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#4850165

Review of Raggedy Ann and Andy  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 31, 2025 at 4:28pm

Length:   1,033 Characters | 905 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE WORD SEARCH This word search has a Raggedy Ann and Andy theme. WHAT I LIKED I liked the introduction and the offer of a merit badge (with a fee, just FYI). The introduction did a great job setting the theme and expectations of the puzzle. ENGAGING I was very engaged in finding the words. If you didn't know a lot about about these dolls, it just might pique your interest. VARIETY There were a lot of good choices that stayed on theme and over MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML in the introduction to enhance the presentation. PARTING THOUGHTS Overall, a fun puzzle! If you enjoy puzzles, you'll enjoy this one! A Bee Hive Review FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee

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#4849721

Review of TWO A.M.  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 28, 2025 at 6:18pm

Length:   1,663 Characters | 1,517 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem about Writing.com - it's pros and cons. WHAT I LIKED The poem shares a lot of heart about what it's like to be "present" at Writing.com. Written over 22 years ago, Writing.com really allows authors to explore different facets of writing, from flash fictions to novels, to poems. We've all been up late just getting one more poem up, one more review up, and even just organizing our ports. All pros. Our con is staying up to 2 a.m. when we should be in bed. STRUCTURE This is a poem with 9 quatrains and an AABB rythme scheme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to enhance the presentation. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "I often picture other writers, Gifted, clever and all-nighters;" This is easy enough to picture - a tired writer, eyes droopy and glassy, coffee or Red Bull at the ready (and maybe even a cigarette) yet totally focused on the screen or the pen and paper. The number one emotion that comes through for me is admiration for those who power through. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening invites the reader in and keeps them reading with it's catchy beat and with a subject we all can relate to. The title is a nice fit for the poem. A moving tribute to the staying power of Writing.com A Bee Hive Review FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee

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#4849244

Review of You owe your rights to Christianity  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 25, 2025 at 12:25pm

Length:   1,587 Characters | 1,358 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE ESSAY A look at human rights, freedom, and equality. WHAT I LIKED I thought this was a well reasoned, persuasive argument regarding the beginning of human rights and the concept of "all men are created equal." POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the third person omnisicent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. THEME The theme involved an examination of where human rights began. While the western words looks to writers like Voltaire and Locke, the author offers a concept which is a deeper one, coming from Christian roots and faith. EMOTIONAL BEATS How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? Great; Good; Okay. I think the writer gives the reader food for thought. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to stress points. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening paragraph invites the reader to consider the rhetorical question where does our human rights come from - it's not where you think it does. The ending is poignant and thought provoking and I hope gives the reader pause to think. A Bee Hive Review FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee

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#4848646

Review of 3i Atlas  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 20, 2025 at 6:49pm

Length:   1,557 Characters | 1,410 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY Ralph has the answer to 3iAtlas. WHAT I LIKED I loved the ending. It landed on the perfect comedic note! POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the 3rd person omnisicent. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUE The dialogue drives the narration. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph puts the reader in the heat of the action with Ralph's unkempt appearance. Something is going on and it's happening RIGHT NOW. Well done. CHARACTERS Ralph and Jeff. Ralph is all in on the 3iAtlas hype. Jeff, well maybe not so much. Reminded me of the two muppet judges/critics Statler and Waldof. FLOW & PACING The opening set up the problem, the middle hyped up the anticipation and the ending landed with a chuckle. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. PARTING THOUGHTS The title is representative of the story and reflective of the theme. Short sentences help to drive up the suspense. We're dying to know what Ralph is going to say. The ending is perfect. There's a lot of speculation out there about 3iAtlas - and honestly, it is what it is. Nothing wrong with having some fun with it. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4848189

Review of Happy Holidays 2025  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 17, 2025 at 6:09pm

Length:   1,023 Characters | 904 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE WORD SEARCH A word search inclusive of the holiday season. WHAT I LIKED The word search had a little something for everyone and I learned about Bodhi Day. I like learning about new things in a fun way. ENGAGING The word search was very engaging and it was fun to hunt down all the holiday words. VARIETY There were a lot of words used that did a good job capturing the theme of the puzzle. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS The introduction did a good job framing the expectations for the puzzle as well as explaining some lesser known events that occur during the holiday season. A delightful word search! An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4848056

Review of Tune In for Christmas  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 16, 2025 at 6:34pm

Length:   1,019 Characters | 898 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE WORD SEARCH This is a word search about the words we find in beloved Christmas/Holiday songs. WHAT I LIKED There was a nice selection of words that evoked some of my favorite Christmas songs. ENGAGING The puzzle is very engaging and it was fun to look for the words. VARIETY There were a 25 words in the puzzle and all the words used stayed authentic to the theme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Nice use of WDC ML to spruce up the introduction. PARTING THOUGHTS The introduction did a nice job establishing the theme of the puzzle. You can't help but hear holiday songs in your head as you do the puzzle. Nicely done. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4847930

Review of Catching October Love Notes  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Given:   Dec 15, 2025 at 8:40pm

Length:   1,345 Characters | 1,212 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM The poem captured the ambience of the season and wove in elements of budding romance effortlessly. WHAT I LIKED I felt like I was a leaf on a branch getting ready to fall, watching two people enjoy the nature walk. STRUCTURE This is a free form poem with no rythme scheme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font making the presentation visually appealing. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "With trembling hands, I caught love notes, dancing on the evening breeze," I really enjoyed this word play here. I have a sense of two young people walking hand and hand, smiling as they enjoy the breeze and the swirling notes of autumn around them. I felt a tad guilty peeking in on them. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening invites the reader for a barefoot walk and keeps them reading. The title is reflective of the poem. Excellent word play. I enjoyed the totality of the moment of the poem. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4847902

Review of Happenstance  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Dec 15, 2025 at 4:22pm

Length:   1,425 Characters | 1,286 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY Two strangers meet on a train and are surprised by that undefinable spark that passes between them. WHAT I LIKED I liked the ending. Just when you thought they were two strangers in the night, they turn around. Well done. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the 3rd person limited from CJ's perspective. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUE The dialogue accents the narration. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph establishes the setting and places the reader firmly in it with a bird's eye view for what is about to unfold. CHARACTERS CJ and Meghan. Each have their own paths so it's nice to see them cross and have them contemplate that crossing. It's what makes them human. FLOW & PACING The opening set up the situation, the middle deepened the characterization and the ending left the reader with hope. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS The title fits the story. A sweet vinyette of a happenstance encounter that could possibly lead to more. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4847700

Review of The Watch  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (4.0)

Given:   Dec 14, 2025 at 8:13am

Length:   1,174 Characters | 1,034 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY Tommy wants a new watch for Christmas. WHAT I LIKED I liked the ending. While sad, it gave Tommy a happy memory. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the 3rd person limited from Tommy's perspective. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUE The dialogue accents the narration. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph sets the scene in a dramatic fashion. CHARACTERS Tommy comes across as sincere and genuine young man and will resonate with readers. FLOW & PACING The opening set up the dilemma, and ending provided an adequate emotional conclusion. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS The title fits the story which is succinct and to the point. A heartbreaking story that will leave the reader misty eyed. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4847544

Review of Love’s Triumph - A Blessed Call  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Dec 13, 2025 at 2:15am

Length:   1,331 Characters | 1,201 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM Note: I found this poem on the Read and Review feature. A moment in time captured on a bleak day can still host a heart full of love. WHAT I LIKED I liked the message - even with storms, love can surge between gloomy clouds. STRUCTURE This is a poem with 3 quatrains and an AABB rythme scheme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: Certainly crisp like the earth's major storms - the wind persists challenged by dark eerie forms," For me, this was like taking the 40,000 foot view of life - envisioning a storm, that once over still lingers. Life is a lot of like that. Everyday life can be storm and it can linger which can be a bit sad if you think about it. Then the next line brings hope - "The life of love surges between gloomy clouds" PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening intrigues the reader and keeps them reading. The title is a good fit for the poem. A poignant read. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4847469

Review of Krampus` Naughty Christmastime.  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 12, 2025 at 10:44am

Length:   970 Characters | 852 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE WORD SEARCH A word search about Krampus who likes to chase naughty children at Christmas time. WHAT I LIKED It was a fun puzzle which reminded me not to be naughty at Christmas time. ENGAGING I was very engaged and didn't have any difficulty finding the words. VARIETY There were a lot of good word choices that reflected the theme of the word search. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS The introduction had a trailer link to Krampus the movie and set the tone/mood of the word search well. Overall, a fun search for this time of year for the spook in your house! A Bee Hive Review FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee

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#4847387

Review of Tetris-ctys  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 11, 2025 at 7:17pm

Length:   1,250 Characters | 1,117 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem about what happens when the Tetris doesn't make it. WHAT I LIKED I loved the vivid action which was portrayed using a good economy of words. STRUCTURE This is a tetractys poem with a link that explains the type. I hadn't seen it before so I learned something new. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "Quicker, more frenetic they start to fall." I read this line and felt rushed, danger, oh no! Yikes...! Sigh... Those blocks are falling and I failed to complete my mission. Well done, capturing the moment of excitement and disaster. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening paints a vivid of picture which invites the reader in. The title is a nice play on words reflecting the theme of the poem. I enjoyed learning about the form and how one can capture emotions using just the right words. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4847249

Review of Wonderland  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 10, 2025 at 5:17pm

Length:   1,440 Characters | 1,307 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM An intriguing poem with a haunting invitation. WHAT I LIKED I loved the imagery the poem evoked. I could picture, a curious little girl, debating in my mind if I should take up the invitation. STRUCTURE This is a kyrielle sonnet with structure explained as a footnote in the poem. This is very helpful, especially to newer community members or newer poets. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: Welcome to wondrous wonderland, Come deeper down the rabbit hole," I enjoyed the alliteration here using the "W" sound. When I read this I thought of place that's full of imagination. I guess the question is whose imagine. The invitation to go deeper rabbit hole plays the reader's curiosity well. Lots of good emotion here - #1 curiosity #2 daring #3 apprehension. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening invites the reader in with a warm welcome. The title is an appropriate fit for the poem. Nice beats, strong alliteration, spot on kyrielle - all solid techniques that make this poem shine. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4847142

Review of Born to Die  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 9, 2025 at 8:46pm

Length:   1,220 Characters | 1,087 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM Reflections of a solider in a war zone. WHAT I LIKED I liked the beat of the poem. The reflections were honest and sincere. STRUCTURE This is a poem with 6 couplets and each couplet rythmed. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "Tell my Sister not to be upset, Her Brother will not rise after this sunset" Initially, this rings rather folksy, as if the brother is trying to soften the blow. In that regard, the phrase hits emotionally. There will be sadness and angst regardless and the reader can be sad for the sister who won't see her brother again. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening beat and sentiment draws the reader in, though the poem is a bit of sad read. The title reflects the mood of the poem. The poem touches the heartstrings with it's somber topic. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4846967

Review of Inner Turmoil  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 8, 2025 at 3:47am

Length:   1,301 Characters | 1,167 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem that expresses caution about the unknown. WHAT I LIKED There's nice spiritual undertones in the poem that resonates with me as a reader. STRUCTURE This is a free poem with no apparent rythme scheme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "The Unknown is my helmsman, My deliverance!" There's a lot packed in this line. First, the unusual capitalization of Unknown. Taken in context with the rest of the poem, I personally interpreted the Divine, and if I do, then the rest of the line, rings poignant and true. There's a lot of reverence in the line, if read quickly, might be overlooked. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening evokes curiosity as the reader sails on a raft in the river of life. This curiosity keeps the reader invested. The title is reflective of the theme contained in the poem. A poignant poem that resonates with the soul. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4846917

Review of Our Silent Hero  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 7, 2025 at 5:43pm

Length:   1,389 Characters | 1,257 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM The poem shared a realistic look at war and how it can affect the psyche. WHAT I LIKED I liked how the poem told a story. There's a nice progression and growth that's outlined. STRUCTURE This is poem is reflective of an ode with a consistent AA rythme scheme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "For the strength of his soul that the world couldn’t drown." There's a lot of emotional depth in this description. This soul has grown, faced the adversary and stayed true to his believe. There's pride and emotional strength here. The descriptions in this poem are incredibly vivid and incredibly poignant. I might suggest submitting this poem to the Veterans Group for the monthly challenge. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening starts by setting the theme and mood of the poem in such a way it piques the reader's interest. The title is a nice fit for the poem. I enjoyed watching how the emotional strength of character led to hope. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4846749

Review of Simple Love  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (4.0)

Given:   Dec 6, 2025 at 6:11am

Length:   1,180 Characters | 1,047 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem about the power of love. WHAT I LIKED The example given really highlighted the theme of the poem which is "Simple Love." STRUCTURE This is free verse poem that starts and end with a couplet and the middle three stanzas are 4 lines each. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "I asked for pitter-patter raindrops. You’ve given me a cyclone," This a vivid description that describes how love can start off with small expectations and turn into a BIG result. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening starts off with an easy metaphor involving chewing gum and love - it doesn't let go. The reader would have to agree. The title is a good, reflective fit for the poem. An honest and easy reflection on love. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4846748

Review of The Flower and the Bee  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Dec 6, 2025 at 6:03am

Length:   1,148 Characters | 1,007 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem about a flower that longs to be pollinated. WHAT I LIKED I loved the story the poem told. It had it's ups and down, but did a great job portraying the circle of life and it left the reader feeling uplifted. STRUCTURE This is free verse poem with 40 lines. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "Grief will heal in time, Everyone was kind," This is a simple statement, but it packs an emotional punch and reminds us just how the circle of life touches our lives. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening starts off with the reader hoping the flower will find happiness and that keeps the reader reading. The title is a good, reflective fit for the poem. Poignant and full of heart. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4846708

Review of Bible Characters  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Dec 5, 2025 at 7:45pm

Length:   1,209 Characters | 1,091 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE CROSSWORD This crossword had a Biblical theme which is perfect for this time of year. WHAT I LIKED I liked that a good portion of the answers I didn't have to search for. When you know some/most of the answers it makes solving the crossword more fun. ENGAGING The crossword was very engaging. Some of the characters came right back to me, and some I did have to look up. In that regard, the crossword also proved educational and there's nothing better than fun learning. I think you retain it better. VARIETY There were a good variety of clues. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS The introduction was spot on and did a good job setting the theme of the crossword. The puzzle is a nice way to learn a little more about the Bible and it's stories and it's a nice compliment for this time of year. Well done! A Bee Hive Review FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee

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#4846030

Review of Remarkably Like Bananas 11/10 -953 Words  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Dec 1, 2025 at 6:11am

Length:   1,327 Characters | 1,204 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY A foreign exchange student writes home about her disastrous attempts at cooking. WHAT I LIKED I loved the comical elements of the story - cooking cultural foods were never easy, but Skylar is just not a whiz in the kitchen. POV NARRATION/TENSE Skylar's story is told in the form of a letter using the first person. Well done. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph intrigues the reader as Skylar implies she has found a new, more exotic playground in Moldova. CHARACTERS Skylar is a good natured person but cooking is not her forte. FLOW & PACING The letter starts off with Skylar going to a restaurant and then grows as she starts cooking. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. PARTING THOUGHTS The title has a comical fit to the story. The word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest. Skylar's adventures in the kitchen will make Mom, Dad, and the reader crack up!

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#4845747

Review of Life Goes On  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Nov 29, 2025 at 2:41pm

Length:   1,608 Characters | 1,480 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY A women who is getting more forgetful, shares something painful with her daughter. WHAT I LIKED The story taps into sad and heartbreaking emotions in a respectful way. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the 1st person by Marcie. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUE The dialogue accents the narration. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph paints the setting and then the next paragraph dives right into the crux of the story. CHARACTERS Marcie is an "everyday" character, a daughter, a mother we can all identify with. It's when her world is turned a bit upside down does she evaluate her life and choices. FLOW & PACING The opening set up the sets the scene, the middle sets up a frantic search and the ending leaves the reader to contemplate the what-if right along with Marcie. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. PARTING THOUGHTS The title fits the story. The story does a good addressing the prompt - a what-if life scenario we'll never know the answer to. It's a good story that resonates with a life lesson - consider your life choices. You might be surprised with the answer when you do. Overall, a story that tugs on the heartstrings. A Bee Hive Review FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee

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Review of Questions that keep me awake.  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Nov 28, 2025 at 11:17pm

Length:   503 Characters | 449 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. This is a poem that looks at the toll of mental health. It's never easy when one has a mental health issue. This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. I did not spot any spelling mistakes. The poem stirs the reader's emotions. A raw, poignant read. A Bee Hive Review FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee

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Review of Long ago  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Nov 27, 2025 at 5:18am

Length:   1,224 Characters | 1,117 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM I found this poem using the "Read and Review" feature. The poem about a time when life was simpler. WHAT I LIKED The poet did a good job capturing an old-timey mood and feel. STRUCTURE This is a poem with 2 quatrains and an ABAB rythme scheme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "In her garden, Sweet William flowers," This is a simple visual - where the reader is just taking in a visual of Grandma's flower garden, but flowers have a way of making a person smile and invoking feel good vibes. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening invites the reader in and teases them to find out what it was like "Long ago." The poem is easy and simple, but there's a lot of heartfelt family sentiment behind it. The poignant emotions the poem stirs leaves the reader in a good place. A feel good read! A Bee Hive Review FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee

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Review of The Visitor  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Nov 27, 2025 at 4:25am

Length:   1,324 Characters | 1,193 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY I found this story using the "Read and Review" feature. A spooky tale about a visitor looking for the jewels. WHAT I LIKED The author did a good job building a spooky mood and heightening suspense with short, concise sentences. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Past tense is used in the story. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph puts the reader in the height of action. The tension in the paragraph was thick and as a reader, I wanted to find out what was going to happen next. CHARACTERS Ther person hiding in the shadows was the main character and she had a secret. FLOW & PACING The opening began with good suspense, the middle grew the tension and end answered questions and asked new ones. Well done. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS The title fits the story, but is almost a bit generic. Overall, a suspenseful read. A Bee Hive Review FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee

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Review of Conversations with nature  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Nov 26, 2025 at 5:11am

Length:   1,321 Characters | 1,183 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM The poem paints a wonderful day of basking in a meadow and enjoying mother nature. WHAT I LIKED While not explicitly mentioned, I felt an undercurrent of spiritually behind the visuals, a relaxation, a meditation, a calmness that behind in the spirit brings. STRUCTURE This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "Today, the earth beneath her feet, rooted her in inner stillness," It's a strong visual, but there's a lot of quiet emotion, a calmness of being rooted (or grounded) and confident in that groundedness. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening invites the reader with a nice easy visual of a female enjoying the meadow around her. The title is very reflective of what to expect from the poem. The poet uses a good economy of words to paint vivid pictures and strike emotional beats. Well done. A Bee Hive Review FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee