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#3307153

Review of Road-trip to Nowhere

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation about a getaway day trip. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a good picture of getting away for a picnic with the children, going no where special, but enjoying the scenery of the time and place of your unknown destination.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks that are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghij kblb. Every second/fourth line is near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you take time with your kids and take a cool road trip to enjoy your time together on the road find a place with a lake and trees for a picnic and lovely day enjoying nature.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line four of stanza seven, should be 'trees'.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3307133

Review of Starting Over

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting for the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about starting over that is heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your faith and trust in God as you renew your life goals and change of direction through guidance from Him who is in charge of your life. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about life change and accepting God's intervention in that change. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3307126

Review of Autumn

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the fall that is short, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted form. Perfect syllabic count of 55 syllables.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the beautiful colors in the autumn season and its beautiful night skies.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express your enjoyment of this season beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and good read. Write on.

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#3307083

Review of She Will Wait

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good fantasy write about unconditional love and how she will wait patiently, through the ages even in the darkness for the one she loves. Well crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your imagination you paint a vivid picture of unconditional love through this woman who will wait for her true love no matter how long it takes.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice metaphor for unconditional love as a woman.
Nice simile: 'death's mystery sung out like a soliloquy'

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the power of unconditional love through peaks and valleys of life, in silence and darkness, always there, always able to be counted upon and always waiting.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of character of unconditional love. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3307072

Review of You were my everything

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a love lost and how important this person was to you through the strength of your memories. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Even in sadness, you express your good memories of this love you once shared, savoring images of a smile, laughter, unforgettable warmth, presence and love... and then how much you miss it when it disappeared and you realized how much you loved this person and how important they were to you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3307065

Review of solitary rose

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, message and metaphor of living a solitary life as described as a single stemmed rose. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your life as described in a solitary rose--roots tired and dry, no petals, bare and lost.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor. A very good comparison/descriptive of the traits of a solitary rose that is similar to traits of a solitary person.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccde ffgg hijj kkll. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line three of stanza one (tight, fight).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the hope you see in being 'a solitary rose' that you will endure even in defeat, just as the rose; but you will overcome and be a radiant rose basking in sunlight. An uplifting and encouraging message.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a suggestion, the following typos need correcting: throughout poem 'I' should be capitalized as well as 'I'm'. Also, in line four of stanza two I would change spilled to 'spilt'; in line two of stanza three I would change stood to 'stand' and in line three of stanza four I would change kept to 'keep'. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3307049

Review of Chains Cannot Hold Me

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Rated: E

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a quest in a day dream while in class and caught at it by the teacher. A good story poem, and true to life. Imaginative. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of being in class and the confrontation by the teacher because of not paying attention and the mad dash out the room and straight into the arms of the principal.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba ccddc eeffe. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling, with a tinge of humor. You express well how you may be captive at school, but your thoughts on this particular day are free.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of dialogue. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3307026

Review of A Horse's Freedom

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a horse in swift gallop that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a horse in its element, running free, powerfully in joyful flight.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the beauty of a horse and the joy of freedom he feels on a run.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3305035

Review of A Lesson Learned

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about lessons we learn no matter how old we are. A heartfelt message. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the importance of love in a relationship, a bond that when broken another lesson (though hard) is learned, that it's okay to grieve and cry. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about things we've learned and learn in life. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3304551

Review of Poetry in Motion Poems

for entry "Acrostic Monorhyme"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

"Teeth" - a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write about your dentures that is concise and succinct. I like the humor. A skillfully crafted free style metered monorhyme acrostic.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your shiny teeth that seem to shine so bright in your room at night.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling with a good sense of humor.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3304034

Review of I Am

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about how you see Good. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eebb fghg. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your faith and conviction in God who loves you. You express His character, love, compassion and forgiveness beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3304016

Review of One Day

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about wishing to escape a relationship that has gone bad. Well crafted free verse couplets with a tinge of rhyme.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; you express your pain and sorrow as well as the hope to one day be free from this person that has been mentally abusive to you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3303996

Review of The Dragon's Time

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about dragons. Imaginative. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the night sky and an ocean of stars and dragons that leap into the void of darkness and disappear.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Enchanting and dark as you express how dragons move in the darkness.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3303430

Review of To Speak or Not To Speak

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about speaking your mind. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhthym of your poem even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaaabbc defghijj. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in lines one (shout, out) and three (without, doubt).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express your thoughts about speaking your mind in a respectable way because if you don't, you could get burned for neglecting respect. A powerful message of keepings one dignity when speaking your mind.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3303419

Review of Erasers

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about yourself and your writings before you started posting on websites. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted rhyming acrostic of your handle in iambic pentameter which I do enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter and very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd ee. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about writing poetry, honing your skills, learning forms; always redesigning to make effective the words of your intent. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the use of erasers in your writing. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3303414

Review of Fireworks of Freedom

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about freedom. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the beauty of freedom, the power of it and the feelings resulting from it. A message of how freedom removes the walls and shackles in life that is uplifting to the heart and soul.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3303400

Review of Living with Pain

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about living with pain and the harsh feelings that come along with it. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Dark. You express the grief of dealing with continual pain without someone by your side to help you get through it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3303392

Review of Alone

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about being alone due to pain of depression. Heartfelt, introspective and dark. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how sleep is your only escape and your need to be alone and left alone, that expresses the darkness of depression.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3303386

Review of Are you my friend?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about what makes a true friend. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse couplets.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. A good message of the characteristics that make up true friendship and the question that always remains... are you my friend?

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3303374

Review of If Not For You

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about finding meaning and love in your life. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how you moved from the darkness into the light through love; that your heart has been mended as has your self worth because of this person you love. An uplifting and inspirational piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3303358

Review of Unfading Regret

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about regret and the pain of it that you feel. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece (heal, conceal; still, kill; hide, inside; first, cursed; forget, regret).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the sorrow you feel, that you try to conceal, but is there festering. Guilt that is relentless reminding you of the painful memories that seek to destroy you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3303344

Review of A Heart's Desire

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your heart's desire, the love you have for your fiance. Heartfelt and romantic. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abbb cdbd efgf hiji klml. A good mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line three of the third stanza (by, my).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love and passion for this special person in your life; the need to be there for him in good times and bad, soul mates to be together, grow old together and one day live forever in God's celestial kingdom.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of The Anger's Changing Me

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about how you feel about yourself, the anger that burns within you. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse couplets.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings about what you have become because of this anger; the hate and seclusion that you feel.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of Sunsets

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the beauty of sunsets. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poem.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see the sun as is disappears into the horizon like magic; the warmth and colors are beautiful as day turns into night.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb dede fghg. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty of God's creation as He set the heavens ablaze with sunset, a spectacular ending to day. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of The Face I See

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about this reflection you see in the mirror. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of an attractive and vibrant woman.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Throughout you talk about this person as someone unknown or forgotten; as though you lost this 'self' as you look in the mirror for recognition and at last you find it, fond memories of the person you used to be... you've freed yourself from the darkness that hid you from yourself.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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