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1,308 Public Reviews Given
2,374 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
Favorite Item Types
Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
Public Reviews
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
As a first draft this is good. I noticed no errors or typo's. There is enough character and location information for me, although some others may like a bit more. However, I would like to know when this takes place? There is no mention of a cell-phone so this might be retro, hopefully. ""She treated me as if I was five, but I was fifteen." This is a great line. Following on from the mother's earlier remarks, it's lets us know the boy's age in a good way. An enjoyable read prompting me to read on.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.0)
A strange take on a novella or short story. Something different of course, and if enhanced and edited it could be a lot better. It seems very clinical and needs some more thought. I noticed no errors or typo's throughout all the chapters which is unusual. I did enjoy the read.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Not much to say. Time moves on.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.0)
As expected, the writing is of a good standard although the lack of any dialogue is a disappointment to me. We have a battle with some dragons but get little information about how it proceeds. Is this computer assisted text, I wonder especially as the user is called A.I? The would explain the friendship excesses. Still I am enjoying the read and will continue.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (3.5)
Not much to speak about in this chapter. Maybe attach it to one of the other chapters.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Again a well written chapter with no error's or typo's noticed. The vocabulary is to be congratulated as the word usage throughout the chapters is very good. There have been earlier hints that this could be a fantasy but the arrival of the goblins confirms it. The confrontation with them is brief and only one paragraph and I feel it could be a bit more detailed. Sarah's emotions are laid bare but we learn nothing about them; maybe later.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.0)
The writing is still good with no errors or typo's noticed. Personally, I like to see more dialogue, but that is my preference and not an error on the writer's part. The group venture deeper into the tunnel but there is no indication, from the previous chapter, that they were in a tunnel although I think a cave was mentioned earlier on. Very little action going on and it seems to be that the story revolves around the friendship between the characters. That is fine but it gets a bit repetitive. It remains a interesting story though.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
A short chapter with not much going on other than the group falling off the path and doing laundry. Well written as expected and with no errors or typo's noticed. I feel this would be better attached to the end of chapter three making for a longer chapter. More dialogue banter would also be welcomed. The story does retain my interest as it is though.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Again the writing is at a good standard with no errors or typo's noticed. However, I feel the story is lacking in this chapter. How did Ace immobilise the bear? Not an easy task I should think but no explanation given. Also, why would they disable the bear and then tend to the bears wounds? If the bear was not dead, it could prove disastrous.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
The story continues with a few surprises for the reader. New friends are made and at first I thought they may be hostile but far from it. They became close and surprisingly were happy to appear openly naked and at ease with the situation. The writing continues to be of a high standard.
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Review of Training Camp  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I am glad to have found this on here. It is a well-written piece and I noticed no errors or typos. The characters and scenes are well drawn enough for me and kept my interest throughout. I look forward to the next instalment. The only thing I would have liked a bit more text joining the battle scene to Luna emerging from the lake as it feels, to me, as if something is missing.
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Review of "Oak Orchard"  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
An interesting chapter. The mystery element remains enhanced by the revelation about the clover boy. But we also have a new romance element to perhaps bring another lasting element to the story. Will have to wait and see. I noticed no error as usual.
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Review of "Oak Orchard"  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
The mystery and intrigue continues in this chapter. Hints and revelations are sort of drip fed to the reader giving enough to keep the reader interested but leaving plenty for speculation. I noticed no errors or typo's in this well-written chapter and look forward to finding out more.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
The last chapter so far. Maybe there will be more. The high drama and suspense continues. Who knows, other than the author, what lies ahead for Larcia? I can't even have a guess. It has been an entertaining journey so far and has potential for more. I noticed a few typo's: (What's the point of walkbng ahead?) , (Princes Evelyn?) , ( he took in my arms in his. ).
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
She fell down a pit, of course, how did I forget that? So we have good characterisation and a well penned chapter. The story gets a bit sinister and is quite dramatic. I noticed no errors or typo's although I was so engrossed with the story that I would not notice unless they were blatantly obvious.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well what can I say? This is like a story within a story. I must admit I was a little confused at first. Was this another dream? I don't recall any kidnap or fall from a horse so have no idea how she got into this situation. It was good to have a reference to Rose being worried as if we were reminded of the real world. A lot of suspense and drama in this chapter making it an enjoyable read.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story takes a very good new direction with the introduction of the horses and stables. The snakes also appear again later making this an interesting as well as a well written chapter. I did notice a couple of typo's near the end though. (they did an year ago.) and ( a lot longer to exit tge forest tgan it did to enter. ). I look forward to the next chapter.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A change in the time. Not a problem at all as it is often done in fiction. In fact it enhances the story. Larcia is a successful woman and has done well in her life but is haunted by bad dreams. She still has a friendship with the snakes which adds to the suspense of the story. I look forward to the next chapter as I don't know where it will lead.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A strange but enjoyable tale in this chapter. It is well written and held my interest throughout. The hook at the end suggests that it may be a dream, which would explain why the snakes didn't see the boys off without her help, as something that I thought about when I read it. I noticed: (but bever attacking) Not sure if this is a typo or a word I am unfamiliar with.
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Review of "Oak Orchard"  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is good. We meet a new character, the boy. The dialogue and interaction between them is interesting. Suspense rises as Reddog appears hostile to Sam's questions. The interaction again is very good. This chapter moves along nicely and I noticed no errors or typo's.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
The worst British Prime Minister ever, and an embarrassment to us all. But look who we have now.
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Review of "Oak Orchard"  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
A good chapter heavy on description which will please a lot of readers, I found it lacked going forward as not much action was happening and it has started to read like a monologue. This is only my opinion though and may not be shared by other readers. I noticed: (You are nutsSam) & (I loosened my grip snd (and) two almost perfectly round smooth stones)
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So Jim finally got caught out, by the anomaly. This is good as I thought the police would catch up with him but was proved wrong by the fitting, and unexpected, events at the airport. We finish with the epilogue where Gary continues with his life without Cherie. But as this is marked as Book One perhaps we have not seen the last of her. A good conclusion to a very good and interesting story.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So Gary won. But there is always a thought in the back of the mind that Jim could take it which adds to the suspense. I like the mention Star Trek and earlier Mary Poppins which give credibility, in my view. I noticed (It could only to be the police.) which doesn't seem to read right. And ( her assistant and prot She had promised Natalie ) seems to have something missing. The end is good. A knock at the door. Could it be Cherie, Jim, or the police? It turned out to be just a talent scout. This is another interesting chapter.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! What a treat. A long chapter well-written and well-presented throughout with not a single error or typo' noticed by me. It seems like a short story within the story. Entertaining with suspense and good interaction between the characters. A brilliant piece of writing and faultless in my opinion.
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