of the cards capture a warmhearted feeling. Well done.

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#4804507

Review of HEART's Day CNotes

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE CNOTES

A nice collection of valentines cnotes.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the simple, sincere message of the notes.

ENGAGING

The cnote collection was very colorful and every note was well done.

AFFORDABLE

I thought the price point was a tad high but affordable. Would I send Webbie one? Yeah, I'd spend the extra GP's on it.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The introduction uses a graphic which helps to set the tone/mood of the collection.

PARTING THOUGHTS

A red and pink nest of valentine cnotes that is bound to warm the heart of the person receiving the missive!

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#4804505

Review of Talent Pond Nature Notes

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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THE CNOTES

A nice collection of flowers and uplifting notes.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the message of the Cnotes. Very uplifting and warm.

ENGAGING

The cnote collection offers a lot of choices. There's a different flower for a different message.

AFFORDABLE

I thought the price point was affordable. The collection helps to support various activities in the Talent Pond.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The introducation uses a graphic which helps to set the tone/mood of the collection.

PARTING THOUGHTS

A warmhearted nature themed collection. Well done.

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#4804307

Review of Love ain’t free.

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (2.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2025. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!

Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!

Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.

This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2025! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.

Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

THE POEM

Cupid ain't cheap and love ain't free.

WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
(you want ugly here)

SLAM: GOOD. I imagine flying overhead looking for a love sick fool with a lot of money.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with an ABAB rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

While kinda' bad, Cupid's slam could have been worse. That said, the poem has a point there are some money grubbers out there and Cupid don't care. The title does the poem proud.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2025 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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#4804301

Review of Cupid - The Arsonist

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (2.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2025. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!

Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!

Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.

This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2025! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.

Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

THE POEM

A long winded articulate diatribe of the havoc cupid brings.

WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
(you want ugly here)

SLAM: BAD. It's a pretty well worded persuasive argument of cupid's ruin. He crashes lovers, he laughs as the world burns, and he runs from the wreckage.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem that doesn't have a rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

While kinda' bad, Cupid's slam could have been worse. That said, wow, this is some intentionally bad yet articulate poetry which is no easy feat. The title is okay for the poem.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2025 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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#4804288

Review of Planet WIDE

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: 13+

| (1.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2025. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!

Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!

Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.

This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2025! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.

Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

THE POEM

Cupid hooked up Jupiter and Venus? Oy!

WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
(you want ugly here)

SLAM: GOOD. Cupid is the worst and if you can picture it "cupider."

What a visual - Jupiter and Venus and the jeans pool.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem that doesn't have a rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Cupid's slam could have been worse. That said, wow, this is some intentionally bad poetry which is no easy feat. The title is okay for the poem.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2025 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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#4803912

Review of Arrowing is Harrowing

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: ASR

| (2.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2025. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!

Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!

Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.

This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2025! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.

Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

THE POEM

Cupid should give it up and let the ppl do arranged marriages.

WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: BAD. Cupid is deranged.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with an ABAB rythme scheme in the 1st two stanzas and there are more rythmes in the additional paragraphs. The slam had a nice flow when read outloud.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make the slam easier to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

While bad, Cupid's slam could have been worse. The slam makes a great case for arranged marriages.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2025 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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#4803717

Review of Blame Cupid

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: ASR

| (3.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2025. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!

Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!

Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.

This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2025! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.

Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

THE POEM

There's a lot to blame Cupid for: cheap love, broken hearts, obsession, divorces, love gone wrong. Let's face it, he's a lil troublemaker.

WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: BAD. Cupid is that mostly naked perverted cherub.

I liked the repetition of "Blame Cupid."

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem that doesn't have a rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

While intentionally bad, it could be worse.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2025 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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#4803217

Review of Some Caring for Karen

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

A heartlfelt poem about the emotional meaning of friendship.

WHAT I LIKED

The author uses a good economy of words to communicate powerful emotion. The poem has a nice positive, uplifting voice.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is an interesting rythmym to the poem with a ME, ME, REST, ME on each stanza. What I liked about this is that you don't notice the scheme, at least I didn't, until I took a harder look.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Then came a soft song, a whisper to the fear in me." There's a lot of good strong emotion here. The song is one of hope that tugs at the fear. Nice expression in this description of how emotions can really play with us.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem, and adds a depth to the body of work as the name of the friend is never really revealed - and that too adds another depth, as the name of the friend is Karen. We all have an idea what a Karen is, a not so nice person, but here the poem shakes up that norm - or does it? Lots of food for thought in this succinct expression. Well done.

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#4803038

Review of Of Friends and Keyboards on WdC

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

A poem dedicated to friendship and WDC keyboard warriors.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the warmhearted tone of poem. I felt like I was true comrade in arms with the author here at WDC.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. With an AABBCC rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and colorize the poem.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "The keystrokes echo hopes and aspirations we hold dear," For me, the line speaks to the power of the words, especially here on WDC and how we can touch people in a positive way. WDC is about community, and at the core I think the community does share the same sentiment. The emotional vibe of the description is uplifting.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Nice expression.

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#4802754

Review of The Swings

Review by StephBee

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Rated: 13+

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THE STORY

In the 1950's a family goes to an amusement park, but something you don't expect happens to the narrator when they go on the swings.

WHAT I LIKED

There is a lyrical quality to the writing which held my attention. I was curious if it was because of a prompt, but the link was "invalid item."

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person by an unnamed narrator. Past tense is used in the story.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph draws you right into the story using a conversational tone of voice.

CHARACTERS

Our narrator appears to be just an ordinary an kid enjoying the swings - until they don't.

FLOW & PACING

I was right in the moment with the narrator. There's a solid beginning, a solid middle which amps the emotional investment, but the ending felt a little rushed and maybe that's what happens you end something so abruptly, there's that feeling of something left unfinished, though, it's pretty much finished.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font for the eyes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title is simple and fits the story. There appears to be a word count and the author uses a good economy of words to communicate the story in a very concise manner.

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#4802576

Review of A Fisherman's Tale

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

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THE POEM
A poem about a giant whale that finds a boat.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the adventure of the poem. I felt like I was a fly on the wall in the boat.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There was no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and tells a good story. Nice use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Then he slammed the hammer down on the water, and with a thunderous roar, freezing sprays rained down." This is an incredible visual which puts the reader right in the boat. It's easy to picture the hammer coming down. I can hear the massive splash and feel the water on the skin. That's 3 out of senses in one motion. Well done!

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening quietly draws the reader and then puts them in the middle of the action with little notice. Well done! The title fits the poem well.

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#4802364

Review of Wildfire

Review by StephBee

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Rated: ASR

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THE POEM

A graphic depiction of a firestorm that consumes a community.

WHAT I LIKED

This is a very visual poem that is easy to picture as you read it. It's a topical poem as a firestorm as such just destroyed the west side of Los Angeles. It's a bit of a different poem, more dark, more intense, more in your face. In that regard, it really displays a darker, more emotional range and depth.

STRUCTURE

This is a dinggedichedt style of poetry. I am not familiar with it, but the explanation is in a dropnote which is very helpful for the reader. There is no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to visualize.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Raining down from on high, Red specks scattered on roofs as infected." Vivid and harsh, it puts the reader on the outer perimeter of the firestorm and makes them feel uncomfortable watching the destruction.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening puts the reader in the moment, and keeps them there, much like a crowd that stops by and watches a building burn. The title fits the poem well. Vivid expression that makes the heart pound. Well done!

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#4802231

Review of First and Second Chance Poetry Contest

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

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THE FORUM/CONTEST

This forum hosts the

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contest. This is a poetry contest which solicits old or new items of poetry which have an awardicon or don't.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved how easy going and welcoming the introduction is. This contest is a great opportunity for members to share their poetry and get feedback. There's a nice conversational tone in the Introduction that lures a budding poet to take part.

THE RULES

The rules are clearly listed and easy to understand.

JUDGES

No judges are listed, so I'm assuming the Forum host is the judge.

PRIZES

Prizes are clearly listed. If anything, I might suggest creating a separate BITEM where previous winners are listed. I think it helps in establishing a proven history with the contest.

ENGAGING

I thought the contest was very active and there were ten entries for February so far.

VARIETY

With an open prompt, there's a lot of room for variety to include styles and themes.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. I liked the use of the graphic in the Introduction as it helps to set a nice tone for the contest. Good use of WDC ML as well.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I think it's a great contest and I would encourage more community members to enter. My suggestion would be to plug it a bit more - maybe on the newsfeed, and WDC plug page. I'll definitely give it a monthly plug on the Bee Hive. The awardicon is well earned!

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Review of Blue Ridge Mountains, High

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

A poem about the start of a camping trip and the excitement it brings.

WHAT I LIKED

I was never a big camper growing up, but when my boys did Boy scouts, we started to go camping as a family and honestly, it brought out a wonder in all of us - just being in nature and slowing down a bit. This poem captured those family feelings and moments perfectly!

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme. There is a prompt which is not to include the following: favorite, home, house, island, and vacation and the author does a great job with the prompt. In that regard, but not using those words, it's made the poem stronger.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. If anything, I might suggest using WDC ML to increase the font to make it easier to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "The thunderous roar of waterfalls, quiets and soothes my inner turmoil." There's two opposite things going on here, the roar of the waterfalls and how it soothes the soul. Oftentimes, just nature's uncertainty, tamed, will tap into a person's emotions with that sense of awe and wonder and have that effect. This description really gives the poem depth.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader, putting them in the moment, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. A poem like this, really says a lot with its honest, easy voice and it's ability to connect to those who have gone camping and appreciated the great outdoors. Nice, heartfelt expression.

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Review of My Thoughts

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

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THE MEMOIR

The author's reflections on life after coming out of the hospital.

WHAT I LIKED

Great voice. There's wonderful conversational tone in the prose/memoir that really connects with the reader.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by the author. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

THEME

For me, I picked out the theme of life cleansing as seen through the lens of the storms of life. We all have our storms in life. Some are rockier than others, but storms are here to teach us, to look at our foibles and ultimately, to make us stronger.

EMOTIONAL BEATS
Nice, honest emotional beat and reflections, especially around God and connecting that to nature.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader. While we never really find out what placed our author in the hospital, it's the reflection afterword that connects with readers. Written with an honesty and sincerity that touches the heartstrings. Positive and uplifting.

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#4801728

Review of Old T.V Shows

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE QUIZ

This is a quiz about old TV shows that ran from the 50's to the 70's.

WHAT I LIKED

What a fun quiz! It brought back many memories of classic shows. I did pretty good 16 out of 20 right.

ENGAGING

The quiz has 20 questions. The questions are succinct and if you've watched the shows, you'll know the answers. The questions aren't hard or stumpers.

VARIETY

Each question had 3 options for the answers. That's a good amount. It's not overwhelming.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic or giphy in the introduction to set the tone for the quiz, if doable. Maybe there's a video montage on YouTube with the intros you can link? This was a really fun quiz and I highly recommend spending some time with it!

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Review of Spring Word Search

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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THE WORD SEARCH

This word search has a spring theme, which is perfect for the upcoming season!

WHAT I LIKED

What a good time to put yourself in the mood for spring. Since it's winter, this word search gives me something to look forward to.

ENGAGING

The word search offers a lot of choices. If anything, I might suggest fluffing up the introduction with a graphic, giphy to establish the tone/mood of the word search.

VARIETY

There were a lot of spring items to search for. The puzzle was easy to moderate and a lot of fun.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

Just in time for spring which is right around the corner. This is a puzzle worth your time!

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Review of Autumn Quiz

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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THE QUIZ

This is a quiz about Autumn.

WHAT I LIKED

I like taking quizzes so I thought I'd check it out. The questions were easy and I liked that the multiple answers that were offered, between 3 and 4 were perfect!

ENGAGING

The quiz had ten questions. The questions stimulated the brain matter and I thought they were appropriate to the topic and theme of the quiz.

VARIETY

There were a lot of selections for answers.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic, a Robert Frost poem, or a giphy or even a YouTube video in the introduction to set the tone for the quiz, if doable. I thought the quiz was a lot of fun. I highly encourage to stop on by and try it out!

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Review of Oh My, Helene

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

A poem about the havoc that Helene would wreck in your life.

WHAT I LIKED

The poet seems as if they are a bystander, so maybe one of their friends was wrecked by Helene. Then again, she just might be a hurricane. I love how there's a double meaning here.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Here deluge of actions pours down around you, flooding your senses and drowning your emotions," I love the 'complicated' descriptions used in this poem! These descriptions can take you on a journey. Hurricane Helene wrecked the southeastern part of the USA last fall, but there are some girls that cause an equal amount damage should you choose to let them into your life. The descriptions are succinct and paint vivid pictures in the reader's mind.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening grabs the reader, plunks them down in the middle of chaos and expects them to walk out. The title fits the poem well. Excellent expression.

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Review of Life Giving Rains

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

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THE POEM

A poem dedicated nature, it's ebbs, it's flows, and the essence of life.

WHAT I LIKED

I could easily see the scene in front of me, the rain, and the Earth enjoying a delicious drink of water.

STRUCTURE

This is Japanese style of poetry called "Naga Uta." A description of the style of poetry is in a dropnote at the bottom.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Life giving rain falls on the thirsty ground below." I can see the action playing out, the rain storm, the ground soaking up the water. The description is vivid, but it also hints at emotion. That the Earth is being sated with the water and finding happiness from a cool drink, much like we do on a hot summer day. Nice depth with this description.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Vivid expression.

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Review of Escape

Review by StephBee

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

An introspective poem about the dark places of our minds.

WHAT I LIKED

A good succinct word choice leads to a strong voice throughout the poem.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no set rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I touch my cold fingertips, to the back of my sweaty neck."
This is a vivid description that one reading the poem can easily imagine, but it also draws well on emotions. How do you feel with cold fingertips and a sweaty neck? Uncomfortable? Uneasy? Well done.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening paints a vivid picture which engages the reader, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. The ending is different for all of us. Very expressive.

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