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Review of Autumnal Haiku  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Valerie ! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*I love reading haiku and continue to study its form as I learned it's essence is a lot deeper than just syllable count. *Wink* Your title gave me the theme and season and while Haiku apparently do not use titles, we often to so we know which is which. LOL

*Balloonr* Your haiku follows the old style syllable count well and I you have two images that you are contrasting: the wind and the leaves. The last line repeats the season. You already used the kigo words "coloured leaves" so the reader knows already it is autumn.
It is a really good attempt as you have no punctuation, it is centered and you have a seasonal word and it is about nature. Good for you.*Salute* Not everyone gets that. Less is more. *Wink*

*Wink*You might play with your two images in a different way and add if you want to stick with the 5-7-5:

the colourful leaves
falling down from the oak trees
crisp morning wind

or something like that.

See how you observe two images without any subjective feeling about it, as you did in your original. And it leaves the reader to add their own picture or understanding. I got that from your version. Only the last line was really not needed. *Wink* Haiku also does not use sentences. *Shock*

Thanks for creating this lovely vision and practicing the challenging haiku form. *Starstruck* Thank you for letting me play with your craft.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of One Way Ticket  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Heya Jeff! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


I missed this round of the contest I think ... the picture is dark and familiar anyway and your poem picked up the idea of the ferryman! I remember the myth. LOL Your title is excellent for the theme and punch line at the end too. It made me smile after the dark image you portrayed earlier in the poem. Wierd me! *Wink*

*Salute* Your etheree is well composed and flows coherently. I think it is a challenge to do! Your rhymes were thematic as well as true rhymes. You did use "sea" and "undersea"....not sure if repeating is the best, yet in this case it works well. *Wink* It does provide a contrast as the boat is above on the sea and the...deathly ones from under now that I study deeper.

*Balloong* I was drawn into the flow with the first lines...reading aloud is a delight with the "s" and "d" alliterative quality. The consonance of d and b produced harsh tones that fit the atmsophere. The first word is like an inviation or soft command...and then we realize the direction. LOL Well written.

*Star* Your etheree fit the prompt in a tradtional way and the fact that the girl is looking back made your last line even more potent. She may be hoping to go back. *Sad* Thanks for the vision. I think I will go back to the happy party now! *Laugh*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Light  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Hiya Sophy! Happy Party Time! I am popping in with a short review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* The title drew me in as we are all light and I was curious! I enjoy cinquains and forgot there was a mirror one. It is interesting how many forms do have mirror aspects. LOL
I think the concept works well with the theme of light..as I think of reflection. *Wink*

*Heartv* Aw! This is so romantic a vision and I could enter right into the dream. The dashes that split the lines in each verse really work for pause and drama. Good call. The enjambents there were effective too. *Thumbsup* The imagery of the dancing light and the touching in verse two are vibrant ones. Wow.

*Balloonp* The mirror cinquain form is well composed and the pictures both occur in the lighted space. A nice comparison of the light playing and then the poet playing on the sleeper. Brilliant! *Star* The punctuation served the read well and I was not thrown out by any glitch.

*Starstruck* Thanks for sharing this lovely vision and your craft. I enjoyed my visit very much.
Keep on shining at WDC with your unique flair! *Fire*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Meta/Paradox  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Yay Jeff! Happy Party Time! I am popping in with a short review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp*Wow! *Shock* This is so fascinating and well conceived.. I love it!! The title lured me first as it is so different. So good call as now I got to see your genius. *Thumbsup*

*Balloonr* Your tanka is well composed with exacting defining images in words! Taking each of those lines as a first line in the free verse poem is brilliant. Your expansion on the meaning of each brief thought was enlightening and filled with engaging imagery. The idea of card game and "bete noir" is amazing. *Salute* I so agree with that last comment. I study Haiku and it is more than just syllable count. LOL {and the desceptively so..is right on!)*Wink*

*Balloonp*The poem was pleasing to read aloud with its effective uses of poetic techniques. eg. "indelibly entwined", "nuanced structure". I liked reading it aloud a few times! The first three lines of the last verse really appealed to me too in content and poem form.

*Star* Your tanka rocked in its conciseness and concluding line! *Salute* This is going on my favs.
Thanks so much for sharing your crafting here. One can learn alot from your explanation that does not sound dry but flowing in a warm and rich fashion. Impressive piece. *Trophyg*

Light on the path as you write on! Keep shining as you continue to bring your flair to WDC!
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Review of Animated Cnotes  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Yay! Happy PARTY Time Leger! I am popping in with a short review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* Wow! This animated shop is one I have not seen or passed by, likely because I am not Premium and thought I could not use them. *Sad* And I do know they can only be sent to Premium authors. Still I missed out sending the two promotion stars! I am sure some folks who were promoted may have been Premium. LOL Those are so celebratory! *Thumbsup*

*Balloonp*The opening banner is brilliant and inviting with its flair! You have a good variety of messages with illustrative glyphs. It is handy as the basic ones like thank you, happy birthday and friendship are ones most may look for! I like the little book worm! *Heart* The Dream one is magical and is awesome for inspiration of the muse. The firefly in the jar is fab!*Delight*

*Balloonp* The cost is reasonable for animated notes and I like that the message in on the picture and the cnote is blank.

*Star*I am glad I found this and will put it on my favourites. Thanks for all the inventive contributions over the years! Keep on shining! *Genielamp*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Hiya Snow! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you at 'I Write in 2018'! *Delight*


*Delight* Wow! This is an amazing expression and the theme really appealed to me. *Genielamp* The title establishes the theme directly.

*Balloonp*Your composition of the La Tuin is well conceived. Using the word "ode" as one of your rhymes is cool and gave me a feeling of old world. *Smile* I like the words you found to rhyme with it too! *Thumbsup* The syllable count and strange ryhme pattern is intact, though I see you use the same word "mode" a couple of times. It does work with your theme and it is a challenge to create this form. I struggled with it myself. *Facepalm*

*Balloonp* I appreciated reading it aloud with its inspirational aura and tribute to the divine as muse! The problem of choosing theme and writer's block are apt examples that writer's can relate to, and revealing your answer gives us all hope. Seek higher! *Angel*

*Balloongo* Thanks for sharing your vision and execution of this unique form! A lovely tribute to Baha'u'llah. *Heart*Good Luck in the contest.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Fyndorian's Desk  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Time fyn! I am partying with a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp*This title of your folder is awesome and so fitting for the theme of a writer's tomes presenting within! The banner with the old desk rocks! What a treasure. *Heart* I love desks! Can't have enough of them even if only need one! LOL

*Balloonp* I appreciate that you also wrote a poem to headline your folder. It makes visiting so inviting and is an appropriate way to signal what we will find in the folder. In it you express what writing means to you in an eloquent and heartfelt way. Your imagery is vivid and the significance of writing is shown to be paramount. The image you create at the end of what would happen without writing is moving and potent! I had to smile. *Salute* I can relate in a way as I can really let a lot of stuff go when I express it out on the page! Saving grace at times. *Heart*

*Balloonp*The free style suits the theme and flows well when I read aloud. Your voice is strong and authentic. The idea that an old desk inspires is wonderful and I can relate to that too. Muses are everywhere..and the vibe around a desk can spark magic. *Wand*

*Balloonr*The folder is well organized and I like the collections of poetry in folders by year written! Titles like Beribboned Hutch and The Locked Cabinet are appealing and creative. What fun!

*Star**Quill*Thanks so much for sharing your gift of words here at WDC through the years. This folder is a spectacular testimony to your magic!

Light on the path as you write on!*Genielamp*
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Review of Poem For Our Site  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Yay Maryann! Thanks for being the first to enter "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest!! Here I am with a short review of your bit of magic! *Delight*


*Balloonp* WOW! Your acrostic poem has a celebratory vibe and the page is so decorative. The poem is well composed and I so admire how you not only have the key letters at the start of each line, but also at the end! *Salute* That is a challenge to do and keep a coherent flow. Great job!

*Balloonr* Your poem has captured the essence of WDC in a few short lines and I am happy to see the word "magic" as WDC is filled with authors' musings! Expression is surely the magic in us all. To have a place to post our gifts in a caring space and develop friendships with like minded others is also magical and something to tribute as you do in your last line! *Heart*

*Star* I enjoyed reading your well conceived acrostic with its positive tone and vision of WDC in a nutshell! Thanks for your participation and love of WDC. *Genielamp*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Yay Jim! Thanks for playing in "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest!! I am popping in with a short review! *Delight*


Wow! What a brilliant tribute to WDC. I love the originality of the voice and speech pattern in the acrostic format. The way you included the number 18 as part of the key words is amazing. I was wondering how to do that myself and you made it make sense. *Salute*

*Balloonr* Your composition is excellent and you even made the lines rhyme! Quite a feat really! "heard and third". Your ideas just popped. I appreciate how you got personal with the sharing. eg. your jokes and being here 8 years etc. Leave it to you to figure our the math. *Laugh*
I would have maybe say YAY at the last line for more energy vibe then Yeah... but maybe it means the same. LOL

Honouring the creators was a nice touch and your second line rocked. I had to laugh as I could also hear the connotation, "that's right" too! *Laugh* Good one!

*Starstruck* I really enjoyed your entertaining and heartfelt acrostic! Way to rock it! I am so glad you came by. Good luck in the contest! It will be a tough one to judge. *Facepalm* LOL

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Texas Cow Patties  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Hiya Kenzie! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp*Ok! I was still wandering your port for your anniversary and had to check this vivid image in your title. I am familiar with cow patties so I laughed to think about a recipe to make them. LOL And I take that TEXAS patties are special. *Laugh* A comic attractive title.

*Balloonr* Your narrative little story of your experience with the original patties and how you came across a recipe is delightful! It seems fated! *Laugh*

*Balloony*Wow! The recipe looks absolutely scrumptious and it was unexpected as thought it would be hamburgers! Great surprise! I love chocolate chips and never thought of putting corn flakes into anything! *Shock*

*ballonb* The recipe is well laid out and easy to follow. Thanks for adding the temperature as it is lower than I usually do with cookies. I wonder approximately how many cookies one recipe makes.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Hiya Sara Jean I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* Oh wow! These fractal images are so cool and I like your little opening line! It made me smile though maybe a little colour and emoticon in the intro would add some flair. LOL

*Balloonp*The cnotes are each unique with a variety of interesting messages.The black hole looks like a vynyl record. The message with the heart is inspiring. One of my favs on the page. I like the pink knot and its sentiment. Great one to send for support. The message about "gray" is wise for sure.

The reindeer one is pretty but I couls not read the script on it. *Wink*

*Balloonr* I was wondering who did the images. Were they your creations? Might be a nice touch to say.

*Balloong* The selection is truly remarkable and appealing. The cost is reasonable for the creativity. I wondered if the cnote shop supports anything in particular. *Smile*

*Star* Thanks for sharing this original cnote shop with our community. It is a valueable contribution. Love the creativity. *Heart*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party time Thing! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* Wow! What an original and evocative title for a poem that tributes Aretha Franklin! Brilliant! *Sun* Interesting fact about the date of Aretha and Elvis' death being on same day, same month. *Cool*

*Balloonr*This is a very unique free style composition with a voice dreaming of the past...yours and the deaths of american idols. The records are a potent symbol and the notion of the "needle stuck in the past, turning imagination in place" is a brilliant line.

*Balloonr* You capture the essence of a memory in a vivid description of scent and sound. I like your style. Thanks for sharing your tribute and memory in this way. The call of fall is symbolic too. Good job!

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Hiya Kenzie! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* I could not resist the title of this recipe as it sounded like an odd use for potato chips! *Shock2* It is intriguing and the question mark would be the reaction of most of us on hearing the idea! *Laugh* I wonder who thought of it.

*Balloong* The narrative sets up the recipe with a personal reflection and how baking is a great family activity and the recipe is an easy one for quick entertaining purposes.

*Balloonr* The recipe is easy to follow with detailed directions. The base of the recipe is made up of regular on hand items and makes use of old potatoe chips, which one crushes up. I still can't imagine it. LOL I like how you add an alternative type of chip by sharing a friend's trial with corn chips. That would be a different taste.

*Balloonv* I guess the only way to know is to try it out. Not that I have chips too often. *Think* Thanks for sharing this oddity. I will pass it on to some family who may like to give it a go. Kids will love it I am sure. Even the idea will be something to talk about. *Star*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp*Happy Party TIME WD Wilcox! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloong* Wow! This is a weird and wonderful contest that is unique. It is a great way to celebrate and tribute pulp fiction and earlier authors. The page is simply laid out with a thematic banner and title. The background and intent for the contest is clearly stated and was quite interesting. I had no idea of this bit of history. *Smile*

*Balloong* The rules are clear and I like how you are mimicking the essence of the pulp fiction phase. It is awesome that any genre is allowed as it makes the contest accessible to everyone.

The prize is generous and the warning that the prompt picture will change as time goes on is a good one as some folks do use them in the story. *Smile*

*Balloong* The prompt is vividly displayed at the end of the page, handy to see.

*Star*Thanks for creating this valueable contribution to WDC and congratulations on the Quill Nominee last year. *Thumbsup*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy Party Time Thing! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Balloonp* I could not resist the alliterative title and was thrilled when I saw the piece was about your dog and cows! *Delight*

The imagery is so vivid and amazing and the alliterative phrases fill the air as I read it aloud. A lovely piece to read. You portray waiting for spring in a way that appeals to the senses and the words weave a spell. I could imagine the dog movements and the cows going home for the night. I appreciate the contrast of the quiet with the train disruption and the allusion to people's lives in comparison to the simple truth of nature and her creatures.

*Star*The dream at the end is captivating! I do wonder if animals wait too. LOL Thanks for sharing this wonderful alliterative marvel. I had fun! *Heart*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of At the Seabeach  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Maryann! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


WOW! *Salute* This la Tuin Poem is amazing! And its theme is so timely at the end of summer. You always have a knack for themes. I like the combo of nature and a child on the beach! Brilliant looking page too with its colour, glyphs and picture relfecting the theme.

*Balloonp* It was pleasant to read aloud and relaxing to enter into this vivid vision of idyllic landscape filled with sights and sounds of summer at the beach. Images were clear and the tone was lively and evoked a sense of fun and light heartedness. So like you! *Heart*

*Balloonr* The form is well composed with the rules intact and some use of assonance and consonance made for a wonderful soundscape. The title relays the main theme of the poem effectively. I liked your personification of waves chasing the child and sensual appeal of your language.

*Starstruck* I am so happy in this vision! Thanks for sharing your craft and joy! *Heart* Way to go in the contest. Yep it is getting to be a challenge. LOL

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Maryann! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Sun* I love the image you paint here of the sun rise in your envelope quatrain! Great entry into the contest. The bright colour and cover piece reflect the theme brilliantly too and add an aesthetic aura!

*Balloono* The vibrant verbs like "peek", lurk and dare are direct and active. It was pleasant to read aloud with its fine use of repeated letters and sounds like the 'K" and the "ee". You create a vivid contrast between the light and dark elements. *Thumbsup*

*Balloonp* The envelope quatrain form is well composed with its rhyme and flow. I liked the strength is words "dark" and "embark" and the personification of the sun is striking. The change from timid to full power is well captured.

*Balloong* The one glitch for me is two adverbs in the first line... generally adverbs are not as descriptive and poetic as solid descriptions. I think the word "peeked" gives us the idea that she is being slow and careful.*Wink* Also the word "beautifully" is plain as well. I know you want to make her shine powerfully. What words would relate to the sun's radiance...and I do see you are trying rhyme with the first line.*Smile* "brilliantly", brightly
radiantly, regally, etc. Just to enhance the vision of her power. *Sun*

*Star**Sun*Thanks for sharing your vision of the sun shifts. I enjoyed playing in your world. Thanks for playing with me in the contest too! *Confettir*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of The Boogeyman  
Review by eyestar~
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC C. YARN Weaver just in time for WDC 18th Anniversary party! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* I love nonet form and your composition is awesome. The title certainly indicates something dark and your poem describes this creature vividly.

The atmosphere is tense as you lead the reader into the vision..like a nightmare. The images fit the creature and it is scarier to think he is talking to his son. The similie "like cold glass" is effective and I do wonder what A 'strange" feeling is. The last line bolded emphasizes the command. *Thumbsup*

*Balloongo* The punctuation assisted the read and flow and the intensity grew to the end. One might expect a BOO! which is reflected in the command LOOK. LOL Creepy!

*Star*Thanks for sharing this eerie vision, so clearly in so few words! Great work on the nonet form, which can be a challenge!

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of April Showers  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Balloonp*Happy party Time CJ! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonr*I enjoyed your tribute to spring with its playful vibration! The Minute form is perfect for capturing episodes of this time of the year too! Good for you for trying out a new form. *Salute*

Your title centers the reader on the time of year and what is special about spring. Each of the 3 stanzas portrays vividly an aspect of the season. The mood has a sense of fun.

Your composition of the form is effective and it was fun to read. Thanks for the author's note on the Minute poem. I like the invitation to Look... and smiled at the "don't scoff" as I could imagine the doubt about spring growth from a tiny bud. LOL Evocative! I could imagine.

The progression from flowers to trees to animals is cool and the last rhyme is brilliant! *Sun*

I think in the first verse you can drop the comma after "showers" so that the two last lines form one thought, the familiar line! *Wink*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your lively vision and crafting this minute! Great job!

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Happy 18th Party Time Black Adder! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* I was so happy to see a Sci fi genre contest and I think it fills a niche here! Yay! Your intro was inviting with a clear intent and rationale for its creation. I had to laugh at the apt line: "may the best senitient being win." Humour is always appealing amid all the details. *Laugh*

*Balloongo* I liked the simplicity of the rules and that all the details are in one place.
Have you thought of sprucing up the page with little subheadings like Rules, Prizes, Winners, Prompt, due date.... just for an easier viewing? *Wink*

You could also ask for donations and list donors. *Wink* You would need to open a group item bank to link to the forum.

It looks like there is lots of interest in the theme considering all the stats on the page. I wonder about maybe putting the past stats in a drop down menu as opposed to posting them all here, to make it simpler to scroll down to forum. Have the most recent entries posted openly, and then the winners when the time comes. It is lovely to highlight the sci fi works though! *Heart*

*Salute*You have done a great job with your first contest and it is good to see folks entering! Onward!
Congrats on the Quill Nomination. May be time to stream line and tweak a bit for fun. oh...maybe a lovely banner at the top. Thanks for thinking this up and making sci fi folks a place to park their space craft! *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Society Unchained  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Bwilder! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


Oh wow! I so enjoyed this blog entry and could really relate to your philosophy. *Thumbsup* The potent image of "lock and chain of society" is brilliant! *Cool* I like the title...and hey, we could be that society, the unchained from collective!

*Balloonp* The writing is coherent and easy to follow. Your voice is natural as you explain your rational for writing. Your commentary reveals your personal opinion and I too, try to rememeber to ask "is this working for me?" *Laugh* I wondered if the quote in quotations is from some one, like another source or is it yours.

*Quill* I think you need a period after "ago" or use "and actually" as the next line is a complete sentence on its own. Also a comma after "nuts", or say 'nuts or gone crazy". *Wink*

*Starstruck* Thanks for sharing your vision. I enjoyed reading. I wonder if adding an example of when you chose not to follow for the sake of following might engage the reader as well. *Wink*
Keep on writing and enjoy the 18th Party Bash! *Balloonr*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Time Away  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Thaddeus! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* I was drawn to the title and its luring message. I thought of taking time away from it all! Your poem gives wise advice on the best way to live that makes sense. My favourite is listen to learn, count the stars, and of course, smiled at the "papers and pens", so vital for a writer. LOL I like the second verse especially in terms of advice for teens! *Thumbsup*

*Balloong* The quatrains are well composed with effective rhyme and flow. It was fun to read. I noticed that the first verse lines are not all consistent 8 syllable counts as in the rest of the verses.*Wink*

*Balloony* The repeated sections in each verse added to the speed of flow and gave the piece the feel of a wisdom reflection.

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing your vision and experience in this inspirational verse.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Artemis Quill! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp*I was drawn by your title as it sounds like a delightful place. The form is one I have actually heard of and have created. LOL It is quite a challenge.

*Balloonb*The poem has a vivid image and the idea of "chatter on its face" is unique. You conveyed the happiness of the stream and the feeling of the poet as he was drawn into its beauty.

*Balloonp* You did a good job of creating the form. Its rhyme scheme is consistent and the chosen words like "ambling" and "bubbling" are vivid. I noticed that some lines are nine syllables instead of them all being "8". It did not take me out of the read, just a technical note. Line three you could drop the word "his" to fix it. Lines 7 and 8 are also 9 syllables I think. You might say "so tranqil" in line 8.*Smile*

*Balloong* I felt the word "projected" was rather unpoetic. *Wink* I think a period at the end of the first line would be more apt as the second line is a complete thought on its own.

*Star*I liked entering your vision. Thanks for sharing your craft and Happy Anniversary. *Balloonr*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Caerlynn! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Tree* Oh, I am a tree hugger and love trees so was so happy to find your poem! The idea of trees talking is so cool and I think they do speak in their own way...if we would listen to the vibe! *Fairy*

*Balloonr*The simplicity of the free style poem mirrors the simple call of nature and I enjoyed entering into your dream as you ponder what a tree would say. Your ideas are relevant and the queries you make to us are evocative and ones we might want to consider. *Thumbsup*

*Balloong*The flow is not regular and yet I like the impact of short abrupt lines line "if you must eat" and "upon my limb". You really capture the importance of trees in this expression. *Heart*

*Quill* I wondered about the comma after "say" in the last verse as really it goes with the "Is" in the last line. You might even use a colon after "is" and put what the tree says there in italics for the punch line that sums up your whole piece so brilliantly. *Delight*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your love for trees in this heart felt poem! *Treefall*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Loving Thoughts  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Timothy! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you, fellow Power reviewer! *Delight*


*Balloonp* What a sweet title that reveals your theme, fitting your short expression. I could imagine the scene in the simple words that portray the poet in his element.
I liked the idea of thinking of love on a spring day as it suggests new beginnings and hopeful dreams.

*Balloonr* The short four line poem has a lovely flow with clear rhyme. I enjoy the sing song effect when I read it aloud. The repeated word in the short phrases in the first three lines really works. You lead us into a relaxed state and then bring us to the mind pondering. Very effective.

*Balloonp*Some use of repeated sounds like "b" and "s" works to create a pleasing sound scape as I read aloud as well. Good job!

*Star*Thanks for sharing your vision and craft! I enjoyed entering that world.

Light on the path as you write on!
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