Hello
Harry
I like the overall "mood" of this poem and its flow. It begs philosophical questions, which in my book is never a bad thing. The opening line
how the modern dog does hate the cat was awesome placement. I also like the phrase
Africa gives clues to what this means.
I don't typically correct punctuation in poetry. However, I did feel as though there were a couple of very minor things in your poem that nagged at me a little. So, feel free to take these or leave these.
yield combat, /
New meetings To me, it felt as though a semicolon would work best here. I say this because the two discussed lines are being compared and are closely related in your story.
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In the first line of the third stanza, I feel as though your quotations are not needed. I think you did a fine job at setting up the preface to this stanza.
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I like how the second stanza is a refrain from the rest of the flow. However, the second line in this short stanza feels cut off, too short. Perhaps this was your intent, but it did cause me re-read it a few times.
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Lastly, in
intrusions in their feastings cause fights sounded really beautiful, but without the
s on feasting(s). This is another personal preference, but I think with the way you have the story set up it might work out pretty well. What do you think?
Overall, I enjoyed this read. Thank you for sharing it with us!
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