ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3316516

Review of Roses in Heaven

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your love for your mother and how much you miss her. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe aghg. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Prayerful. You express your love for your mother beautifully in this piece as you converse with the Lord about your feelings for her and what you'd like Him to tell her. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3314301

Review of There are..

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your feelings for yourself and your aspirations. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts and feelings nicely in this poem. I like the encouragement that surrounds you, those who bring you peace, love and happiness that is a blessing to you. Uplifting and encouraging to your spirit. I like your optimism in yourself, knowing that you will come through whatever the obstacle.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line five, should be 'breaths'. Also, line five is a bit awkward; if you change "thank for everyday" to 'I'm thankful for everyday,' this will make the flow and rhythm of that line even better in my opinion.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3314291

Review of Boogey

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the boogyman that is heartfelt and eerie. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this sinister shadow that brings fear to you when you try to go to sleep.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your fear of this 'night' creature very well and the one thing that can keep it away is light. I like the bit of humor of your last two lines--the thing that protects you and keeps you safe a 'powerful night light!' - the memories that this brings back to me.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3314286

Review of RANSOM

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable for the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about people who take over a conversation. Heartfelt and clever. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts well of people that monopolize conversation to the point you feel you are held captive. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3314271

Review of Drinking Memories

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about cups and the memories they give you about London and the sea. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted Etheree. Perfect form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express the importance of these cups, the warmth of memories they bring you each time you use them as well as how they make your tea and coffee taste even better.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on these cups that prompt sweet memories. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3312989

Review of HE WATCHES

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about God's eternal love for His children. Very nice presentation. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Uplifting and encouraging. Your faith shines in this piece. Wonderful words of praise and adoration for God. A beautiful message of His character, of his forgiveness, grace and love He bestows on all who believe.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3312978

Review of NOTHING TO FEAR

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about God's grace that is heartfelt. Lovely presentation. Skillfully crafted free verse that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your faith and love for the Lord beautifully in this piece. Heartfelt words of praise and adoration for God. An uplifting and encouraging message and reminder that in Him we find peace and joy; we need not fear because we are safe in His hands. A lovely invitation to those who don't know Him to come to Him.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3312465

Review of Imperfect Rose

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about being seen as beautiful even in your imperfections. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice use of metaphor, a good descriptive/comparison between traits of the rose and your own physical traits.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. A lovely expression of beauty as seen through the eyes of the one who loves you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3312462

Review of A Lingering Disease

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about hate and how it is fostered from generation to generation. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababab. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line five (say, today)

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how this 'illness' is promoted from parent to child through the generations, a sad commentary on mankind.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3312456

Review of Dispensed Unevenly

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about justice that is short, concise and succinct. Clever word play. Thoughtful and thought provoking. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of justice as a woman; one that is blind so every person coming before her is on a level playing field yet sometimes it rings untrue.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbcdd. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the problems that one finds in justice when it is delayed, or on those who don't have the means to get the best representation; and I agree, courts and lawyers can render it pathetic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3312453

Review of Spring Rains

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about spring rains that is short, concise and succinct. A well crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of rain as it nourishes flowers to blossom as it renews plant life.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a note, you don't have to use punctuation when writing haiku.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express the importance of rain in springtime, one of renewal and rebirth.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3312448

Review of Just A Touch Of Spring

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your love for Spring. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of new life that comes with the spring season. Through the lens of your eye we see the beauty of blossoming trees, budding flowers and as though we're right there by your side, hear the birds singing; this is a lovely touch of spring.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the joy of Spring beautifully in this poem. I can relate. I love Spring. It's finally arrived here in NYC.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of springtime. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3311214

Review of Inspire Me

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the inspiration of love in a relationship. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of love as view through nature, leaves rustling in a breeze (love's symphony) and color flowers (love's galleries).

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the comma at the end of lines five and nine. If you remove them the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you ask for love to inspire your imagination making it run wild; to inspire your senses with every beat of your heart. Poetic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3311194

Review of Youth is a Leaf

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about youth and how the attributes of youth is similar to characteristics of the life of a leaf. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of the bond between leaf and tree that is similar to the connection between parents and children.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of metaphor expressing the similarity between a leaf and growing child.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the stages of growth, still clinging to the care/life giver and in time given the opportunity to float free on its own.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice use of double entendre. Just a note, I think there is a typo in line seven, should be 'though'.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3311187

Review of Behold The Morning

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the beauty of the morning. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of the morning sky as the light becomes a symphony that awakens the day and nature's creatures from their nightly rest.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the commas at the end of lines two and three. If you remove them the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'the ineffable rhythm, nature's sublime symphony' - a good descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your love of the golden light of the morning. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3311180

Review of Where a Church Used to Stand

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the true meaning of love. Heartfelt words of wisdom. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the commas at the end of lines five and six. If you remove them the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express what love means to you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3311177

Review of The Cleansing

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about release and cleansing of the soul through tears. Heartfelt and abstract. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eyes you paint a vivid picture of tears as they fall from 'eye-less' faces.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the period at the end of line four or the semi-colon at the end of line eight. If you remove them, the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'Time faces the mirror' - good descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how through tears, the spirit is mended.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3311129

Review of Dawns Dance

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about dawn that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Haiku. Perfect 17 syllables or less form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eyes you paint a vivid picture of the light of dawn.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'glowing light begins the dance' - good descriptive/comparison of the flickering light of dawn that is dance-like.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty of dawn as it breaks through the night. I enjoy watching the rising sun and the beautiful colors of the sky.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3310599

Review of Halloween Acrostic

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a Halloween and an evening of fun and games. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of fun children have on Halloween night that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm of your poem even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the fun of dressing up on Halloween, seeing pumpkins carved out and glowing and the giving out of candy to trick or treaters on this magical night.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3307842

Review of Courage, Love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the love you feeling for this special woman in your life. Uplifting. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme which is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for her and for each other beautifully, this love of yours that shall never be defeated. The power of it will keep you through the valley's of life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3307833

Review of The Wall

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about words as a wall of protection that is concise and succinct. Well crafted rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the period at the end of line two. The flow and rhytm of this short piece will be even better without it in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. The second and fourth lines are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this poem.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. A clever word of wisdom for ones safety; a way of hiding from the ills of the world.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3307818

Review of Hunger

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your love for words. Heartfelt and clever word play. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the power of words, your passion for them, how you crave them, their sound and how they flow off the tongue. For you they are like fine wine, sweet as they wet your lips.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feelings about words. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3307771

Review of Take Heart

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about living life. Heartfelt and upbeat. Well crafted rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cbcb dbdb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Uplifting and encouraging. A message that tells you to take heart and be strong and you will fend anything that comes at you in life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3307558

Review of THUNDER SPIRITS

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt prayer, a tribute to your Sioux heritage and its people. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of simile: 'hear the prayer of this Sioux like a dream catcher, sift out the bad' - a good descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your plea to the Thunder Spirits to give your people back what has been lost to them poignantly in this poem; a heartfelt plea for peace and dignity and to find the path back to your home that was once plentiful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3307538

Review of Just Because

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your life and how you live it. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts and fears about life and how it shapes you very well in this poem. Thoughtful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition and rhetorical questions for emphasis of feeling about living your life. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.