You know you brought up something that I think most don't think about but you and I have. My son was put in jail one time and it broke my heart so much to see him in chains and locked up as he came into court. Then a woman who looked to be around my age and was in chains as she was arrested too. She put out her hand as best she could and touched me. She told me everything would be alright and told me not to cry. When she did this I looked into her eyes and I saw myself. It was then that I thought you know this could be me under different circumstances. So I try to help others like you do. Who cares where the money goes that you give? It's having the chance to give unto others that is the important thing.
As always you have done a terrific job.
I also knew verysara. She was a wonderful soul. Always quick to make you feel at home.
Love,
Diane
That pretty much sums my life up as well only I was smart enough to divorce the second husband.
Our lifes are so simular only I was raised in the ghetto of Detroit but used an address to go to a white collar neighborhood school. I couldn't make friends. I was pretty much the person who was a great actress. One moment I was a girl from the slums being around the poor then in an hour and a half I turned myself around into a very rich girl from the surburbs. Isn't life funny?
Well, I have this pounding headache so please say a little prayer for me. Funny though I figured you were a really young girl when you read my blog because you go by Kenzie! To find out you are like me..in your fifties!
Just look at you! You are a star! I'm so proud of you. I remember when you were just a little ittle bitty newbie and I loved you and your work so. Like John Mayer says in one of his wonderful songs, "Someday I'll fly, I'll soar!" You gotta love a singer, guitar player who has create a new genre of music.
I'm going to look up a black suitcase friend of mine. He's great and try and follow up.
That's a great poem and a wonderful way of showing how a man feels about love. It reminded me of my husband only he's the one that wonders what is going on in my head. You did a wonderful job. I love poetry. I am not really good at it myself. I at least have tried since being on this website.
Thanks so much for the review of Tupelo Outhouse! It was great.
Very good for a short poem. I liked it because it was good, quick and to the point. We do have a chance on Earth because of those who stand behind us through thick and thin. This is the way I feel about my very best friend. We shared the same birthday and when we realized that we took it from there and we are so much alike!
Keep writing! That's what it is all about rewrite, rewrite, rewrite! Diane
I liked this item very well. It had a believable plot and the characters were wonderful. I loved the little girl and you honestly potray to me, what it would be like for her to loose her daddy. The only part that left me hanging was the end. I think what happens when you write when you get to something painful it's hard to write the ending.
Keep writing.
Diane
Sara,
That was wonderful and very beautiful. I can just see you swinging in the tire swing. There's no better way to forget your worries than to go swinging high in a swing.
You did a great job and should continue to write. In the meantime I'm going to donate you some GP's toward you membership. I'll stay in touch to make sure you stay a member.
Diane...there's more from the group I'm involved with...Hi! I'm Diane and I am here to adopt you!
I have been a member of Writing.Com since March, 2003 and I'm glad to be here to help you get closer to that beautiful Upgrade. I that time I have met many writers, entered a lot of contests and written quite a bit.
You probably want to learn as much as possible to earn a lot of GP's, then we should be the perfect match!
My main job is to donate gp's to you, but also to encourage you and give you good advice. I will try my best to show all of what I know and keep in close contact with you.
1. Adopt you
2. Decide how often I will send you money
3. Send you encouraging emails
4. Ask you if you have any questions or concerns
5. Show you the ropes
Finally, I just want to say that you should always check out our member's page and post questions or comments. It's a good way to keep in touch with other member's of the group.
That's about it!!
Put this in with your signatures: I have been officially ADOPTED by All In Upgrade Need!
Any questions or confusions please don't hesitate to ask! Have a nice day we speak again.
This is a very good informative essay. I think there should be a direct contact to read this essay from the home page. Alot of the things in this essay I knew nothing about and it is things that are important to the site. I think all writers should be here, along with editors, teachers, and readers. This site not only promotes education; it is an education. Along with that you have mentors who become that best of friends and it is a great emotional boost for those of us suffering from depression.
Thanks for all you do!
Diane
Very good and I hate to say this but I have the exact same virus. The problem with me is that I am a woman, unemployed because my husband had a near fatal car accident in 2002. I lost my job as an office manager at a camp and conference center. Now I have no money, I'm addicted to writing, and my house is a mess. I always said if I didn't have a job I would be a perfect housekeeper but I got the virus and you know the rest of the story!
Keep writing anyway..Diane
I liked this poem a lot. Some of it is because I feel like I do understand it down deep in my soul then another part of me wants to say that I don't. Does that make any sense? It's like my mind doesn't want to accept that I am like that old and not wanting to face the memories. I think when a writing does you like that it is very good. The poem does want me to hear more.
Diane
This is a great story and on content it deserves a 5 because it really touches the heart and covers all the emotions except for the sense of smell. You could add that very easily and do a few edits and have such a great work in an essay or even a short story because it is so good it leaves you wanting to know more about your cast of characters. I would just do some editing and you'll come out. If you need some help just let me know. Things like doing the conversations need some help, little things like that and like I said it would be perfect.
Keep writing because you have talent.
Diane
That was really a good read. I enjoyed it so much because the words you wrote is what I too feel that I would read them over again so that they could fully soak into my brain. One of my favorite lines is this one Novels that are turned into movies sometimes leave me feeling bereft because about every movie has left me this way if I have read the book first. Two of the movies that cross my mind that do this is Gone With the Wind and The Stand. Both could not compare with the book. I don't know how Interview with the Vampire came so close.
Anyway you did a great job. I could go on and on and when I do that you most certainly struck a cord with me.
I loved your article that you put in the newspaper which gives me the great idea of doing the same. I can stress writing.com enough. The joy of writing has always been a true love of mine and when I found this website not only did it help me with my writing I also got the great joy of reading other writer's work! I was depressed and had lost my job due to my husband's coalmining accident and then later an automobile wreck. I really truly think I would have had a nervous breakdown without this site. I look forward to reading some more in your port as well because I can see so much talent. Do you have to let the storymistress know if you are going to do an article for the newspaper?
Thank you for writing!
Keep it up! I've joined the NANOWRIMO so I've got to get busy.
Diane
I really like and respect your writing of the pain you feel. The thing I hate is that it sounds exactly like mine especially how it is felt in the fingers. In the mornings after a long night is the worse. You explained it so presisly that I am going online and look around at this strange diease to see if I am altered with it. I pray not.
Diane
That is so very good and so believeable. I will now have to visit the story of Jorinda and Joringel. Did you write that story too or did this story result from reading that one? Whichever way it went you did a marvelous job? Are you thinking of making it into a novel? It's a perfect story for this time of year.
Keep writing! You have a tremendous amount of talent.
Oh, this was good but so sad that you could feel that you have nothing. By your writing you have something. You can write. I find sometimes people that have the greatest sucess as some kind of artist is those of us that are depressed. Come and join us in one of the groups for depressed people. It helps and we let you shout if you'd like. Just let me know.
Keep writing.
Diane
This is really good work. I felt all of the senses really strong except for smelling which you can kind of get from the way you wrote the poem. Saying Johnney Depp really gave you a glimpse into what the rock star was like that was the best line in the poem. I had a hard time putting the two things together the letting go of the past and the poem seemed like two different things.
Diane
I would think it perfect even when I hAVE A BIG CONNECTION not only spiritual but physical and emotional. When I went downstairs to break to get a snack a chill ran over me as I thought about all the deep secrets Mississippi holds with my family. I assume the big black river is the big black Warrior river. I could be wrong because like Mississippi, Alabama is loaded with rivers.
Off the subject for a moment before my old mind lapses. I SAW a bumper sticker today that said "Do you still trust the government? Ask the Native Americans." Right, eh?
Your poem/essay was terrific. If we don't passed down what has been told to us it will be lost forever. You'd like my Tupelo Honey/Hillbilly Initation. My Great Great Grandmother was a full blooded Creek. Her name was Deer I Saw. When she married a white man she changed her name to Deerisaw for a Madien name. I wonder how all this came about. There was such prejudice among families during that time!
Keep writing and we'll hold on to those memories!
Diane
That was very good. I loved the way you drew the reader into the story and held the attention so well. You put all five senses into the story which is what means so very much to me as both a writer and a reader. It leaves you wanting to hear more of this story. You did a wonderful job!
Diane
This is very good and one reason is the fact that it makes you want more of the story so it's a good thing that you are writing a chapter 2 or we would be hunting you down. The characters are real and believeable. I felt that way at one time, years and years ago. I'm really looking forward to seeing what the girl on the sidelines is going to do; I would suspect something mean!
Diane
Becky,
That is a wonderful poem and I think so many times many of us are scared to say "Where is God when we need Him." He is there and we feel him but we wonder if He is answering our prayers or even listening. That's why I love the song Unanswered prayers.
You did a great job and don't ever give up writing. Especially things like this; I really got a get uplifting from it because I suffer from depression. I feel like Job some days!
Diane
This is a great start for a story but it needs some work. First of all when you do sentences you will do them like this to be grammactially correct, oops, I can't spell myself.
She hated when he said that, he sounded like a fool. Then he continued, “what about you babe?”
There was silence. Then with no feeling in her voice, “there was no where else to go.”
You would put, "There was no where else to go." You didn't do all the sentences like this only a few.
Also, in one instance. But in this case she had no feeling. You really shouldn't start a sentence with But because it is a word that connects another word. Like Also, in one instance but in this case she had no feeling.
Over all it is good. Just need to add some more and especially not drop the reader off at the end. If you go over it and make some minor rewrites you'll have an excellent piece. Remember writing is all about rewriting! Diane
Bless your heart, Mandy. I can't imagine being that depressed at such a young age. I'm 51 but the way you summed your feelings up made it feel like I was doing the writing. I feel the same way about my family. They just don't understand depression. My Mother told me one day, now I'm the only child and she said this, "If you continue to use the medicine you use for depression you are going to lose all your family and friends including me." I told her, "Well, I'm not quitting my meds so you might as well disown me." I've tried several times quitting my antidepressants because of this and just knocked myself thousands of feet back!
Keep writing.
diane
That's really a great portrait of what a cigarette means to people. Neither me or my husband smoke but both our children do. Go think! Anyway, this was so good and would be a great advertizement for non smoking. I just loved the way the cigarette was a part of this couple. Keep writing and don't worry about being 62 just write!
I really like your piece of writing. I think one reason it really appeals to me is my agreement with you, that when the time comes I will be ready to meet with the next life, whatever that will be. I have met so many elderly people who are ready especially after all their loved ones have went on before them.
Diane
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