Hi C.E.,
This is a wonderful piece. The tone is full of worry and fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker can help Kelly. They will read to the last word to find out. In the piece, someone meets a deeply hurt person and attempts to help them heal. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Thewriterwitch,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with confusion and longing. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone struggling through a difficult, heartbreaking time and still coming up short. I have been through a situation like this so many times, and I have always found a way through. I read to the last word to see if the speaker did as well. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi CareBearLes,
This is a fantastic script. The tone is full of desperation and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Elsie will overcome her alcoholism and become a better mother to Susie. They will read to the last word to find out. The script is about a woman who struggles with mental demons, alcoholism and being a single mother. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like rea people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the script. The script is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi BEAR,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is apathetic and dark. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is depressed but are ignoring the situation. I have so much sympathy for the speaker in this poem. They need help and read to the last word to see if they got it. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi RAIDER XL,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the piece. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about your upbringing in Kenya. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi JMW,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow and despair. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who wants desperately to catch the attention of someone they are in love with but keep getting ignored. We have all experienced this at one point or another. I am filled with sympathy speaker and read to the last word to see if they catch the eye of the person they love. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Emiline,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. They will begin to read to know more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention on you and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about your preference of writing darker pieces about aggressive emotions. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. What a person writes certainly says something about them as a person. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Eight-7,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of nervousness and hope. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The story is about three men who fight against a polar bear after their ship is wrecked in an accident. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Naomi,
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is full of excitement and awe. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the mountains will be the only obstacle in the speaker's journey. The will read to the last word to find out. In the piece a traveler must get over a series of mountains to progress on their journey. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
Hi Isedora,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive and full of anger. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is done with a person in their life who refused to support them as they pursued their dreams. I have had to build my dreams without support from friends or family, so I really identify with the speaker in this poem. I loved this poem, and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Drake,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is dark and full of heart breaking sadness. The poem is about someone who is mourning someone they love who has died, and they are having problems accepting the death. I am hoping that the speaker will come to terms with their loss and move on to a better life. I read to the final word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Eddie,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. The reader knows that they will be reading about the show Saturday Night Live but not much else. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about how boring and unfunny this year's season has been. You have written the article from personal experience. The reader is delighted with the look they get at one of your pass times. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use an informal, light style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Jay,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is light but still formal. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about defeats that are successes in the end. I have always believed that something good does, sometimes, come out of something unpleasant. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi smitch,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of frenzy and nervousness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the boys will effectively carry out their switch. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about high school students who committing identity theft in a very unusual way. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Chris,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with the reader being told how the boys have generally spent their days. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the boys. The reader will read on to find out how they are. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are wondering how the boys will do in the next phase of their training. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:
1)his personnel appearance-should read "his personal appearance."
2)In a few places you have neglected to begin a sentence with a capital letter. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi MJones,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is slightly self-deprecating. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who calls 911 because they see a red sky and realize how foolish this was. I chuckled as I read this poem picturing the speaker in their embarrassment. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The Haiku poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The meter is consistent from line to line. There is a wonderful rhythm here. You have concentrated on one emotion here-embarrassment. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You do not use punctuation here, but it is not needed. You have used grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Isedora,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of frustration and apathy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone suffering through a mundane existence that is driving them crazy. I feel just like this from time to time, and it is not pleasant. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Beejay,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. I commonly use certain words the wrong way, and I began to read right away to see what words you included. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses is completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about words that are commonly confused because of similar pronunciation or spelling. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Ken,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is visited in the night by a frightening specter from his childhood. I am wondering if the specter will hurt the person in the poem. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Cobwebby Space Reader Riendeer,
This is a fantastic review. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the review. They will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the review without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the review. They will read to the last word. You have given the reader a review of a children's tale of a family and their dog. The reader wants to know more about this tale and where to find it. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the review tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Tim,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about having to toil while keeping in mind that a brighter future is ahead. This poem resonates with me since I started my own business and have to keep this very thing in mind when things become difficult. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Joey,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal but tinged with joy as well. It takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a Thanksgiving spent in Florida. I have always spent Thanksgiving in cold and snow. I would love to spend one in a warmer climate. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The Sonnet poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Francis,
This is a fantastic essay. The title is direct and to the point. It tells the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the essay. The essay is personal to you, and the reader will begin to read immediately to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and completely focuses it on you and the topic. They will read to the last word. You have written about why you write and your thoughts about your writing. The reader is delighted with the look they get at your writing perspective. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Swapna,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with joy and wonder. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about celebrating the morning sun. There have been only a few times I have seen the sunrise, but there is such a special feeling when you get to see it. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but it is not needed here. You have used grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Kenzie,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. The reader will begin to read right away to find out more. You introduce the topic with a quote about survivors. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about how you survived a life filled with abuse. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a personal, emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
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