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Review of The Lone Survivor  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the Random Read & Review. I mean it really did pop-up, as I unintentionally hit the button. *Laugh* No matter, I figured what the heck, I always enjoy a good Olympics show.

Characters with odd characters:

Troy Kealy -- The great one. The one representing America in these future Olympics.
Warren Bost -- the previous first choice to represent, but stuck as the back-up
And assorted military officials and robots. Persons or things not to be messed with. *RollEyes*

Location, location, location:
New South Africa -- Cape Town

Superior Strength:
Troy was the lone survivor of a Mars fiasco.

Sprouting body Parts:
Yup, he was a sprouting them up down, left and right and with a 360 view. Well qualified if not over qualified as his very own humanity was at stake. *AlienGr*

Observation:

"The man’s grip could have a cracked a walnut." Doubled up on the "a."

Conclusion:

*Bug* As with all of your stories, whether human, alien or machinery, you pull your reader into the show, front and center. There's sufficient mystery surrounding the character and also, a cringy aspect of dark to horror that infuses the senses.

Good job, Bill! *BareTree3*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WW

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In affiliation with The Witch's House  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello there Whata SpoonStealer
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#444444 by Ԝ€ß☆ԜiʈCH
Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" . Thank you for entering our annual Cop Shop Mystery! *Magnify*

*Rolling* Adrie, you ran this perp through the grinder at 90mph, with the quick and quirky set-up and solving done.

Entertaining Characters:

I'd say yes! Whata ya think, with Porky 5 Ohs, a food stamp defrauding ex-wife, a Librarian Killer, An officer with wet knickers, a fresh corpse -- and throw in a yellow duckie ... Whata could go wrong? *Ha*

You did the deed, solved a mystery in 19 supersonic sentences. May have a tiny punctuation issue, but it flew by so fast it got away from me. *Shock*

*Cheshire* I could just picture this mild-mannered locksmith grinning while he slipped away with the stash.

This was a wall cracking, side-splitting fun read! *Tophat*

Good job! *Toy*

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Review of Fuzzy Fun Pages  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love these fun games and am so excited they are here for the birthday month of Pay It Forward! You do so much to uplift spirits when least expected and always pay it forward throughout the site. *HeartV*

Your folders of cNotes, Fuzzy-grams and adorable bears doing good deeds is such a fine fixture in this community, and I know so many here appreciate YOU! *Teddy*

Thank you for all your generosity including opening up these games for a month. The price of premium is costly, but we will certainly enjoy it and make it worth the cost. *HeartP*

*Hug*
WW


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Review of A Clown's Funeral  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because I saw it highlighted on today's Newbies Newsletter. *Smile*

*GoLucky* This is quite a humorous show you portrayed with your characters and their dialogues.

A Clown Is Dead!

*Shock* Oh, the humanities! The whole troupe saddened at the thought of their clown, Fischietto being dead. However, the clown had different plans, like planning his own funeral. I believe he actually put FUN in FUNeral! *Laugh*

Observations:

"The group head for a bed where the Dead Clown." [dead clown lay?] it seems a word is dropped here that should be here.

*NoteV* Formatting: I suggest you tighten-up the huge gap between the opening title and the beginning of the dialogue.

Parting Thoughts:

This was a fun and humorous read that pulls-in the reader's curiosity about the dead clown and those around him with big plans. *Ha*

Well done! *BalloonY*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Ready to Fall  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there, Beholden
I am reviewing your entry as a judge at
 
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Use the music provided to inspire your writing!
#2002964 by Writing.Com Support

Thank you for entering! *Smile*

My Thoughts:

Interesting take on the music prompt. You painted a picture of aging and life's losses. You make the reader understand this man's loneliness and pain. It's as if we were watching his life pass-by along with him. Good way to pull the readers into the story and keep them reading more of this man's life. *CheckGr*

Location:

His home is the only place that he is, physically. He narrates his thoughts, thoroughly, thus we are taken outside the home and to other places, a neighbor's yard, work, and a bar. We travel through the years with him in his descriptive thoughts without ever having to leave the home.

Characters:

Most of the characters were part of his everyday life from years ago. The readers could picture each one of them interacting with the protagonist.

Doris: His wife who appears to the reader to be sweet, loving and caring.


Observations:

He had seven kids and couldn’t afford to work ever again. I could and a job eventually dragged me away and we forgot each other.

I didn't understand this underlined phrase. I would think with seven kids he couldn't afford not to work. Perhaps I'm missing something?

Parting Thoughts:

I found the ending to be both a little bit of satirical humor from the gentleman, as well as quite poignant. This is where he decides to face his fate, move forward and leave a life filled with ghosts behind. It gave me chills.

Well done! *Quill*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello there, Mara ♣ McBain

I am reviewing your entry as a judge at
 
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Use the music provided to inspire your writing!
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Thank you for entering! *Smile*

*Bird* What a lovely experience one encounters when they are free to let all the shackles of self-doubt break apart and lead to a new beginning. This is what I gleaned from this story. Ivy was reborn!

The Prompt:

*Quill* Nicely penned to give the sense of connection to the music prompt and lyrics.

Character:

Ivy was a determined author trying to get rid of her writer's block and leave all the negative forces behind her. She went through much loss and hurt by those she loved. She was on the edge of giving up but made herself revisit her past and see the good times that they held. She's strong and likeable to the reader.

Setting:

At a lakeside cabin that brought back beautiful childhood memories. Just to note, I loved the refrigerator!!! Through the eyes of Ivy, we are given a tour of the cabin that burnishes images into our minds. It was such a treat picturing the vinyl sofa where many a wet bathing suit rested. Add a loft to the mix -- pure perfection as a backdrop to begin writing again.

Observations.Suggestions?

I found nothing out of place that jumped out at me.

Conclusion:

*Rabbit2* The story is one of facing past wrongs and rising above them. She let it all go and in a dramatic "baptism" when she jumped into the water, she arose reborn within her own mind, body and soul.

Well done! *Butterfly2T*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Uncertain Paths  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there, debmiller1

I am reviewing your entry as a judge at
 
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Thank you for entering! *Smile*

First Impressions:

A young man embarks on an adventure, seeking answers from a shaman. Good way to pull the reader into the story. I was curious and wanted to read more.

Character:

Natock, a Neolithic man, was trying his best to support his mother after his father was killed during a hunt for food. He seemed to do this grudgingly, as he felt the gods were calling to him to be somewhere else.

Natock's mother wanted her sone to start a family of his own. She wanted to remarry. That fact bothered her sone very much.

Setting:

This is the Neolithic age, or last phase of the Stone Age.

Observations:

Natock['s] vision zoomed down to merge with one of the hunters and looked out of the hunter's eyes - his own eyes.

He had gone [on] a three day journey toward the new day.

Natock lowered his spear, accepted the neckless [necklace], and put it on.

Parting Thoughts:


This was an interesting take on the music prompt. I liked how Natock pulled himself together and decided to forge ahead with his life and become his own man. He hoped one day he would have followers. The good thing to remember is that he did indeed have the gods on his side and a protective charm to keep him safe on his adventures.

Well done!*Bird*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)


Hello PureSciFi

I am reviewing your item as a judge for
 
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Thank you for entering! *Smile*

This was an interesting take on the music prompt. I actually didn't know what to expect about the strange goings on at the old house. But then, I do like a good haunting.

Imagery:

The children playing tag was such a natural thing. Kids will find a place to play no matter how potentially dangerous it could be. I could picture each one of them in my mind. The dialogue fit the antics of kids at play.

Wow Moments:

The fallen staircase! Oh, my, my heart jumped a bit for the two kids stuck under the rubble.


Observations:

“No, I’m not.” James into a push-up position. You need to add a verb to make this a sentence. [James got into?]

“We were just playing tag there.[new sentence, Capital T, here] there isn’t any other place to play except for that old house ever since the tornado came through here a few years ago.”

Story Flow:

A little bit disjointed, probably due to having to cut out some parts for the word count limit.

*Apple* Also, the family names all starting with an "A" makes the reader pause to try to remember if it's a parent or kid. I know some parents whose names start with the same letter give their children names beginning with the same letter, but when we readers have only a small piece of their lives, their characters, it can be difficult to follow.


The Ending:

*Tempcold* I got chills at the end about the parents, who originally owned the home. I wondered why the daughter and her husband didn't try to keep up the maintenance on such a dangerously inviting place for curious children.

Ending was wrapped up pretty quickly with the visit to the neighbors' home. I guess I just wanted more clarity, more development of the attitude of the townspeople. It has to be tough living in a town where your family is disliked over a piece of troublesome property. I wonder if James' parents are going to sue for his personal injury. *QuestionGr*

Parting Thoughts:

This story has good potential. It just needs a little editing so the flow is better and some parts developed further to bring more clarity to the reader. It's a fine gem in the rough. *CheckG*

Good luck with the contest. *Smile*


Until next time--write on!


Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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In affiliation with The Witch's House  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there SandraLynn Team Florent!
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angel*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the random Read & Review generator. *Glasses*

You had me at "I miss you Mom!

Once I saw that title I had to read your poem. I knew there would be a connection straight to my heart. You say all the things mothers and daughters would say or think. I could feel the emotions both joyful and some bittersweet moments as well.

Who is Mom?

Mom is the woman who can talk on the phone for hours and never miss a beat. In case that had the tiniest chance of happening, she'd repeat the whole conversation again. *Laugh* But you always knew it was because she loves you so much and wants to hear your voice.

When my mother passed away, I still had her voice on my voicemail. I never erased them because they were beautiful moments of her life that she shared. I can still hear her voice now, both by her messages and still within my mind and heart. So, I know how this poem about your mom pulled at your heartstrings. We do miss them so once they are gone. In fact, I just started emptying the boxes I packed from her home after she passed away. It's been six years that they have been stored away because I would cry if I opened them.

As the years pass, I believe we still remain close to our Moms. We relive those memories in our minds and hearts.

Final Thoughts:

Your poem touched that depth of the love between a mother and daughter. It was beautiful to read!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Sad Country Song  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello there, Prosperous Snow celebrating

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#444444 by Ԝ€ß☆ԜiʈCH
Review! *Witchlegs1*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review.

My Initial Thoughts:

Country music and broken-hearted love go hand in hand. There is a catchy melody and the sweet lamenting that pulls the reader right into the tone of the emotional pain.

Mechanics:

*Music1* Rhythm and Rhyme, beautifully executed.
*Vine1* The feelings it evoked, very "Country!"
*Tackg* The strong words were woven handily for proper impact.
*Guitar* I could picture a guitar strumming along with these lyrics. It could actually be seen, heard and appreciated in my mind's eye. I like that!

*Butterfly2V* I found no spots that jumped out at me and gave me pause. Smooth as silk perfection!

Good job!*CowboyHat*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Ladybug Beach  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angel*

*Binoculars* I came across your item while perusing things to read on WDC. Your title captured my attentions!

My Initial Thoughts:

*Ladybug* I love ladybugs, too! They are so cute and wouldn't hurt a fly, although what they consume must be quite tiny. There is a certain time of year that they seem to show up. I figure they know what they are doing and let them be. *Laugh*

Your poem had a lovely rhythm and rhyme. It was almost lyrical. *Music1*

I did not know this:

Orange colored ladybugs are older, and red ones are younger? You learn something new everyday. Thanks for that bit of information. *Bigsmile*

*Ladybug* Loved this poem and the happy way it made me feel reading it over again and all the way through! I found no spot that made me pause. It was a smooth and pleasant read.

Good job! *BurstB*

Lots of luck with your creative writing and poetic muse!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Camp Hostage  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" . Thank you for entering the July prompt. *Bigsmile*

*Delight* I really enjoyed the antics of Joey and Danny at the campsite. They were wonderful complements of one another to keep the dialogue going in between the scary moments they experience.

*Smirk* I loved the local horror-tale by the camp Counselor!!! There's nothing like a campfire, kids gathered around, and a scary story being told. All that was needed were the S'Mores! *Ha*

*Laugh* The dog, the skunk the not-to-well constructed tent and the humor it all invoked was enjoyable! *GoLucky* Kids are wonderful subject matter for humor mixed with camping. You made them likeable and real in my mind's eye.

Observations:

This would have been easier to read if there were spaces skipped between paragraphs. I know indenting is classic book-style, but on the monitor it is more difficult to look at. Think "wall of words bleeding together." Anyway, this is just a suggestion and is probably the most used format on WDC --the spacing between paragraphs.

Some punctuation issues are present. [commas, and ending punctuation in a sentence should precede the end quote.] A couple other spots could use a quick check in the punctuation department.

*PaintBrush* Otherwise, this was such a fun read. It was descriptive and lively. It brought the scenes and characters to life so I could picture the,

Well done! *TreePine*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there Circuit Rider
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" . Thank you for entering! *Bigsmile*

*Sneaker2* I enjoyed this story through the eyes of a Boy Scout leader bringing the troop on a camping trip.

Unique Location!

*Bat1* Having a cave as the campsite made this extra fun. It goes beyond a tent or sleeping under the stars and brings the reader into a dark, claustrophobic spot. Hey, it got me gasping for air just reading it. I happen to have claustrophobia, so even though this is a comedy, it made me shudder! *Bats*

The Characters:

Besides the boys and the bus driver, the main character is Mr. Jones. He's the one who has a dialogue with Spivey, a youngster who couldn't spend the night in the cave. It worked out well for Mr. Jones, he couldn't sleep in the cave, either. *Laugh*

Loved this Part:

"And I had brought along my squeezebox that I still didn’t know how to play, but it made a good deterrent if I threatened to play it."
*Rolling* Good way to keep order among the 18 boys, threaten to play an accordion.

Observations

"I guess we could have, but working with young boys and fitting it into family schedules, you take whatever adventure you can get in the wintertime and I didn’t have to worry about frostbit [frostbite],..."

"Finely [finally] the last flashlight beam quits dancing across the damp ceiling and all seems at peace."

Conclusion:

I loved the ending. Spivey vowed to protect Mr. Jones' reputation by not divulging his fear of spending the night in the cave. It made me laugh. *Laugh*

Additionally, there was a "bonus" ending because Spivey was able to bond with a father-figure and know trust and honor. Great character strengthening. *Salute*

Well done!*Fire*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, willwilcox
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our July prompt! *Bigsmile*

What Intrigue is This?

*Blackberry* It is a spine chilling story that pulls the character into frantic fear, because of what is on the loose -- is what this is!

There Must be a way OUT!

One would think, eh? However, this beast has a mind of its own and does not believe in quitting until the job is done -- or should I say overdone? *Shock2*

The Character of the Character:

*Target2* Jake Springer is a pretty cool guy. He loves camping and nature walks. You made me like him. I thought here is a guy who is strong, athletic and self-sufficient out there in the wilderness. Or, at least I thought he was all that. Actually, Jake had a huge target on his back. HE was being hunted in the most unnatural way.

My Favorite Lines:

"Jake's eyes bulged, greasy nausea gripping his guts. He turned his head to meet it face to face."

*Ninja* I believe that image will be planted in my brain long after this review gets planted in yours. However, in that line I saw Jake's courage bloom. He was no longer running; he couldn't run anymore. He faced those eyes and fangs. That was brave -- very brave!

Technical Issues?

I found none the jumped out and bit me on the neck. *Poison*

Conclusion of the Conclusion:

*Shuffle* I liked it! His last thoughts as he crosses out of this life leave the reader to wonder what would that answer be from the rattler of vengeance. Would that scream vibrate through the fangs? Indeed!

Well done! *Shovel*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hello there, Princess Megan Rose 22 Years
This is an "The WDC Angel Army"  Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

*Cry* Oh, my, I'm so sorry for the loss of your beloved Tigger." She sounded like a real bundle of fun and love. I love the way you describe your memories of her.

*House* House fire! So scary! I'm happy you all made it out safe!


*Cat* I feel like I know so much about Tigger and her devotion to you. You were fortunate to have her in your life for so many wonderful years. And yes, she'll be waiting for you at the Rainbow Bridge.

*Hug*
Webbie *Witch*


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Review of beach walk  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello there, Rhyssa
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing this item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

Initial Thoughts:

*Wave1* Your poem about walking on the beach is glorious! I say that because I felt as if I were right there on that walk with you. I love the seaside with all its sights and sounds and ambiance. It is an explosion of senses.

Construction:

This is a free verse poem, which I love when well-executed. I loved this one! *Bigsmile*

Brief Observation:

"and dune grass dry
and whispering secrets"

*Thought2* Don't know if it was intentional for emphasis, but the double "and" might be better as a single use in the second line and eliminated on the line above it? Just a thought.

Loved this!

"sand squelches between
my toes"

I could actually "feel" what you are describing! *Delight*

The "and" aside, I feel this poem deserves five stars. It awakened all my senses -- and that's worth a great deal to me after reading poetry. *Quill*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of No Amateur  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello there, Nani - Blessed Indeed
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Review! *Angelic*
I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review! *Smile*

My First Reaction:

*SnailV* When I saw the prompt words I was going to pass this by. So many prompted rhymes have the ability to feel like they were forced to complete the task. I'm happy to report I got over that feeling after the first few lines. Not one of those forced-fed poems, trying to fit within certain prompt words. *CheckY*

The Rhythm/Rhyme/Meter:
Nothing could be neater! *RollEyes*

I found the read smooth an easy. It had an almost bounciness to it that moved the reader along effortlessly. No stumbles or pauses to make me cringe. You did a fine job weaving those prompt words in.

Emotionally:

I felt uplifted while reading this. It was like taking a step beyond our realm. I love envisioning the ghost whisperer, surrounded by the protection of angels. She works helping guide the spirits to their final destination, paving the way for travelers who have yet to cross-over.

Dark and Delightful:

Although a dark subject matter as death and graveyards tend to be, there tends to be a banner of hope surrounding these lost souls

Favorite Line:

"From ectoplasmic sightings to hideous moans."

Visually emphatic with tons of impact to awaken the synapses of the brain!

I'm not a huge fan of rhyming poetry. But this was refreshing. *Bigsmile*

Well done! *PawPrints*

Until next time -- rhyme on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello there, Prosperous Snow celebrating
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angel*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" . Thank you for entering our annual Blog/Journal contest in June. *Bigsmile*

*Quill* A Journal is a very personal writing. I enjoy the thoughts each person has to present within their entries. I found many links within your blog where I may search for more information or knowledge about different celebrations and teachings of which you speak.

Faith:

I found your entries to be quite spiritual as well as educational. You do a fine job of introducing us to your faith, and, the Bahai teachings.

Poetry:

Loved the poetry that wove the blog together into a lovely tapestry of inner spirit, daily practice, usual chores, and always including prayers to follow through with God's plan. It was an insightful peek into your daily life and your ability to conquer adversity through your faith. The poetry was well-penned.

Parting Words:

Thank you for inviting us into a part of your life. I feel I have a much better understanding of who are. You are very spiritual, and you seek truth in your life. You have pain, but you know there is a plan for you, and keep on moving forward.

Your entries reach deep within the heart where others may feel that grace and contentment.

Lovely! *Bird*

Regards,
WebWitch


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Review of The Bush House  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review click. *Smile*

*Witchhat* My first Impression:

I was curious by the title and brief description. It just pulled me in making me want to read more. Then, you tossed in s couple kids, which adds to the potential of a creepy, horror story. Kids are terrific subject matter to show fear and get those goose bumps popping!

*Glasses* Keeping my Attention:

*Web1* The mysterious mirror was a fine addition to the Bush House. It gave it a magical quality and built up the reader's curiosity all the more!

*Tools2* Techniques and Suggestions?

Basically, a clean straightforward write. I found no errors jumping out at me. I do think it could use more chilling build-up to the horror. Perhaps a couple things going bump in the night before the knock on the door.

I cringed when the girl responded to the knock by inviting whoever knocked into the cabin. That's pretty scary in itself! *Shock2*

*Thought2* Final Thoughts:

I enjoyed the creepiness of the cabin, the premonitions appearing in the mirror, and the fright through the yes of the youth!

Well done! *Teddy*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of The Great Secret  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello there, willwilcox
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I am also reviewing your item because I saw it highlighted on the Newsfeed. *Bigsmile*

Your words about it not getting a good reception made me curious. And, well, you know about curiosity, right? *Cat*

*Paperdoll* Actually, I didn't come away from this story feeling it was any less impressive than your many blood curdling horror stories.

What was the Horror that struck ME?!!!

*Spider* Simple and clear cut. Put all the death row thoughts behind. Put all the emotions this man is going through on a back burner for a moment. What really is deep-down frightening and chills the very core of my soul, is the fact that this man is truly innocent.

Even more Horror:

*Ant**AntR* I know that death row can last for years. Appeals and waiting for them just seem to drag on. However, there comes a time in one's life where there must be closure. Here, our inmate gave up hope of ever being saved. Despair was his everyday on death row, with no end in site -- until it was!

ACCEPTANCE AND RESOLVE:

*Wind* Accepting his fate was the present, he felt relieved that he would no longer suffer the wait, and live without a dream of hope.

POIGNANT FINALE:

*Skull* He went out with no remorse, as he was innocent. He also went out finding the secret revealed! As for us? We must all wait our turn, however it appears to us. The end is guaranteed.

Good job, Bill! *Tag*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there Dr M C Gupta
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

I enjoyed this image painted with your poetic lines, of a farmer as compared to an urbanite.

*PepperYellow* I noticed this was created using particular prompts named after very popular horror/supernatural movies. Not easy to do when talking about a farmer during his growing season.

*PepperRed* Yes, I agree. There is much wisdom that can be learned by listening to the reasoning of a farmer. He knows how to provide from using the world of nature before him.

Observation:

"More close to the nature" ["closer" would be the better word] Also, it replaces two syllables with 2 syllables. *Smile*

Well done! *Tomato*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*








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Review of Venus  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review! *WitchHat*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" . Thank you for entering! *Cool*

Your Photo:

*Beach* This photo is gorgeous! Love the Mexican shoreline framed by two palm trees. I could almost feel the warm breezes. The quality is lovely, seeing that the star of the Title can be seen in her rising glory. Good shot of Venus, there. It's also romantic as I spy tow branches reaching out and touching the other's palm leaves. Another great point about it!

Your Haiku:

*Quill* Flawless execution! Love the "embraces a tranquil world" line. Your ending is yet another strong connection to the photo as the blush color on the horizon meshes perfectly to the words in the last line.

*Thought2* I can't think of one thing I don't like about the image and its matching Haiku. You hit this prompt's nail right on the head. Gee, I hate when you do that, Ken! *Laugh* Just kiddin'!

Superb! *Camera**BurstB*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Foresight  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello there Bilal Latif
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Review! *Angelic*

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Very interesting use of Picture Prompt! *Butterfly*

Mood:

*PaintBrush* This story had an adventurous side, Sci-Fi to give it some time-travel qualities and a setting that brought in the dark side.

Character Appeal:

*UmbrellaR* Norman is a very determined man. He continues his mission no matter how dangerous it could be for him. I liked him and was curious about what he was trying o accomplish.


I think my head was spinning as Norman past and present travels in search of a special little girl. *Heart*

*Onion* There are so many layers of the story to keep in mind. The umbrella is helpful marker for the place he needed to be and the boots had the power to reach the past. Perfect timing requires the exact spot to be placed at the right time. After many "misses" Norman finally, with the help of Ariel, gets to where he wants to be so he could try to change the past.

When the reader realizes the purpose of his mission, she is shocked about what happened to Leira, and heartened by the ending, which was the highlight of Norman's life as well as Leira. My icky-creep meter rose over Del. I thought about that kidnapper with the little girl. *Angry*


Clarity of the story:

"And as the thirty-year old Norman who said that reaches Del’s side, the Norman who fancies himself forty years young squeezes the umbrella handle and mutters, “Ariel, this is the wrong date.”

That sentence required a couple reads. It seemed a bit awkward as written. Nobody said life it easy going from past to present in an instant. *Laugh*


Conclusion:

Not knowing what date he would land in, he nevertheless took the chance to find Leira. It was a beautiful ending to see his daughter safe from the creep. Whenever they would be would be their normal.

Well done! *Lightning3*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello there, ruwth
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I am also reviewing this entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" . Thank you for entering! *Bigsmile*

*StarV* Unique Interpretation of the Picture Prompt:

You did a fabulous job of taking an ordinary photo and turning it into a heart warming story.

The Characters:


*UmbrellaR* Well developed and easy for the reader to picture. You make the reader care about the grandmother and her grandson and her determination to find the help he needed.

*GingerBread* The boy was a lovable individual and he had a fine sense of humor (evident at the end) that had probably been masked by the other issues he had to deal with regarding his Autism Spectrum Disorder. It showed the reader how tough it is when a loved one is super sensitive to everyday things that most of us don't pay any attention to. Besides his social issues with others he had a heightened sensitivity to noise and scents around him.

The Conclusion:

*Ha* I loved the boy's interpretation of the drawing that the boy gave to the psychologist who was testing him. PRICELESS!!! He saw the world through his own special way, indeed. *BurstR* I got a chuckle out of it. It's a combination of innocence and confidence in his witty response.

*BoxCheckB* Interesting take on the prompt and touched my heart deeply!

*PenB* I saw no errors that jumped-out at me.

Good work! *CheckP*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of The Umbrella  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello there, willwilcox

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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering! *Bigsmile*

*Mask* Picture Prompt Interpretation:

*Rain* I can't tell you how much you grabbed my attention from the start. But, I'll try. *Wink* You chose a Thriller/Suspense genre, which fit easily within the prompt. The photo, though simple can be fertile within a writer's mind with its interpretation.

*Cat* Opening lines:

"An umbrella can separate us from the world outside, everything else is inconsequential.
Jeremy Strauss stormed through the rain, the umbrella acting as a cocoon against the constant pelting from the torrential downpour."

*Witchlegs1* You had my attention with those lines. Great opening! My curiosity was raised. I needed to know what sort of mission this man, braving the elements, was so important to brave a day such as this one.

*Wolf* They are also effectively used in the last paragraph. I love that! You tie the beginning to the end perfectly. It has great impact on the reader and the emotions felt are strong.

*UmbrellaR* Now, the reader wonders why this man with the umbrella needs to finish a task that has been nagging at him. He felt a pull toward a certain destination, and nothing would prevent him from continuing on. He even risked be run-over during a busy work day to get where he knew he must be at that very moment.

*Drop* Horrifying Grammatical Errors?

*FlagR* Nope! Found nothing to make me pause.


*Ax* Clutter of Useless Words?

None! You trimmed down this story so only the material elements of the story were given to the reader. At that point, the reader could inject her imagination and enjoy the show from a particular or peculiar point of view. I can do either. *Laugh* You nailed it in 633 words. Not an easy task!

*Spider* Conclusion:

I loved it! It had multi-faceted meanings one could assume until the end arrived. Then, the shock of knowing the full truth is exposed. It was both heart-warming and heart-breaking. However, the starkness of the final words seals the fate of both characters. Nothing sappy-sweet about this story. I like that!

Simplicity as well as layered complexity are evident. Great job with the prompt!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WW


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