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#3642575

Review of Resolutions

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Resolutions"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about resolutions that is short concise and succinct; a chestnut with very nice humor that is so true. A skillfully crafted Than Bauk, perfect climbing rhyme and syllabic form.

Imagery:

Not applicable.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Internal rhyme is good; perfect execution of masculine rhyme (past, cast, last).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express that the best of intentions don't always hold true... especially when making a resolution.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice assonance and good consonance. Spelling: line two - heartfelt is one word. No punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
I like all the lines. The humor with punch line made me smile. Clever play on words.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3641986

Review of ~Velocity

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello StaiNed-House Targaryen

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "~Velocity"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

~Form/Style:
A good write about raging emotions. Heartfelt and introspective. A well crafted free verse acrostic which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid pictures in the many sides of your emotions that are seen through the lens of your feelings.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

~Rhyme:
Nice internal rhyme in line two (eagerly, me).

~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. You express the power of your feelings as they run through you at high velocity.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the period at the end of lines one, three, five and seven. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Licking and loving my terrified soul.
Opening my heart to invade ever more." - powerful expression of the feelings that causes the fear that runs through you.

~Overall:
Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3639306

Review of BEHIND CLOSED DOORS

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Oldwarrior

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Showering Acts of Joy Review"

I am reviewing your poem "BEHIND CLOSED DOORS"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your life that is heartfelt, introspective and uplifting. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy and that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your mind and heart, you paint a vivid picture of throwing away the bitterness of the old life as seen by closing those doors for good and seeking a new life through love that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: "closed the door on yesterday, and thrown away the key" - a good descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two (me, free) and nice internal rhyme in line four (threw, new)

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express with power a new lease on life as you are free to enjoy life and love as you seek a better life of happiness. I can relate to these thoughts well.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma in line two, it isn't needed and will make the flow and rhythm of the line even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"I’ve locked behind those bitter doors, a life of hurt and pain,
But since I threw away the key, I have new love to gain." - a beautiful statement of what you were able to change in your life that is deep with emotion giving you a new start in life and love.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3639300

Review of ONE DAY AN ANGEL

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello SHERRI GIBSON

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Showering Acts of Joy Review"

I am reviewing your poem "ONE DAY AN ANGEL"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about what it would be life to be an angel. Heartfelt, introspective and precious. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a beautiful picture of an angel, bright and shiny, filled with love, joy and happiness that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Very nice use of simile: "stars shine like diamonds" and wings "shimmer like the moon and stars above" - good descriptive/comparisons.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbccddeeff. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty of love that shines from the heart and the longing to sit by your mother that is touching to my heart. Delightful.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line one, change the period to a comma at the end of line three and change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line nine. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"One day I’ll be an angel, sitting by my mother.
I’ll know peace and happiness unlike any other." - a beautiful and powerful emotion expressed, driven by your love for your mother and the need to be once again by her side which will bring you peace and happiness.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3638643

Review of LED BY A STAR

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello SHERRI GIBSON

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Showering Acts of Joy Review"

I am reviewing your poem "LED BY A STAR"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your story poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and rendering of the Christmas story and birth of our Lord. A festive presentation. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the night of our Lord's birth that any reader (child or adult) can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm/cadence. Nice use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of simile: "mother looked like a queen" - good descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff gghh aaii. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your faith in God beautifully in this story poem of the Savior's birth.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the birth of the King. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"The star lit up the night.
The angels sang with sheer delight." - a beautiful description of the song of angels proclaiming the birth of our Savior--the light of faith.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3638625

Review of In My Hands..

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello StaiNed-House Targaryen

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "In My Hands.."

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

~Form/Style:
A good write about the power and feelings as seen in your hands that is heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic which I enjoy. Perfect form.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of feelings expressed through your hands that any reader can appreciate.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of you hands - emotion filled; they seek and yearn - nice descriptive/comparisons.

~Rhyme:
Not applicable.

~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion; you express the intensity of your feelings with power in this piece.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feelings about how you 'see' your hands. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts and make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following line(s):
"Yearning for something that cannot be touched" powerful... something needed that can't be touched, yet your hand yearns for it.

~Overall:
Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3634774

Review of Ain't she my kin

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello CREEK

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Ain't she my kin"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

~Form/Style:
A good write and message about the many faces of nature and her affect upon those in her domain. Thought provoking. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of nature, her power and care that any reader can appreciate.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Very good personification of Nature, her sustenance of those in her domain.

~Rhyme:
Not applicable.

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express how her being misused is slowly killing her and that we are the only ones who can stem the tide. Definitely a message that all of us should think about.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; strong use of repetition and questions for emphasis of feeling about the 'personhood' of Nature. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: line one should be 'created'; line four should be 'hugs' and line eight should be 'quenches'.

I especially like the following line(s):
"Ain’t she the one who sustains us all, though she is dying, after all?" - powerful closing line which sums up just how important Nature is to those who live within her boundaries.

~Overall:
Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3632137

Review of A Nursery Rhyme

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is a School Daze Poetry Contest Review"

Hello Liam

. Good day to you.

I am reviewing your poem "A Nursery Rhyme"

Title:

Not applicable.

Form/Style:

A good write about Miss Muffet's wish for a new diet. I like the humor of the piece. Clever word play. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of Miss Muffet as she tries a new diet, sharing it with her relations from other nursery rhyme characters.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a nice rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line throughout poem is a nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one of stanza one (Muffet, it); line three of stanza one (Mary, contrary); line one of stanza two (sham, lamb); line three of stanza two (full, wool); line one of stanza three (Muffet, it) and line three of stanza three (blind, find).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; good use of irony.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: should be 'Muffet' in line one of stanza one and line one of stanza three. No punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"So little Miss Muffit told Mary to stuff it
And returned to the curds and whey." - Miss Muffet expresses her displeasure well in these lines.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3632130

Review of Nursery Rhyme Contest

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (3.5)

. Good day to you.

I am reviewing your poem "Nursery Rhyme Contest"

Title:

"The Pieman and Simon" - a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A nice write about Simon's wish for dessert. Nicely crafted near rhyme poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of Simon as he hopes to get 'pie' from the man who sells it that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Nice use of rhyme and near rhyme.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express Simon's predicament of having no money to purchase 'sweets' from the pieman.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is nice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of conversation in your poem. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
"So Simon turned his pockets out and said,
"too bad for me."" - Simon expresses his lack of money with vividness. Good closing lines.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3628006

Review of A New Arrival

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello ChuChuRocker

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "A New Arrival"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the love you have for your unborn child that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your mind and heart, you paint a vivid picture of your love for your son before he was born that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbcc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in lines one and two (know, though); in line five (four, more, before) and line six (baby, we).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love for your unborn son beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of your love for your son. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. Spelling: in line one 'cannot' is one word. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to add a comma after too in line two and in line three change the period to a comma after dance. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Every time I move, we dance. Our hearts the only beat.
Every time you kick, I laugh. Your touch is such a treat." - lovely expression of your joy and loving bond with your unborn child that is powerful.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3626079

Review of Never Alone

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Grace

. Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your lyrics "Never Alone"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your lyrics.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about trusting in God and in His strength when you are feeling low. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted lyrics.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a picture of the storms in life that God will guide you through and that even in the dark, His light is there to carry you through.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of simile: you hear a whisper "it's like the wind" - very nice descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Your faith in God shines beautifully in this song. Melodic.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling of God's power and character. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following line(s):
"I'll always love you
I'll never leave you
I'll be there to guide you through this storm" - lovely expression of God's love for you. Powerful.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3615437

Review of INSATIABLE

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello iluvhorses

. Good day to you.

This review helps me recruit a creature to bring damage against the Green Witch

I am reviewing your poem "INSATIABLE"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about what it means to be insatiable that is short, concise and succinct. Clever word play. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the extremes of a person whose hungers are voracious.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of hungers: they roar - good descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbccddee. A good mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the power of these hungers and cravings that can take over one's life because they are always in search of more.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Seeking more
As hungers roar" - these lines define insatiable beautifully and powerfully.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3615435

Review of Trust In Him

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse

. Good day to you.

This review helps me recruit a creature to bring damage against the Green Witch

I am reviewing your poem "Trust In Him"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about God's love, grace and faithfulness to us. Heartfelt. Very nice concrete (shape) poem. A skillfully crafted blend of rhyme and free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of the Lord who gave His life for us, His gift to us of saving grace--His bride who forever trusts in Him.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme and rhyme scheme in first six lines is good; perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your testimony of your love and faith in God very well in this poem.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: check line four - 'upon' is one word. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the commas at the end of line two and eight. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"I trust in His way,
for He has saved me." - you express your faith and trust in the Lord well in these lines.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3615426

Review of Friendship

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello geographyangel

. Good day to you.

This review helps me recruit a creature to bring damage against the Green Witch

I am reviewing your poem "Friendship"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write that defines true friendship; heartfelt and warm. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poem which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a good picture of friendship that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: "pulling me through when the tide is high" - good descriptive/comparison of a friend helping you through troubles.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abbcddeff ghgh. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece (way,day; weak, seek; cry, high) and (sends, friends).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express what friendship means to you through good times and bad. I can relate.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. For example: place a comma at the end of line two and a semi-colon at the end of line three of your first stanza.

I especially like the following lines:
"Holding me up
When I am weak
Helping me find what I seek" - a beautiful description of a true friend that is powerful.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3612440

Review of Caffeine

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Helene - Missing being here!

. Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Caffeine"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a coffee connoisseur that is heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Senryu string. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your love for coffee from its scent and taste to how it makes you feel, morning or night that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: "mouthfuls of velvet" - good descriptive/comparison, unique.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the power of coffee drinking and the well being it gives to you beautifully in this piece. Nice aha moment in line three of your first and second senryus.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"warm liquid in porcelain
mouthfuls of velvet" - powerful and passionate expression of your love for coffee.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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Review of Witches

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Pammi

. Good day to you.

This review is made by the light of the moon as we prepare to do battle against the Green Witch

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I am reviewing your poem "Witches"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about witches and their evil spells through dark magic which defines their hideous character. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of witches as they weave their spells, in the dark of night and the fear they create in others that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbcc ddeeff gghhii. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Eerie and creepy. You express the darkness found within these witches and the fright they cast in the hearts of men.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the commas at the end of line one and three of the first verse; remove the comma at the end of line three in verse two and add a period to the end of line six in the second verse and remove the comma at the end of line three of the last verse. This will smooth out the rhythm and flow in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
With bony fingers that coil and twist,
to send their magic through the mist, - this captures the character and nuance of a witches enchantment and spell casting.

Overall:

Very good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of Transformation

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Karin Scholl

. Good day to you.

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I am reviewing your poem "Transformation"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write from the point of view of a human that transforms into a werewolf. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of the werewolf's eye, you paint a vivid picture of the life of a werewolf in the forest, hunting prey with his bloodlust that needs to be satiated that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jklk mnon pqrq siti. Every second/fourth line through each stanza is a nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings of the life of a werewolf, of the hunt and being part of a pack with power very well in this piece.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling of a werewolf's lot in life. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: line two of stanza three, third word should be 'turned' and in line four, first word should be 'they'. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"anything gets in my way
they soon will be dead" - powerful feelings about being the hunter that loves to kill its prey.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of Vampires of Twilight

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello ~twilight*starlight~

. Good day to you.

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I am reviewing your poem "Vampires of Twilight"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the lot in life of vampires. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming triplets that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of the senses, you paint a vivid picture of the life of vampires, how they live and sustain themselves condemned to walk the night through the ages as they watch those they love die that any reader commiserate with.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of time: it "flies" - nice descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme of the first two lines in each stanza that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the pain and sorrow felt by vampires locked into this immortality, hated by all as they seek redemption that will never come. Desolate.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition and conversation in a type of call and response for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the period at the end of line two in the second triplet; to remove the period from the end of line two of the fifth triplet and to change the period to a comma at the end of line two of both the sixth and seventh triplets. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion,

I especially like the following lines:
‘We are not but empty shells,
knowing full well that we are condemned to hell.
For life without rest is far worse than a life with an end.’ - a beautiful summation of how vampires feel about themselves that is powerful.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of Midnight Lover

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello KathrineOconner

. Good day to you.

This review is made by the light of the moon as we prepare to do battle against the Green Witch

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I am reviewing your poem "Midnight Lover"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and story poem about dark love and being turned by your lover into a vampire. A heartfelt fantasy of preternatural love. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Though the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of love with a creature of the night, his beauty and passion that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of shadows: the "dance across the windowsill" - good descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaa bcb def ghij kk. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your ardor for this vampire who comes to you each night as you become one with him in this dark romance and dance of love.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling of his love and beauty. Nice use of dialogue. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: line one of first stanza, 'windowsill' is one word. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the period and quotation marks from the end of line three in the fourth stanza and the quotation marks at the beginning of line four of the fourth stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"His skin is quite pale,
His teeth a little sharp,
But he is handsome, cunning, and smart." - lovely rhythm and character description in these lines.

Overall:

Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of The Vampire and the Wolves

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Shaara

. Good day to you.

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I am reviewing your poem "The Vampire and the Wolves"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about this meeting between vampire and wolves in the dead of night. Eerie. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this night under the moon as the sound of howling wolves permeates the air causing fear in the heart of this vampire who joined them in their 'night music' until the moon went down that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one of stanza one (midnight, white, light).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Haunting and melodious night sounds during this 'conversation' between vampire and beasts.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis a feeling. Very nice use of dialogue. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the period at the end of line three of stanza three. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"I heard terrible sounds through the foliage of trees
Which stopped my advance as my legs did a “freeze."" - powerful description of fear felt by the vampire that resulted in his inability to move... nicely done.

Overall:

Very good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3608543

Review of A Poem

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Jessi James

. Good day to you.

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I am reviewing your poem "A Poem"

Title:

Not applicable. Just a suggestion, it's alway good to title poetry.
You can always revise it at a later date if you're not satisfied with it.

Form/Style:

A good short write about two werewolves in a fight that is concise and succinct. Nicely crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this bout between to werewolves that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba. A nice mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the power and fierceness of this battle between werewolves well in this poem.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: line two, second word should be 'frightening'. No punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
"l know blood was gushing'
and bones crunching" - a powerful description of this bloody battle between these beasts.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of Vampire's Life

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello StalkingMeadow

. Good day to you.

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I am reviewing your poem "Vampire's Life"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the hunt of a vampire, his hunger and thirst. A well crafted blend of free verse and rhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this preternatural being, how he hunts at night to find sustenance for his bloodlust that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the unique rhyme scheme. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme: (moon, soon); (go, follow); (breeze, seize) and {strong, long). Well executed rhyming. Nice internal rhyme in line one of first couplet (night, daylight) and line two of the first couplet (hiding, rising).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; dark and eerie. You express the power of the 'hunger' and the urge to find prey very well in this piece.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of the suspense of the bloodlust. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a comma or semi-colon at the end of line two of your first couplet; a comma at the end of line seven and a period at the end of line nine. This will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"You awake and something's calling
You'll be out there soon." - very nice description of the need upon awakening to feed.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of Halloween Horror

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse

. Good day to you.

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I am reviewing your poem "Halloween Horror"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about halloween and trick or treat. An entertaining piece and a skillfully crafted free verse acrostic which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of Halloween with children dressed in their favorite costumes on this night of pretend that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the fun, excitement and amusement... a multitude of feelings on this special night each year. I can relate.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: check line four, should be 'very'. No punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"An amusing adventure as
Lively little children come and visit me" - a delightful description about the fun seen at your home on Halloween night.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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Review of Minute Acrostic

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello iluvhorses

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I am reviewing your poem "Minute Acrostic"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about life's moments that are heartwarming. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as is the descriptive. Through the lens of your heart you paint a picture of how endearing special moments can be in life that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the timelessness of endearments that are powerful memories in one's life.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; strong use of alliteration, good assonance with nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
I like the entire poem and all its lines.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of The Contours of Expression

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello NanoWriMo2018 Into the Earth

. Good day to you.

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I am reviewing your poem "The Contours of Expression"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your love for drawing that is heartfelt. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic that is short, concise and succinct. Very nice presentation... creative.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of your love of drawing, the movement of it that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express beautifully your love for drawing and how it is part of who you are.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Woven together
Inclines and slants
Nestled" - a beautiful way to express what it entails to draw.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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