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#3510199

Review of The Beast Within

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Alyssa Grace

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Beast Within"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about darkness that lurks deep within a person. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbccdd. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line eight (without, doubt).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the fear and horror of this ugliness and being consumed by it as it is released powerfully in this poem.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"I feel it building, feel it rising;
It is truly terrifying." - you express the fear and loss of control due to this darkness that is welling up from within which is about to erupt that you no longer will be able to hide with power by these words.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3509317

Review of Take Me, Oh Death!

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

HelloAlexandra Jones

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Take Me, Oh Death!"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

~Form/Style:
A good write about the person of Death. Heartfelt, introspective and thought provoking. A well crafted blend of free verse and rhyme.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of death in its pridefulness as it seeks its next victim that any reader can see in their mind's eye. You contrast his darkness with the truth of the light.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Good personification of Death: to "embrace me"; "stretch out your hand to me," and to "strut through lives full pomp and pride," - good descriptive/comparison of his human traits.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme: good use of masculine end line rhyme in the following lines - four and five of stanza two (dead, stead); lines one through four of stanza three (friend, end; out, doubt); line one through four of stanza four (embrace, face; day, say) and lines two and four of stanza five (light, sight).

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. Powerful. You express the darkness of death and how one quivers in its midst at the side of those loved who have passed that is also bound with a message of encouragement--death may take us, but we pass into the light and presence of God.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis a feeling about death. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a suggestion, I stumble with the rhythm in line one of your second stanza - if you add "of" before pomp, this will make the flow even better in my opinion. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines: (there are so many)
"For though most fear thee as the end,
'Tis only born of doubt." - I like the turn found in these lines where one comes to learn that there is nothing to fear of him and doubt can be fought with truth.

~Overall:
Excellent closing lines. Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3509090

Review of The Bequest

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Ken. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Bequest"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about renewal, planting new life, a lesson shared and passed down to family. Heartfelt. Nice presentation. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of giving back to the earth, as a family spends time together planting a tree--passing on this gift to a grandson who will see this sapling grow to adulthood.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of simile: "Time lay upon him like a shroud" - a good descriptive/comparison of the grandfather.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef ghgh ijij. A nice mix of dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two of the last stanza (though, grow).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express the special relationship between grandfather and grandson as he passes down his love for the land and the importance of caring for it; to continue the family tradition of planting a tree, their gift to the upkeep of the earth.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about his grandfather. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Excellent use of dialogue in the last stanza. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"that we can give the earth relief.
This is the gift that I bestow." - a simply beautiful statement; powerful conviction.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3508581

Review of Hoot Owl

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello IdaLin

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Hoot Owl"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about an owl that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Dodoitsu. Perfect 7/7/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptive. You paint a vivid picture of an owl howling at night that is frightening to those that hear it.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling with a bit of humor. You capture the traits of this bird well in this piece.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of an owl's call. Good alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors. Nice internal rhyme in line one: (fowl, owl).

Overall:

Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3507306

Review of I Am

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Pat. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "I Am"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about the character of God, the great I AM, in the first person. Heartfelt and inspirational. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling and expression of the traits of our heavenly Father who loves and cares for us.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of reference for emphasis on His character. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period to a comma at the end of line four and remove the comma at the end of line six. These changes will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Every good gift is from above
and comes from Me." - true words of wisdom from God who blesses those who love Him.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3506601

Review of From the ashes

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello James. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "From the ashes"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about life rising up from the ashes of your past. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a picture of embers in life that have become sad reminders of loss and what was not learned and the hope of a new flame that kindles as your journey of life continues.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Good meter 7/6/7/6. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cded fghg abib. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Hopeful. You express your thoughts about being forsaken by the ones who loved you; yet still they are a comfort, memories that are carried with you wherever you go.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"these ashes are a comfort
as I go on my way." - poignant words of that which is kept with you always.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3505188

Review of Hoping

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Pen. Good day to you.

"This is a Simply Positive Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Hoping"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about hope and its affect upon us. Heartfelt, inspirational and uplifting. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture about hope through what is seen in nature that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice simile: "All we have is our hope, like a bright shining light" - nice descriptive comparison of what hope looks like.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdefe. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece (renew, canoe; unknown, foreknown). Nice internal rhyme in line three (bright, light) and line four (through, canoe).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the strength and beauty of hope that one holds dear to during the valley's of life. Encouraging.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling regarding hope. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Our hope is our destiny, dreams are our future,
to lead through the alien realms of unknown." - well said in describing what hope does for us.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3504653

Review of American Goddess

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello bobibillius

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "American Goddess"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about beauty of this goddess that is concise and succinct. Heartfelt and thought provoking. A well crafted Tyburn. Perfect form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Nice rhyme and rhyme scheme. Nice feminine end line rhyme in lines one through four. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in the last two lines of this poem (years, tears).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the type of life lived by the American Goddess where perfection in beauty is what is expected yet is detrimental to being a role model for young girls and will skew how they look at themselves.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling and is what drives the form of this poem. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3504630

Review of Paradise- just a bridge away.

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Lauracat. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Paradise- just a bridge away."

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about paradise and life change that is thoughtful, heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Quatern, perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of paradise, a bridge that will take you to a place where you feel at home.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Good meter, eight syllables per line throughout poem. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor about paradise--beyond reach, on the other side of the stream, just a bridge away: good descriptive/comparisons of this place of hope and belonging.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the need of change, in life, to reach this paradise to at last be free to be yourself. I can relate to these feelings.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling, and also drives this form of poetry. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation found.

I especially like the following lines:
"The first step is the hardest one,
and I don't have the strength to go." - You express the difficulty of change which steps can be so hard; powerful.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3504599

Review of The Feet of Angels

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Muriel. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Feet of Angels"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about traits of angels that is concise and succinct. Heartfelt and thoughtful. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eyes you paint a picture an angel's walk; how their feet are calloused, dust covered and streaked with tears that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about angels and their work carrying prayers that touche the heart.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis a feeling about angel's feet which show their work. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following the last three lines:
"the ones that carry prayers
are calloused and dust covered
and streaked with a thousand tears." - a powerful faith in the messengers that carry prayers to God.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3503363

Review of Defending Weeds -Week 11 (Septolet)

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Poetic Exploration

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Brandy. Good day to you.

"This is a Poetic Exploration Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Defending Weeds -Week 11 (Septolet)"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the beauty of the countryside. A skillfully crafted Septolet that is short, concise and succinct. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the beauty of the countryside that is contrasted by your partner that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: "blankets of majestic purple" - good descriptive of field of flowers.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the contrast of the beauty you see and the blandness of how your husband sees the same scene in a powerful way in this piece.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Very nice use of conversation for emphasis of feeling. No spelling errors. Punctuation: I would add quotation marks around the conversation in the second section.

I especially like the following lines:
"blankets of
majestic purple
after rain." - simply lovely.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3503339

Review of God's Tree

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Poetic Exploration

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Jace. Good day to you.

"This is a Poetic Exploration Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "God's Tree"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about trees in nature and in one's home that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Septolet. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint the contrast of trees in nature and its use by man in their homes that any person can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the protection that we are given by trees--graceful, strong giving its shade for protection and home for God's creatures as well as the fruit that comes from it for sustenance; and the use of it to create furniture, in this case a hutch that protects fragile dishes.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for expression of the traits of a tree and its uses. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3502370

Review of Caress

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

MY PAPER DOLL GANG FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Ken. Good day to you.

"This is a Paper Doll Gang Form Poetry Contest Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Caress"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good fantasy write about love within dreams. Heartfelt and introspective. An excellent interpretation of the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted English Sonnet. Perfect form and execution of iambic pentameter.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the radiance of her love she awakens in you that is seen through the lens of your dreams.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Excellent meter and rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: "as sunlight broke the fasting of the night" - nice descriptive/comparison and contrast.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg. A good mix of dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the passion between her and the dreamer beautifully in this poem. Magical.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
There are so many to choose from.
"Though tenuous, I could not bring an end
to passion's fantasy of love and lust," - powerful expression of ardor

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.

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Review of First Kiss

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

MY PAPER DOLL GANG FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Mitch. Good day to you.

"This is a Paper Doll Gang Form Poetry Contest Review"

I am reviewing your poem "First Kiss"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the fantasy of love's first kiss. Heartfelt and introspective. A good interpretation of the picture prompt. A well crafted English Sonnet.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of the sights and sounds of love, a trip of delight.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely well. Good meter and nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg. A nice mix of dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one of stanza three (hazy, crazy).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express love, how it is a bewitching ride with the one dearest to you.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
A hazy, crazy, crisp kaleidoscope
ensnares your soul and takes you for a ride. - a nice way to describe this trip of love.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.

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Review of Rejuvenation

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Dr. Taher. Good day to you.

"This is a Simply Positive Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Rejuvenation"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about love that sustains and heals. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Archimedes Pi. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a lovely picture of love through embrace that is refreshing.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express how through touch, love is able to be renewed, even after a very long time.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3495072

Review of To My Muse

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Isiterra. Good day to you.

"This is a Simply Positive Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "To My Muse"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write to your muse about your writer's block. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are your descriptives as you paint a vivid picture of the character of your muse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Very good personification of your muse: you wait for her "to whisper in my ear" and "Sing to me your song of wordless meaning"; you "anticipate our next encounter" and so much more. Good descriptive/comparisons of her 'humanity'.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings of ire to her because you are at her 'beck and call' and she is not there to help you through, leaving you lost without words to create "life with paper and pen"... and complete it. I think every writer can relate to this, the devastation of being in the midst of writer's block.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling of the desertion of your muse. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: there doesn't need to be a comma at the end of line one or three of the first stanza. If you remove them, the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Speak to me, evasive spirit!
I anticipate our next encounter," so poetic as you command her to speak to you in anticipation of your next encounter. Passionate.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3494817

Review of Winter's Colors

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Jace. Good day to you.

"This is a Simply Positive Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Winter's Colors"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about this winter scene on a wintery day. A skillfully crafted Septolet that is short, concise and succinct. Lovely presentation.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of two cardinals perched in a tree, almost like ornaments, dusted in snow, showing the beauty of the season that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the joy of this time of year through the beauty you see in it. I can relate.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3494811

Review of Happiness

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Emily_Sian. Good day to you.

"This is a Simply Positive Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Happiness"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write and message that defines happiness which is concise and succinct. Heartfelt words of wisdom. Well crafted free verse poetry with a tinge of rhyme.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Nice rhyme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines two and five that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about happiness with brevity that any reader will take to heart and hold faithfully to it.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling and importance of this joy to store away in our lives. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
"A fleeting moment, or a glorious day
A wonderous feeling you will never forget" - a lovely defining moment of joy to which we will hold dear.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Thanks for sharing this chestnut. Write on.

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#3494403

Review of Icarus

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello ~Sue~. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Icarus"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about Icarus that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of his loss of wings that ends his life.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express Icarus' character that leads to his demise which is so sad. Nice aha moment in line three.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of his wings he loses because of his foolishness. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a note, in haiku there is no need for punctuation and it is also written in lower case.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Men!

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the other half of your relationship. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Good 8/6/8/6 meter every four lines throughout poem. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdefeghij. Nice mix of near perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. I like the irony in this poem. You express your thoughts about the ups and downs in this relationship that I can relate to so well.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
"Then, after all was said and done
You'd have the final word!" - nice twist and very good closing lines with a bit of humor.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Explore

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Jenny. Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Explore"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about love, family and children growing up, leaving the nest. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a picture of babies as they grow towards adulthood.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the importance of allowing a baby to explore, learn and grow to be independent; it is a learning experience for the parents who know that there comes a time to let go. It is also something all of us have learned in our families, for we went through this process as well.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance. No spelling errors. Punctation: I would add a period at the end of the last line in your poem.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of Arrival

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Oasis. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Arrival"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the beauty of autumn. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a beautiful picture of autumn, its colors, Halloween and Thanksgiving that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm, ten syllables per line throughout poem.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of personification of autumn - dropping in for a face to face - nice descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express how much you like the beauty of the autumn season that any reader can relate to.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following:line
"Soaking in cobalt as deep as a sigh" - a beautiful way to describe the deep blue color of the sky.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of Vision of Spring

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about spring. Heartfelt. Elegant verse. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poem which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of a day and night in spring that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: "And this, to a silvery night in Spring when the moon bathes the world in its balm," - a beautiful descriptive/comparison of the healing power of the moon. Nice use of simile: "for a night born in spring is like silver's soft gleam" and "a day like the pureness of gold" - simply lovely.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the unique rhyme scheme: abcdb efgdf hieji. Every second/fifth line in each verse is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece (sky, sigh), (balm, calm) and (mold, gold) . The fourth line in the first and second verse is perfect masculine end line rhyme (trees, breeze).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty of nature and the elegance of spring in particular. I can relate.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about a spring day/night. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
As the stillness of peace and a juniper breeze
weave a spell that is drowsy and calm. - whimsical and peaceful.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Perhaps

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Rose. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Perhaps"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and presentation about our Lord and life after death. Heartfelt and inspirational. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of heaven, this special land where blessed waters flow and where those of faith will meet our Savior.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih ajkhlmh. Every second/fourth line in the first three stanzas are perfect masculine end line rhyme which is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your faith beautifully in this poem. Lovely words of praise and adoration for our Lord.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling for this place, the promised paradise. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

My favorite lines: the entire third stanza. I love the power of the the words of hope and love that we will share when we reside with Him in His grace. Powerful.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Moon

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Susan. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your "Moon"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write about the moon where spirits meet. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the night sky; through the lens of your eye, parted loved ones gaze upon this same moon, bonding them together even though they are separated by long distances.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: "that lunar face is a mirror of our souls" - nice descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; spiritual.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration and assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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