ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3459106

Review of Complete Serenity

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about rediscovering yourself at this special place where you find serenity. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of your time at the beach, the soft sand beneath your feet and the saltiness of the ocean carried in the air; lovely 'snapshots' that any reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of the breeze and air: 'gently hints of secrets that she knows'; 'I lift my head to greet the salty kiss of the sultry summer air' - nice descriptive/comparisons.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the unique rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this poem (me, free; toes, knows; free, be, sultry; me, serenity).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express the peacefulness as the tides roll in and out bringing you bliss. I can relate to this serenity you feel.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3458468

Review of Awakening (Mirrored Acrostic Wk 1)

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Poetic Exploration

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about wisdom planted within from our Creator. Heartfelt, introspective and thought provoking. A well crafted mirror acrostic. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of various things that give wisdom, books or even looking into a mirror to really 'see' the light of Creator who plants this knowledge within us.

Flow and Rhythm

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'ancient seeds of wisdom' - nice descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Your faith shines in this piece which is thoughtful and encouraging.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

An inspirational piece with a lovely message. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3458334

Review of Up and Down

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Poetic Exploration

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about weight gain and loss. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Double Etheree written in free style rhyming poetry. Lovely shape; perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the yo-yo of weight gain and weight loss and the regimen of exercise to get this 'cycle' under control.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile about your weight: 'up and down, to and fro, bouncing like a little toy yo-yo.' A good descriptive comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a unique rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece (fro, yo-yo; too, do; thing, sing; main, gain).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your struggle with weight gain and loss powerfully in this poem. I like the humor and I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis on this 'merry-go-round' of weight loss and weight gain. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

You kept my attention from the beginning to the end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3457877

Review of Prophecy

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Poetic Exploration

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation from the perspective of nature seen through the eyes of a scarecrow. A skillfully crafted double nonet in free style metered rhyming poetry. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the eyes of the scarecrow the reader see the fields that are now bare at the change of season. He paints a picture of his decay as he stands in the heat and rain.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Good personification of the scarecrow, he contemplates; he worries about his clothing and body becoming tattered and becoming one with the earth.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece (air, bare; worn, torn; scattered, tattered; flow, go; time, climb; see, eternity).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling that comes through beautifully throughout the poem. A lovely expression of faith.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

You caught my attention from the first line to the last. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3457845

Review of In His Hands

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about what God will do for you if you give yourself into His care. Heartfelt, uplifting and encouraging. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the unique rhyme scheme. The last line of each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme (light, night; song, strong; eyes, prize). Perfect masculine internal rhyme in the second and third lines of each stanza (grow, show; use, choose; waste, taste; wear, bear; feed, exceed; heal, seal).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express how God calls to His children to come to Him and trust in Him. You express the love and care He gives to us if only we will reach out to Him. A beautiful and creative invitation to all of us.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

A beautiful message; from the first word to the last line you captured my attention. An inspirational piece that touches the heart. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3457745

Review of Morning Brew

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Poetic Exploration

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation about the importance of that first cup of coffee to start your day. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Cinquain that is short, concise and succinct. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. The reader can almost smell the aroma of this brewed coffee and the sweetness of the chocolate that brings one bliss.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You're readers definitely sense your love for coffee and how its taste satisfies you each morning.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3457264

Review of A Bond for Life

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Poetic Exploration

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation about the bond between mother and child. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted etheree. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of loving interaction between mother and child through the pleasure of sound.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling of love and care that comes through beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, consonance with nice assonance.

Overall:

This message of love between mother and child is true to the subject and is carried well throughout poem. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3456931

Review of First Kiss

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of this poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your first kiss. Heartfelt and passion filled. A skillfully crafted Nonet. Perfect form that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture, by a summer's breeze, that describes your first kiss.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I would change the period at the end of line three to a comma. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion comes through beautifully in this piece. Delightfully sensual as you express feeling the passion of love's first kiss.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

You caught my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3455459

Review of Winter's Touch

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write about snow fall; its beauty. Heartfelt, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a light snow fall, how the flakes are so delicate and melt as they touch your skin.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of snowflakes, how their embrace is a sensual sensation.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express how beautiful snow can be and how it brings solace to you and memories that are lasting.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

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#3455452

Review of As Yet

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about being alone. Heartfelt, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the stillness in being alone and its gloominess.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just one suggestion, you don't need the period at the end of line three. Punctuation isn't usually used in haiku/senryu.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express very well how you have dealt with being alone. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

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#3455446

Review of You

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about this special person in your life. Heartfelt and introspective. Good form and shape.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of your love for this person, how they brighten your day, from sunrise to sunset.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how important this person is to you and how it haunts you when they are away from you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

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#3455397

Review of Island Time

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Poetic Exploration

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation about island time. Heartfelt, excellent word play. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of 'island' leisure that any reader would understand and wish to partake in, a true getaway to uplift the spirit.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: time being your master. Nice simile - 'a bitter taste, like alkali' - good descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good and unique. Very good use of internal rhyme in first stanza: (eye, alibi; away, Calais; squeal, real; formula, insomnia; then, regimen) and in the second stanza (fact, transact; simplify, alkali; daydream, self-esteem; grime, time).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the need for quality relaxation that restores the spirit as experienced by island time. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3444118

Review of The Storm

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

MY PAPER DOLL GANG FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the storm and the maiden that makes music to it. Good interpretation of the picture prompt. A nice attempt at a Rispetto. Just a note, the rhyme scheme for the first stanza is abcb and should be abab.

Originality/Imagination:

An original piece that kept my attention throughout.

Content:

Content is good.

Flow/Rhythm/Rhyme:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Good meter. Iambic tetrameter is executed well in this piece. Very nice rhythm. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this poem.

Emotion/Depth of Feeling:

Good depth of feelings. You express how this maiden feels as she strums her lyre during a storm, singing a song of regret.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this maiden as she makes music during a song which any reader can see in their minds eye.

Alliteration/Assonance/Consonance:

Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; no spelling or punctuation errors.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.

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#3444098

Review of A Sirens’ Tale

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

MY PAPER DOLL GANG FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the lure of this siren to sailors. A well crafted story poem and good interpretation of the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted double Rispetto. Good form.

Originality/Imagination:

An original piece that captures the attention of the reader. You are a good storyteller.

Content:

Content is good.

Flow/Rhythm/Rhyme:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of iambic tetrameter although there are places where the stress points are a bit off. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Emotion/Depth of Feeling:

Good depth of feeling. You express how her song takes pulls the sailors and their ships off course as they are lost upon the seas.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptive. You paint a vivid picture of ships at sea and the call of the siren.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of metaphor: 'on tired timbers lost to time' - good descriptive/comparison.

Alliteration/Assonance/Consonance:

Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. No spelling errors. Just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Overall:

An entertaining piece. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.

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#3442560

Review of Writer's Block

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Heavenly Roses

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your love for writing, even when you don't seem to have the words or are in the midst of a drought in putting your thoughts to paper. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Decastich, perfect form in iambic tetrameter.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of how you see the will for writing (phrases that are knitted together; a rough road and a diamond in the rough).

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very good meter and very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice metaphor: words 'a miracle, a sudden diamond in the rough' - a good descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the importance of writing in your life and your pursuit of it even when the way is rough. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of your feelings about writing. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

You have a gift for words that is pleasing and is executed very well in this poem. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
A lovely gift from our dear Sonnetwolf

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#3433372

Review of A Penny Saved ...

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good story poem about Penny and her demise. Clever word play. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of Penny how she followed her hero around which was an irritation to him.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; tongue in cheek. I like the humor in this poem and the play on words in the last three lines.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis upon 'penny'. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Please note that all poems are limited to 16 lines, your poem is 20. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.
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#3433325

Review of Peter, Peter, pumpkin eater.

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about Peter the pumpkin eater carving a halloween pumpkin reaper. A fun read for children for this holiday. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect feminine rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You capture halloween as celebrated by Peter the pumpkin eater.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.
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#3433317

Review of Little Miss Muffett

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about Miss Muffet and her feelings about school. A poem any child would enjoy. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the action that any reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. I like the fun and humor of this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an entertaining read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.
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#3433096

Review of Portrait of Osceola

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official First People's Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write/conversation about this portrait, seen through eyes of the artist and a friend. Well crafted free verse. Nice interpretation of the picture prompt.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express the plight of the American Indian.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good dialogue.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.
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#3431105

Review of My Miracle

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and dedicatory piece to your beloved daughter. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'heart of gold'and 'my shining star' - good descriptive/comparisons about your daughter.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff ddgg hacc iijj kkll. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your love for your daughter shines brightly in this poem. She is indeed a special and wonderful caring friend to you. You are truly blessed by this bond that has grown stronger and deeper through the years.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3431048

Review of My One And Only Brother

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and loving tribute to your brother that is heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for your brother powerfully in this piece. Your reader's can see just how important he was as well as how his memory will forever be in your life, a true blessing even though his life was cut short. Your hope that one day you will be together again in heaven shines in this poem. My condolences in your loss.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of your feelings for your brother. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

A well penned dedicatory piece in honor of your brother and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of The Purpose of man

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about ones purpose and where it comes from. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cded fgfg hbib. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts of a man's purpose as seen through the lens of faith and trust in God.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of the life purpose of a man. Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of Retail hades

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about being a manager in the retail business and its affect upon 'your world' in the workforce. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your job which your readers see through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of metaphor: 'I clock in to oppression' and 'I crawl into my shell' - very good descriptive/comparisons on how you feel about your position in retail.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line throughout poem is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about your job, the people you work with and retail with humor.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of irony to express your feelings. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of This Walk Of Faith

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about ones faith in God. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of metaphor: doing right is a daily struggle, to 'keep your candle lit' - a good descriptive comparison of the flame of faith that keeps one on the right path.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Encouraging words of wisdom about faith that is uplifting and expresses the power of prayer and how God will work in your life if you will let Him.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, consonance with nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of Ardor

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about love and its passion that is short, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through what you see in nature, you paint a vivid picture of passionate love.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express love that has a depth and ardor that is scorching like the sun.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, consonance with nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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