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Hello 
Thank you for your entry in 
SUGGESTIONS: None I think would improve the entry. 
CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A 
OVERALL THOUGHTS: You did a splendid job of using the prompt for this week. The imagery is absolutely superb! I could almost feel the brisk air as you walked under the crescent-shaped moon, and chills were felt when the demon and his minions appeared. OUTSTANDING HALLOWEEN POEM! 
Sherri
ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical or other mistakes were noticed, although the rhythm is off in a couple of the verses. Other than that, I cannot think of anything that would improve the poem. 
PERSONAL FAVORITES: You did a great job of posing the inquiries. I do not think time or contemplation of most things are relevant to Him. I believe He knows what will transpire long before they do. The poem expresses thoughts we might have in my opinion. I liked that. 
Keep in mind that any suggestions made are meant to help, not to be critical in any way.
CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A 
Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize your work in any way. 
ERRORS: No grammatical, spelling, or other mistakes were noticed. 
SUGGESTIONS: None I can think of for improvement. 
MY THOUGHTS: You did a wonderful job of using the prompt for this week. With all that your teacher has to deal with, it is easy to see why she feels no fear, especially when dealing with angry parents and lazy students. Your teacher's reasons for why she keeps the occupation is inspiring. We could use more dedicated teachers with her goals. 
"just had" before "a hangover" and add "from" after "hangover". A comma should come after "night before". I would change "his first" to "the first" being as "His" is used too closely together in the sentence. A comma should follow "nerdy", and a period after "pants". A comma should follow "Chelsea's dad". I also think Mister is used too closely together. You might want to consider replacing it with 
PLOT: The storyline is good overall. With some editing, I think you would be off to a super start. 
It was easy picturing the lovely garden. I could almost feel the warm breeze and see the trickling water. This place sounds like a piece of Heaven. 
This is the third and final review won by you in 
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No mistakes were noticed, and I cannot think of anything that would improve the poem. 
CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A 
OVERALL OPINION: Like the ones read before it, the imagery is absolutely wonderful. What I thought was going to be a very depressing poem, turned out to have an inspiring end. The poor man was certainly fortunate to have the visitor come. He was indeed an angel of mercy. 
Hello, 
This is the second of three reviews won by you in 
SUGGESTIONS: None I think would improve the poem. 
Like you, writing is my passion. I like your honesty when letting readers know about what you write about, and although relayed a bit harshly at the end, you made your point. That is something I can deal with. 
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical, punctual, or other mistakes were spotted, and I cannot think of anything that would improve the poem. 
CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A 
MY THOUGHTS: The rhythm is perfect, and the emotions relayed just as well. You did a wonderful job or summing up the definition of present. I think everyone wishes they could alter things in their past, however, good intentions and all, sadly it cannot be done. I enjoyed the entire poem, but my favorite lines are the ones about the past being history, the future a mystery, being content with what is, and looking at each day being heaven sent. The poem is uplifting, and was a pleasure to read. 
OVERALL THOUGHTS: The first thing that sprang to mind when reading this was that you must have came across some bad reviewers. If so, I feel for you, because there are so many good ones here also. I do not think poetry reviewers intend to be so critical, but to help a writer instead. Some may sit high on opinions as written, but like everything else, reviews vary. 
Keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize in any way.
Hello, 
This review is being made on behalf of the Rising Stars Member To Member Group.