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#3564376

Review of WEDDING BELLS

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "WEDDING BELLS"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a couple's wedding day that is short, concise and succinct. Very good use of the word list prompt. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this wedding in the autumn season that is an idyllic ceremony which any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Beautiful expression of their passion on this very special day in their lives.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion--for example, a comma at the end of line three and a period at the end of five--smooth's out the flow.

I especially like the following lines:
"Harvesting their love
In a garden of vows" - simply beautiful description of the importance of their vows expressed by their love.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3556573

Review of Synchronicity

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello JACE - House Targaryen

. Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Synchronicity"

Title:

A good title that is suitable for the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the harmony of true love in this relationship. Heartfelt and romantic. A skillfully crafted Lanturne String. Perfect 1 / 2 / 3 / 4 / 1 syllabic form. Each lanturne is able to stand on it own as well as being part of a whole.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of the bliss found in true love that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the passion and oneness in a loving relationship that is powerful and forever because your poem defines love in its different aspects.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in regards to love. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
"One
from two,
love's pure bliss," - expresses beautifully that two in love become one.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3553827

Review of Keep Your Head Up

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Keep Your Head Up"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about what you miss when you don't look up to see the creation God has made for you. Heartfelt and introspective. A lovely testimony and message of encouragement to others so they will see what you had missed for a time. Skillfully crafted free verse poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the heavens, its beauty and majesty that any reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: "Letting the pillows dance" - a very good descriptive/comparison of the fluffiness of clouds.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the awe and beauty of what God has planned, created and gifted you, as well as His love that you never saw and the sadness felt because you missed it. I think we can all relate to these thoughts and feelings.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. Just a note, in line six you should capitalize "His" because you are speaking of God's spirit. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, I would remove the period after sky in line eight. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"All this He did for me
that I may be happy.
All this He did for me,
but I never looked up." - Powerful, this feeling of awe for what He had done for you to make you happy, but you didn't experience it then, because you never looked up.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3553632

Review of COUNTING MY LOSSES

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "COUNTING MY LOSSES"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your relationship with God with the perspective that in Him you have lost nothing. Clever word play that is short, concise and succinct. Thoughtful.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your faith and testimony in a powerful way. I can relate.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of your faith in Him. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line one (need to remove one "I"). No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, remove the period at the end of lines two and three. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"For I still have Him.
And with Him, I have all." - a beautiful statement of faith in God.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3553623

Review of STARS

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "STARS"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about stars, how they shine until the sun rises. A well crafted Shadorma. Perfect 3 / 5 / 3 / 3 / 7 / 5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of shining stars at night and how their light fades as the sun rises that any reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express the beauty of starshine and the power of the sun as its light causes them to fade away until day is done.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: line five, should be"'til" and in line six, should be "its". Punctuation: no errors found.

I especially like the following line:
"'till the sun shines them away" - good descriptive of the sun's rays overpowering starshine.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3553616

Review of IDEAL

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "IDEAL"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the standard of excellence that allows one's creativity to soar. A well crafted Cinquain Swirl. Perfect 2 / 4 / 6 / 8 / 2 / 4 / 6 / 8 / 2 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the gracefulness of creative ingenuity which aids the imagination of a person to soar.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of subject. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the last three lines of your poem. You express the power of thought that brings a person to new heights.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3545830

Review of My Thoughts of ... Love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Mari ~

. Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "My Thoughts of ... Love"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about true love that is heartfelt and introspective. A well crafted free style metered rhyming poem which I enjoyed.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the rhyme scheme: aabc dd ee fff. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line eight (we, be).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express your thoughts about true love that is heartwarming.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about love. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Love is gorgeous and is free
Like we say, the best in life can be" - a beautiful thought and sentiment on true love.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3536528

Review of Love Daggers

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Farooq

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Love Daggers"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good dark write about the pain and sorrow of unrequited loved. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a dark picture of love unreturned as described by pain to the body: crying, tears, heartache, labored breath, etc. that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of pillow being "my witnesses" - nice descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You pour out your heart about these powerful feelings of love that are not being met which cause you unhappiness, feelings that are there that won't go away... moments of despair being separated from this person. Poignant with passion.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about love that is not returned. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: check line seventeen, should be 'groping'. Also, when writing poetry try not to use signs. I'd suggest that you change & to "and" in lines nine, sixteen and twenty-five.

I especially like the following line:
"My breath is labored, every movement an effort" - you express the depth of your feelings regarding this unrequited love.

Overall:

Deeply emotional. Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3529982

Review of The Untroubled Island

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Liam

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Showering Acts of Joy Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Untroubled Island"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about this mysterious island that also lives within you. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Spenserian Sonnet. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this special place where you visit in your dreams, a place of simplicity surrounded by the sea that is a world away and at the same time is buried deep within you giving you the rest you need.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Good meter and execution of iambic pentameter. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: "there's and island deep within my breast" - lovely descriptive of this place you hold dear, this place of rest where you go in your dreams.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab bcbc cdcd ee. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line three of stanza two (lovely, Innisfree).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express how much this place means to you, its magic, a place of rest that beckons to you; uplifting to one's spirit.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling, how clearly you see this place when you close your eyes. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
"Of mud-thatched huts built half a world apart
And turf-fires burned across the silver sea." - Vivid, a beautiful description of this island that means so much to you.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3525877

Review of Is God Proud Of Me?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Daizy May

. Good day to you.

"This is a Simply Positive Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your "Is God Proud Of Me?"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about God's love as seen through the eyes of love you have for your children. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a beautiful picture of your son and daughter that any reader can delight in.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccaa ddef. A good mix of near rhyme and near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in stanza one line four (she, me) and line four of stanza two (he, me).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express deeply, the love you have for your daughter and son; how proud you are of these gifts that God has given you and whether He looks at you with love and pride, that same love which He has planted in you. Thoughtful.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Then I wondered if my Father in Heaven,
The One by whom my children were given,
Looked at me as I looked at them," - Heartfelt and a thought provoking question of how God sees you.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3525238

Review of Tasting Memories

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello JACE - House Targaryen

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Tasting Memories"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the joy of cotton candy at an amusement park. Heartfelt. A good interpretation of the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted Rondelet. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptive. You paint a vivid picture of the joy, taste and sweetness of cotton candy (one of my favorite delights) that any reader can relate to.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: AbAabbA. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the love of this light and airy candy that brings such joy to children.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition which drives this poetic form. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"For candy of air our tongues play,
Flavor that melts and lasts all day." - a lovely way to express how this candy makes your mouth water.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3525224

Review of STARS AND GHOSTS

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello SHERRI GIBSON

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "STARS AND GHOSTS"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the healing power of star shine that helps you let go of painful memories. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint of vivid picture of the light of hope you get from shining stars that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the strength you get from star shine, how their shimmer wipes away ghosts of the past and they are no more. A hopeful and uplifting message.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to remove the comma at the end of line one of the first stanza and remove the comma at the end of line one of stanza two. This will make the flow and rhythm of these stanzas even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"The stars seemingly urge me to let go,
of the ghosts that hurt me so." - a lovely expression of hope and healing of star shine, a theme that is carried through throughout your poem.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3525182

Review of The Inner Child

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Feywriter

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Inner Child"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about one's inner child. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of the trusting nature of a child who sees beauty all around them.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express the traits of a child as seen through their innocence, joy, love and boldness in life, these things that somehow has been lost to many of us as we reach adulthood.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"always forgiving
seeing beauty
in everyone and everything" - a beautiful description of the inner character of a child who sees through the eyes of love.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3523276

Review of Hope as Rainbows

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello TM Crane

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Hope as Rainbows"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about hope and trust in God that is uplifting and encouraging. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice simile: "hope as a rainbow after the rain" - nice descriptive/comparison of the cleansing and healing trait of hope.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. A beautiful testimony of your faith in God whom you trust.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"No matter the situation or circumstance
God will make a way" - you express your faith in God beautifully in these lines.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3523247

Review of Embrace

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello . Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Embrace"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the power of an embrace as seen by a couple who deeply love each other. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of their emotions as they embrace the love they feel for each other.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Good use of simile: "anticipating the moment like prey" - very nice descriptive/comparison of his movement towards her... in love.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual. You express their love for each other, physically and emotionally with power in this piece.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Lovely use of contrast of their feelings, much like call and response. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines: there are so many.
"He whispered her name
Power and tenderness
Wordless demands." - I like the power of his love expressed for her in these lines.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of My Mother

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Liam

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "My Mother"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your mother. Heartfelt, introspective with a bit of humor. A well crafted Limerick. Good form and rhyme.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling, lilting and lighthearted. You express the love of you mother and her personality that brought you joy well in this poem.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about her. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a comma at the end of line two to slow down the flow of the piece which will make the rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"she never would miss
a chance at a kiss" - very good use of humor in these lines

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3516393

Review of Teach Me 14lines

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Yellow Rose

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Teach Me 14lines"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about teachable moments regarding true faith that is heartfelt and introspective. Thoughtful. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the unique rhyme scheme: abcb defe geef. Every second/fourth line in the first two stanzas and second/third line in the third stanza are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the willingness to be taught this vision, this faith and outlook in life so that you can share it with others.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling of this person's outlook you wish to share. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. Spelling: line two in stanza one, should be 'surround' and line three in stanza two, should be 'outlook'. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategic placement of commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Certain of your faith and outlook
Knowing peace is what you see" - simply beautiful statement about what faith gives one.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3516367

Review of One Belief Away

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello LdyPhoenix

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "One Belief Away"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about belief seen through faith, religion and hope. Heartfelt, introspective and thought provoking. Well crafted free verse triplets.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of faith as you see it as a high wire act without a net; as climbing mountain peaks without a harness, because it gives one wings to soar.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Good use of metaphor: it gives us "wings to fly" - good descriptive/comparison that defines the power of faith and religion - which guards against "the open box of the mind".

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express your conviction of faith and hope in a powerful way in this piece.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: at the end of line three of the first stanza there should be a period.

I especially like the following lines:
"For the believer, one searches for a higher purpose,
Connecting with the Creator's grace and love," - sums up the reason for faith in the believer.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3516361

Review of A Lil Wind Blew Today

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Sticktalker

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "A Lil Wind Blew Today"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a cool, windy, wintery day in springtime and the sprouting of your allergies. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of a cloudy, gray day in spring; you capture the sights and sounds of that windy day, paper flying through the air as the leaves are blown around on branches of trees that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling regarding this cold spring day with a bit of humor. A nice twist to the end of your poem as this season brings about much sneezing and sinus trouble, too. I have allergies, so I can relate to this.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. Nice internal rhyme in line two of the second verse (down, town). No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"The wind rose out of the north
Sweeping down upon my town" - a good description of this cold wind that swept upon your town that continues with the theme of your poem.

Overall:

Good closing lines. Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3515157

Review of After the Storm

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello SWPoet

. Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "After the Storm "

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the after affects of a powerful storm that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Naani. Perfect form: four lines with a 25 syllabic count.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the destructive power of a storm through the upheaval of trees from the roots, branches wind blown and the aftermath of color as nature works its healing balm.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express with power of hope after devastation; how those who survive, work to rebuild what was taken from them by a life-threatening storm.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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Review of Dandelion Blown

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Tina B

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Dandelion Blown"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about dandelion bits floating in air that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted haiku, perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptive. You paint a vivid snapshot of the 'rinds' of the dandelion floating through the air wherever the breeze takes them that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the beauty of its flight very well in this piece.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3513277

Review of End of Days

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Ken. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "End of Days"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation about this special relationship that is heartfelt and romantic. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poem which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a loving picture of these hands that have brought you comfort through the years that any reader can perceive in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb dede fghg ijkj. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the love, passion and strength of these hands that have cared for you through the years, feelings which you reciprocate, during the peaks and valleys of life. You are blessed.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling due to the touch of these hands. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"They've touched me gently in the night
and roused my inner passion." - Simply beautiful, the power of hands that touch you with love; passionate.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Earth Day

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello jaya

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Earth Day"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the importance of caring for the earth. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of the beauty of nature as is flourishes through its plant life and waters which any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of metaphor for earth as mother, a good descriptive comparison for her nurture.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdce fgfg hihi. A nice mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express your concern for the earth and our care for it. Moving. A message of importance for all mankind.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis on earth and her welfare. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, in stanza four line one I would change the period to a comma and remove the comma after "For" in line two. This would make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Let not those greedy hands loot
Nature, a great gift to you and me." - a lovely message and petition for us to treat the gift of Nature with care.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of True Friendship

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello warriormom. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "True Friendship"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about friendship that is heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Etheree. Perfect form. Nice shape.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as is the descriptive. You paint a lovely picture of dear friends being presents. A rare gift indeed.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: "Dear friends are rare and beautiful presents." - good descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express how true friendship are ties that can be even closer than those we have with our relatives very well in this piece. I'm sure that all readers can relate to this message about friendship.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about what makes up true friendship. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines: there are so many but I like these the best -
"No burden is too
small or too big to share." - this is very special indeed.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Stillness

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Daizy May

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Stillness"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about different ways to express stillness. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered couplets which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint vivid snapshots of different ways of stillness seen in nature: the quiet before a spring rain; a bird watching for its next meal, then swiftly darting after it, receiving its prize as well as the stillness in life: the quiet that comes after an embarrassing moment of rudeness and the stillness of a child lying in his mother's lap that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee ff. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express many forms of stillness, some a blessing, some disturbing; but the best is shown in the stillness of love.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, I would change the period at the end of lines one, three and seven to commas. This would make the flow and rhythm of these couplets even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"But the stillness that is best, the one I most enjoy;
Sitting on the couch, in my lap the head of my grown-up boy." - lovely expression of love between a mother and son.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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