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1,297 Public Reviews Given
2,363 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
Favorite Item Types
Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
Public Reviews
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I am impressed by this one. It is my type of poem. It has reasonable rhymes, and they don't seem forced or out of place. The similarity between a caged bird and a trapped lover comes across well, to me anyway. I look forward to reading more from you.
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Review of The Fall  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
A cracking little poem with a feel-good thread throughout. It is easy to read and understand. I would say "fills me with delight" instead of "fills me with might." But of course, it is your choice. I enjoyed the read and noticed no errors or typo's.
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Review of The Magical Charm  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
You have the potential to create a good story. I enjoyed the read and it kept my attention. However, it needs some work. A space after every line seems a bit strange. There are places where a comma is used in the wrong place. Example:"got the formula right, she looked at the purple potion". Might be better to start a new sentence: "formula right. She looked at".Introduction in dialogue needs a comma as in "Oh, hi, Cher! Also "showed of (off) her hair." "I tried to (two) of the droplets". "they both walked out the door" I would delete the second both and the extra speech mark at the start of the sentence. It seems a lot but if you go through it you should try to spot where two separate sentences are separated by a comm. This may seem a lot but don't be downhearted because it is all fixable and you will find your work improves the more you write and get reviews. I rate this item on the story which is quite a good start. Hope you do get to continue.
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Review of The Turkey  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a charming piece of writing. This short-short has a feel-good theme and is quite funny. I do like the way he met his mate and they feasted on the corn. We tend to forget that animals have a life, especially when we are tucking into our own dinners.
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Review of Bus Stop Blues  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I like a poem that entertains and this certainly fits the bill. I feel as if I am the person at the bus stop and that is a good plus point. I could not see any typo's or errors but would not wish to as this piece stands on its own quite well. Well done with this interesting and enjoyable piece.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
The group return to the tree and I expected them to be caught. They didn't and it is always good when I am proved wrong. This is the last chapter displayed so far. Will it be continued? I don't know, but if it is I will be pleased to see what happens. It has been an enjoyable read and something different in the thread. Well done with this. In the last sentence should suck read as such?
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
The new wizard people have mixed ideas which makes for a good thread. Also Sora seems uninterested in taking the throne which comes as a surprise but also gets my interest as I feel he will change his mind at some time. What is for sure is that there is possibly some danger ahead in the next chapter. Must read on. No errors or typo were spotted.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
The journey continues and new characters come along at about the right time. The reader will be left wondering if these new people will be for the good or for the bad as hints are given for both options. I can't comment on spelling due to country differences but I think "Her's was an oak color" doesn't need an apostrophe. "Arwin moved his to move his staff" seems an error. A good hook at the end prompts me to read the next chapter to find out if the new people are friendly or not.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Lots going on in this chapter and we get a small reference to the side characters. I admit that I have a slight difficulty merging the two parts of the tale together as it seems all about the fairies and not so much about the plot that Yasmin is there to follow as a side character. Nevertheless, it is a good enjoyable read. I noticed: "Grass growing and leave near the window." Should this be leaves? "Angel(s) were the perfect rulers." "Slowly and quietly they surrounded the buzzwasp." Perhaps remove "slowly" as it seems unlikely that the buzzwasp would be caught if they moved slowly. I like the bit where Yasmin wakes and thinks for a moment she is in her room. Still enjoying the read as it seems like something different from the norm.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This chapter fleshes out the surroundings and gives us an insight into the lives of the characters. Although this was an interesting and well-written chapter, I can not see how it equates to the original idea of "A side character". Perhaps more will be revealed in the next chapter. Towards the end, there seemed to be a lot of fairy names and I was a bit confused at times. That said, it was an enjoyable read.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This seems more complex and different from the previous non-chapter item. The story comes over well and can be followed enough to make it an entertaining read. The storyline itself seems refreshingly original for a fantasy. The next stage of the story is about to begin and that is a good hook for the reader to consider continuing. A couple of typo's, perhaps: "get this boy to me my family." and "a week nod" weak.
Just a preference in my work is to put a bitem at the end so the reader can go straight to the next chapter.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I am always looking for something different, some new angle. I have found that in this piece. This prompts me to take a look at my own side characters and their existence. The fantasy is interesting and well-written. Would the story so far cause me to read more. I believe it does.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
A good and entertaining first piece on here. Who doesn't like and have fond memories of their grandparents, hopefully? If you go onto the edit wheel, top right on your item's heading. Go down to Advanced and select double spacing and the item will look more presentable and be easier to read. Welcome to WDC.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
What an interesting piece of writing. Centering on a cemetery with the deceased all about the place. Death is, of course, sad but this tale seems to see through the sadness with a message of care and understanding of those who went before. I spotted no typo's and enjoyed the read.
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Review of YoungTown  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It seems a bit disjointed at places where it jumps forward without explanation, but due to the high quality of the writing, I assume that it is intended that way. The outlaws arrive but we don't hear from them until four of them are locked up in jail. There is a typo at: "We (With)all the supplies". It seems more like an outline for a longer story than a completed short story. Nevertheless, it is well written and an interesting read. The ending is a nice surprise.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
An interesting factual read about Anne Boleyn. It reminded me of my box-set "The Tudors" where Anne Boleyn is played by the talented Natalie Dormer (Game of Thrones and Mockingjay plus other parts). Also stars British singer/actress Joss Stone as Anne of Cleaves. Time I got the box-set out again.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good names for the characters and Grace Serket drew me into the story right away. This is a very good taster. It puts questions into the mind of the reader that may prompt them to read on to find the answers. The mix of dialogue and narrative is fine. Maybe put the item into a few paragraphs to make it look more presentable on the page. It is refreshing to see young skilled writers developing their writing skills on here, and this is the place to do it. Welcome to WDC.
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Review of Thursday Thoughts  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
An excellent short piece that I could see fitting nicely into a romantic novel. No errors or typo's noticed in this delightful piece. Due to the high standard of writing and the interest in the words, I look forward to more from you. Welcome to WDC.
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Review of The hourglass  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
An interesting little short with an unexpected but good twist to the ending. I found no faults or typo's which shows that you know what you are doing and obviously proof your work. Well done with this and welcome to WDC.
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Review of Coffee Spuddle  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A well constructed and entertaining piece. Should have been placed higher, I think.
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Review of Rainbow Magic  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well done with this interesting and well-crafted poem.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So I come to the end of this epic story and what an action-packed adventure it has been. It also broke from the action sometimes and told parts that were more homely and a bit emotional. The writing was of a high standard throughout and I can't remember noticing any errors or typo's. Many of the end hooks were a great prompt to tempt the reader onto the next chapter. I was confused a couple of times but only minor hiccups and reading on would always remove the confused thoughts. Fantasy is not my favorite category but I was quite happy to read this story. What led me to this story in the first place? Mainly the notes at the end: "This item is NOT looking for literary critique". Also, "I am NOT seeking publication". I can relate to the second part as I gave up on seeking publication years ago. I remember when I used to pay to have my novels professionally read, one of the readers told me that I am not writing to the rules and conventions. And I should do so, alternately, I can just write what I like, but with very little chance of publication. I went for the, write what I like, option. Anyway, back to the story. I wondered if I would have the staying power to read all 110 chapters/parts. But it was not a problem and my interest was kept up throughout. Very well done to the author and thanks for giving me the enjoyment of visiting Manitou Island.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Nearly there and what a good read it has been on my journey around the island with Charmian.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another action-packed chapter full of suspense as we near the end of the story. The young heroine, Charmian, get power and help from others as she battles with Ocryana. Although seemingly weakened, Ocryana, makes it to her goal. Charmian is on her tail as she tries to stop her from destroying the island. The hook at the end ensures the reader want's to find out how Charmian and her friends stop her. As usual, we have a well-written part with no noticeable errors or typo's.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A great battle rages against Ocryana as many join Charmian in the fight but the demon always come out on top despite her injuries. A fantatic action packed part.
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