|This is a review for "A Haunting Sweetness" from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"
A memory flies on a breeze in the middle of night.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the contrasts the poem uses. There's wisps, obsidian, hope; light to evoke memories, darkness to evoke apprenhension.
I could almost picture Dracula seducing a pretty young woman, and the poem would be from his point of view.
This is a free form poem. There's no apparent rythme scheme.
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is well presented and easy to read for the WDC audience.
Nice word play evokes visuals and emotions in the reader's mind. If anything, and this is minor, you might want to tap into the sense of smell to heighten the tension.
The poem is an easy read, but it gives the reader pause to think. Even in darkness, one can find hope on a the wisp of a vision. The poem evokes a night time setting and hints at worry, doubt and fear and yet it offers sliver of something else, possibly hope, with a vision that illumates the soul.
Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen