ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3302357

Review of Unstable

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about finding comfort in the darkness. Heartfelt, concise and succinct. A well crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion as she expresses her thankfulness in the darkness of her room knowing that it won't let her go. Dark.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3302347

Review of Wrong Again: A free-form Haiku

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write about your expectations that is concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect form of 17 syllables or less.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Introspective and heartfelt. You express that what you believe in has shown you time and again that it does not match up with your desires.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3302160

Review of Ascent

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the heights of true love that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express how true love soars and brings you eternal bliss.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Good masculine end line rhyme in lines one and two (above, love).

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3302149

Review of My last breath

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about this rush of desire you feel towards this person that is overwhelming. A skillfully crafted cinquiano. Perfect 2/8/6/4/2 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express passionately this desire that you feel for this special person.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3302134

Review of Enchantment

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about having a peaceful spirit. Whimsical. A good blend of free verse and free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid and enchanting picture of the pirouette of the wind and the soft music carried upon it.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good. Nice internal rhyme in line four of stanza one (real, surreal). Nice near rhyme in end lines five and six of stanza two (self, wealth). Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines one through four of stanza two (light, sight; fall, all).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Light and uplifting that is calming within you, this peacefulness that is priceless.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3302126

Review of Rustle of Silk

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about this voice that lifts your spirits. Skillfully crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling that is heartfelt and introspective.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3302123

Review of Why Thoughts?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your thoughts and the feelings they leave behind. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a nice rhyme scheme. A good mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the anguish and fear of these ghostly thoughts and memories that visit you making you feel helpless and lost.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3301199

Review of free

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good fantasy write about being free. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Cinquain. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a walk at the shore where you see the beautiful colors of the ocean as the salt and moisture are wind tossed in the air.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Delightfully sensual.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3301190

Review of Aglow

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about wishing on a star that is short, concise and succinct. Imaginative. A skillfully crafted Cinquain. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Good personification of a star who smiles, touches a wish and has a conversation with a wish.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Uplifting and hopeful. Whimsical.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of dialogue. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3299621

Review of AFRICA

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about Africa and disease and war that ravages her. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic with a tinge of rhyme that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personfication of Africa as she is ravaged, she stumbles in tragedy, she weeps and bleeds. Good descriptive/comparison of the country to a woman.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the pain and sorrow felt by this country and her people powerfully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. Good dactylic/masculine end line rhyme in lines three and four (genocide, died).

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3299606

Review of Who am I?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about who you are and how you see yourself as a writer. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling and sense of humor. You express your feelings about yourself that run the gambit especially when you are writing. I'd say that you're more than an average writer... you're very good at it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3299336

Review of The Other Side Of Summer

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the sorrow and pain love can bring in the heat of summer that result in the end of a relationship. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abca defe gege. A nice mix of dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings that are sharp and fuels your 'quiet rage' when fate is reversed and you are set free from the pain of betrayal to again find summer nights of ecstasy.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3299329

Review of My Passion

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your love for this special person in your life. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic. Good presentation.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual. You express the bliss of your love and the safety you find in his arms. Deeply romantic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

A well penned love poem and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3299324

Review of Strawberry Erotica

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the act of love that is short, concise and succinct. A good attempt at a Cinquain, near perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form. Just a note, line three has seven syllables, should be six syllables.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of the passion of love beautifully in this piece.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong alliteration, good assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3299319

Review of DIVINE SOULMATES

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the loss of a spouse and finding love again, a blessing from God. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Good meter and nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line three of stanza two (knows, widow's, woes).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the pain of death and the end of your marriages, leaving you both with broken hearts. God heard and answered your prayer, gifting you with a soul mate, bringing you together, a new love to share together.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3299290

Review of Smile!

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the gift of a smile inspired by your brother. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every third/fifth line in each stanza is near perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; uplifting and encouraging. I can relate to your feelings about receiving a smile. A sincere one can make a person's day.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3298914

Review of My Child, I Love You

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your faith in God and how He speaks to you. A heartfelt inspirational piece. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb cdcd efcf. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express how you hear God through the sounds of His creation (thunder, wind and morning dew) as you converse with Him prayerfully asking for His forgiveness knowing that He loves you and will forgive you through His loving grace. Uplifting and encouraging.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3298899

Review of Summer Solstice

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about summer and its character. Clever word play. A skillfully crafted double acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of her as a sister to other seasons: 'the solstice's locks that cascade in torrent' - a good descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling about summer's light captivates all that it is showered upon.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3298878

Review of Memorial Day

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about a woman's introduction of her fiance to her mother at her grave site. Poignant. Skillfully crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as she softly introduces the man she loves and will marry to her mother who never thought that day would come.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3298869

Review of The Bakeshop Window

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about a bakeshop window. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of the sweets and other baked good seen through a bake shop window to draw potential customers into its store.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of the window that acts as a sales person for its delicacies.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling expressing the pleasure it gives 'the window' to show others delights of all types of baked goods.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3298862

Review of Pondering God

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about God and His knowledge of everything you are. A prayerful conversation with Him. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile

Very nice simile: 'Tis rather like and apple's task to tell about the tree...' good descriptive/comparison about knowing ones creator.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your faith, wonder and mystery that you see in Holy God, someone we can always trust as we are showered in His grace.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition and rhetorical questions for emphasis of the mystery of God. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3298409

Review of Do Not Enter

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your inner reflection of yourself; this prison in which you reside. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Dark. You express the gloominess of the dungeon of your mind, a place for secrets and at times a cell of torture where silent demons sleep; a place you describe as broken whose thoughts belong to you for now.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3298220

Review of Inspiration

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about how you view inspiration. Heartfelt and uplifting. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm of the piece even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the things that give you inspiration: flow of words, music (far and near) and kindness of the heart's of people who come your way. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3298215

Review of My Secret Love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good about a lover you haven't met, but you've grown to love the idea of him. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about your secret love passionately in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3298209

Review of Hope

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about hope that is eternal. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm of the piece even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express how hope's flame never goes out, there is always a glimmer of it waiting for one to reach out for it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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