Hi Doctor007,
This is a wonderful piece. The tone is melancholy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the relationship between the speaker and his wife will endure. They will read to the last word to find out. The piece is about a couple who has found a comfortable relationship beyond romance as time has passed. The piece is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
Hi CBH,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with hope. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Amine and Yassine will get passed their humble beginnings and achieve the stability they are lacking. They will read to the last words to find out. In the story, a quest for a short time of happiness leads to tragedy. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue, but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Fyn,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone starts off full of melancholy and sorrow but ends in joy and fond remembrance. The contrast captures all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a sad moment of a friend's passing that turns joyful as her friends remember and celebrate her life. I think that all funerals should end up like this one. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Prosperous Snow,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of embarrassment and humiliation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a flaw in a movie clip which causes embarrassment for the movie's maker. You have based the poem on a movie you watched. The poem has a unique rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Nemesis,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with vivid description. This grabs all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the chapter. They will read on. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail is vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the chapter. The reader is wondering if Liam will be able to cope with his family long term. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)“always a pleasure to meet a friend of my son.” He released her hand.-"always" should begin with a capital letter.
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi M.A.,
This is a fantastic first chapter. The chapter opens with vivid description. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the chapter. They will read on. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail is vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main characters and plot very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi Elliot,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about different types of birds and they relate to each other and the world around them. I love birds and was fascinated with this poem. I read to the last word. The poem has a unique rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. There is lovely description here. You can see the birds going about their business as you read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Frankie,
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is filled with confusion and apprehension. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what the nocturnal visitor wants of the speaker. They will read to the last word to find out. In the piece, someone is visited at night by a spectral man who seems to be sending a message but the message itself is incomprehensible to the person being visited, leaving them confused. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the thoughts and impressions of the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed her. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi PiriPica,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of pride and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a dragon who returns home after accomplishing a great feat. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The Terzanelle poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Nathan,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with impatience and anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Aliz will be able to make at least some friends and fit it. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a little vampire girl who is hoping to find someone to fit in with, someone like her. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Joey,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about a heartbreaking experience you had while working in Africa. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Elsa,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with love and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is loved and well remembered. I feel that the person in the poem was a wonderful person and touched many lives when they lived. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Angelica,
This is a fantastic contest page. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. The reader thinks that the entries will include monsters of some sort, but they intrigued and will read on to find out how much more involved it is. You have introduced the page by telling the reader what the contest is all about. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it on the contest and the page. They will read to the last word. You have set out your rules in a straight forward way. The reader knows exactly what they have to do to enter and enjoy this contest. You have listed your prompts very clearly. You have given the reader an example of the entries that have won this contest. The reader has a good indication of what you want from the entries. You have listed your prizes in a concise, logical fashion. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the contest. You have listed your judges, donations and how to make a donation. Very helpful. The page is very organized and easy to navigate. Great job.
Hi Roari,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a girl who takes up dancing and achieves a great deal from it, including a lot of joy, just like her grandmother knew she would. I have always tried to achieve everything I set out to achieve, and I am very happy for the girl in the poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Anna,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about humans really proclaiming who they are. I believe everyone should be proud of who they are. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Damon,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of confusion and agitation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why the government has asked Hannah to help them. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a university instructor who is asked, by the U.S. government for her help. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi DonutWriter,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what to expect from the piece. Fairy bread sounded so tasty, it seemed like something that might be a sweet treat. I began to read right away to find out how to make it. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have shared a recipe for Fairy Bread. You have written the piece from your own experience. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. I can't wait to try this recipe. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Darken_Graves,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of pain and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone contemplating the woman they love leaving and the pain it will cause them, but, at the same time they know that her staying would only cause her more pain. I hope that the speaker has the strength to let this person go. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Jake,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is light but tinged with longing. The contrast takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who only wants the person they love in their lives for Christmas. I am feeling sorry for the speaker and hope that their love comes back to them as I read. I loved this poem and read to the last word. You use the free verse poetic form in this poem, and it works very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Anish,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the article. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about a day you and your wife were enjoying tea together in a very tranquil setting. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Joey,
This is a fantastic article. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the article. I love novels and stories that involve magic and began to read right away to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the article. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about how you use magic in your own writing. The reader is delighted with the look they get at your thinking process during your writing. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Keaton,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is dark and full of anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a child locked away in a tower because of a disability with only a flower. I am wondering who did this to this child and if someone will find them. I read to the last word to find out if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Queen NormaJean,
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is filled with nervousness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if George and Janie will find anything scary in the cellar. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about two children who go exploring a cellar which seems frightening. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Youdi,
This is a fantastic first chapter. The chapter opens with intense emotions as the main character watches the one they love leave. The reader is completely drawn into the emotions and wants to know more about this relationship. Wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi Dia,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anxiety and despair. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who believes they are not worth anything because of the messages they have received from others. I used to feel like this, so I really identify with the speaker here. I read to the last word to see if they formed a better opinion of themselves. I loved this poem. The free verse poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
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