Hi Roari,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a girl who takes up dancing and achieves a great deal from it, including a lot of joy, just like her grandmother knew she would. I have always tried to achieve everything I set out to achieve, and I am very happy for the girl in the poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Anna,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about humans really proclaiming who they are. I believe everyone should be proud of who they are. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Damon,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of confusion and agitation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why the government has asked Hannah to help them. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a university instructor who is asked, by the U.S. government for her help. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi DonutWriter,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what to expect from the piece. Fairy bread sounded so tasty, it seemed like something that might be a sweet treat. I began to read right away to find out how to make it. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have shared a recipe for Fairy Bread. You have written the piece from your own experience. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. I can't wait to try this recipe. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Darken_Graves,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of pain and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone contemplating the woman they love leaving and the pain it will cause them, but, at the same time they know that her staying would only cause her more pain. I hope that the speaker has the strength to let this person go. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Jake,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is light but tinged with longing. The contrast takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who only wants the person they love in their lives for Christmas. I am feeling sorry for the speaker and hope that their love comes back to them as I read. I loved this poem and read to the last word. You use the free verse poetic form in this poem, and it works very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Anish,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the article. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about a day you and your wife were enjoying tea together in a very tranquil setting. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Joey,
This is a fantastic article. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the article. I love novels and stories that involve magic and began to read right away to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the article. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about how you use magic in your own writing. The reader is delighted with the look they get at your thinking process during your writing. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Keaton,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is dark and full of anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a child locked away in a tower because of a disability with only a flower. I am wondering who did this to this child and if someone will find them. I read to the last word to find out if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Queen NormaJean,
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is filled with nervousness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if George and Janie will find anything scary in the cellar. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about two children who go exploring a cellar which seems frightening. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Youdi,
This is a fantastic first chapter. The chapter opens with intense emotions as the main character watches the one they love leave. The reader is completely drawn into the emotions and wants to know more about this relationship. Wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi Dia,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anxiety and despair. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who believes they are not worth anything because of the messages they have received from others. I used to feel like this, so I really identify with the speaker here. I read to the last word to see if they formed a better opinion of themselves. I loved this poem. The free verse poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Lynda,
This is a fantastic essay. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the essay. I love lighthouses and was more than anxious to begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by giving the reader a brief description of a harrowing incident at see. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about the function of lighthouses and how they work. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Poppy C,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of confusion and fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the Gnomes are in danger of being discovered by the humans. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a family of Gnomes worry about what to do when they discover that their presence in the world might be discovered by humans when their home becomes visible to a child. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Ironworker,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering how David ended up in the predicament he is in. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who wakes up to find he is inhabiting the body of a woman. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi BEAR,
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is light but tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why the speaker would ask such an auspicious question of The Groundhog. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about someone who goes to the groundhog to ask if the world is coming to an end. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Tim,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the attributes which one must forge to meet their God in Heaven one day. I believe in Heaven, and try to live my life like God wants. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Harvey,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive and filled with despondency. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who no longer cares about themselves or others. I am wondering, as I read, how the speaker came to this emotional state. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Karani,
This is a wonderful article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article actually contains. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the article. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about the points of interest for any tourist wanting to visit a town in Italy. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1) You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi TheactualTreasure,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what is in the box that Lily has found. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a young girl who finds a necklace which transports her to another, strange world from which she has to find her way back. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue, but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
Hi VanillaSoftArt,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with delight and anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the girls will enjoy their massages. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a pair of girls who get a massage from a guy with a foot fetish. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi The Key Mightier,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of alarm and shock. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker was imagining things. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about someone who sees something unexplainable happen to a woman reading a comic book in a diner. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The speaker speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Tia,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anxiety and tension. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a time in your life when you just had too much going through your head and just wanted to shut down for a while. I have felt like that too many times to count. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi TheBusmanPoet,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. You have written about how finding the good in people will outweigh the bad that exists. I focus on the good in people. I choose to see the good in people. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi C,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about what home means to you. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)In one section you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
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