"Indifferent trees" written by dom11977 reads like science fiction but I'm not too sure... it could equally be about the positive symptoms of the condition known as Schizophrenia in which the affected person has visual and/or auditory hallucinations - sometimes of a derogatory nature, which impel the sufferer to commit actions that they wouldn't ordinarily do.
...He says it's a mystery... It is.
... But I tell you, I couldn't put it down! It was a well written, totally engaging short story! I read it twice. Not typo's - No evident errors of any kind!
Amber - a Newbie - has written the poem "The End" from which I've extracted the following lines - I also think that these lines are the heart of the writing.
On another note, I would be careful of 'over-working' lines to make things 'fit': - 'less-is-more' sometimes.
I liked the font type and the setup on the page - it was very appealing.
The end of an era, the end of a story
The author writes the last line with a sigh of relief
This story at 299 words was the winner at "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" - it's written by debmiller1 and she knows how to follow the Flash Fiction covenant: 'Thou shall have a twist in thy tail - if thouest want to be truly entertainingeth'.
"Mrs. Sutphin's Malady" is written by Newbie, Josh Bolling and it is the tale of a rather nasty creature, and I don't mean the spider! Macabre; a horror story which has a back-palate of abuse - and as I get older, I am less surprised by the malevolent things some people are capable of, but still...
A well written story with an original take on horror - for me, at any rate. Since one puts such faith in doctors, it is a little unpalatable to have to consider them as the villain.
I found one or two typo's but got caught up in the story so I can't recall where exactly... run the story through a word.doc spell checker to pick them up.
"The Semicolon" set out by flyfishercacher is a wonderful discussion on the semicolon. For those of us who hope to write for the interest of others and not just to please ourselves, this intelligent English lesson is invaluable. Below, I have included in my review some succinct lines which, if other readers' do nothing else - take this information down and refer to it until you have learnt it off by heart!
Good writing should be a mixture of both: short sentences for action and plot movement and long ones for pause and reflection.
I like this as an intuitive guide:
Comma – catch your breath.
Semicolon – catch your breath and grab the thought.
Period – Full stop, end of the idea.
Now, see .. this is my kind of poem! After reading it - I was immediately transported back to a person and time in my life where these utterances could have been spoken by me. "Love Me" is written by a very new Newbie, Elexis LaFay - who I reviewed just yesterday - and here today - is another piece of writing!
This poem rhymes and I like rhyming poems - there was a time I believed that all poems had to rhyme - but that is just verse, I think. I'm still learning... still have my 'L' Plates on.
Is that a few drum beats... a guitar and piano... I can feel a song coming into the room
"I'll Do Better" is over 5600 words - I read most of it but started to get a bit confused with who was what and where they were - as indicated by my arrow.
I thought that the story was well written - a good flow, characters were clearly identifiable and I remained engaged until I felt that there wasn't enough explanation for what was happening.. more narration I think - is required to give the reader a proper view of the scene.. like a movie.
When I read - the story becomes like a movie, in my head - but suddenly during this story - I could 'hear' sounds and noise and voices but couldn't get a clear idea of what was unfolding in the 'scene'. It could be just me. But I'm happy to share - as best as I can - why I stopped reading - and there isn't that much left to read - so perhaps another day... Oh! and a few typos, but if you put the word doc through a grammar and spell check you'll find those. Easily fixed.
Overall Impression Well worth a read! Very engaging - probably just needs a tweak here and there. I'm up for further reads/reviews as it progresses. I'm invested!
I read down to
"Harvey, relax. We can talk about this." I wrapped my fist around the knife, a dangerous and stupid indulgence, forgetting even that I had it.
JACE - House Targaryen has created a very impressive piece of 'Word Art' in item "WDC" - I'm sure the creator won't mind me saying that it is particularly notable as WDC Celebrates 20th Years of operating as an International Writing Site! - which we are all so lucky to be able t enjoy.
It's the first time I've seen this form of 'Word Art' in a long time - it is always eye-catching and effective!
I read an inference of uncertainty in how the young person felt that they were being perceived. This ambivalence sits incongruent to the self-containment that many children feel and a quality hard to retain as we enter young adulthood and beyond.
The poet has expressed quintessential human qualities which the reader immediately identifies and appreciates.
A Grammar Error - Easily Fixed
Do you know who I am?
Maybe youryou're too blind to see;
There are many poets to keep one company at WDC but I value the knowledge and resources at
"The Poet's Place "
That made me smile and wince (not sure which came first, though)
Coz I can identify with all of that - I think 'we' have that little talk ourselves, every day!
River is a Gemini (like me) and perhaps talking to our 'other selves' comes naturally. So "Why Don’t You Look At Me? " - resonates at many levels, for me, at least.
I loved the way this funny - and yes - a bit sad in content at times - story developed. But it does have a cheerful ending!
I found this poem on the Reviewer's Page and I was intrigued. "Light" was written by Sophy but I could imagine standing over someone I loved and feeling the same way.
I learnt what Mirror Cinquain is, thankyou!
A Mirror Cinquain, then, is a 10-line poem (decastich) made up of two Cinquains, where the second is reversed, forming a mirror image of the first. So in summary, the Mirror Cinquain is. A decastitch (10-line stanza) with an emphasis on the syllabic count of each line.
This is excellent Flash Fiction - speaking of "Bleak" by Leadwood - who was the Daily Winner for 1st September at "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" & certainly deserved to!
"It's blurry, the image. It's a figure, the face distorted. I strain to make out the details. This is unusual, unsettling. I always see the faces, but not this time. The figure glides through a fog. It's a male, I can tell by the size. I know I need to see his face, but a sharp pain pierces my head. ..."
Perhaps because I'm a nurse, I thought the story might be about a patient with head injuries.. but no! Something more mysterious was about to take place.
The story teller appears to be an accomplished Flash Fiction writer - with a good twist in the tale. Well Done!
Good Evening from Melbourne, Australia, Randyjohnson - I once owned a Chihuahua too and I know how 'hyper' they can be. Very nervous as a breed, on the whole. I love dogs and little dogs especially, since I live in a small place in a built up area, I could only have a small 'house' dog.
I loved your story about you and Agnes - it makes me want to go and get a dog again - I currently don't have one, as I work nights, and most little dogs howl and bark at night when you're not there and neighbors would complain, I'm sure.
I hope you find another little pet to love soon, though!
Rae has written a well rounded piece of Flash Fiction called "My Angel" - which has a very credible ring to it...I was able to picture Molly there in a recital school hall... very convincing and engaging. Apart from a couple of typos - the story had a perfect arc with a satisfying ending.
A couple of typos
*heard snatches of whispered conservationconversation from the audience
*By the time the day I arrived, I was feeling confident
The 'Thing' with Flash Fiction is that, it sounds easy - a story of 300 words or less. But you've got to have a WHOLE story... that's a begining - middle and end. And the end - can't be any ordinary old end. It has to have a catch - be completely unpredictable - a twist in the tale.
Queen Norma has it down pat. I keep asking for her book and then I can get her autograph too! She certainly is Queen of the Story Tellers!
Hello Newbie ~ Ckrose77 (17th August 2020) I really enjoyed your item, "Embrace" and it seemed poetic to me. I am a very novice member of "The Poet's Place " but I find the knowledge there to be first rate. You might like to see for yourself...
I was so engaged with your words that I couldn't resist re-setting them into a picture for you to see.
I
wish to lay among the Meadows
As I gaze into your Galaxies
Our souls embraced among the stars.
Our hearts may be heavy
So let us lay to rest in the clouds.
There is no better place to be lost
Than between the moon and the stars.
Greetings, Newbie Uchee I was very impressed with your short story which has many elements of a fable.
"And that's when the fish said..." ... "Perhaps I wasn't meant for gills," He pondered sadly as he nestled into the reeds lying beneath a decaying log.'
Here's some info' I hope is of some value
*Fables are fiction.
*Fables are short and have few characters.
*Characters are often animals with human attributes.
*They have strengths and weaknesses and are in some sort of conflict.
Hello to Newbie Peony who is very new! 18th August - that's today here in Australia - I think the U.S.A. is a day behind.
You have written some philosophy - that is the term used generally, when one considers themselves - in relation to a larger matter or being.
Some might even consider your writing a form of poetry - and as a novice, I can only direct you to this page and hope that you might find a second home. It's interesting and you might enjoy the competitions and information provided, there. "The Poet's Place "
This item, "The Real Christmas Quiz" by Moomintrollwas interesting and I'm ashamed to say I only just passed! I think we get to take so much for granted about the bible stories and I haven't belonged to a Church since I was a child. Never the less, I consider myself a Christian and I should have gotten all 21 questions correct.
Thankyou for creating the quiz, I enjoyed it - the set questions required real knowledge by the author and I think that is a very creative way to teach people about Christmas and Christianity - an especially good teaching tool for young people.
Now, how's that for a teaser? Well, I am always amazed by QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham's imaginative turn of mind. I confess, I'm a follower and I always look forward to her stories and this one was pure Genius in the convolutions which this little gem took! Amazing imagination!! ... Time for her to put all these wonderful stories in a book, please!
The winner at the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" with "A Two-person Job" on the 16th August certainly did create an arresting story! Full of suspense and a good twist in the tale at the end - very satisfying!
It's nice to see a new winner there - encouraging for the rest of us who'd love to have a go - but, speaking for myself, too intimidated by the few, excellent writers who consistently win there.
Well - the plusses are that all the information is freely available through various links on Dave's pages.
What I love about the way Vivian has set this page out is that it is clear, methodical and best of all - easy to understand She provides both the term and then gives an example. How easy is that!
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...He says it's a mystery... It is. 
On another note, I would be careful of 'over-working' lines to make things 'fit': - 'less-is-more' sometimes.
Well paced dialogue leading to exciting action.
A well written story with an original take on horror - for me, at any rate. Since one puts such faith in doctors, it is a little unpalatable to have to consider them as the villain. 
This poem rhymes and I like rhyming poems - there was a time I believed that all poems had to rhyme - but that is just verse, I think. I'm still learning... still have my 'L' Plates on.
Overall Impression Well worth a read! Very engaging - probably just needs a tweak here and there. I'm up for further reads/reviews as it progresses. I'm invested! 
A Grammar Error - Easily Fixed
Eloquent and elegant - as simplicity often is! 
Perhaps because I'm a nurse, I thought the story might be about a patient with head injuries.. but no! Something more mysterious was about to take place.
The story teller appears to be an accomplished Flash Fiction writer - with a good twist in the tale. Well Done! 
I loved your story about you and Agnes - it makes me want to go and get a dog again - I currently don't have one, as I work nights, and most little dogs howl and bark at night when you're not there and neighbors would complain, I'm sure.
The 'Thing' with Flash Fiction is that, it sounds easy - a story of 300 words or less. But you've got to have a WHOLE story... that's a begining - middle and end. And the end - can't be any ordinary old end. It has to have a catch - be completely unpredictable - a twist in the tale.
Queen Norma has it down pat. I keep asking for her book and then I can get her autograph too! She certainly is Queen of the Story Tellers! 
"
Here's some info' I hope is of some value
You have written some philosophy - that is the term used generally, when one considers themselves - in relation to a larger matter or being. 
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