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Review of I Love the Rain!  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Butterflyv* Hello Alexis Tigerspice Welcome to Writing.com! *Smile* Any suggestions made by this humble reader are only an opinion meant to help, not to criticize your work in any way.

*Pencil* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical, spelling, or other mistakes were noticed, and the only suggestion I have to offer is to keep writing these lovely poems. *Pencil*

*Note1* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Note1*

*Check2* MY THOUGHTS: The imagery is dynamite! Some of my personal favorites are the rain falling like teardrops from Heaven, the sky and earth joining, and purifying with virgin droplets. Like you, I love a good rain. The poem is well written and beautiful. *Check2*

WRITE ON!

Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Redtowrite *Smile*

*Pencil* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: "teeth" should be capitalized. Other than that, no other errors were noticed, and I cannot think of anything I feel would improve the poem. *Pencil*

*Note5* CHARACTERS: N/A *Note5*

*Writing* OVERALL OPINION: The imagery is outstanding! My heart bled for the huntress who endured such pain and suffering. The wolves howling their empathy was awesome. I like the combination of emotion and nature, and the last verse was inspiring. In short, the poem is well written and a fantastic read. *Writing*

Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Cyril Sweet *Smile* Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are only an opinion of this humble reader and intended to help, not to criticize. *Smile*

*Exclaim* ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: A comma should follow "their marriage". Other than that, no errors were spotted, and there are no suggestions for improvement. *Exclaim*

*Pencil* CHARACTERS & PLOT: Derek, Linda, and the other characters are defined well, and the storyline terrific. I thoroughly enjoyed it. *Pencil*

*RainbowL**RainbowR* OVERALL THOUGHTS: The imagery used in describing the characters and settings is fantastic. That always makes a story better. Some excellent examples are the gust of wind that lifted the leaf and looked like a bat's wing, its color changes, the revelation of the affair and its impact on her husband, and the paragraphs about the hospital. The story is well written and from the heart. I liked that. *RainbowL**RainbowR*

Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello ChuChuRocker

*Idea* ERRORS: No punctual, spelling, or other mistakes were spotted. *Idea*

*Exclaim* SUGGESTIONS: None I can think of that would improve the poem. *Exclaim*

*Note5* OVERALL OPINION: The rhythm is outstanding, and the imagery good. My heart ached for Amber when reading about the constant moves, but felt as if it had broken after reading parts five and six. Even when Amber finds love and later bears a child, the scars have notable taken their toll on her and left permanent damage. My heart bleeds for you, and am glad you found genuine love. Keep writing, for it seems to be an outlet for these painful memories. *Note5*

Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Tim Chiu *Smile* Please keep in mind that suggestions made are meant to help, not to criticize.

*Idea* ERRORS: No grammatical or other mistakes were noticed. *Idea*

*Reading* SUGGESTIONS: None I can think of for improvement. *Reading*

*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION: The imagery used in describing the sport is awesome. You did a super job of expressing why you enjoy bowling so much. From speed of the ball to whether it is luck or ability of the participant, the poem is well written and a pleasure reading. *Star*

Sherri
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Review of Passion  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello H.C.Paye - All I Need *Angel* Please keep in mind that suggestions made are intended to he helpful. They are not meant to criticize your work in any way. *Smile*

*Idea* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No spelling or other mistakes were spotted. The only suggestion I have to offer is that I would use punctuation where needed in all of the lines being as it is used in most of them. *Idea*

*Sun* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Sun*

*Earth* OVERALL OPINION: The rhythm is terrific, and the imagery fantastic also. The title fits the poem perfectly, for every sentence relays lovely emotions that made this readers heart melt. Who could help but feel similarly about one who cares so much? *Earth*

Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Boat*Hello, Harry This review is being made on behalf of the SHOWERING ACTS OF JOY GROUP. *Smile*Please keep in mind that suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize in any way. *Smile*

*Questionb* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: Having read your work before, I was not surprised when no mistakes were spotted. *Thumbsup* There are no suggestions I feel would improve the item. *Questionb*

*Gold* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Gold*

*Clock* OVERALL OPINION: The imagery used in describing the animals and the settings is superb. I was impressed with so much information about the animals relayed in the poem. It was easy envisioning the large animals and the settings, and empathy at what the poachers do. As always, the poem is not only written well, but informative. *Clock*

Sherri
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Review of An Angel's Wing  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Brenpoet

*Vine1**Flower2**Vine2* Please keep in mind that the suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize in any way. *Smile*

*Questionb* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No mistakes were noticed, and there are no suggestions for improving the entry. *Questionb*

*Flower1* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Flower1*

*Gold* WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhythm is perfect, and the imagery and messages just as good. The first verse drew me into the poem as soon as the angel's wings filled your heart, and held my interest until the end. I do not think a reader here could not relate to your feelings about loss of loved ones, yet you managed to make the item inspiring. I commend you on a job well done. *Gold*

Sherri
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Review of Glory and Honor?  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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*Vine1**Heart**Vine2* Hello Duke-CastleChaos *Smile* Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are only the opinion of this reader, whose intention is to help, not to criticize your work in any way.

*Burstb* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: A comma should follow "but the truth is". "Glory" needs no capitalization. Other than that, there are no suggestions to offer for improvement. *Burstb*

*Woman**Man* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: The storyline is good from a point of view way, and the character's emotions expressed candidly. I liked that. *Woman**Man*

*Tulipv* OVERALL OPINION: You did a good job of relaying how the individual feels about technology and what is worth fighting for and what is not. The last two paragraphs summed up the ones before them in a way that sent chills up my spine because I ache for the numerous lives lost when there is war. *Tulipv*

Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Vine1**Heart**Vine2* {Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse *Smile* Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are only the opinion of this reader, whose intention is to help, not to criticize your work in any way.

*Burstb* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical, spelling, or other mistakes were noticed, and I cannot think of anything I feel would improve the forum. *Burstb*

*Woman**Man* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Woman**Man*

*Tulipv* OVERALL OPINION: This is a wonderful activity! The proceeds used to support groups and contests on the site. The tickets are reasonable priced, and the rules written in a way that cannot be misconstrued. The breakdown of the pot will prompt many to purchase some tickets to help support these fabulous groups or win part of it themselves. Good luck with the activity. *Tulipv*

*Gold* Sherri
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Review of LOVE ENDURES!  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Butterflyo* Hello Jaiam *Smile* Keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize in any way.

*Questionb* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No spelling, punctual, or other mistakes were spotted, and the only suggestion I have to offer is that "it" is used too closely together in the first verse. However, I cannot think of another word to replace it that would improve the entry. *Questionb*

*Rainbowl**Heart**Rainbowr* OVERALL THOUGHTS: The rhyming pattern is fantastic overall, and the imagery used in defining the sad man and his settings excellent. I could easily picture him standing on the seashore awaiting his love, and the last verse was both heartbreaking and romantic in a tragic sort of way. The image before the entry is an additional plus in my opinion. *Rainbowl**Heart**Rainbowr*

*Boat* Sherri
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Review of dot. dot. dot.  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello A.M.~~~ back... *Angel* Please keep in mind that suggestions made are intended to he helpful. They are not meant to criticize your work in any way. *Smile*

*Idea* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: Other than "unheard" and "words" not rhyming, the rhythm is terrific. No comma is needed after "your art". There are not any other suggestions for improving the entry. *Idea*

*Sun* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Sun*

*Earth* OVERALL OPINION: The imagery used in relaying how a writers Muse sometimes fails him/her is fantastic. I agree that exposing our work to others is difficult because reviewers can be critical, however, constructive criticism helps us pen the good items mentioned in your poem. It is my opinion that something good can be found in almost all writers work and needs to be pointed out also so a writers dreams will not be disillusioned or fade as stated in your entry. Great poem! *Earth*

*Angel* Sherri
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Review of Lovesong  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Vine1**Flower2**Vine2* Please keep in mind that the suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize in any way. *Smile*

*Questionb* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No spelling, punctual, or other mistakes were spotted, and the only suggestion I have to offer is that I would use punctuation where needed in every line being as it is used in some of them. *Questionb*

*Flower1* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Flower1*

*Gold* WHAT I THOUGHT: the rhythm is good, and the emotions relayed wonderfully. My personal favorite is the second verse. I could easily picture you humming a tune to your loved one under the stars and moon. Beautifully written! *Gold*

*Snow3* Sherri
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Review of How can this be?  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello oh my *Smile* Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to be critical in any way.

*Burstr* TITLE: I think the title is appropriate for the item. *Burstr*

*Exclaim* ERRORS: A question mark should replace the period following "sustains". A comma should come after "and destroy us". *Exclaim*

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS: Just a humble opinion, but I think that after the comma that follows "that is nurture" the sentence would read better if worded something like "and solace" with the other words before it being deleted. It would still have the same effect. *Idea*

*People*CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *People*

*Starstruck* MY THOUGHTS: You did a remarkable job of expressing how writing can alleviate numerous emotions. I do not think a reader/writer here will not be able to receiving a soothing feeling when jotting down his/her emotions. *Starstruck*

*Hourglass* Sherri
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Review of In Elysian Fields  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello kim *Angel* Please keep in mind that suggestions made are intended to he helpful. They are not meant to criticize your work in any way. *Smile*

*Idea* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical or other mistakes were noticed, and I cannot think of anything I feel would improve the entry. *Idea*

*Sun* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Sun*

*Earth* OVERALL OPINION: I loved the poem! The rhythm is great, and the imagery dynamite as well. I like mythology, and Pegasus is a favorite. The entry was almost like reading a short story. I had no personal favorites. The entire poem is well written and awesome. *Earth*

*Hourglass* Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello artemis53 *Angel* Welcome to Writing.com! Please keep in mind that suggestions made are intended to he helpful. They are not meant to criticize your work in any way. *Smile*

*Idea* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: A comma should follow "are we there yet", "cerebral hierarchy", and "her college education". Commas should also come after "during the day" and "be gathered". Commas should also follow "six year old" and "thought the latter". Several others like these noticed throughout the essay as well, however, I still thought it was very good. *Idea*

*Sun* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Sun*

*Earth* OVERALL OPINION: Some valid points about the differences in children are made. I thought it was great that your mother shared activities and steered her children in the right direction. That is not an easy task, and I commend her for it. It is easy to see why you followed in her footsteps. You and your siblings are fortunate to have been blessed with such a great parent. *Earth*

WRITE ON!

Sherri
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Review of My Angel  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello rl *Angel* Please keep in mind that suggestions made are intended to he helpful. They are not meant to criticize your work in any way. *Smile*

*Idea* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: The rhyming pattern is off in the second verse, although I still thought the poem was very good. I also think following a pattern using the same syllable pattern would improve the poem, but this is only a humble opinion. *Idea*

*Sun* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Sun*

*Earth* OVERALL OPINION: Overall, the rhythm is good. The poem expresses genuine romance and love. I liked that. The poem is summed up beautifully in the last verse. Keep that fire burning! *Earth*

*Vine1**Suitheart**Vine2* Sherri
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Review of Christmas Eve  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Brenpoet *Ornament4r*

Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize.

*Santahat* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No mistakes were spotted, and I cannot think of anything that would improve the poem. *Santahat*

*Snowman* CHARACTERS AND STORYLINE: N/A *Snowman*

*Stardavid* OVERALL THOUGHTS: The rhythm and imagery are excellent. You painted a beautiful poetic picture of the true meaning of Christmas and all that He sacrificed for us. The image that comes before the poem is lovely, adding to the beauty of the item. Very well written! *Stardavid*

Holiday blessings,
Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Ken! *Stockingb*

Hello *Smile* Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to be critical in any way.

*Burstr* TITLE: Fits the sonnet perfectly. *Burstr*

*Exclaim* ERRORS: No mistakes were noticed. *Exclaim*

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS: There are none to offer for improvement. *Idea*

*People*CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *People*

*Starstruck* MY THOUGHTS: The form used is superb, and the rhythm and imagery just as good. I could almost hear the whispering winds as the flowers danced. The notes following the entry are an additional plus for those unfamiliar with some of the terms and form used, and the image before the entry a lovely reminder of nature's beauty. *Starstruck*

Merry Christmas, Ken!

Sherri
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Review of Sparrow  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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hello April Desiree-I'm back! *Stockingg*

*Exclaim* Please remember that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize.

*Pencil* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical or other mistakes were noticed, and I cannot think of anything that would improve the item. *Pencil*

*Coffeer* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Coffeer*

*Butterflyr* WHAT I THOUGHT: The imagery is terrific, and the rhythm just as good. My heart went out to the sparrow, yet I found her peace uplifting after her ordeal with the buzzards. The poem is a combination of sadness and serenity. Well written poem! *Butterflyr*

Happy holiday wishes,
*Ornament3g* Sherri
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Review of Lurking Raven  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Dave *Candycaneg* Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to be critical in any way.

*Burstr* TITLE: Fits the entry perfectly. *Burstr*

*Exclaim* ERRORS: No spelling, grammatical, or other mistakes were spotted. *Exclaim*

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS: There are none to offer for improvement. *Idea*

*People*CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *People*

*Starstruck* MY THOUGHTS: The rhythm is good, and the imagery terribly dark, yet just as good in my opinion. True enough, the harbinger remains until we have taken our last breath. You did a great job of relaying the mortality of individuals. There is no escaping the inevitable. *Starstruck*

Happy holidays,
*Ornament3g* Sherri
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Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Crista Jackson *Santahat*

*Vine1**Flower2**Vine2* Please keep in mind that the suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize in any way. *Smile*

*Questionb* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No spelling, grammatical, or other mistakes were spotted, and there are no suggestions to offer for improving the entry. *Questionb*

*Flower1* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Flower1*

*Gold* WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhythm is excellent, and the imagery terribly sad, but good. The pain felt is relayed in a way that made my heart ache. Abuse of any kind is horrible, leaving scars like the ones written about in the poem within heart and mind forever. What I liked the most was the strength found in the last verse. I pray you will free yourself from the abuse. *Gold*

Happy holiday wishes,
*Xmastree* Sherri
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Review of Vlad's Wife  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello April Desiree-I'm back! *Ornament4b*

Please keep in mind that suggestions made are meant to help, not to be critical in any way.

*Santahat* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: "ducked at" should be "ducked by" instead. A comma should follow "from her head", "with caution", "the battles", and "Arges River". Other than these, I cannot think of any suggestions to offer for improving the short story. *Santahat*

*Stardavid* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: The characters are defined well, especially Jusztina, and the storyline good. *Stardavid*

*Xmastree* OVERALL OPINION: I was impressed by the pace of the story and the imagery used in describing the siege and settings. I only wish you had written what Jusztina saw when looking out the window. I liked her determination to avoid enslavement, although she certainly chose a drastic way of avoiding it. *Xmastree*

Merry Christmas Wishes,
*Stockingg* Sherri
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Review of Silent Rain  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello The Lone One *Candycaneg*

Please keep in mind that suggestions made are meant to help, not to be critical in any way.

*Santahat* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical, spelling, or other mistakes were noticed. Just a humble opinion, but I think "drip" is used far too much. Cutting it in some of the lines, (not all), would still have the same effect without being as repetitive. *Santahat*

*Stardavid* CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A *Stardavid*

*Xmastree* OVERALL OPINION: I think most of us have felt similarly at one point in our lives. The poem relays the depression and loneliness felt in a way that I found heartbreaking. Losing a loved one is difficult to overcome in most cases like yours. The last sentence broke my heart. I hope things are looking up for you now, and wish you the best. *Xmastree*

Happy holiday wishes,

*Ornament4g* Sherri *Candycaner*
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Review of The Only Choice  
Review by SHERRI GIBSON
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Ironworker *Candycaneg*

Keep in mind that suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize.

*Ornament1r* ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: A comma should follow "was not working". One should also come after "floated closer". "his " is used too closely together in the sentence beginning with "Taking a deep breath". Just a humble opinion, but I think it would read better like so: "Taking a deep breath, he established composure, and...". No comma is needed after "asks himself", however, one should follow "short of panic" and "Studying the damage". I think "He could watch them grow" would read better if worded this way: "He watched them...". The sentence beginning with "Turning quickly to see..." read off to me. Perhaps something like: "Turning quickly, he saw a young man...with a comma following "his crewmen". A comma should come after "Who are you...". "mirror like" should be mirror-like". *Ornament1r*

*Santahat* CHARACTERS: They are defined well. *Santahat*

*Xmastree* STORYLINE: Moves well, and enjoyable. *Xmastree*

*Ornament2g* MY OPINION: The settings are described as well as the characters, especially in the first and nineteenth paragraphs. The choice the commander made was one I almost knew was coming being as it was stressed that he was an explorer. Good story! *Ornament2g*

Wishes for a Merry Christmas,
*Stockingr* Sherri
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