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Keep in mind that any suggestions made are only an opinion of this reader whose intention is to help, not to criticize in any way.
ERRORS: No spelling or other mistakes were noticed. 
SUGGESTIONS: Some of the lines are too lengthy to be lyrical in my opinion. Cutting them down is suggested. 
Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to be critical in any way. 
WHAT I ENJOYED: I think the entire story is excellent. You did a super job of relaying how the ghost thinks and feels. Unlike most ghost stories about haunted houses and evil beings, yours is quite the opposite. I liked that and the undying love for Karissa that was carried with the ghost when he departed. 
Hello and thank you for your entry in "
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhyming pattern is good overall, and the wishes like many others. The commercials seen when watching television lead people wanting the things written about in the poem and more. The lines about Cimbalta and your husband getting upset if more flowers were bought were humorous. 
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: The rhyming pattern is off in some of the lines, however, the poem is great. Other than that, there are no suggestions to offer for improving the poem. 
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhythm is good overall. The poem reads almost like a short biography, giving readers a chance to know more about you. I liked that. I also liked the humor in the names you discarded. Choosing your handle because it is the name of your business is a good idea. It was a pleasure getting to know a bit about the man behind the handle. 
OVERALL THOUGHTS: The rhyming pattern is great, and the imagery just as good. The emotions are expressed well also. My favorites are the verses about seeing the light and God knowing ones true worth. How right you are! The poem is terrific. 
MY FAVORITES: This is an exceptional holiday story, Bill. 
I can see why they drifted to sleep. The last verse is great as well. You did a marvelous job of expressing what goes through the mind of a child. 
Hello Deanna! Thank you for your entry in "
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: Being as it is used after some of the sentences in the poem, I think using punctuation where needed in all of the lines would make for a better presentation. You begin using a rhyming pattern that falters after the first verse. Just another humble suggestion, but I think the poem would be better if the pattern was used in all of the verses. 
