| My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Eight cats and a human ponder the question, "Are our actions predetermined?"
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the creativity behind the story.
This is told in the 3rd person limited from the human's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
The prompt is to create a dialogue between the internal voice of a pet and their human. The human tries to figure out which of the cats turned on the AC.
There's enough to set the scenes. This can be a challenge because the descriptions need to organically fit the dialogue. What I liked is how the author used the actions of the cats throughout the day which allowed me, the reader, to picture what they were up to.
TIME: modern day
This is something that is clarified for the reader.
Human and the cats
There's a little snippet that features all the cats. There's Sammy, Nirvana, Jachin, Orion, Boaz, Xiaolong, Saith and Serendipity. All have their own unique personality. If anything I think the personality in the narration and not the dialogue.
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
The opening engages the reader. The cats (and human) tackle a really loaded question. A very entertaining vignette. Word count was not listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.