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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama Author IconMail Icon
Review! *Angelic*

I am reviewing your item because it caught my attention while I was perusing the Comedy Genre page.


Initial Thoughts:

Your title and brief description made me want to read about a plot-pitching dentist. *Laugh*

Further Thoughts:

I got a chuckle out of the poor patient being a captive audience to the dentist's ideas for a screen play. He couldn't talk with a hand and instruments in his mouth.

Parting Thoughts:

I laughed at the end of the story when I found out who the patient was. Evidently that dentist had reached him. Oh, my, to think the dentist didn't get any credit for the top grossing movies in their time. *Laugh*

Conclusion:

I found this story amusing and it fits within the subject matter of my upcoming Comedy Newsletter, due to be out Wednesday. Thus, your item will be highlighted. *Ha*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review! *Angelic*

I am reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the comedy genre page.

First Impression:

It's a curious description that just calls a reader into the poem.

Further Impressions:

When the dentist can't fix the problem with a tooth, trouble is forthcoming!

Your poem had great rhythm and rhyme, and beyond the technical stuff -- it had good humor. Now you see, that's what I was looking for!

Parting Thoughts:

Loved the ending! That Leprechaun took the bait, and problem solved! It's a good idea to brush up on the Irish folklore. A golden opportunity, I'd say!

Conclusion:

Your poem will fit fine with this week's upcoming Comedy Newsletter. It's about going to the dentist office. *Ha*

Thus, I am highlighting your poem. The newsletter is due out on Wednesday.

Have a wonderful day, and write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama Author IconMail Icon
Review!

I found your item while perusing the comedy genre and looking for dentist related topics. Yours filled that curiosity splendidly. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

The story of taking 25 kids on a "field trip" to the dentist hospital in order to actually have them participate as dental patients, had me sitting on the edge of my chair.

I have been a volunteer multiple times when my kids were young, going on these field trips with a classroom full of youngsters. It mostly uneventful in the way that none of the kids were going to be anywhere near a place where a vampire may go to get his teeth sharpened. So, I guess it was a relatively easy job for me. *Ha*

Nice job bringing in a character who has the immediate ability to calm children down with her jolliness!

Observation:

"he proceeded to tell them of the torture instruments the dentists themselves would force in to their mouths." [into their mouths]


Parting Thoughts:

I have to give Ernie credit. Driving a busload of 6-year-olds deserves a medal of patience! He was really great at keeping his nerves steady and blocking out most of the uprising on the bus while keeping the bus safely on the road. Kudos, Ernie! *Ha*

Conclusion:

Your story was an amusing read and relevant to my next week's Comedy Newsletter, thus will be highlighted there! *Bigsmile*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Initial Impressions:

The "DIY" part of the title brought my mind to the Hobby-Craft" Genre part of the prompt for June. Adding Romance to the brief description, let me know that there would be some twisted spin above and beyond nail bagging! *Ha*


The Characters:

Deborah, the divorcee seeking the right man to marry, while hiding her considerable financial worth.

Chad, is quite the interesting do-it-yourself person. Not only does he build and renovate his mansion, he has quite the IQ for several professions. Plus he has a charitable

Further Thoughts:

I enjoyed the weaving of humor within this awkward hopeful romance between the two. Deb, the more organized of the two, searched for answers to why Chad let the house fall into disrepair. While Chad had an answer for everything. He was so nonchalant about the jobs he undertook as well as the accomplishments. He was a Jack of all trades, including a software engineer. (And so much more! What a catch for Deb.)

Observation:

"written gambolling algorithms or online casinos"

Gambling is the word I believe you meant to use, whether American or British English.

*Right* Oxford Dictionary, Gambolling definition: "to skip or jump about in a playful manner; frolic"


Parting Thoughts:

Loved the quirkiness of this story, it's mixture of humor and seriousness rolled up together. You made him quite the DIY person who takes each project he attempts, seriously.


Conclusion:

Loved the ending. In all all seriousness, they guy does like to have fun. That's a plus in the dating department. But, is it Deb's idea of fun? *Laugh*, His riches are what they are, but he is who he is, a hopeless Do-it-yourselfer. *thumbsupg*

Well done, fun and twisted read! *Tools2*



Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there Sumojo

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Initial Impressions:

Your title tells the reader what to expect as they proceed delving into the story. Plus, as one who has been a collector myself over the years, it piqued my interest. *Bigsmile*

Further Impressions:

Edith is quite a dedicated collector of all things Royalty. She's so dedicated that it overrode her devotion to her husband.

The extent of her "hobby" permeated her family life with her children, somehow planned to be born at the time Queen Elizabeth's children. Coincidentally 3 boys and a girl born in the same order as Her Highness. Naturally they were named, Charles, Anne, Andrew and Edward.


Parting Thoughts/Suggestions:

Prompt was well-used as a collector is a hobbyist.

The character development could use a little more delving into.

*QuestionG* What possessed Edith to be so obsessed?

*QuestionY* Did it begin when she was a child because her mother might have been starstruck by the lives of Royals?

Just a little backstory to get the reader ready for Edith's grand entrance of collections.

Other areas could be trimmed a bit to allow for us to get to know Edith before she turned into a crazed fan, so-to-speak. I say "crazed" because she didn't care how much her family suffered embarrassment and worry due to her actions.


Conclusion:

All in all, a great use of the prompt and a satisfying ending. Edith definitely needed some elderly home care. *Laugh*

As stated above a paragraph, several lines, to develop Edith more as an introduction may have been good. I know the intent was to get as much of the collection obsession across to us readers. I believe you have done that handily. *CheckP*

Amusing story!



Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch



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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello there PureSciFiPlus

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First Impressions:

Title and the brief description let a reader know this story's theme is the craft/hobby of writing. I guess we writers can all agree with that as one of our favorite hobbies. *Smile*

Further Thoughts:

While reading through the story, I almost thought that the true hobby in this story seems to be moving. There was a whole lot of descriptions of two weeks worth of moving from the old place to the new place, and just a mere mention of writing or attempting to write.

One could suppose the art of writing is not easy to write about. It's the writing that makes it our craft, our hobby.

Further Observations:

This story is about trying to write each day amidst a labor intensive move from the old home to the new one. Writing is naturally interrupted, thus the hobby is placed on the back burner.

Observations:

"After Patrick James backs up to the opening garage, he and Douglas get out and goes go into their old place."

"Too tired after moving to the new house to get any writing done yesterday, thinks Douglas as he fights to keep his eyes open while Patrick drives them back to their old place." Awkwardly stated. This could be simplified.

"After getting everything, (no comma needed here)we wanted to get on the truck and in my SUV into the garage we started loading them up."

Further Observations & Suggestions:

There is a tendency to use a passive voice throughout the story. It doesn't capture the reader's attention as well as if you used an active voice.

Active voice in an of itself helps keep the story tighter. You don't want to get bogged down in word-heavy paragraphs when a few well-placed word choices would do the trick.


Further down in the story, they decide with only a couple days left to relinquish the premises, they decided to rent a U-Haul. Why not do that from the start? And, if that were the case, why were movers involved? Why use the SUV for a couple trips a day back and forth when either the movers or the rental of a U-Haul truck could have made it in one or two trips?


Parting Thoughts:

I found the flow of the story a bit difficult to follow. It appears in the early part of the story they were waiting for movers. Then, they are suddenly traveling back and forth from old place to new with their belongings in an SUV. If there were movers involved, why would they need to be moving so much stuff on their own? I started to thing that moving stuff was the real hobby. *Worry*

Curious, indeed as to how much stuff they had to move? It wasn't a whole family, just two guys. But perhaps I missed something along the way. The point is, I shouldn't have to wonder. You are the writer, you are the one who can make us readers see what you see in your mind as you wrote your story.

I think there's a little room for improvement here, and it begins with using an active voice and not getting hung-up in emphasizing that which prevented the writer from getting to his writing, but by actually describing a certain story being worked on, and showing irritation due to the hours of moving and traveling required.

Make the writing the predominant subject matter of the story by actually starting a few lines of whatever Douglas was writing during the time. Then show the need to do more packing and moving. Spending so much time on the road in the rain takes away from the heart of the story. Return Douglas back to the keyboard during a break typing out a couple more lines, etc. I think that would pull a reader, especially one who is a writer, right into the mind of Douglas. We would have a clearer image of this character.

Conclusion:

You had a good spin on the Hobby/Craft genre by trying to place a love for writing within the real world of everyday duties that tend to get in the way of such a beloved hobby.

Thank you again for entering the contest. You are being the writer you were hoping Douglas would be in the story. It was not one of the easiest prompts to write about. At least you made an attempt. Kudos! *PenB*




Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
zeHello there

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Initial Thoughts:

Your title and brief description grab the reader's attention. You make it an inviting hook to read the story. *Hook*

Further Impressions:

I love how you weave something spiritual and magical into this story. The blue crayon appeared to be one of the most used and needed in . The young lady so enjoyed sketching as a hobby, but received offers by folks who wanted her to sketch their portraits. *Painting*

The crayons took on a life of their own, whereby she couldn't sketch what was in her mind for that person's portrait she was doing. Somehow, it was a resemblance to the person, but also had a different something that couldn't be explained, until Grandma set her straight on art and money and love.

Parting Thoughts:

It's a wonderful lesson for the young artist. You can't put a price tag on love. *Crayons*

I couldn't find any errors that jumped out at me. The story flowed smoothly along keeping the reader's interest right to the end. The ending was heartwarming, indeed.

You did a fine job with the Hobby/Craft genre prompt. *ThumbsUpGreen*


Conclusion:

Beautifully, done! *PaintBrush*




Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch



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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello there Graham B.

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Initial Thoughts:

Love "Secrets" good way to hook a reader into the story in your brief description. I like that there is going to be a mystery to solve. *ThumbsUpGreen*

Further Impressions:

Charlie (aka Charlene) was the sheriff in the community in charge of taking inventory of the the deceased premises for probate court. Wilhelm crafted a beautiful boat , but there was no family to give it to.

The sheriff finds initials (M.G.) carved into the boat and tries to find who was that important to Wilhelm that could be the person to inherit the boat.

The town gossip lady Daphne Payne spoke to Charlie sending him over to Merritt Garner's house due to their "history" because Mimi, Merritt's wife was a known hussy and must have worked her charms on Wilhelm. *Shock2*

Additional Observations:

This story covers hobby, boat building for one. The neighbor played the violin. Music and craftsmanship. Hits the Hobby/Craft Genre in the prompt. *Thumbsup*

There's also a couple sun-stories going on as well. Someone was in a relationship with Wilhelm, and that was about to be unfolded.

Also, the sheriff's husband was pushing Charlie to sign divorce papers so he can be with the woman he loves and their son likes her as a future step mom.

Parting Thoughts:

Charlie signed the divorce papers in the sheriff's car. I felt like she came to grips with the ending of the marriage and was ready to move on.

The ending wrapped up quickly as the reader finds out the M.G. initials weren't Mimi Garnier's.

The ending was a bittersweet memorial with the boat being released in the lake.


Conclusion:


Nice job with the prompt. The story could have been tightened up a bit since there were a couple subplots taking place. It's difficult to give a history of the characters and have a mystery unfolding in a limited word count such as this.

You did manage to get the point of the story across to the reader, though, enough to fill in the blanks. *CheckG*




Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch



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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Review! *Angelic*

I came across this amusing story while perusing the Comedy Genre pages. *Ha*

First Impressions:

Loved the title and brief description. Good way to tempt a reader to plunge into the story. Curiosity is just that powerful and urge.

Further Thoughts:

I so enjoyed this story written in the colloquial dialect of the area. It painted vivid images in my mind's eye. It was difficult not put a face on the grandma and the almost white cat. *Laugh*

Good way to connect with the readers and pull them into the story as if they are right there.

Parting Thoughts:

This was such a humorous story, rich in detail and imagery. That poor cat! *Laugh* The description of a baptism by tobacco spit really hits the funny bone. Being a comedy lover, you hit all the things I look for as a classic tale twisted around comedic moments that just kept flowing on.

Conclusion:

Your story is classic, it made me laugh ... Therefore, I am highlighting this in this week's WDC Comedy Newsletter, due out tomorrow. Hope you subscribe to the Comedy Newsletter so it shows up in your email.

Until next time--write on, laugh on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your blog as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering the June blogging contest, *Bigsmile*

Qualities I enjoy:

It's a glimpse into one's life
Holds interest with subject matter discussed
Mixture of Real life OR all real life -- Not completely fiction
Eye appeal, relevant photos or videos, etc.

Your entries were very in tune with those qualities. *BoxCheckB*

Subject Matter:

You give a reader a fine account of traveling in Portugal, and where to stay and the costs that could be estimated.

People:

You introduce us to the people you have stayed with, met on tour, and visited their establishments. It's as if we have met those folks in person.


Real Life Events:

Bingo! Loved the touring and the sharing of both good times and difficult times due to illness.

Imagery!

I enjoyed the images you included within the blog.


Conclusion:

Well done and quite informative!

Until next time--blog on!

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WebWitch *Witch*


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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering June's blogging contest. *Bigsmile*

I have enjoyed spending time reading through your entries, from gardening, to your favorite Chinese restaurant, and your son's birthday stop at the mall with a game purchase that ended up being a pirated copy. You did a good job, Mom, in helping him get a refund and reporting it.

The final entry was very heartwarming. God bless you for stopping to help that elderly woman. You have a kind heart. Yes, I'd like to know their secret to longevity, as well! *Shock2*

Thank you for sharing a part of your world with us in June.

Hope to see you entering June 2023 to share more adventures!

Until next time--blog on!

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WebWitch *Witch*


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I found your story while perusing the Comedy Genre page. *Ha*

My first Impression:

What could possibly go wrong? Pregnant passenger, careless telegram operator? I don't know, but I sure wanted to find out!

Further Impressions:

Pamela is a caring American woman trying to get a train to meet her hubby who is serving in the Military, and is stationed in England. The train had only one available berth left and it was first class. She bought the ticket.

An elderly woman was next in line. She felt bad that the woman wouldn't get to her destination for the birth of her first grandchild. Pamela, being the big-hearted person she is gave away her ticket to the woman.


Conclusion:

Pamela, of course, neede to get a telegram to her husband about her later arrival.


I won't spoil the ending, but it's a doozy!

Amusing tale, great ending, laughs are there, of course. *WitchHat*

I will be highlighting this item in the Comedy Newsletter, due out tomorrow. *Delight*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering our May's picture prompt contest! *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

You followed the rules. *BoxCheck*
You gave us a glimpse of what the child's thought took the photo prompt and brought the child to life with his thoughts of the chocolate covered strawberry. In fact he couldn't stop eating them! I wish there were more thoughts from the toddler. He only responds to the "dozen" comment.

Observation:

"Reggie seems pleased as he practice (practiced) his newly acquired sign for "more","


Parting Thoughts:

I notice you just made it in before the deadline. You may have had more opportunity to add to the story giving us even more thoughts through the eyes of the child. However, to your credit, you took the plunge and entered. *ThumbsUpGreen*

Conclusion:

This is indeed how memories are made. *InLove*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering May's Picture Prompt Contest. *Bigsmile*

My Thoughts:

This little dialogue was amusing all the way through.

You followed the rules, wrote a story based on the picture, and made us see the story through the eyes of the child.

I loved the youngster's interpretation of what a chocolate covered strawberry is. Everything covered in brown should give a kid second thoughts! *Laugh*

Since everything is yucky-poo, in his mind, this kid was not going to fall for the delicious chocolate covered strawberry.

Loved the ending! *Rolling*

Chocolate is bad for dogs. Good comeback by the kid who thinks his parents are out to get him with the food choices.

Quick and quirky and fun to read! *Bigsmile*

Well done! *Strawberry*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*


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Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering our May, Photo Prompt month!

First Impressions:

Loved the brief description about Thomas coming to terms with the treat being offered. I knew you caught the expression in the photo and the rule about making us see what's happening through the eyes of the child.

Rules Followed ... *BoxCheck*

Further Impressions:

You brought Thomas to life for the reader. I loved the internal thoughts of the youngster. Kids do say the darnedest things and now we are privy to that!

The treats usually offered were not to the kid's liking and he already became a challenge to the parents trying to get him to eat something.

Loved this part:

"Well, maybe we'll circle back to the plums." I was reminded of someone seen on TV. *Thought* Nothing like weaving something out of the headlines into your story. *Laugh*

I loved Thomas's replies. This kid believed he was in control.

Conclusion:

Thomas may have been a fussy snack chooser, but the kid also knew when to step down the stubbornness. Miss the chance to go to the zoo? He wasn't going to let that happen! *Rolling*

Quite entertaining! *Monkey*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*


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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing "One Writer's Favorites!" Open in new Window.. *Bigsmile*

You did a lovely job of showing a reader how their feelings shouldn't be bottled up and ignored. If one remains silent, then who will know something is wrong? If one complains, are they pitied? I don't think so. I believe those who remain silent and don't allow a good friend to help unscramble the turbulence hidden within, are losing something extremely powerful to help them find the solutions. *DragonflyR*

Yes, quiet suffering might seem noble to some, but, expressing what's on one's mind, even if a bitterness being battled, surely will make both who share in its "secret silence" will be enriched in a way that makes both feel so much better. *TulipB*


I really like this and enjoyed reading it. It made me think on a philosophical level. That's a good exercise for the brain, too! *Delight*

Good job! *Butterfly2B*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello iluvhorses

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I am also reviewing your item because I came across it while perusing writings in "One Writer's Favorites!" Open in new Window.. I was pulled into reading this from your title and brief description. *Reading*

I, too, have seen what storms can do to beautiful, mature trees. In my case it was an ice storm that wreaked havoc on some of my trees. However, none were Weeping Willows. *Wind*

I have always wanted a huge willow tree on my land, but as you say, they do dig their roots deeply into drainage systems.

Your story, very much a prose-like writing, short, almost lyrical in nature because it talks about the nature of a majestic tree.

I loved how you describe its destruction and the feelings of sadness when it was down on the ground after the storm. Weeping for a Weeping Willow -- mourning its loss. Beautifully crafted to bring the personal tragedy of its loss to the reader.


I found no spots where there needed to be any repairs. Well written and actually, well-painted imagery sketched into the reader's mind. I saw that tree both standing proudly, and lying down on the ground, not salvageable. *Cry*

Great job! *Tree3*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*


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My dear Sherri, I fell upon this poem via another writer's link. I couldn't resist saying a few words in honor of your mom's memory and yours.

This poem touched my heart and made me reflect on that sudden feeling of a daughter who lost her mother. *HeartBroken*

I give it 5 stars, because no one knows the feelings of the loss of a mother until they've experienced it, and it was one they loved so dearly.

I felt all of that reading your poem. *Care*

I remember how wonderful you were to me when my mother died, notes and card of sympathy sent to my home. You left us here a couple years later.

Thank you for the books you wrote that I have read.

It may seem odd to others, that I review a White Case, author, because she'll never see the review. But actually, I believe that you can see it too, and feel the spirit of love being sent right back to you.

I have reviewed your writings when you were here, but somehow missed this one. It is no longer missed, but you are, my friend.

You'll always be remembered, here! *Angel*

Beautiful poem, with a spiritual touch of love after loss. *Butterfly2P*


~Webbie


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Hello there 🌖 HuntersMoon
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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering our April Poetry Month prompt! *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

Love the title "Meditation" I knew you'd bring the reader down memory lane of springs forward and past and the times enjoyed or missed but always bringing back those memories.

You combine the nature with the images of the times of dancing in the rain.

Further Impressions:

You chose a Villanelle form of poetry.

I loved the smooth rhythm and rhyme.

I really loved the refrains used:

"bringing bygone visions into my sight."

"gossamer rainbows shimmer in the light."

Simply beautiful!

Other Favorite Parts:

arcane mystic droplets pull at my mind

forgotten sorrows and joys are entwined

Vague wisps of what was begin to rewind

All very well woven into the lines to bring the reader into the the life cycle which renewal is ever present after the winter's past. Love and loss, yet the promise of fresh beginnings come with spring. It's alive with nourishing rain, colors bursting forth ... all adding to make the memories sweeter rather than sorrowful.

Conclusion:

Beautifully done! *Butterfly2B*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there Windtalker

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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering our Poetry Month prompt in April. *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

Love the title, it evokes thoughts of memories of people and times gone by. Your brief description shows the reader it is indeed a dual meaning of springs rebirth and remembrance of one who has passed on. It is the circle of life, and spring is always the time of rebirth.

Further Thoughts:

You chose a Villanelle form of poetry.

The rhythm and rhyme pattern is beautifully done. It paints vivid imagery that evokes both joy and sadness within its lines.

The joy of spring and the sounds and sites of the sea, as well as one of the refrain lines which is a reminder that there is a mourning as well. "in the mourning darkness heard, it is that night."


My Favorite Parts:


a godwit's peeps or the gull's shrill singing ...

so many gilded, silvered fish in the shallows finning

Remember to live life by faith and not by sight,

And of course the other alternating refrain: the clear clang of a bay's red buoy bright.

Conclusion:

Beautifully done! It brought both tears of hope and the misty eyes of sadness all at the same time. *ScallopT*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there Prosperous Snow celebrating
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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering our April Poetry Month prompt. *Bigsmile*

You chose a Vilanelle:

It is beautifully crafted an embodies the senses that mingle within our spirit regarding the month of April.

The "Bones" of the Vilanelle:
5 tercets followed by quatrain with 2 repeating rhyme and 2 refrains.

Your poem does this handily!

Further Thoughts:

I loved the refrain chosen.

"Inhale the petrichor perfume of dawn."

Petrichor,thoughts of that very first spring rain which has an unmistakable scent. Excellent word choice.

Conclusion:

Very well done, indeed! I felt April within every fiber of my being. *Flowerw*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there GERVIC

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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. Thank you for entering our April Poetry Month prompt. *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

"Springtime in the Tropics" It got me to thinking about how different April is in the tropics than so many other regions around the globe. It is of course that way where I reside half a year -- South Florida. It feels like summer in April.

Poetry Form:

You chose a sonnet. You have three quatrains and a couplet, 14 lines.

It has the magic of lyrics woven within.

Favorite Parts:

"Perhaps the deities sprinkled some magic
To please the gods with the grandest display"

"Of verdant plated prairies and meadows
Perfectly complements the azure sky.

These lines jumped out as true visual delights! Loved the azure sky.

Conclusion:

Well woven words to paint a beautiful scene of April in the tropics.


Nicely done! *Butterfly2V*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there Dave

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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at T"The Bard's Hall Contest" Open in new Window. . Thank you for entering our April Poetry Month prompt.

You have chosen a Sapphic.

You completed this poetic form handily with the accentual syllabic meter.

The complete design inspires the meaning of April's spring renewal after a winter's sleep of nature.

Well-chosen words provide impact and a cadence that keeps the rhythm beating within the reader's mind's eye.

Loved these lines:

Bloated skies release the elixir needed.

Nature's manna nourishes sacred treasure,

Daffodil delivers a pollen luncheon--
mutual comfort.

nature's bountiful sacred treasure.


I breathed the breath of spring while reading this refreshing poem.

Conclusion:

Wonderful job with this form!

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there James Heyward
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I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Read & Review. *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

The image of the bridal gown and the title with brief description captured my curiosity.

The fact that it was listed under the Genre Horror/Scary really clinched it. I had to dive right in!

Further Impressions:

I loved the building up of the mystery surrounding his nightmares. His self-loathing and still, the attempt to convince himself he had done much more good in his life than what had transpired 35 years, prior.

I could feel his struggle and pain. Your descriptions pull the reader right into the scene.


Observations:

A few Grammatical errors needing attention.

“What a thin, flimsy things your love was, Sandra." "Thing" should be singular as used in this sentence.

"He made no considerable attempt (at)discretion; if a floorboard creaked, no one noticed."

"The shot crashed the stillness of the cottage, and on the wedding gown blood splatter bloomed like red, poison roses." Spatter, not "splatter" I've watched lots of Dexter. *Laugh*

"Turning off his bathroom light, he stepped back into the bedroom..."

Parting Thoughts:

This is a good horror story. It has great bones! It just needs some edit spots here and there to make the read smoother. *SwordL*

Conclusion:

Good job! *Poison*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there Lynn

Welcome to WDC! *StarB*
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I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Read & Review. *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

I felt like I was going down that dark tunnel of trying to shop when Covid 19 first hit. The idea of masks, disinfectant, six feet apart and up and down marked aisles in the grocery stores were surreal to say the least.

Further Impressions:

Amazon became my best friend for all things canned and with a long shelf life. Also, I ordered bulk paper goods -- still have some stored away, I believe. I see you opted for Target, there wasn't one close by in my very rural area.


Parting Thoughts:

I loved the realism you wove into your story. The cat needing to get those probiotics into the system, added to everything else to be dealt with, made this story come through brilliantly. Yes, meat is important if you enjoy cooking and having something to go along with the frozen veggies. The early a.m. time to get it made me too sleepy to imagine. I am night hawk, myself. *Laugh*


Conclusion:

Very nicely done! I saw no errors that jumped out at me. Probably because I was too focused on the intensity of the story. *Quill*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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