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Review of I Am Thankful For

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE POEM
A poem as seen through a toddler's eyes.

WHAT I LIKED

I really enjoyed the voice of the tone. The poet caught the simplicity of life at an early age.

STRUCTURE

This is poem with an AABBCCDD...etc rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice rhythm when read out loud. If anything, I might suggest using WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "'Cause veggies are gross and make my insides queasy." This honest sentiment made me laugh. Most toddlers share this feeling that veggies are gross, but I think it's the raw honesty that resonates with readers. Who has felt this way and held back from being honest because you don't want to hurt someone's feelings. Ah, conundrum when we grow up!

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader, putting them in the moment, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. I enjoyed the touch of honesty and smiles this poem brought.

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Review of Seasons

Review by StephBee

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

A poem that takes you on a journey through the seasons through lovers' eyes.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the progression of the seasons and how love grew throughout.

STRUCTURE

This is an english sonnet following the traditional ABAB CDCD EFEF GG rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to make it easer on the eyes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "In ample fields of fragrant grasses, Rainbow colors, nature's bedspread" What a rich description using a good economy of words to paint the picture. I can easily visual a field of grass with blooms, dandelions, poppies, a colorful flower array, and it sets a table of hope and anticipation.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader in with blooming flowers, and encourages them to keep to find out what happens next. The title fits the poem. Good beats and nice storytelling.

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#4810622

Review of Raised for Us

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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THE POEM

A poem that examines the Easter mystery.

WHAT I LIKED

The poem is very succinct and to the point.

STRUCTURE

This is a haiku that follows the 5/7/5 syllable pattern.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "death is defeated" This really is the

of the story when it comes to Easter. It's showing a new way forward.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is reflective of the poem, giving us a hint of what to expect. The topic matter gives the haiku depth. The revenant tone of the poem comes across which is no easy feat when words and syllables are limited. A great poem for the upcoming Easter season.

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#4810510

Review of Dickinson — Joyce duologue

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE CROSSWORD

A crossword about Emily Dickinson and James Joyce.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked that I could search the answers if I didn't know them.

ENGAGING

The crossword has a lot of easy questions if you know the subject matter. Still, it wasn't hard to look it up and I found I discovered stuff I didn't know.

VARIETY

There were a lot of questions that stirred the cobwebs.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

An intriguing introduction and offers up the biggest similarity between Emily and James. An entertaining crossword that's just as entertaining as Emily & James.

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#4810509

Review of My Favorite Musical Artists

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE CROSSWORD

A crossword about One Republic and Imagine Dragons.

WHAT I LIKED

That I could use a search engine to find some of the answers!

ENGAGING

I thought the crossword was very engaging and I wanted to find out the answers.

VARIETY

There were a lot of questions, and I think if you were familiar with these groups, you'd do very well.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I like that the basic facts to the groups were linked. I think it's very helpful in finding the answers if you didn't know the music or the groups very well. A fun crossword!

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#4810358

Review of Madness of March

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

This is an acrostic poem that takes a look of all the "fun" or madness that March brings.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the poem started with a gentle reminder of the "lion/lamb" proverb.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem that used "MADNESS OF MARCH." From Websters: a composition usually in verse in which sets of letters (such as the initial or final letters of the lines) taken in order form a word or phrase or a regular sequence of letters of the alphabet

The poem had a nice flow when read outloud.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to highlight the beginning letters.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Maybe luck will be with you," This line stuck out to me and made me think of St. Patrick's Day. St. Patrick's Day is a holiday that usually leaves a smile on one's face.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening invites the reader and dares them to read on to find out why March cannot make up it's mind. The poet uses a good economy of words to conjure up preciously the magic and madness March brings. Well done. Line count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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#4810067

Review of Madness of March

Review by StephBee

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

This is an acrostic poem with an "Alice in Wonderland" theme.

WHAT I LIKED

I really enjoyed the word play in the poem. The poem is imaginative and very creative.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem that used "MADNESS OF MARCH." From Websters: a composition usually in verse in which sets of letters (such as the initial or final letters of the lines) taken in order form a word or phrase or a regular sequence of letters of the alphabet

The poem was full of eclectic visuals.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to highlight the beginning letters.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Madly morphing magic mushrooms collide," I found this to be a very powerful visual. It's a great example of alleration using the "M" sound. I had a visual of Alice, lost in wonderland - a dreamland - that takes unexpected turns and it evokes an astonishment, apprehension, and dumbfoundry all at once.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening baits you in with that hare's mocking smile and takes you on a wild ride. The title is the acrostic. A creative take on what it's like to be Alice in Wonderland. Line count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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#4809677

Review of Madness on the Court

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

This is an acrostic poem with a March madness basketball theme.

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the imaginative take of the poem. I also liked that it was something a little different and I liked how it incorporated "sports" into the theme.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem that used "MADNESS OF MARCH." From Websters: a composition usually in verse in which sets of letters (such as the initial or final letters of the lines) taken in order form a word or phrase or a regular sequence of letters of the alphabet

There's an AA rythme that's scattered throughout the poem. The poem has a good flow when read outloud.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Aficionados raise in waves," The whole poem is a great visual of being in the stands at a basketball game and feeling the excitement as you watch the game. Here, I picture the crowd raising a cheer after a successful score. It captures a "feel-good" vibe.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

My suggestion might to be add a couple other genres - maybe "entertainment," "contest," or "action/adventure." The opening sets the tone for the poem with its simple description, and the reader wants to find out what will happen during the game. The title is a good riff off the "madness of march" acrostic prompt. A fun poem that puts the reader in the heat of the moment. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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Review of Naw-Rúz in the North

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

This is an acrostic poem with a "spring/new year" theme.

WHAT I LIKED

I learned something new with this poem "Naw-Ruz." I learned that Iranian people celebrate the new year with the spring equinox, but also, so do other Asian cultures. I love learning (even in my 50's) so I appreciated the opportunity this poem afforded.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem that used "MADNESS OF MARCH." From Websters: a composition usually in verse in which sets of letters (such as the initial or final letters of the lines) taken in order form a word or phrase or a regular sequence of letters of the alphabet

The lines are concise and to the point.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Clouds gaslighting our hope for daffodils," This is so March and the opening days of spring, as the weather is fickle and can't decide if it wants to be rainy and windy or mild and warm. Here, this description tells us, that spring's start isn't quite ready for the daffodils. The line evokes patience still even when patience is worn thin.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening sets the tone with simply "mud season." What is mud season? Dirty? Slick? Bogs one down? Mud season is madness. The title is original and fits the poem well. A very direct poem using a good economy of words to paint a dreary season during the madness of march. Line count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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#4809603

Review of Madness of March

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

This is an acrostic poem with a "spring" theme.

WHAT I LIKED

The poet uses a good economy of words to paint the progression of spring.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem that used "MADNESS OF MARCH." From Websters: a composition usually in verse in which sets of letters (such as the initial or final letters of the lines) taken in order form a word or phrase or a regular sequence of letters of the alphabet

I liked the ABAB rythme scheme, which is rare with an acrostic, and the poem had a nice flow when read outloud.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to highlight the beginning letters and increase the font.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "On Columbine and Queen Anne's lace," This line is simple, talking about flowers, but these flowers give away to spring and spring evokes smiles after a long, tiring winter.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening sets the tone for the poem with the melting snow and let's the reader anticipate the opening hints of spring. The title is the acrostic prompt. A fun poem that unveils springs as it comes. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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Review of Spring is on its way

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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THE POEM

This is an acrostic poem with a "spring" theme.

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed how the poem uncovered those little hints that spring was in the air!

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem that used "MADNESS OF MARCH." From Websters: a composition usually in verse in which sets of letters (such as the initial or final letters of the lines) taken in order form a word or phrase or a regular sequence of letters of the alphabet

I enjoyed the AABB rythme scheme, which is rare with an acrostic, and the poem had a nice flow when read outloud.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to highlight the beginning letters.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: For home and house spring cleaning," This line uses a good economy of words to describe the activity of spring. It's time to welcome the new and throw out the winter doldrums. It's a line that speaks to purposeful activity.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening sets the tone for the poem with it's implied anxious activity and lures the reader in to find out what's next. The title fits the poem and theme. A busy, motivated poem now that spring is here! Line count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

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Review of ROOTS & WINGS

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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THE BLOG

Roots and Wings is a food focused blog with several stick to your rib recipes.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the variety of recipes and little anecdotes the author shares. Total bummer about the hike for the Marsala. Marsala should not be that hard to find.

ENGAGING

The blog offers the reader a lot of yummy recipes and I think the pictures help to sell the selections!

VARIETY

There was a nice variety of recipes to include waffles, fruit pop bombs and meatball marsala. I would recommend bookmarking this blog and checking it out often just to see what recipes might be up next.

EXPRESSIVE

The blog was easy to read. The pictures really help sell the recipes.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm a bit more liberal.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The introduction sets up the intention and tone of the blog so the reader knows what to expect, but I might also suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set the "food" mood for your blog. What a yummy visit! Bon Appetite!

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Review of Lady Bee's cNote Hive

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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THE CNOTES

A nice mix of cnotes with a little bit of everything.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the mix. There's a little bit of everything in this collection.

ENGAGING

The Cnotes offers a lot of choices. There are 10 Cnotes. Some are centered on caring and kindness, there's one about valentine's day and one about celebrating your WDC birthday.

AFFORDABLE

The notes are very affordable from 350-500 GP's.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The introduction sets a nice tone/mood for the collection. It's a very sweet collection and at the price point, I would recommend these notes. This collection is worth a peek if you're thinking about sending a cnote.

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#4808970

Review of Bee~Worded

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

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THE WORD SEARCH

This is an "Everything about Bees" word search. Perfect for a lil bee like me!

WHAT I LIKED

There were a lot of things related to bees in this word search. I didn't know there were that many words!

ENGAGING

The word search offers a lot of choices. Personally some sounded gross but hey, if you think about it, bees are kinda gross. Any whoo, I found myself engaged and I would put this search at a "medium" to do. Words with "W", "Q" and "Z" are easier to find that you think!

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic or a giphy in the introduction to set the tone for the word search, if doable. Maybe a cute lil bee like me?

I thought the word search was a lot of fun.

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#4808583

Review of summertime blues

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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THE POEM

A poem about what gives one the summertime blues.

WHAT I LIKED

The poem is very succinct and to the point, yet very visual using a good economy of words.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Death valley temperatures," The line is short and direct, yet it invokes a lot of feeling. When one reads "death valley temperatures," hot comes to mind, and not just slight hot - hot to the point one is uncomfortable, sweating, with dry air in the lungs and not enough water.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening is barely enough to lure the reader in, but it is reflective of the nature of the poem - when it's hot, you don't want to do nothing but cool off. The title hints at the the emotional resonance of the poem. Direct expression, yet very visual.

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Review of Mirror Image

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

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THE POEM

A poem debates good vs evil and how it wars within ourselves.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the expression. It's not accusatory or demanding, but asks sincere, legitimate questions that only we can answer.

STRUCTURE

This is a rhyming poem with 3 stanzas and an AABB rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "As she sits upon the water, gazing, she begins to ponder," It's an easy visual, but it implies more with the invitation to ponder, suggesting it's easy to get lost in weighty thoughts.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening piques the reader's interest and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem and invites the reader to go a little deeper. Easy expression that invites introspection.

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#4808196

Review of Dear Me 2024 Version

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

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THE ESSAY

This is a motivational essay that sets the tone for author's writing goals in 2024. It also incorporates life goals such as health, financial, and travel.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the essay not only included reading and writing goals, but took a lifestyle approach to the yearly goals.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is written in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

GOAL SETTING

Personal goals were listed for 2024. There were a lot of goals which I thought was pretty ambitious.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening uses a conversational voice to lure the reader. The ending was very heartfelt. I hope you were able to accomplish a lot in 2024. This was a nicely balanced essay with clear goals.

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Review of There Lived Red Bud, A Magical Tree

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

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THE POEM

A poem about a girl and tree that grow up together.

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the reverence for nature that resonated throughout the poem.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I often times rested on the cool, soft, grassy bed," It's a nice, easy description that I can imagine, and it puts me in the moment. The poem is visually stimulating as it paints a picture of an easy friendship between the growing tree and young girl.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening teases the reader and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem. It's a very sweet poem with several positive notes including finding inspiration and respect for nature. Nice expression.

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Review of Hanging Sticky Flypaper Ribbons

Review by StephBee

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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THE POEM
A poem about how to use an instruction manual.

WHAT I LIKED

This was highly entertaining and comical!

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Sticky fly paper stuck, In her hair and wrapped around her fists" What a visual! Can I can only imagine fly paper stuck in one's hair - it must have been wild. This is someone who didn't read the instruction manual well and it makes the reader chuckle at the visual. Who hasn't read an instruction well?

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening interests the reader and keeps them reading, wanting to find out what will happen. The title is hilarious fit for the poem. Nice comedy.

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Review of Disposing of refrigeration units

Review by StephBee

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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THE POEM
A poem about how to get rid of your refrigerator the right way.

WHAT I LIKED

Great advice! It's well said and very succinct. Honestly, it's got to a be a challenge writing about getting rid of a refrigerator so this is pretty good.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Neglecting to do such a step, Has resulted in several deaths" This is a honest, in-your-face, what's going to happen and it evokes negative emotions so you better think twice before leaving your frig on the curb.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening interest the reader. The title fits the poem well. Honest and straight forward. It's not easy coming up with a poem about this topic, so well done!

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Review of Big Brother

Review by StephBee

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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THE POEM
A poem that takes a look at George Orwell's book, "1984."

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the heavy font subtly reinforced the theme of the poem and that was the losing of free will.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is an AABBCC rythme scheme in each stanza.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. It lulls you in much like 1984's television....

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Instead he is tortured and brainwashed until Big Brother has won by breaking his will." This description is direct and to the point. Our hero is tortured until his free will is broken. There's a heavy handedness to the tone and inflection of lines and embodies a 'hopelessness' that strikes harsh emotional chords. Well done.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening lures the reader in, much like the television in 1984 and keeps them reading. I like how the poem echoes the theme of the book with it's moody, heavy presentation. The title fits the poem well. Harsh expression well done.

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Review of Grief

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM
A poem about soothing hurts and finding hope.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the message - that even though things may be looking down, never underestimate the power of a hug.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font.

DESCRIPTIONS

This was really heart to choose, but I went with this description: "Eventually, the sands castle and the hurt becomes a heart full of pearls." I really took the analogy of the beach, with sand castles (things that can easily fall apart if the waves get to them) and the pearls (hugs) to heart. It's a beautiful analogy and tugs on the heartstrings. The word play is subtle, yet poignant.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader, and keeps them reading. The title is reflective of the poem. Poignant and hopeful.

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