|Hi Kip, you asked me to re-review this, so here I am! (Better late than never, right?) You asked me to check for grammar mistakes. I saw just a few minor ones:
"The last of the Mohicans."
* capitalize Last
of my life.
I do freely and willing
* should be a line-space between those two.
The colonel jumped from his chair his face flushed.
* The colonel jumped from his chair[,] his face flushed.
"Calm down colonel. I haven't touched her. Be reasonable, sir," releasing him,
* Calm down[,] colonel.
Be reasonable, sir," releasing him
* Be reasonable, sir," I said, releasing him
"Wonderful, William! He said excitedly.
* "Wonderful, William!["] he said excitedly.
* I liked this descriptive line:
I would succumb to the evil passion that tore at my sanity with ravenous claws.
* I also liked this whole paragraph, in the evil portents it shows:
I know the Devil's monstrous pen is quite capable of ...
I thought that your story captured well the old-fashioned flavor of the times. I like your protag & his sweetheart. I liked that she could laugh at her piano teacher glad to miss out on the "God-awful racket."
Well done, my friend!