I don't know how anyone can sleep with an arachnid in their bEdRoOm! But that's not who she ends up with, I'm happy to report! Such a well-crafted story with good tension and lots of detail to keep a reader interested! I didn't come across any grammar or punctuation errors. Thanks for a good read!
"Howling Halloween" - an acrostic created by Jezri in 2006! We should have had this out about a week ago! But since I love the genre I am happy to review it at anytime! And Happy 15th Anniversary at WDC!
A perfect acrostic which has been attentively placed on the page to show it at its best. Jezri has been clever and inventive with each word!
A Wonderful Poem ~ "Old Brighton Town" ~ by Lady Elf created in 2017. Happy 4th Anniversary ~ at WDC What a wonderful poem - I have read it a couple of times, and I really enjoyed it.
7 Stanzas with an AA BB rhyming scheme - to give a pleasing resonance, while either reading or saying it out loud, as I did. Lovely!
What does trigger My Review? Well... An interesting title for sure, next I look for a short story or poem because I always feel that these types of items present a succinct overview of the writer's quality and style . They're good for reviewers who can quickly read a complete item and give a thoughtful review.
I enjoyed your poll and it gave me a chance to relax a little and have a bit of fun as well as provide me with an opportunity to express some insight.
"Black Tinsel and Fading Lights" by nicoola was created a while ago - December 2006. Perhaps, just about a month after joining WDC in November, 2006.
This item appears to be a kind of tribute to friends who were important to the writer and I respectfully acknowledge this' as I review. Suffice to say, it was well written and would do justice to any friend.
Excerpt: A Lovely Line
And for a brief moment, as a barrage of memories played on the silver screen of her mind, she smiled, delighted by the visual splendor.
"Space Blunder" is by Light and was created in 2009! Another story which needs an airing! And by the way ~ Congratulations on 13 Years at WDC!
A sci-fi / technology story - Yes, I like those - I like writing them, too. Well... It seems that no matter how clever we get, we still have all the same weaknesses - and bungling bureaucracies!
Lots of information included by a knowledgable writer which reinforces the story's inate tension. Thankyou for a very enjoyable read!
"The Words We Never Say" written by Angels in my Ear is a traditional poem - with 10 stanzas and an AB AB rhyming scheme: written a month after the writer joined, in November, 2012. Congratulations on 8 Years at WDC!
While I am still very much a novice, I enjoy reading poetry and I think, on a quiet night, when there are no distractions I like to look for a piece to read. I enjoyed this item, which had me reflecting on a time, long ago... and I enjoyed your poem, as an agent for those memories..
But the words that I so cherish
Break like ice against your heart
They never seem important
Yet they’re tearing us apart
"In Your Eyes" written by Dr Matticakes Myra was created awhile ago - December of 2005 - so its time it had an airing! Out for an Anniversary Waltz! Congratulations on your 18 years at WDC!
I enjoyed this free verse poem - or lyrics as it is labelled in your portfolio. I wonder if you ever put it to music... I particularly liked to stanza below. I am a novice but I think that the writer has captured a particular wistfulness throughout the lyric.
Drown.
As the coolness crushes you.
Fall.
On your shattered wings.
Cry.
But remember
it's weakness in your eyes.
The tears...
Cry...
"Mama" by NickiD89 - A tender story of a mom-to-be who reflects on memories of her own Mama - which don't always provide idyllic recollections. It is in fact a sad tale even though some of the memories might be compensatory... I found the story very touching.
Good writing, well paced with no detectable errors of grammar or spelling. Congratulations on 17 years at WDC
"Audrey's Son" by Newbie, StephanieHazel is a powerful family drama in which the writer demonstrates her skill in pacing the story and holding the tension until the end. I think that this story could be submitted for prize money, it was an excellent read! ... I need a drink! I feel for that mother and her son!
Did you mean?...
she found herself smacking her first ...fist off her other palm repeatedly
Hello JustMe - I've reviewed another item in your port' and I noticed this' on the reviewing page - as reviewed earlier.
I think that I am not unlike you - but I am lucky that I have 2 sons who love me and that, together with my writing - gets me by. I'm outspoken - too outspoken and can't seem to have an opinion ... (like other people with over the top personalities can get away with!) ... without offending someone and having major fallout as a consequence. But I go on! I insist on being allowed my space, the same as anyone else. If that doesn't exactly win me a ton of friends, so be it.
One word of caution - referring to other people's downfall as in drug or other failing may hurt relatively inocent people. I know many' write them off - but I work in Mental Health and AOD Services - you might be surprised at the number of people who have turned their lives around. I never say never!
I think, since you can put 'pen to paper' - that you are a good writer! Yes, I do! You have a coherent and edgy style. Why don't you try some short story writing - some Flash Fiction and put that up? I will be more than happy to review anything and everything you write! Consider me your online WDC Pal!
This story is well written, suggesting that the writer is not a novice - perhaps they're used to writing at tertiary, level because cohesive structure is maintained throughout'.
A poignant vignette - no surprise ending or twist in the tale but the story left a definite impression! Well Done!
"Something's Fishy" - I thought this was a good title and it has sinister connotations, too! - Written by Foxtrot Victor - whose writing I always enjoy.
I didn't realise how devious this writer could be in their thinking! Good writing and signs that trouble was brewing created the necessary tension. The resolution might not be considered one' by some readers though!
Written almost entirely in dialogue, the story has an intense pace and a somewhat disturbing finale but is a guarantted good, short story read!
It sure was! I laughed at the last line - it certainly was a really good twist in the tale, and the first funny Flash Fiction entry that I've ever read.
A good story arc with the whole composition being set out nicely on the page with a good, clear font - no grammar or spelling errors detected.
"as we wake " written by Newbie, sambob seems to be a rap tune - it certainly has that kind of rhythm, and after checking their bio, I think I may be right. It's a very positive and upbeat message which is what we all need at the moment.
I really liked the words which have a rhythm when they are spoken out loud and although I hadn't thought of myself as an appreciator of the rap genre, I think that this writer has engendered an interest for me, in that medium. Well Done!
A short and funny parady - or farce (I love writing farce, myself) - perhaps this would do well, extended to a one act play in Sydney, Australia!
Since I have a tendency to convert what I read to an internal reel, I can see this as online entertainment. There is a niche for it, apparently and writing in similar style, has engendered interest at the AACTA's in Australia. e.g. Ding Dong I'm ...
"Ten Judgments That Changed India" by a Newbie, Venky is a fairly dense political opinion piece. At times wordy but mostly well written never-the-less, with a very good command of the English Language and apparent knowledge of law.
However below' - is an example of an extremely long sentence that needs revision with appropriate punctuation.
A convergence, as to what broadly constituted the intractable, indispensable, and inviolable structure of the Constitution was however reached and it is now a given that the tenets of supremacy of the Constitution, separation of powers between the legislature, executive and the judiciary, sovereignty of India and its democratic polity, dignity of the individual and the mandate to build a welfare state and an egalitarian society all represent the basic Constitutional Doctrine; [FULL STOP!]
My Over-All Impression
While I was impressed with the knowledge and expresion generally, I thought that there was a level of verbosity, which the piece' would benefit from with some revision. However, as an opinion piece for general readership, I think it was very interesting.
An excerpted piece of writing that demonstrates potential
'Once finished, he watched me write the last few words, seemingly fascinated by the methodic swaying of my silvery stylus and the blue letters that were forming on the page. “Where did you learn?” he asked quietly.'
An example of an Error
I nodded, a look of contempt amusement on my face.
Should read: I nodded, a look of amused contempt on my face.
Some repetitiousness - its a matter of fine tuning written language for more interesting descriptors
He suddenly blushed and pulled a piece of folded parchment out of his pocket. I suddenly noticed his clothing: it was fine, made of quality materials and dyed with expensive colors. He was not a poor child.
I do think that this story has potential, however it needs tighter editing and awareness of what 'reads well' by the writer. Overall, I did enjoy enjoy the story; it started to feel Dickensian and had an old world charm.
"rest is only a reward for the worker" by Rhyssa - 'speaks' to me this evening (in Australia). Are we masochists, then? Possibly - how many' though, can relate to the whipping up of some motiviation to get the day's tasks done. It may seem extreme, but only a lazy bones, like me, knows that metaphorical self-flagellation is, in fact, necessary!
The symmetry in the poem's presentation is also very pleasing which is explained
According to the American scientist Alan Lightman, human brains actually strive to see things symmetrically. “The reason must be partly psychological," he says. "Symmetry represents order, and we crave order in this strange universe we find ourselves in... [It] helps us make sense of the world around us"
For the unititiated, like me, who chance upon this review - here's some info
... To complete a word challenge AND have it make sense when it's read out, is always a pleasing achievement. I enjoyed this piece of writing - and although I would not attempt it myself - I applaud those who can do it successfully!
Item "This Twisted Life" written by Dr Gonzo states that the genre is poetry:biographical. I have a respect for the poet, who is modest in his claims of being one' - but I beg to differ. This poet has great capacity: exampled in the first stanza, below.
However, I have also seen some growth and development since I first started reading their poems and I believe that the writer is learning their lessons fast! I think this poem shows vulnerability, honesty and is very well expressed.
My past has come back to haunt me
No reward in the trust I gave
Expectation leads to disappointment
Not the joy I hoped it would pave
"The City of 100 Walls" written by Month Old Newbie, Midnight Starkiller left me wanting more! I was just getting into the story, so I hope that there is more to come
The genre that has been selected is Fantasy/Political/Adventure - but it's a subtle inclusion because, the main protagonist could just almost be amidst a 'State of Emergency'/Pandemic Enforcement period. I liked that aspect about the story as it makes it quite relatable to the reader.
My main contention is the setting out on the page. Online, I think its important to set it out on the page in an appealing way. It certainly makes this reviewer more inclined to read the story favourably.
I ran the story through a grammar and spelling check which did not detect any errors.
As I indicated above, I found the story engaging and I hope that the writer will let us all know asap when there is more to read!
"Feeling Grateful" written by QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham is a Winner! Congratulations! NJ ~ An Apocalyptic tale of Year Zero - Post Pandemic and The Great Vote Disaster. Written with a mixture of narration and diaglogue utilising all the prompts.
In the beginning of the story, it was evident that social anarchy was taking place, such as in a war, and at first I thought that was what was unfolding. In a a sense, it was. However, the writer took us on a journey from the story's present to a future where the characters were being viewed historically. Very interesting!
I thought that, considering the word limit and the necessity of incorporating all the prompts, that the writer did a great job of the time perspective-angle. The flow or story arc was engaging, infact, I wished that there had been more of it! No errors detected.
"Carrying Fire" by debmiller1 This story carries the reader on an exciting ride, that's for sure! I thought he'd be D.O.A.
I was sure it would be a the ghost of Sam arising... Well written, not missing a beat! I was excited all the way through and like the bike rider, I caught glimpses of dirt trail - creek ravine - all while wolves pursued!
What a cool story! With a nice sting in the tale! Very Scorpionic! Well, that's the Astrological Period I'm reading, in any case.
I really like your style - slick. Smooooooth I'm really impressed! In just under 300 Words you delivered a complete 360 Degree Turn! I won't spoil it for others - they should go and read that! Thankyou - I really appreciate your craft! Well Done!
This item, "Cars " by Gabby is 4 Stanzas using an uneven rhyme scheme -'which may be used to generate those ambivalent feelings and make the reader consciously aware of the poet's sensation.'[ No Author / No Date - APA 6th Edition Citation Style].
It strikes me that you, Gabby could write for ads or gift cards - in all the pieces of writing that I've seen here on WDC, I've noticed a certain style which would suit the advertising world. Have you ever explored that?
In anycase, your writing brings a smile' - and that's a good thing!
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I don't know how anyone can sleep with an arachnid in their bEdRoOm! 
But that's not who she ends up with, I'm happy to report! 
Such a well-crafted story with good tension and lots of detail to keep a reader interested! I didn't come across any grammar or punctuation errors. Thanks for a good read! 
And Happy 15th Anniversary at WDC! 
A perfect acrostic which has been attentively placed on the page to show it at its best. Jezri has been clever and inventive with each word! 
What a wonderful poem - I have read it a couple of times, and I really enjoyed it. 
7 Stanzas with an AA BB rhyming scheme - to give a pleasing resonance, while either reading or saying it out loud, as I did. Lovely!
What does trigger My Review? 
Well... An interesting title for sure, next I look for a short story or poem because I always feel that these types of items present a succinct overview of the writer's quality and style . They're good for reviewers who can quickly read a complete item and give a thoughtful review. 
- so its time it had an airing! Out for an Anniversary Waltz! Congratulations on your 18 years at WDC!
I feel for that mother and her son!
Did you mean?...
I didn't realise how devious this writer could be in their thinking! Good writing and signs that trouble was brewing created the necessary tension. The resolution might not be considered one' by some readers though!
It sure was! I laughed at the last line - it certainly was a really good twist in the tale, and the first funny Flash Fiction entry that I've ever read. 
"
However below' - is an example of an extremely long sentence that needs revision with appropriate punctuation.
[FULL STOP!]
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Item "
The genre that has been selected is Fantasy/Political/Adventure - but it's a subtle inclusion because, the main protagonist could just almost be amidst a 'State of Emergency'/Pandemic Enforcement period. I liked that aspect about the story as it makes it quite relatable to the reader.
NJ ~ An Apocalyptic tale of Year Zero - Post Pandemic and The Great Vote Disaster. Written with a mixture of narration and diaglogue utilising all the prompts.
In the beginning of the story, it was evident that social anarchy was taking place, such as in a war, and at first I thought that was what was unfolding. In a a sense, it was. However, the writer took us on a journey from the story's present to a future where the characters were being viewed historically. Very interesting! 
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What a cool story! With a nice sting in the tale! Very Scorpionic! Well, that's the Astrological Period I'm reading, in any case.
I'm really impressed! In just under 300 Words you delivered a complete 360 Degree Turn! I won't spoil it for others - they should go and read that! Thankyou - I really appreciate your craft! Well Done! 
It strikes me that you, Gabby could write for ads or gift cards - in all the pieces of writing that I've seen here on WDC, I've noticed a certain style which would suit the advertising world. Have you ever explored that? 