ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3428341

Review of Timeline

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about time that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poem which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Excellent use of simile: 'birth, death, rebirth - in a cycle like a clock.' Very good descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdefe. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in lines two, four, six and eight.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how time, past, present and future is linked to birth, death and rebirth, much like the cycle of a clock.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the trait of a clock. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3428069

Review of Witty Lines & Joker's Smile

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of this poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and characterization of the Joker, a fictional character in Batman. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of his facade as well as the evil that dwells within him.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'shelved away like a deck of old cards' - good descriptive/comparison of why The Joker will not be forgotten.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Dark. Clever.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of dialogue and repetition for emphasis of his dark character. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3428064

Review of Miss Calavera

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about this woman, in life, grandmother; in death, Catherine of the dead. Good presentation. A skillfully crafted story poem in well written free verse.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the time, place and person that the reader sees through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Dark, powerful and eerie as you describe this holiday, this poem inspired by the Day of the Dead. Your feelings for your grandmother, what she was, what she became and how she is seen by others at this special time permeates this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line one in the sixth stanza before the picture/graphic, should be 'each other'.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3425516

Review of Breathless

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting for the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the wonder of childhood that seems to disappear as we grow into adulthood. Heartfelt, introspective and thought provoking. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express your thoughts about losing the magic of childhood and how if affects ones life, whether we view it as a loss of inspiration that seems so powerful in dreams of youth.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3424369

Review of Angel

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about an angel atop a Christmas tree. Concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the Christmas tree that any reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your feelings of the beauty of the Christmas tree.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration and assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3424365

Review of OCEAN

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the ocean that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted limerick. Very good form for this rhyming poem that I enjoy and prefer.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of walking along the shore as the waves touch your toes.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts and feelings about your memories in peacefulness as you walk on the beach. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3424359

Review of KEYBOARD

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable for the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about various keyboards and their importance in daily life. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of different keyboards that all your readers are familiar with.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines two, four, six and eight that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Nice sense of humor.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of the importance of keyboards. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3424351

Review of Halloween

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about Halloween. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid and eerie picture of Halloween.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines two, four, six and nine that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line four (sheer, fear).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You capture the essence of Halloween beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3424139

Review of Winter Crimson

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your flash fiction.

Structure
Your story flows well, narrated in the first person.

Language
You express your thoughts about how you feel, what you see as you walk on the beach that is readily understood by those who read this piece. Although there is no dialogue, the reader can sense that what you experience is true to yourself.

Character and Idea
Lovely depth of feeling is expressed by the sight of the winter sun, its beauty as it paints its color around you in the sky, in the sand on the beach. I like the peacefulness and warmth of color that you find in this place and how you paint a beautiful picture of it.

Other Points/Overall
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition gives emphasis to the serenity you feel in this place. Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3424123

Review of Uniform

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about seeing the 'real' person, asking them to take off the uniform that hides who they really are. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You beautifully express how you feel about this special person in your life letting them know they need not fear showing their true self to you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3423004

Review of Shattered ... Dreams

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about the times in which we live. A skillfully crafted Tanka. Perfect 5/7/5/7/7 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express that even in hard times, Christmas joy is passed on to others by little ones who understand just how important it is to those they love. Thoughtful and encouraging.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3422952

Review of Poetry

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about several forms of poetry that is short, concise and succinct. A well crafted free verse acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling as you express the number of types of poetry that you know and create as your own.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3420059

Review of Summertime Sensations

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the joy and beauty of summertime that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eyes you paint a vivid picture of summertime that any reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express the sensations felt in summertime on picnics, at the beach in sunshine that gives you joy. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3420051

Review of IN THE MIST

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about this special love in your life. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse triplets that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You expressed the importance of your love for each other and the strong faith in God which you both shared. Although now he has gone on, this special love still comforts, a true blessing from God.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3420045

Review of THE ANCHOR

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about God being a person's anchor in life. Heartfelt and encouraging. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of an anchor in rough seas of life that pictures God's love and support that calms the storm in that person if only they will reach for Him.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Nice use of enjambment in the second verse.

Metaphor or Simile:

Lovely metaphor in this picture of an anchor in life that keeps you through troubles.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Uplifting. Your faith in God shines through beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3420041

Review of Brick by Brick

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about breaking down walls that hold you back and the possibilities of living life well and finding joy in whatever makes you happy. Heartfelt, uplifting and encouraging. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express how one can change the direction in life, that each person has power that lies within if only they find the courage to take that first step from misery to the world of wonder that waits patiently for them.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3418225

Review of A Thank You Prayer

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about the beauty of nature as created by God. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of nature that is beautiful and peaceful.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification: 'woods are drowsy'; Nice simile: 'nature relaxes like an new mother' - very nice descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling, prayerful. You express the beauty and splendor of this season in thankfulness to God who created it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3405415

Review of WHISPERS

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and blessing to the special people in your life. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of different aspects in nature to bless others with in a prayerful and loving way.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of simile: 'your heart be soft as a gentle breeze' and 'dreams be bright as the summer sunrise' - very nice descriptive/comparisons.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; beautiful words expressing to others that they are loved.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3405413

Review of Stand With Me

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about this place you share with someone special in your life. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of this please that any reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe. Every second/fourth line throughout poem is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; romantic. You express the beauty you see on this mountainside and your emotion very well in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of this place you enjoy. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3405379

Review of Awake To Reality

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of this poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about overcoming through faith. Heartfelt and introspective. A well crafted Rispetto. Good form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a note, this form is ten syllables per line, but it is not written purely in iambic pentameter (lines one, two, four and eight are in iambic pentameter). Nice use of enjambment in lines one and two.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. A lovely testimony of your love and trust for the Lord. Uplifting.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3403475

Review of Haiku: Frozen Hands

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A nice title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about how hard it is to get back into writing that is short, concise and succinct. A well crafted Senryu, perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a clear picture of how your fingers are stiff and cold through lack of use, in this case, due to not taking time to write.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your feelings of inertia well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3403466

Review of On Edge

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about living on the edge. Heartfelt and introspective. Nicely crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a dark picture of this precipice that you are drawn to with vividness due to a broken heart.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Nice use of near rhyme and and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts with power and fear.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3398818

Review of Futile

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about regret in ones life journey. Heartfelt and introspective. A well crafted free style metered rhyming poem that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a unique rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about your life journey so far and the mess it becomes that wasn't what you expected.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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Review of All I can Do

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about navigating the challenges in life. Heartfelt, introspective and thoughtful. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about doing the best you can in your life journey, trying to choose the right path that is best for you. It is hard making the right choices. We all struggle with this throughout our lives.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line four, should be 'from' and in the last line of your poem it should be 'That's'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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Review of Summer Joy

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation of summer fun in the sun that is short, concise and succinct. A well crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Nice imagery and descriptives. You paint a very nice picture of a child enjoying the water and sun on a hot summer. day.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Nice use of rhyme in line three (fun, sun).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express the delight of youngsters basking in the sun in summer.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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