Hi Ken,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who wants to find beauty in their mundane, working existence. I find something beautiful and exciting in everyday. I think there is always something to find and discover. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The RemyLa Rhyme poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Violet,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of annoyance and curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what kind of magic ability Princess Lillian has developed. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a Princess who is being enrolled in a school of magic but the reason why is unclear to her. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:
1)She hesitated, unsure how hoe to continue.-"hoe" seems to be not necessary here.
2)You have neglected to either indent or double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Chynn,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about a strike was held by Uber, Lyft and Doordash drivers. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Ashok,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article will actually talk about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on you and the article. They will read to the last word. You have given the reader an introduction to you. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Colby,
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is formal. It suits the plot and piece very well. The reader is wondering if the woman will keep having a calm reaction to getting older. They will read to the last word to find out. The piece is about a woman who decides to celebrate getting older. The piece is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The piece concentrates on the woman who is growing older, and she comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
Hi Brenda,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is light and full of excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a little girls who is preparing for her role in the platy for the Annual Girl Guides' Show. I am hoping that her play goes well, and I am caught up in her excitement as I read. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Dr. MC Gupta,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem, someone is left by the one they love. They only things they have are two roses and bitter memories. We have all gone through something like this. I have so much sympathy for the speaker, and read to the last word to see if they would be alright. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Marius,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is melancholy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem you compare yourself your circumstances to that of the God Apollo. As I read my heart goes out to you. I hope that you eventually find a way to reach out to others and find a way to love. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Ashok,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about when you opened a cafe\library but closed the business when a customer gave you a remark that was uncalled for. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Rootcreator,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. You have a point to make here, and you intend to make it. The poem is about someone frustrated with the general selfishness and avarice of the people in this world. I try to see the good in people and believe that all the life is precious, so I hope the speaker finds a different outlook as time goes on. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Grace,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about how you keep reflecting on your mistakes and focusing on the guilt you have about them. I have tried to live without regrets, but was never that successful. I do think of my mistakes as learning experiences, though. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi JAEman02,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with anxiety as Morgause comes for Arthur causing him a great deal of confusion. The reader is wondering what will happen to Arthur if he goes with his sister. They will read on to find out. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for your reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep al the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi John,
The is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Day will be found guilty of the charges. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man tried in a rather silly charge. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)You have neglected to either indent or double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
Hi Elisa,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive and full of frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem comments on Florida's people and, overall atmosphere and economy. I have never been to Florida and have heard just that it is hot most of the time. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Seuzz,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if this crew will get off the planet without getting seriously hurt in the overpowering light and dryness. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about the crew of a rocket ship who are stranded on a planet under an overwhelming star and the dry conditions of the planet itself. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi St. Francis II,
This is a fantastic piece. The title enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to right away to find out. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. You have written about your childhood development. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece. Tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi zola,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of hope and curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Alex will find the answers he seeks now that he has met Mark. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a troubled man who meets someone he believes will be a mentor and help him find the answers he seeks in life. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. Mark speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
Hi ToWhrythe,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is melancholy and introspective. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will reconnect with the village they are visiting. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about someone revisiting a village they were in in the past. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
Hi Sage,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of disappointment and frustration. In the poem, a man steps in and becomes a child's stepfather, giving them the stability they need then makes a woman the most important person in his life. I am hoping that the stepfather and child can mend their relationship sooner or later. I read to the last word to find out if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem, There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Jace,
This review comes with a huge thank you for reviewing my article. This is a fantastic essay. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the article. The reader will begin to reader to find out more. You introduce the topic by explaining to the reader exactly what the article will be about. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on this topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about your writing goals for the year. The reader is delighted with they get at your goals. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi lucifer,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about how a champion is fundamentally a fool. The reader is wondering why you feel this way they will read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Redtowrite,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a woman who takes up dancing to impress a man she is in love with. The reader is wondering if this woman will get the notice of the man she loves. They will read to the last word to find out. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem. The poem has a unique rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Inkwell,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about what purpose of a Dreamcatcher. My husband has a Dreamcatcher which he got from a friend of his. It is beautiful and I have always been fascinated with it. It so beautiful. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi HillBillyDale,
This is a fantastic essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You introduce the topic by giving the reader some information about you. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on you and the topic. They will read to the last word. You have written about your thoughts on the U.S. becoming a Theocrary. The reader us delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organizes style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Christoph,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why the plant is using more energy than it should. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who is taxed with the responsibility of finding out why the plant he works at is using more energy than normal. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:
1) have been less productive lately since the death of my sister and I have been taking longer cigarette breaks.-There should be a comma after "sister".
2) In a few places you neglected to put quotation marks around dialogue. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
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