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Review Style
I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
Favorite Item Types
Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a delight to come across a chapter written to such a high standard and capable of holding the interest of the reader (me) throughout. The narrative and dialogue are spot on. I found it an extremely interesting read. My only grumble "non-seguitur". I am not keen on Latin phrases especially if I have to leave the story to look them up. This is as I said a grumble and not a fault as you are, of course, entitled to use whatever words you wish. There is a typo just before the first section break: "Lacv left and Cherie". A brilliant chapter and I look forward to more.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good sized font and spaced paragraphs is always a good start. The characters are well-drawn and believable. The storyline kept my interest throughout and I noticed no errors or typo's. A faultless prologue and a good ending which shows the mental state of the mother. Very well done.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.0)
I must repeat that a huge block of text may be off-putting for some people who may not continue to read it; especially if they read on the screen. If the text is copied temporarily to word, or similar, the reader can break it into paragraphs which makes it a better experience giving the chapter a more enjoyable feel. Moving on, as a chapter the story continues to be of interest and as I said before has good potential. The characters are well drawn. I would certainly read on if the text block was not so off-putting. In the last sentence, should line be lion?
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a good start and is an interesting read. It seems to be well written and I noticed no spelling or typographic errors. However, it falls down in the presentation and if this were a longer piece the solid block of text might put some people of. This is easily fixed by breaking the block into separate paragraphs with spaces between them. If you select the wheel at the top right it takes you to the edit row where you can also increase the size of the font. I can see by this small piece that you have a talent and you can enhance it here on W.D.C.
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Review of Monster  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am not saying these bits are wrong, just how I see them while reading through. The fourth paragraph seems to miss the opportunity for bit more drama. Perhaps one man took a shot and missed then as the other raised his gun they were both took out with two shots. Later, saying Linda was in the same town tells the reader straight away that she is the target. The ending if this is to remain a short lets the reader imagine the outcome. If it is to be a chapter it is a good hook. The story itself is good and held my interest throughout. It is well written and well presented on the page. I noticed no errors or typo's.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
(“Don’t worry(,)Dan, I’ll hurry.”) It feel as if she would ask what has happened after this reply. If you do not want to reveal anything yet, he could have already hung up. There seems to be something missing between : (rushed to her room) & (She ran down her stairs). I don't understand the screaming carpet. (She walked to the reception lady) Maybe desk. There is no previous indication that the lady was sitting in a chair. (Don't worry(,)Dan) (Hi(,)Dan) (“Hello(,)Miss Delaney,). These are just my suggestions. The chapter itself is enjoyable, well-written and very visual. It has a good hook at the end as Peyton wonders what is wrong and as a reader, so do I.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I came across this by chance. I am glad that I did because it is difficult to come across longer works that hold my interest. It is well-written and I noticed no errors or typo's. The characters are well drawn and believable. I like the small added lines that take us into the real world, like illegal drinking at 15 and the going off for a can of WD-40. I look forward to the next chapter to find out more about the great hook at the end.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An enjoyable start to the story. It is well-written and I noticed no errors or typo's, although there are large gaps between the paragraphs. There is a great hook at the end which prompts me to read on. The droplet of water that trickles down her spine. This sparks an interest in me as I wonder if it is going to be important in the later chapters, or not.
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Review of First Snow  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a charming short story to come across. It is written in an easy to read style and retains my interest throughout. Well done with this and if it has not been entered yet I noticed a few typing errors. 1. trying to stay quite, (quiet) 2 been before before (Repeated word) the snow, saw were (where) her own paw prints were. Apart from the title, I don't think winter needs a capital. Good luck with this wonderful and interesting piece.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
An interesting little short story. We often see such folk from outside these days, but this puts us into head of one of them. It is descriptive enough for us to feel for the character and to even smell the soup. I noticed a couple of typing errors: (greeted with the a smile) and (Even as evetyone else has left,). Not a big deal though in this excellent piece of writing.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Although I don't know a lot about yoga, I don't need to as this is more about the characters than the yoga. I did enjoy the read but noticed a couple of missing quotation marks: before (No, I could have bought a retreat) and after (I've met my neighbors.) if this is speech as it has a mark at the beginning. Also (The teapot was boiling over with prepared water.) I don't know why this is there. The first part of the first sentence is great and prompted me to read on. Well done with this.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
A great chapter with a lot of suspense. As a nightmare it is credible because that is the sort of way nightmares seem to go, moving from one scene to another without any logic. A well-written chapter again and I noticed no errors or typo's. The angel seems to be a vital part of this story and has just the right amount of input. Having already read chapter three I know what happens next, but after that I wonder how Morgana gets on as I feel for her.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
On to chapter three as I can't find a chapter 2. Another good chapter that keeps me wondering what will happen next. It is a good piece of drama/thriller that keeps the reader guessing. It seems like the end of Guy as Morgana takes a shine to her friend Rae. I noticed no errors.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am impressed. 5,000+ words in what I would call one scene lasting a few hours and it kept me fully interested throughout. It is good how the roles change. The bad guy turns out to be not so bad and the good guy turns out to be not so good, even though he thinks he has good reason for his crime. All’s well in the end which is just how I like it. The only things that threw me a little: I am sure lots of people know what NDA’s are, but I don’t so it didn’t mean anything. And I found: “I'ma have a hard time moving past what you did, you—“ a bit confusing.
A great read, thank you.
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Review of Killing Christmas  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A sort of fantasy about an imaginary character who lights up a lot of peoples lives at Christmas. As with all fiction we have to suspend our disbelief to enjoy the story. There is a drama/thriller twist that makes this stand out. At the end I was expecting Thornton to telephone his cousin to thank him for the present only to find that his cousin knew nothing about it. To come across a well-written short that gives something different is always an enjoyable read to me. Recommended by Mr C.P.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
An entertaining short. A wizard that gets things wrong but succeeds in the end, a bit like that English magician Tommy Cooper. It make a change from a serious wizard and the theme has great potential for a longer piece. The name Dilby fits the character perfectly and rolls off the tongue. I noticed no error or typo's in this well-written short.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
It is good to be back in Bellingham. This is the sort of story I enjoy the most depicting people and places as if in real life. It is a well-written piece and I could clearly imagine each scene. There are quite a lot of children to cope with but I seemed to manage all right. The family name confuses me though as sometimes it is Kenney and other times it seems to be Brower. Tragedy strikes in the final paragraphs and is credible which would prompt me to read more. I noticed that you say :At the age of three Sonny is the youngest of the siblings.", twice in three paragraphs which does not sit right with me. Well done with this and I hope you continue with it.
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Review of The Wolf Speaks  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
A great little fantasy type story to start the day with. It has a well presented font and as far as I can see, faultless writing. It was descriptive enough for me and I could easily imagine what was going on. A happy ending for the orphan. Very well done with this.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
An enchanting tale. At the moment it could progress into a children's story if the content remains the same. It is an interesting, fantasy, read and I noticed no errors except: Some paragraph breaks are needed to separate each character's speech or action. Should Ext be Etc. A comma is needed after "OK", in the last sentence. Well done with this and keep up with it, it has potential.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
It is always good to come across something well-penned and different. This short fits the bill. It seems to be in a category or its own and it comes over as very entertaining. Could be male or female P.O.V. until the last few lines. I am impressed and suggest other members take a peek at this.
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Review of A New Love  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
A charming short that is well-written with no errors noticed. Can't go wrong with a tale of attraction to our pets. How many people have said that they would never get another after saying goodbye to their beloved pet, only to change their mind because of the empty space in their life. Well done with this pleasant and enjoyable piece.
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Review of Bioluminescence  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Something different for us to read. It is well written and I noticed no errors or typo's. The content seems a bit strange and I had to read it twice to understand it, but as it is in the fantasy category, anything goes. I see it as the two characters are in love with astronomy, maybe, and with the title relating to the last paragraph. The writing is a small size which might put some people off from continuing. At the top right of your work there is a small wheel and if you select it you can get the edit tab. If you highlight the work and select the tab with three SSS, you can change the font size, if you wish to. A good read.
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Review of Animal Help  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a charming piece. It is so good to come across something different on here. I enjoyed the read very much and the message it gave out. It is very well written and presented and I noticed no typo's or errors. I found: "and many other of the nature sounds." threw me a bit and thought it could be altered by putting other before nature, but that may just be me. Well done with this excellent work.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An enjoyable read of non-fiction. Many people have a true love of dogs and may find this an interesting take of a dogs'home/pound. I especially like to find vocational works of non fiction especially when they a written to such a high standard as this. It has the potential to be extended into a larger piece, maybe highlighting friendly named dogs as well as some not so friendly. I noticed no faults or typo's.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I must say that I am impressed with the quality of the writing. This was as if I were reading a published novel from the library. The story was good and interesting although at times I was confused as to who was who. A couple of points: The first paragraph seems, to me, to imply that Bath is by the sea when of course it is further inland. Also the chapter seems long. I am not saying that is a fault as many published works has long chapters, but I feel it would appear more readable to some on WDC if it were split into two chapters. All in all a very good read.
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