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#3603430

Review of Priceless

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello iluvhorses

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I am reviewing your poem "Priceless"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the love you have for the special person in your life. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as is the descriptive. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of your thoughts as treasure that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Your love expressed by closeness that nourishes it shines in this piece.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: to add a period at the end of line nine; just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Increasing closeness
Cultivated to nourish" - a good description for love being nourished that is followed through with to the end of the poem.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3602945

Review of Time

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Kail

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I am reviewing your poem "Time"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the traits of time that is short, concise and succinct. Well crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of how you see time that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of time: "limbs stride without rest" and "its ragged breathing" - good descriptive comparisons.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a nice rhyme scheme. Nice mix of near rhyme and perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express time creatively as it continues its journey through the ages.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on time. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the semi-colon at the end of line three to a period. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following line(s):
"its breathing ragged but never out of breath;" "very nice description of time, it can get rough, but it doesn't lose its steam (breath).

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3601600

Review of Thirsty Leaves

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Cubby

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I am reviewing your poem "Thirsty Leaves"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about change of leaves as they are nourished by due. A skillfully crafted Tetractys. Perfect 1/2/3/4/10 syllabic form. Very nice presentation.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the changing colors of leaves in nature that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the life found in leaves that will make them more beautiful through the season.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
I like the poem in its entirety.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3601552

Review of Stairway to Life

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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I am reviewing your poem "Stairway to Life"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good inspirational write and message about living life no matter what comes your way. A heartfelt chestnut that is short, concise and succinct. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your heart, you paint a fine picture of life as it blooms that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of simile: "Bloom as only you are planted" - very nice descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbc. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts of living life beautifully that is uplifting and encouraging to the soul.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on how one should live life. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion - for example, add a comma at the end of line one and a period at the end of line two.

I especially like the following line:
"Faith is patience, you can endure" - powerful yet lovely words of encouragement in this line.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on

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#3601537

Review of To You I Give

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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I am reviewing your poem "To You I Give "

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about these special gifts from the heart that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint fine picture of uplifting one's spirit through the many sides of love that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Uplifting and encouraging to those who receive this blessing that anyone can relate to. Beautiful words of faith which shines in this poem.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at the end of a thought will give emphasis to it as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion - for example: a comma at the end of line two of stanza one and a period at the end of line four of stanza one.

I especially like the following lines:
"Faith and hope, to see the light
When your days are dark as night" - a beautiful gift to bestow upon those going though rough times.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3601105

Review of A Blessing for My Wife

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Candlemaker

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I am reviewing your poem "A Blessing for My Wife"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write of well wishes of love to your wife which is heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a beautiful picture of love and blessings through what is seen in nature that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb aded ff. Every second/fourth line in the stanzas and the ending couplet is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling and a beautiful prayerful blessing to the wife whom you adore and a loving petitionary prayer to God for her as an expression of your faith and love. Uplifting and encouraging.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"When the showers fall around you
May the rainbow light your days." - simply lovely, this hope to be there for her even in times of trouble.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3601090

Review of HOW AND WHY

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse

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I am reviewing your poem "HOW AND WHY"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your faith in God; heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Double Tetractys. Perfect syllabic form.

Imagery:

Not applicable.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your faith and trust in God very well in this piece.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on God's omniscience as Creator of all. No spelling and punctuation errors found. Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

I especially like the following lines:
"I leave it up to faith and just believe
that my God knows" - a powerful statement of your faith in an all knowing God that I relate to very well.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3600948

Review of Mourning

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Amay

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I am reviewing your poem "Mourning"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about our fallen heroes in war that is short, concise and succinct. A heartfelt memorial. A skillfully crafted Naani, perfect form of four lines with twenty to twenty-five syllables. An excellent interpretation of the picture prompt.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives: You paint a vivid picture of this place of honor where our soldiers who lost their lives rest as the symbol for our nation watches over them that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express how important it is to honor our fallen heroes who gave their lives for us so that we can be free.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
All the lines give us a wonderful message about those who gave their lives for us.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3600936

Review of Real Beauty

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Sonicsauce

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I am reviewing your poem "Real Beauty"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about true beauty, where it lies. Heartfelt. A well crafted free verse poem.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptive. Through the lens of your eye you paint a very nice picture of beauty that shines that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express how important it is to give the beauty within you a chance to show. Encouraging.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the repetition for emphasis on what true beauty is. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance. Spelling errors: check line eleven, should be "you're". Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically place comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Look deeper
Your beauty shines through your
Outer beauty" - upbeat and encouraging to give one a better feeling of self.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3600861

Review of A Gregorian Clerihew

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Bill Kinahan

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I am reviewing your poem "A Gregorian Clerihew"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the Pope and his walk among the sages that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Clerihew. Perfect form, free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a good picture about the character of the Pope.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this pice.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling with a nice bit of humor.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
"Plods valiantly up the slope" - a good descriptive of his sacred walk that is done slowly and steadily.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3600454

Review of Winter's Glass 10 lines

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Lucky Leprechaun's Gro...

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Yellow Rose

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I am reviewing your poem "Winter's Glass 10 lines"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a special love that once was that is heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poem which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of memories of this love you shared long ago that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbccaa. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings about this special love with poignance, powerful feelings of sadness with a glimmer of hope of reunion that fills your heart.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts and make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Will you return some summer day
Please come to kiss my tears away" - you express your feelings simply and with power... sadness and hope for this love that permeates your poem.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3600349

Review of Pathways

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon

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I am reviewing your poem "Pathways"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about finding one's way home that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted Naani. Perfect form of twenty to twenty-five syllables. An excellent interpretation of the picture prompt.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of shades of sadness felt as one searches for the way home.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; almost maudlin are these feelings about finding the true path home that any reader can relate to.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Good word choice as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Somber shades of gray
Coalesce in random shapes" - a beautiful descriptive of feelings that keeps one's attention from the beginning to end of your poem.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3600336

Review of PHENOMENON

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Kent

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I am reviewing your "PHENOMENON "

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about perception that is deeply thoughtful, short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect form: Seventeen syllables or less.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of your process of thinking--how they're about to happen, that they are matchless and end up as a memory.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express what a phenomenon your thoughts can be, how quickly they proceed from its beginning to its end, filed away as a memory.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. No spelling. Punctuation: just a note, in Haiku/Senryu, punctuation is not necessary and for the most part, all words are lower case.

I especially like the following lines:
All of them because they contribute to the movement of thoughts.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3600217

Review of Verse as Inverse

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Bill Kinahan

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I am reviewing your "Verse as Inverse"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a bard that is short, concise and succinct. Clever word play. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Not applicable.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling in this short verse about how a writer writes--for knowledge (or lack of it); nice use of irony.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for the "poet" of this piece. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Only through lies can he tell the truth" - nice use of contrast/opposites that is powerful.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3600193

Review of To My Beloved

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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I am reviewing your "To My Beloved"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about true love that is short, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your heart and senses, you paint a vivid picture of the sight, sound and scent of love that any reader can understand.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of personification: "fingers of desire"; nice metaphor: "your words are roses" - very nice descriptive comparisons that paint a picture of love.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You beautifully express the attributes of expressing love through the power of words by this special person in your life.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"The fragrance of your words,
Titillates and beckons," - simply beautiful description about the 'traits' of words; very creative.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3600180

Review of NO TIME

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse

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I am reviewing your "NO TIME"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the tendency to not be on time. A well crafted Nonet. Perfect syllabic form. Nice aesthetics.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eyes you paint a good picture of how time seems to move so fast in your life that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Not applicable.

Rhyme:

Not applicable.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express well how you lose track of time, something that I certainly can relate to.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of how you feel about the rush you feel when running late. No spelling or punctuation errors. Just a suggestion, I would change the first letter of line to to lower case since it is not the beginning of another sentence, just a continuance to it.

I especially like the following lines:
"As soon as I wake up, I’m
getting ready for bed." - I like the humor of these words.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3595421

Review of Pieces of Our Lives

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams

. Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your "Pieces of Our Lives"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the power of words in our lives and its affects upon us. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of hurt and pain, the memories... torn pieces of ourselves that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of metaphor: "loneliness hidden in shelves" - nice descriptive/comparison of what is 'hidden' in the shelves of our lives.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the unique rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef egeg hehe. Every second/fourth line thoughout the poem is a nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line four of stanza two (we, see).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you describe life, its ups and downs and how words are powerful in our lives.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically place comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion; for example, a comma at the end of line one and a semi-colon at the end of line two of stanza one.

I especially like the following lines:
"But torn pieces of our own
Loneliness hidden in shelves." - a powerful description of loneliness and how it's hidden.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3586612

Review of Unsaid Prayer

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello DJ Juillett

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your "Unsaid Prayer"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

~Form/Style:
A good write, message and prayer. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery is nice as is the descriptives. Through the lens of your heart, you express your need for God's love and how essential it is that He answers you when you call out to Him.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express your faith and trust in God beautifully in this petitionary prayer. Encouraging and uplifting to the spirit.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines: there are many, but these two lines are powerful and resonate with me.
"Teach me right from wrong,
Then, help me to be strong."

~Overall:
Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3572585

Review of THE STELLAR REACH

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Maddy

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "THE STELLAR REACH"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and ode to this special star. Heartfelt, introspective and whimsical. A well crafted free style metered rhyming poem which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the night sky that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Good use of personification of a star--it yearns, is a "loyal friend". Nice use of metaphor: "she dipped into the sea of night" - very nice descriptive/comparisons.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaba ccdc eefe gghg iiji. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line one of stanza one (do, you); in line one of stanza two (she, sea) and in line three of stanza three (divine, sign).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts and the magic of this star beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Another suggestion, to single space each stanza in your poem. For me it would make it easier to read and review.

I especially like the following lines: There are so many but I choose:
"She dipped into the sea of night
Embraced the dark with much delight" - a beautiful description, so vivid and romantic.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3569392

Review of Wonder Woman

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello twin_14

. Good day to you.

"This is an Angel Army Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Wonder Woman"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about what it is to be a strong woman. Heartfelt and uplifting. A well crafted free verse poem that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of metaphor: "she's dripping with pride" - a good descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about the strength of this woman powerfully in this piece. This is a woman that all women aspire to be.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of strength in women. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
"Strong and Independent
Her power so ascendant" - very good description of the power of woman that grows (ascending to higher heights) which follows through to the end of the poem.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3565155

Review of The Junk Box Kitten

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello ~WhoMe???~

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem"The Junk Box Kitten"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

~Form/Style:
A very good write and presentation about how you 'see' this box. Imaginative. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptive. You paint a vivid picture of your treasure chest and the toys that bring you joy as contrasted by an empty box that lies there taking up space.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of the chest: "you are always tempting" and "making lots of noise" - good descriptive/comparisons.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdefeghih. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece (floor, galore; toys, noise; smitten, kitten).

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express the joy and happiness this treasure chest gives you and how smitten you are with it.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance with good assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"I see a treasure chest
filled with fun galore." - these two lines sum up the joy found in ones imagination which you follow through beautifully to the end of the piece.

~Overall:
Excellent closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3565132

Review of My Heart Possessed

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello very thankful

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "My Heart Possessed"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

~Form/Style:
A good write about the dark side of love. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express the disturbing side of love that isn't love at all.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about dark emotions abiding in this love. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
"My heart is possessed" - I like how it emphasizes what is wrong about this type of love.

~Overall:
Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3564914

Review of Unconditional

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Brooklyn

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Showering Acts of Joy Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Unconditional"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and tribute about your husband and his personality. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of the type of man your husband is that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of personification: "that old man time will win" - good descriptive for time.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee ff gg. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Romantic. You express how much he means to you, your passion for him and the unconditional love he has for you.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"This man, my husband, on which I can depend
his love for me unconditional, forever, without end" - I especially like the last rhyming couplet. These lines sum up what you see in him, his unconditional love and support, a man you you can depend on. Powerful.

Overall:

Excellent closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3564665

Review of Purity

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Showering Acts of Joy Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Purity"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about ones love for their child and the purity of their character in the land where they slumber. Heartfelt and an excellent interpretation of the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted Trois-par-Huit. Perfect form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a child that is loved as she drifts off to sleep to dream of butterflies and sunbeams--happiness that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice metaphor: butterflies dancing in sunshine

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aab bb ccc. Perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty you see in this child as she slumbers that I can relate to very well.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Colorful butterflies dance in golden sunbeams,
amidst rapturous fields, to the music of streams." - simply beautiful and warm is this description of her dreams.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3564648

Review of Economic Woes

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Showering Acts of Joy Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Economic Woes"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the affect of the economy on a person's worth. Good presentation. Clever word play that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5 / 7 / 5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the dark side of monetary loss and the affect on home ownership.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; very nice use of satire--dark humor, a commentary of the state of the economy as the bottom drops out of the housing market and real estate values go down. Very nice aha moment in line three.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following line(s):
"pocket cash-tration" - says it all; excellent play on words.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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